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Ninjaman
2010-07-12, 12:29 AM
Well, this is my web comic.

Dream world is about a bunch of people, from all around the world, who all suddenly got a blackout. and when they woke up, They were in a world like nothing they had ever seen before.

Intruduction Ignite http://lh5.ggpht.com/_VNsRqOWzhhw/TD9arWyINZI/AAAAAAAAAGo/ivs5JBalvYw/s795/ignites%20comic.png.jpgEgon http://lh3.ggpht.com/_VNsRqOWzhhw/TEABV2e_9gI/AAAAAAAAAGw/hO06S4NihOw/s800/pirate%20comic.png.jpg Xing zen hu Number 1
http://lh4.ggpht.com/_VNsRqOWzhhw/TEWuN79PqEI/AAAAAAAAAHA/FbdGZCQ0Y-s/s800/Phsyker%20comic%20comic.png.jpg
Number 2
[IMG]http://lh6.ggpht.com/_VNsRqOWzhhw/TEWuTm-C0GI/AAAAAAAAAHE/ce1LIPoGudo/s800/phsyker%20comic%202.png.jpg (http://lh6.ggpht.com/_VNsRqOWzhhw/TEWuTm-C0GI/AAAAAAAAAHE/ce1LIPoGudo/s800/phsyker%20comic%202.png.jpg)] ReverNumber 1
http://lh4.ggpht.com/_VNsRqOWzhhw/TEXkjTJtCVI/AAAAAAAAAHM/3wJK3gHQer8/s800/Brawler%20comic.png.jpg
Number 2
http://lh6.ggpht.com/_VNsRqOWzhhw/TEXkjoomEoI/AAAAAAAAAHQ/w0ldxt5_E-8/s800/Brawler%20comic%202.png.jpg Paulhttp://lh4.ggpht.com/_VNsRqOWzhhw/TEbI-jXXZ_I/AAAAAAAAAHw/CIwy-lPanJ4/s800/mummy%20comic.png.jpg The mystic snowboarder which name we never really heardhttp://lh6.ggpht.com/_VNsRqOWzhhw/TEgashvH3nI/AAAAAAAAAH4/yjm3br2uz2M/s800/Wind%20srider%20comic.png.jpg

I still donīt know all the options but iīm working on it.

Feel free to post.

Cizak
2010-07-13, 05:22 AM
Looks pretty good, but you have a few spelling errors. Maybye you should et someone to read your comics before you post them?

Spelling errors in comic #1:

Panel 1: "precident" should be "president".
"promissed" should be "promised".
"Well about the story, well". Not a spelling error, but when you repeat "well" like that it sounds weird.
"exacly" should be "excactly".

Panel 3: "becourse" should be "because".
"vidio" should be "video".
"No Little Alex loved something---" This would look better with "No, little Alex".

Sorry to post something so boring as your first comic, but it's a major thing that needs improvement. Otherwise, it looks good. The art ids nice and it sounds like an interesting story.

Lyinginbedmon
2010-07-13, 05:36 AM
The massive blocks of text may dissuade readers...try stretching the page out a bit and separating them into smaller chunks.

Roland St. Jude
2010-07-13, 08:07 AM
Sheriff: I'll give you a little leeway on this first comic, but if this comic is about real world politics, you shouldn't post/link it here.

Ninjaman
2010-07-15, 02:04 PM
Looks pretty good, but you have a few spelling errors. Maybye you should et someone to read your comics before you post them?

Spelling errors in comic #1:

Panel 1: "precident" should be "president".
"promissed" should be "promised".
"Well about the story, well". Not a spelling error, but when you repeat "well" like that it sounds weird.
"exacly" should be "excactly".

Panel 3: "becourse" should be "because".
"vidio" should be "video".
"No Little Alex loved something---" This would look better with "No, little Alex".

Sorry to post something so boring as your first comic, but it's a major thing that needs improvement. Otherwise, it looks good. The art ids nice and it sounds like an interesting story.

I have edited them, i will try to double check in the future

Thanks


The massive blocks of text may dissuade readers...try stretching the page out a bit and separating them into smaller chunks.

It is just the intruductions which include this much text. The real comic will be more speechbubbles and action.


Sheriff: I'll give you a little leeway on this first comic, but if this comic is about real world politics, you shouldn't post/link it here.

It wouldnīt, i donīt even know whatīs going on in politics

Ninjaman
2010-07-16, 01:54 AM
New comic is up

Intruduction Egon http://lh3.ggpht.com/_VNsRqOWzhhw/TEABV2e_9gI/AAAAAAAAAGw/hO06S4NihOw/s800/pirate%20comic.png.jpg

Threeshades
2010-07-16, 07:31 AM
Are the next two going to be a pilot (who crashes due to turbulences) and a miner (who gets buried in a collapsing shaft)?

Ninjaman
2010-07-20, 07:30 AM
Are the next two going to be a pilot (who crashes due to turbulences) and a miner (who gets buried in a collapsing shaft)?

No. Why you ask?

Ninjaman
2010-07-20, 09:17 AM
A new comic is up, or 2 actually

Number 1
http://lh4.ggpht.com/_VNsRqOWzhhw/TEWuN79PqEI/AAAAAAAAAHA/FbdGZCQ0Y-s/s800/Phsyker%20comic%20comic.png.jpg
Number 2
[IMG]http://lh6.ggpht.com/_VNsRqOWzhhw/TEWuTm-C0GI/AAAAAAAAAHE/ce1LIPoGudo/s800/phsyker%20comic%202.png.jpg (http://lh6.ggpht.com/_VNsRqOWzhhw/TEWuTm-C0GI/AAAAAAAAAHE/ce1LIPoGudo/s800/phsyker%20comic%202.png.jpg)]

Lyinginbedmon
2010-07-20, 09:40 AM
Did she just petrify and fall over? :smallconfused:

Ninjaman
2010-07-20, 01:06 PM
Another (two) is up

Number 1
http://lh4.ggpht.com/_VNsRqOWzhhw/TEXkjTJtCVI/AAAAAAAAAHM/3wJK3gHQer8/s800/Brawler%20comic.png.jpg

Number 2
http://lh6.ggpht.com/_VNsRqOWzhhw/TEXkjoomEoI/AAAAAAAAAHQ/w0ldxt5_E-8/s800/Brawler%20comic%202.png.jpg

Threeshades
2010-07-20, 01:31 PM
No. Why you ask?

Oh I just thought I was beginning to see a pattern.

The last few comics are kind of confusing, people seem to tip over for no apparent reason.

Ninjaman
2010-07-20, 02:15 PM
Oh I just thought I was beginning to see a pattern.

The last few comics are kind of confusing, people seem to tip over for no apparent reason.

Propably best that way. If you think the intro is confusing you donīt stand a chance in the real story, as it is kinda "Alice in wonder land" the bloody version.

Ninjaman
2010-07-21, 05:18 AM
New comic is up

http://lh4.ggpht.com/_VNsRqOWzhhw/TEbI-jXXZ_I/AAAAAAAAAHw/CIwy-lPanJ4/s800/mummy%20comic.png.jpg

This means i am half the way through the introductions

Bayar
2010-07-21, 07:04 AM
New comic is up

http://lh4.ggpht.com/_VNsRqOWzhhw/TEbI-jXXZ_I/AAAAAAAAAHw/CIwy-lPanJ4/s800/mummy%20comic.png.jpg

This means i am half the way through the introductions

Ok, I didn't want to post in this thread at first, but this just made me crack. Get a spellchecker. Seriously. It will improve the comic a bit. Proper punctuation and capitalisation is the key to a good reader response.

http://i241.photobucket.com/albums/ff15/bayar_m2003/rect2495.png

Keveak
2010-07-21, 08:50 AM
Ok, I didn't want to post in this thread at first, but this just made me crack. Get a spellchecker. Seriously. It will improve the comic a bit. Proper punctuation and capitalisation is the key to a good reader response.

http://i241.photobucket.com/albums/ff15/bayar_m2003/rect2495.png

There's only one "e" in Swedish.

My spell checker say so :smalltongue:

Zexion
2010-07-21, 05:33 PM
There's only one "e" in Swedish.

My spell checker say so :smalltongue:
You are correct. Also, seriously put these through a spellchecker AND improve the drawing. The lines are too thick, and you've copied and pasted almost everything.

Bayar
2010-07-21, 05:45 PM
There's only one "e" in Swedish.

My spell checker say so :smalltongue:

Well my spell checker says so :smalltongue:

Zexion
2010-07-21, 05:54 PM
Well my spell checker says so :smalltongue:
Bang (http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Swedish_language). :smallbiggrin:

Threeshades
2010-07-21, 07:49 PM
Oh now i get it, all the inexplicable tipping over is meant to be inexplicable.

scientists say the average human understands or best memorizes a pattern once it repeats the third time.

But this does confuse me, why did nobody fall over in the other two comics?

Ninjaman
2010-07-22, 01:23 AM
Oh now i get it, all the inexplicable tipping over is meant to be inexplicable.

scientists say the average human understands or best memorizes a pattern once it repeats the third time.

But this does confuse me, why did nobody fall over in the other two comics?

They did, you just couldnīt see it, the first gets set on fire, the second hit by lightning, the important thing is not that they fall over, but that they all got a blackout.

Ninjaman
2010-07-22, 05:20 AM
http://lh6.ggpht.com/_VNsRqOWzhhw/TEgashvH3nI/AAAAAAAAAH4/yjm3br2uz2M/s800/Wind%20srider%20comic.png.jpg

Next one is up, i spell checked this one.

Bayar
2010-07-22, 06:13 AM
Bang (http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Swedish_language). :smallbiggrin:

Actually, I was reffering to the word "say" needing an s at the end so it would be gramatically correct in Keveak's post. Won't go modify the comic since I didn't save the .svg file.

Dvandemon
2011-02-17, 12:01 PM
To make a link, highlight the words you want to link and then click the Insert Link button.