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The Neoclassic
2009-01-28, 09:20 AM
... Because clearly there are not enough such webcomics already. :smalltongue:

I update on Mondays and Thursdays. I'm doing this for fun, not because I think I am brilliant, extraordinarily funny, or the best artist. If I produce a moderately amusing comic that a few people enjoy reading, I will be happy. :smallbiggrin:

Constructive criticism is always welcome!

Archive

#1

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#2

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#3

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#4

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#5

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#6

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#7
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#8

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#9

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#10
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#11
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#12

http://i449.photobucket.com/albums/qq218/Queenfange/Webcomic/Comic012.png

#13
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#14
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#15
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Additional Notes and Questions for You

As you may've noticed, the barbarian is of a race not found in mainstream D&D; he's from a homebrew race. I'm using elements of my homebrew setting in this for a few reasons:

Because I like my homebrew setting.
Many of the standard D&D races are quite well-covered by other comics already, I think. This gives me some new territory to cover.
Working from my homebrew setting gives me a bit of an established world to work with so I can maintain some elements of verisimilitude.

I'm not going to say too much more about my plans, if only because I'm afraid I'll end up changing my mind later! Without further ado...

Questions for You!
What was your favorite part/element of the comic?
Which part/element do you think needs the most improvement?
What, if anything, would maintain your interest in this comic?


Thanks very much, everyone!

Green-Shirt Q
2009-01-28, 09:46 AM
Questions for You!
1.What was your favorite part/element of the comic?
2.Which part/element do you think needs the most improvement?
3.Would you like to see a cast of characters with a bit about each of them?
4.What, if anything, would maintain your interest in this comic?

1. I think the "I'm a pink man" was a pretty well timed punch line when all along I thought it was just an artistic choice. Made me chuckle.
2. Well I was just skimming the comic, so I might not have paid enough attention to it, but some parts of the text kinda sneaked up on me and confused me a little.
3. Not just yet, actually. It may be just me, but I feel I don't want to read a whole bunch of stuff unless I care about the characters enough first. It is a personal pet peeve of mine when a comic starts and immediately churns long character bios I feel like I have to read (because once you've said it in the bios you have no need to say it in comic form) which are usually boring when the comic just started and, to me ad least, makes me unpleasently feel like the comic is pretentious. Plus most comics don't get over the ten-comic hurdle, so I feel like it's a waste of time. I recommend that you hold off the character bios for a little bit and make people desire to read them, build intrest, and built enough steam so that the comic isn't going to end any time soon. It would make the comic all the more interesting. :smallwink:
4. My intrest in this comic is already maintained by the decent art and humor, so I recommend keeping or improving the quality of both. The main thing that would keep me interested is if you continued making comics and made an epic plot that forced me to keep coming back out of curiousity.

I'm getting a really good feeling about this comic. Keep up the good work. :smallwink:

Szilard
2009-01-28, 09:48 AM
By biweekly, do you mean twice a week, or once every two weeks?:smallconfused:

The comic is good overall.

Lyinginbedmon
2009-01-28, 09:58 AM
By biweekly, do you mean twice a week, or once every two weeks?:smallconfused:

The comic is good overall.

Biweekly means once every fortnight (two weeks). "Bi" meaning two.

However, in the UK and increasingly everywhere else, it means twice-weekly. I think Queenfange probably means twice-weekly.

The Neoclassic
2009-01-28, 10:02 AM
Ooh, very good point. I should have written twice-a-week. *Goes off to fix*

Tiffanie Lirle
2009-01-28, 02:31 PM
What was your favorite part/element of the comic?
I like the general art, the characters could use some cleaning up. But it's fairly solid and colorful.
Which part/element do you think needs the most improvement?
The text is somewhat rough at points, could use a bit of work. Slight lack of the funny.

Would you like to see a cast of characters with a bit about each of them?
Not yet, establish the characters a bit more. So that people actually care about learning about them. :smalltongue:
What, if anything, would maintain your interest in this comic?
Noticing that more then a decent amount of effort was put into the strips, even if it takes longer.
I suppose I'll check every once in a while for an update. There's nothing here at the moment that'll really "hook" someone though.

The Neoclassic
2009-01-28, 03:01 PM
Thanks for the honest responses thus far. :smallsmile:

I was leaning away from doing a cast of characters just yet, so I'm glad to hear that people agree. I don't think it would be helpful just yet, as you two have pointed out that an attachment to the characters through the comic should come first.

I did put a lot of effort into these (I didn't churn out all three in one night), though I understand how it may not look that way since I am not talented in art nor humor. :smallfrown:

By nothing that will hook people yet.... I assume that's because it's not amazingly funny and nothing to yet clearly distinguish it from the other masses of OotS-style D&D webcomics? I shall work on both of those. Creating an excellent webcomic is something I'd love to do, and I readily accept that I am still in the learning/OK-but-nothing-special-webcomic stage (though I know that is no excuse to not try hard to improve!). Constructive criticism helps me improve, and so I do appreciate it, even when it is unflatteringly blunt. :smallbiggrin:

Tiffanie Lirle
2009-01-28, 03:07 PM
I did put a lot of effort into these (I didn't churn out all three in one night), though I understand how it may not look that way since I am not talented in art nor humor. :smallfrown:
If that was in response to me, I didn't mean to imply that these seemed that way.

I was just saying that you shouldn't go down the road of quick comics like so many artists before you did. :smalltongue:

The Neoclassic
2009-01-28, 03:43 PM
If that was in response to me, I didn't mean to imply that these seemed that way.

I was just saying that you shouldn't go down the road of quick comics like so many artists before you did. :smalltongue:

Ah, OK. Thanks for the clarification. :smallsmile: I plan on neither rushing nor getting too lazy with this.

Wreckingrocc
2009-01-28, 04:37 PM
Excellent! I almost groaned when I saw the title, but your modesty and knowledge that it seemed quite generic made me smile... It's not something you see often. In addition, the art is excellent, and the text fits very well with the bubbles. I can't see any errors as of yet, and none of the characters feel very two dimensional. There are a couple who seem quite stereotypical, but that's OK when they're just two-comic NPCs.

If I were to suggest one change or improvement, it would be the end of the second comic. The line "I am a bright pink man" seems like it's an answer to the lady's question, but Prosper's line seemed to cut it up a little bit, throwing the tempo slightly off. That's about it with suggestions, though.

The pink man was pretty cool... I was trying to figure out what he was, and I couldn't place my finger on it. It's nice to see some creativity every now and then.

The humor is decent and more lighthearted, and it doesn't feel like you're doing it solely for laughs. There's nothing that bugs me more in a new comic than a badly placed joke that takes away from the storyline. This seems to flow very well, and many elements of the first three comics are excellent/ridiculous enough to be awesome, fitting, and, in a more general sense, funny.

It's obvious that you plan it out a lot more than most people do, so I can see this comic going places. Good luck on maintaining it. You're off to an excellent start, and I'm looking forward to more.

Panabelle
2009-01-28, 10:44 PM
I enjoyed it. I'll be checking back regularly for updates. My main comment for improvement would be about the layout of the strip--but as time goes on, you'll get more adept at placing speech bubbles and that sort of thing.

Good luck!

The Neoclassic
2009-01-29, 09:16 PM
Thanks for the responses! :smallbiggrin:

New comic time...

#4

http://i449.photobucket.com/albums/qq218/Queenfange/Webcomic/Verisimilitude4.png

Szilard
2009-01-29, 09:24 PM
So Amarel'neve are the pink people? Cool.

I like the fifth panel.:smallbiggrin:

Eita
2009-01-29, 10:01 PM
Conjunctions aren't evil you know...

The Neoclassic
2009-01-29, 10:18 PM
Conjunctions aren't evil you know...

Oh, of course not! I very much like contractions. Whenever I don't use them, it's quite on purpose and used to provide a contrasting pattern of speech (in other words, most characters will use them, but a few don't). I'm also working on being more aware as to how the lack of contractions may interrupt flow (flow is on my to-work-on list!). I just counted and in the first three comics, I used nine contractions. The only character who has not used them is the barbarian, though Prosper tends to go with "I am" rather than "I'm." So, purposeful choice here, though I appreciate your input. :smallbiggrin:

OH WAIT! You said "Conjunctions"... But my mind immediately lept to "Contractions" because that's what my friends pointed out to me. M'bad. Could you let me know where I am doing poorly with conjunctions? I know the flow wasn't great at first, but I didn't think it was that choppy or I left out words like "and," "or," etc...

@ Szilard: Indeed! Homebrew race (as if that wasn't obvious). Hopefully I shall slowly flesh them out in later comics, without doing any boring telling-not-showing chunks of exposition. And I had fun making the fifth panel! Glad you enjoyed it too. :smallsmile:

Panabelle
2009-01-29, 10:26 PM
Conjunctions aren't evil you know...

Conjunctions = and, or, but
Contractions = shortened forms of words using apostrophes like can't or shouldn't

:smallbiggrin:

(I like new comic too)

Assassin89
2009-01-29, 10:38 PM
Very interesting comic. The goblin is not a prick like many others of his race, and several characters already have defined personalities.

The Neoclassic
2009-01-30, 09:17 PM
Very interesting comic. The goblin is not a prick like many others of his race, and several characters already have defined personalities.

Yay! Glad you like the goblin thus far. My main challenge with him will make him being not too much like Redcloak, of whom I'm a big fan. :smallsmile:

EDIT: So that I don't get into the terrible habit of double-posting on my own thread. :smallwink:

I've made two banners thus far. I plan on making three more in the near future (so that there's one for each PC). Hopefully these are mildly amusing, though I realize I will probably need better ones in the future. Ideally, each banner will reflect each character's personality by their response to the comic's title.

Banners:
http://i449.photobucket.com/albums/qq218/Queenfange/Webcomic/Banner.png

http://i449.photobucket.com/albums/qq218/Queenfange/Webcomic/Banner2.png

Panabelle
2009-01-31, 11:13 PM
Aww, cute! I don't DnD so I don't have much of a concept of how low 8 is for a stat, but single digits can't be good. =P

Love Prosper's expression too. He looks like he's an actual actor in the comic who's been roped into doing a stupid promo. XD Despite the fact that he actually does a good job!

The Neoclassic
2009-02-01, 03:24 PM
Single digits are bad. :smallwink: Short story, an Intelligence of 8 is a bit less than the average human. Not really stupid, or unable to function intellectually, but certainly not bright or prone to having a large vocabulary.

New comic today!

#5

http://i449.photobucket.com/albums/qq218/Queenfange/Webcomic/Verisimilitude5.png

Threeshades
2009-02-01, 06:01 PM
Single digits are bad. :smallwink: Short story, an Intelligence of 8 is a bit less than the average human. Not really stupid, or unable to function intellectually, but certainly not bright or prone to having a large vocabulary.

New comic today!

#5

http://i449.photobucket.com/albums/qq218/Queenfange/Webcomic/Verisimilitude5.png

I'm so converting right now!

CrimsonAngel
2009-02-01, 06:10 PM
All hail Spes!

Wreckingrocc
2009-02-01, 06:39 PM
Dern is the definition of irony... He's a joyful and loyal barbarian... Who is very loyal to his religion simply because of cupcake fridays...

Keep up the grand work.

The Neoclassic
2009-02-04, 02:05 AM
Thank you for the lovely comments!

I've decided to update on Mondays and Thursdays for now. I'm now two comics ahead of schedule, and hope to keep building up a bit of a buffer so that I never fall behind.

If anyone is interested enough to put this comic on a RSS feed, I've put the comic up on Drunk Duck (http://www.drunkduck.com/Verisimilitude/) and there should be a button near the top to RSS feed it. It may also be an easier way to look through archived comics. Your choice; just throwing that out there!

WillWolf
2009-02-04, 06:34 AM
I think it's a nice little story that you have going on. I think you have two main problems in terms of the writing, both of which can be fixed if you place the correct amount of time into it.

1) Your characters sound very, very similar to each other. I can tell by what they say that their are differences; however, the way that they speak sounds a little too contrived and similar to each other.

2) Exposition is important for a story to help it move along, and it occurs regularly during the beginning; however, too much exposition creates a talking head syndrome. This is particularly bad when the two characters already know what the other is talking about.

Tiffanie Lirle
2009-02-04, 08:07 AM
I finally figured out what bothered me about the characters. It's their mouths, they're somewhat out of shape.

Looking at panel 1 of comic 5, Purple Dress's mouth is on the wrong side of her head. Or panel 2, Pinky's mouth is somewhat boxy, could be rounded on the top instead of beign a flat line, etc etc.

The Neoclassic
2009-02-04, 08:55 AM
Tiffanie: You're entirely right; making better mouth shapes is something on which I certainly need to work. I think they've gotten better since the first couple comics, but I will keep an eye on that and practice making some that look better. It's one of the things I find more challenging to draw.

WillWolf: Ah, yes, the writing. Again, something which (while I think I've again shown improvement in it since the first three comics) I need to seriously continue to work on. The flow of some sections of the comic is choppy, I agree, hence the contrived speaking. That's probably one of my greatest difficulties. As far as their similarities, any accent would have been out of place for them, but I will be striving to set their speech patterns apart more in the future. I also agree that I need less exposition and more plot. I've been trying not to have any character tell something to the other that they already know, but it's possible I've slipped up with that in places.

My only problem is that I'm keeping the latest couple of comics for future postings, so it may take a little while after comments come in for me to notably improve. It's just a matter of practicality to make sure I don't miss an update. :smallsmile:

Person1123
2009-02-04, 03:44 PM
Very funny. *Goes to Free Cupcake Friday*

The only thing that irks me a bit is something about the text bubbles. Otherwise, this is great!

The Neoclassic
2009-02-04, 05:55 PM
Very funny. *Goes to Free Cupcake Friday*

The only thing that irks me a bit is something about the text bubbles. Otherwise, this is great!

Thanks! Formatting the text bubbles is a bit of a pain, but in later comics I've been messing with the size and putting the characters in better positions, so hopefully they will look much improved from here on out!

Panabelle
2009-02-04, 09:49 PM
It would probably help if you storyboarded the panels out beforehand, rearranging characters in some panels so that the speech bubbles don't have to be contorted around the art. Not that they are now--I think you've gotten a lot better at it since the first few. =)

(when will the next comic be up)

memnarch
2009-02-04, 10:54 PM
Found a new comic to read due to forum scrambling. :smallsmile:

The Neoclassic
2009-02-04, 11:20 PM
@ Memnarch: Excellent to have you with us! Hopefully you shall enjoy the comic enough to keep coming back. :smallbiggrin:

@ Panabelle: The answer is... NOW!

#6

http://i449.photobucket.com/albums/qq218/Queenfange/Webcomic/Comic006.png

Shades of Gray
2009-02-05, 12:15 AM
This comic shows a lot of promise, the lines are a bit thick. I've gotten a few laughs, which is rare for me.

By the way, whatever happened to that 4E interplanar campaign? I made a hound archon fighter, and Tichrondius made a rogue I think, and you were gonna make an infernal warlock.

Person1123
2009-02-05, 06:34 AM
Nice comic. (#6, I mean). One bit of constructive criticism: In about half the panels, the priest guy is in nearly the exact same postition.

SoD
2009-02-07, 07:46 AM
This seems a fine comic. It has a good combination of characters, although some details (not necaserily [goddamnit. You're right about big words and 8 int!] in the comic) on your homebrew world could be useful.

The biggest laugh I've had so far was Free Cupcake Friday's though! Brilliant! A work of genius!

Sincerely,
SoD

onasuma
2009-02-08, 06:17 AM
Nice comic. (#6, I mean). One bit of constructive criticism: In about half the panels, the priest guy is in nearly the exact same postition.

So? Maybe thats how he likes to stand.

The Neoclassic
2009-02-09, 10:58 AM
New comic!

#7
http://i449.photobucket.com/albums/qq218/Queenfange/Webcomic/Verisimilitude7.png

Thus far, my update schedule is working out well; I've yet to fall behind at all. :smallbiggrin:

Shades of Gray: Thanks! I'm still tweaking with the layout and style of the comic, so I may end up adjusting line thickness in the near future.

Person1123: Positioning is something I continue to work on, as it's rather tricky to make the characters not look entirely copy/pasted from one panel to the next. And I'll be honest: I am not going to redraw every character for every panel. Somewhere I read someone say that one should do so, but that would make each strip take about ten hours rather than two to three. I will be more careful in the future though!

Sod: :smallbiggrin: I am most flattered by your praise! Out of curiousity (and to help provide the necessary clarifying information), what details about my homebrew world would be most useful for this, if you had any in specific in mind?

onasuma: Maybe, maybe!

memnarch
2009-02-09, 06:18 PM
What an annoying man. :smalltongue:

Assassin89
2009-02-09, 07:07 PM
Very interesting comic. Both churches are quite annoying, and I wonder if Spes will be annoying too.:smalltongue:
Are the gods mentioned actual gods in the D&D realm, or are they homebrewed?

The Neoclassic
2009-02-09, 10:50 PM
They are rather annoying, aren't they? :smallsmile:

These gods are all homebrewed, if only so as not to infringe on any content that isn't OGL.

CrimsonAngel
2009-02-10, 07:53 PM
Go ahead and kick his crotch!

Fredthefighter
2009-02-11, 01:58 PM
Go ahead and kick his crotch!

For once, I agree with CrimsonAngel here. Ugh, I felt like I just entered a parallel universe for a moment then. :smallwink:
Anyway, keep up the great work.

The Neoclassic
2009-02-12, 02:21 PM
#8

http://i449.photobucket.com/albums/qq218/Queenfange/Webcomic/Verisimilitude8.png

Now for the bad news: My archives have run out. I was a bit sick and very lazy this week, so I didn't get any new comics done. Now, hopefully this weekend I will get at least one and maybe two comics done, but I apologize in advance if I miss one of next week's updates. However, updating is important to me, and so I should be able to catch up this weekend. One missed update easily slips into two or three, which easily slips into comic death. :smalleek:

On the bright side I do have the next comic planned out and a good idea of the upcoming plot! :smallbiggrin:

Lunaya
2009-02-12, 02:45 PM
Wow! Funny and original and only eight pages in. :smallsmile: I'm definitely gonna keep reading.

Szilard
2009-02-12, 06:38 PM
Are all praedames female?

Keep up the good work.:smallsmile:

The Neoclassic
2009-02-12, 10:01 PM
Are all praedames female?

Nope! I just happened to pick two female ones to draw, maybe for a reason, maybe for no reason at all. :smallwink:

Hmmm, maybe if I feel really bored I will stat up some of the main characters, though of course only after Monday's comic is done!

Person1123
2009-02-13, 05:17 PM
Wow...
Can't believe I missed too updates!
*berates self*

Did I really just say "too"?

Lyinginbedmon
2009-02-13, 05:36 PM
Now for the bad news: My archives have run out. I was a bit sick and very lazy this week, so I didn't get any new comics done. Now, hopefully this weekend I will get at least one and maybe two comics done, but I apologize in advance if I miss one of next week's updates. However, updating is important to me, and so I should be able to catch up this weekend. One missed update easily slips into two or three, which easily slips into comic death. :smalleek:

I assume you mean your comic buffer, because if the archives run out then you're actually out of comic entirely.

Incidentally, illness and laziness is why I have a week and a half of comics buffered. :smalltongue:

The Neoclassic
2009-02-13, 11:40 PM
I assume you mean your comic buffer, because if the archives run out then you're actually out of comic entirely.

Incidentally, illness and laziness is why I have a week and a half of comics buffered. :smalltongue:

Ah, yes, buffer. That's the word! You are entirely right. :smallbiggrin:

EDIT: I have Monday's comic done! Now, if I can get one more in the buffer this weekend, I will be back on track...

The Neoclassic
2009-02-15, 11:04 PM
I know it's an hour early, but here's Monday's comic!

#9

http://i449.photobucket.com/albums/qq218/Queenfange/Webcomic/Verisimilitude9.png

Szilard
2009-02-15, 11:13 PM
The legs look a bit awkward while they're walking, but otherwise, good comic.

memnarch
2009-02-15, 11:16 PM
Bet they are eventually shown to actually do something or easily be recharged. :smallcool:

Assassin89
2009-02-15, 11:22 PM
I like that barbarian fellow, he's funny. Despite the intellect of certain worshipers, Spes sound like the more intelligent of the deities.

CrimsonAngel
2009-02-16, 08:53 AM
One of the barbarians boot is black in panel 6.

The Neoclassic
2009-02-16, 11:15 AM
I'll work on the walking next time; some of the character poses are indeed rather unrealistic. Thanks for pointing it out!

As far as the black boot, occasionally Inkscape colors something in with black when I group a lot of objects. I can't figure out why, and ungrouping/regrouping often doesn't work. I didn't catch it quickly enough this time (Oops! :smallredface:) but does anyone know how I can fix that issue in the future?

CrimsonAngel
2009-02-16, 11:20 AM
Hmmm, that's never happened to me before. I'd say just reread the comic after you finish and check the art.

SoD
2009-02-16, 02:45 PM
I've acutally seen dull grey ioun stones used usefully. Throw them at opponant and cast shatter on it when it starts spinning around their head.

The Neoclassic
2009-02-26, 12:32 AM
I fell behind for not one, but two updates. I sincerely apologize, but at least I have not utterly disappeared! Amazing what exams do to one's hobbies...

#10
http://i449.photobucket.com/albums/qq218/Queenfange/Webcomic/Verisimilitude10.png

Assassin89
2009-02-26, 08:19 AM
It appears that the males are talking about weaponry, while the females are talking about relevant information.
Interesting strip.

Nameless
2009-02-26, 09:03 AM
Looks good, I like the art. :smallsmile:

Panabelle
2009-02-26, 11:10 PM
It appears that the males are talking about weaponry, while the females are talking about relevant information.
Interesting strip.

Well, it's plenty relevant if you're trying to kill things!

The Neoclassic
2009-03-06, 09:33 PM
I sincerely apologize for not sticking to my update schedule. More exams and a lack of creativity have led to me being terrible about getting them done. Luckily, I am still working slowly but surely on the comics and do have a new one. It's one of my favorites so far; I hope you all enjoy it as much as I do!

#11
http://i449.photobucket.com/albums/qq218/Queenfange/Webcomic/Verisimilitude11.png

CrimsonAngel
2009-03-06, 09:44 PM
*snickers* *cracks up*

Assassin89
2009-03-06, 09:47 PM
The barbarian is using the logic of cupcakes to guide him. Quite funny indeed.

Szilard
2009-03-06, 09:48 PM
Awesome. .

Panabelle
2009-03-08, 01:52 AM
Bwahahaha, I love the halfway punchline! You're getting much better with setting up the humor in these. :smallbiggrin:

Lyinginbedmon
2009-03-08, 09:11 AM
Bwahahaha, I love the halfway punchline! You're getting much better with setting up the humor in these. :smallbiggrin:

Just noticed something, your FeMale (Male with Fe element shield) could also be translated as Iron Man :smallbiggrin:

Szilard
2009-03-08, 11:09 AM
Just noticed something, your FeMale (Male with Fe element shield) could also be translated as Iron Man :smallbiggrin:

That's probably the entire point.:smalltongue:

The Neoclassic
2009-03-10, 01:35 AM
I'm glad that you enjoyed the last comic. Positive feedback is always appreciated and keeps me going! :smallsmile:

So, another update!

#12

http://i449.photobucket.com/albums/qq218/Queenfange/Webcomic/Comic012.png

memnarch
2009-03-10, 06:59 AM
Sidequest!

Panabelle
2009-03-11, 03:11 PM
Dern + butterfly = adorableness incarnate.


(Also sorry if this ends up posting twice, my internets are being dumb)

Victor Thorian
2009-03-12, 07:01 PM
I like it. Really.
Also, I like cupcakes.

Keep up the good work :]

The Neoclassic
2009-03-12, 11:33 PM
Keep up the good work :]

I will do my utmost to achieve this! :smallwink:

Heck, I'm even churning out the updates this week!

#13
http://i449.photobucket.com/albums/qq218/Queenfange/Webcomic/Comic013.png

memnarch
2009-03-12, 11:45 PM
Hey look! A statue! :smalltongue:

The Neoclassic
2009-03-15, 03:53 PM
A statue indeed! I wonder what that means... :smallwink:

Updating is somewhat of a chore, but I find that I feel that way about the actual work part of all creative projects. Coming up with ideas and getting started is extremely fun, but actually sticking with it and putting in the time to keep working, even on the tedious stuff, is very hard for me. That said, I have several friends who are enjoying my webcomic and it seems to have a few fans here, so after I get each one done, I feel a real sense of accomplishment which makes up for all of the sometimes boring work that goes into the comic.

Enough about my creative process! Next comic!\

#14
http://i449.photobucket.com/albums/qq218/Queenfange/Webcomic/Verisimilitude14.png

This is my first attempt at drawing anything battle-related, so constructive criticism is particularly welcome on this!

Szilard
2009-03-15, 03:59 PM
I wouldn't spend too much panels on a flying Arrow, otherwise, all is good.

Assassin89
2009-03-15, 04:04 PM
Interesting use of a gorgon's effect

CrimsonAngel
2009-03-15, 04:08 PM
Oh no! The blonde guy whos name escapes me!

Tiffanie Lirle
2009-03-15, 04:11 PM
Well the gorgon/bull thing doesn't actually seem to move. Ever. It's always in that same pose. Also 3 panels, even if they are small, is a bit much for one arrow.

Also, the mouths again. The last 2 panels, blond guy. If I could make a suggestion? That line on the mouth, on the top right part of it. Try to position that so it's directly between his eyes.
http://img256.imageshack.us/img256/499/examplev.png

A rough example there, but note that this does not apply in all cases. Because the head detail positioning is also dependent on the individuals personal drawing style. But generally you don't want the details on the other side of the head. :smalltongue:

The Neoclassic
2009-03-15, 05:43 PM
Well the gorgon/bull thing doesn't actually seem to move. Ever. It's always in that same pose.

I moved the legs a bit, but I entirely see what you mean upon looking over it again. In retrospect, I should've chosen a monster that was easier to draw dynamically for my first battle scene, but in future comics I'll work to make much clearer, more defined movement!


Also 3 panels, even if they are small, is a bit much for one arrow.

I also agree, in retrospect. I did have fun experimenting with chopping up the panels differently though! I'll just have to put that formatting to more interesting use next time. :smallcool:


Also, the mouths again. The last 2 panels, blond guy. If I could make a suggestion? That line on the mouth, on the top right part of it. Try to position that so it's directly between his eyes.
http://img256.imageshack.us/img256/499/examplev.png

A rough example there, but note that this does not apply in all cases. Because the head detail positioning is also dependent on the individuals personal drawing style. But generally you don't want the details on the other side of the head. :smalltongue:

This will actually be really helpful. Drawing mouths is one of the more difficult details for me, so I think lining it up as such will help a lot. Thanks!

@ CrimsonAngel: The blond one is Adonis. :smallsmile:

Victor Thorian
2009-03-15, 09:38 PM
This is going well.
Heh, heh.

I know how it feels when you don't do art for yourself, and rather do it for the masses that follow. It starts to feel a lot like a full-time job. You just go on and on until you can't do it anymore, then take a break.

And start over because people forgot about you :]

Lunaya
2009-03-15, 10:33 PM
Dern + butterfly = adorableness incarnate.

I know, right? ^_^

I may just have a favorite character already.

CrimsonAngel
2009-03-16, 07:57 AM
I know, right? ^_^

I may just have a favorite character already.

No more failing saves? :smallamused:

The Neoclassic
2009-03-16, 06:08 PM
It starts to feel a lot like a full-time job. You just go on and on until you can't do it anymore, then take a break.

And start over because people forgot about you :]

Precisely. :smallwink:

I don't know if anyone else is familiar with Drunk Duck, but I keep my comic up there too just so I have an easy way to share it with some of my other friends... Anyway, this past week, I've been getting 100+ pageviews a day. I've no idea how, but it's kinda nifty, considering up until then I was averaging 20-30 a day. :smallbiggrin:

Also, if anyone is an avid fan and is interested enough, I have a twitter where I will also be posting updates about the comic (http://twitter.com/TheNeoclassic) and other random stuff and also a facebook page for the comic (http://www.facebook.com/home.php?#/pages/Verisimilitude/49033963036?sid=ca16f2f00eeaa416f491f5e9db14ae35&ref=s)itself where I will occasionally post additional artwork and updates.

Anyway, don't feel obliged or anything, I appreciate all the fantastic feedback here and will do my utmost to get a new comic out to you by the end of the week!

Lunaya
2009-03-16, 09:50 PM
No more failing saves? :smallamused:

*raspberries* I can like other webcomics without being unfaithful.

I am not giving up my Failing Saves banner until Undertaker himself tells me it's dead. So there.

The Neoclassic
2009-03-18, 07:10 PM
New comic: Now with a gorgon that actually moves! :smallbiggrin:

#15
http://i449.photobucket.com/albums/qq218/Queenfange/Webcomic/Comic015.png

Assassin89
2009-03-18, 07:35 PM
Looks like Adonis is useless to the group and likely to cause trouble.

Lyinginbedmon
2009-03-18, 09:22 PM
No, looks like Adonis is a Rogue.

He could still be useful.

CrimsonAngel
2009-03-18, 09:36 PM
No, looks like Adonis is a Rogue.

He could still be useful.

http://i43.photobucket.com/albums/e381/CrimsonAngelChris/g239.png
:smallmad:

Dr. Simon
2009-03-19, 02:41 AM
Panel 6-7: Are those entrails spilling out of the gorgon's belly? Nicely gruesome touch!

Lyinginbedmon
2009-03-19, 02:55 AM
http://i43.photobucket.com/albums/e381/CrimsonAngelChris/g239.png
:smallmad:

See...now...how is that even relevant?

Panabelle
2009-03-19, 10:42 PM
OH NO that looks pretty unpleasant! Lawled at the last panel! Though I'd recommend next time putting some sort of differentiating banner around it to make it clearer that it is an imagining of some sort.

@CrimsonAngel: Explain yourself for the less perceptive in the audience (including myself) what this picture is supposed to mean, please. :smallfrown:

DarkCloud
2009-04-04, 11:04 PM
Hiya. I'm just noting that I enjoyed this little webcomic.

If you no longer have time to update, no worries. But I just wanted to know that it was appreciated. :smallsmile:

~DC.