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Zefir
2010-08-10, 07:41 AM
Hello everybody!

I have some free time to spent and I decided to make the backstory of my current Pathfinder adventure in an OotS-Style comic. (Hopefully earn some extra XP cause I am a little behinde the other^^). I made the story a little bit more fun but most have had like I draw it.

Most story is given in the first comic. The severals Backgrounds will be in spoiler after they where asked to tell them. some more story background will also given in spoilers.

I plan to make even one every 3 weeks up to 2 every week. This depends on my work and how people ask for new comics, cause i like fans.



Current Page:
http://i977.photobucket.com/albums/ae257/Goldmann-andreas/Seit10-2.png


Archiv
1. Messages for all! (http://www.bilder-hochladen.net/files/ex3p-d-png.html)
2. Meet at Lanzetstreet (http://i977.photobucket.com/albums/ae257/Goldmann-andreas/Seite23.png)
3. The forecast (http://i977.photobucket.com/albums/ae257/Goldmann-andreas/seite3-1.png)
4. Storm on the front (http://i977.photobucket.com/albums/ae257/Goldmann-andreas/seite4-1.png)
5. Backup from the inside (http://i977.photobucket.com/albums/ae257/Goldmann-andreas/Seite5-2.png)
6. I can see the goal (http://i977.photobucket.com/albums/ae257/Goldmann-andreas/Seite6a.png)
7. Don't burn yourself on Fast Food (http://i977.photobucket.com/albums/ae257/Goldmann-andreas/Seit7-2.png)
8. Lamm is dead, check the hatbox (http://i977.photobucket.com/albums/ae257/Goldmann-andreas/Seit8-2.png)
9. Let's take a look (http://i977.photobucket.com/albums/ae257/Goldmann-andreas/Seit9-2.png)
10. That's in the box. (http://i977.photobucket.com/albums/ae257/Goldmann-andreas/Seit10-2.png)


Backgrounds:

Eon

http://i977.photobucket.com/albums/ae257/Goldmann-andreas/Eon2.pngEon was born and raised in Corvosa. Moste time of his childhood were spend in the orphanage. At a age of 10, he was an abnormaly high person. He was even as high as a man of 20 years. Because of this fact Lamm noticed him and tricked Eon to work for him. For some months Eon worked as a debt collector for Lamm, even if his body seems to be old his mind was like a child. With his tall body and his rude appereance many people feared him and it was easy to fullfill the task Lamm gives him. At some point Eon realized that he transports several Gold pices but only get a copper every time. He menaged to get a house in corvosa, what isn#t very hard, because most of them are empty. He managed to take a few coins every time there are so many that you can't say they miss them. But Hookshankes knows how many coins should be in the bag...

Don Salvara Gato Camorr
http://i977.photobucket.com/albums/ae257/Goldmann-andreas/Salvara2.pngSalavara doesn't know his father and his mother ban talking about him. His mother was Nartana Camorr, but she was ailing and weak since Salvara can remember. Cause of this the upbringing was taken over by his grandmother. She rears him in the traditional ways of the Varisian.
Salvara got used to walke the alleays and for that his Grandmother gaves him the nickname Gato (something like kitty).
In his young age he made friend with 3 boys Tharl, Jared, and Aaron and a girl named Ameiko. They launch a gang to earn 'donations' from the people. Salvara used his skills to distract people especially woman, while the rest collect the 'donations'.
At the age of 8 died Savaras mother after her long illness. Only two years later his grandmother was killed by a Hellknight named Alerghast. She was out on the fence market to buy some cloth. The hellknights made a razzia that day. At the examination the hellknight assure, that it wwas an accident. Salvara thought that the judge was bribed and he swear revenge.
All alone Salvara managed his next two years of his life with the help of his gang. Their actions got noticed by Lamm and he managed to take them into his groupe. The next three years were a ordeal for Salvara. But the day came where his fathers blood show of. flames burst out of his hand and set the house on fire he was in. he managed to flee from Lamm in the burning house. His new goal was it to stop Lamm and free his gangs member.

Kal Barron
http://i977.photobucket.com/albums/ae257/Goldmann-andreas/Kal2.png
Kal Barons story is short . He was one of Lamm's lamms and he was allways alone. After he made it out of Lamm's hand he managed to stay alive. This years made him closed. He doesn't trust anyone. Well nothing more to say about his life.
Pathme Sonnenschein
http://i977.photobucket.com/albums/ae257/Goldmann-andreas/Pathme2.png
Rayne Bethma
http://i977.photobucket.com/albums/ae257/Goldmann-andreas/rayna2.png


Story:

The Story beginns and playes in a larg city called Corvosa.
The City is one of the biggest once at the continent. Corvosa is a port city lokated near the Ocean, it makes good trade with the Varisian.
The city is split into different areas, most caused of the live standart or a sewer/river. The part in the north is called "Old Corvosa" the people of this district are mid to poor class people. In this distric the most popular place is eals end. Eals end is build of five ships unable to move, each ship holds another lust like Alcohole, drugs, gambling, erotic and entertainment.

Other things:
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Cizak
2010-08-13, 08:04 AM
The order you read the panels in is... wierd :smallconfused:

Zefir
2010-08-13, 08:30 AM
Its just for the first one the rest will be like normal comics.

I want to have the message in the mid cause all got the same message thats the point i made it like this.

CrimsonAngel
2010-08-13, 09:00 AM
Geeze that comic is huge.

Prince Zahn
2010-08-13, 09:33 AM
Aside from spelling(even though it is only minor)
I have a good feeling I'll enjoy reading this....so I will:smallsmile:

Allan Surgite
2010-08-13, 10:32 AM
Unless you were going for a pun, Crimson is not spelled Chrimson.

And reduction in size and a grammar/spelling check would be appreciated. If you wish, you can feel free to send any scripts you have to me; I'd gladly flick over them and fix up the more obvious spelling/grammar mistakes and return them.

Zefir
2010-08-13, 10:49 AM
This will be nice my english is not good and word/leo don't make it better.
(I even wrote crimson right in the comic....)

The size is a problem that i will solve soone. Think Din A4 is much to large.

Keveak
2010-08-13, 12:27 PM
This will be nice my english is not good and word/leo don't make it better.
(I even wrote crimson right in the comic....)

The size is a problem that i will solve soone. Think Din A4 is much to large.

Don't worry, it'll come to you some day :smallbiggrin:

Also: Word/leo?

Allan Surgite
2010-08-13, 12:29 PM
I believe "Leo" is another spellchecker, but that is based entirely on the context.

Worry not; if you've a good head on your shoulders, merely reading "proper" English should rub off on you. And as mentioned, my PM box is always open, although I may not be able to reply instantly.

Zefir
2010-08-13, 12:36 PM
Leo (http://www.leo.org/) is kind of a dictionary which has some english phrases, without it you would have hunte me to mars or pluto or an other galaxi.

2nd strip is still at work.

Allan Surgite
2010-08-13, 12:42 PM
Hopefully it will be a bit smaller this time? :smalltongue:

I'd also advise a simpler panel set-up, unless you have a similar point to the one you were getting across in this strip to drive home in the following strip.

Zefir
2010-08-15, 08:42 AM
2. Meet at Lanzetstreet (http://i977.photobucket.com/albums/ae257/Goldmann-andreas/Seite23.png)

New Page is up.
Low intresst but hope it will come, sometimes.
Grammer checked by Allan A. Aokage

Green-Shirt Q
2010-08-16, 06:39 PM
Good thing you showed everybody entering the building.

If you hadn't shown that, I would've assumed everybody teleported in using magic. :smalltongue:

Wait...actually in a fantasy comic that doesn't sound as sarcastic. :smallconfused:

Let me try again. :smallsigh:

If you hadn't shown that, I would've assumed everybody teleported in using science. :smalltongue:

Zefir
2010-08-17, 04:07 AM
@:Green-Shirt Q

I am not sure what you want to say but i see the sarkasm so i tell you.
Your critc is no critic its just a make-someone-sad-dialog so pls if you have no good critcs just don' post anything.

Allan Surgite
2010-08-17, 07:22 AM
@Zefir: He's being humorous, and not particularly serious :smalltongue:

Keveak
2010-08-17, 10:29 AM
@:Green-Shirt Q

I am not sure what you want to say but i see the sarkasm so i tell you.
Your critc is no critic its just a make-someone-sad-dialog so pls if you have no good critcs just don' post anything.

Spicy guatamala-eating Michelangelo on a skateboard, dude!

He was making a joke, calm down and try not to take every post too seriously :smallsmile:

Especially not if a ":smalltongue:" is present.

Zefir
2010-08-17, 04:43 PM
Then i am sry i missunderstand, but here where i live its just like a insult.

Lord Raziere
2010-08-17, 11:19 PM
yea, stating something completely ironically in a sarcastic way is completely insulting and offensive, its not a good way to point out things in a cool way at all, I should really stop, you have Enlightened me to the truth, good sir.

Keveak
2010-08-18, 12:39 AM
Then i am sry i missunderstand, but here where i live its just like a insult.

The joke was that a common (but mild) criticism/semi-insult (The part about teleporting in with magic) would make perfect sense in this setting.

The smileys are what made the difference, though. Always keep an eye on the smileys :smallsmile:


yea, stating something completely ironically in a sarcastic way is completely insulting and offensive, its not a good way to point out things in a cool way at all, I should really stop, you have Enlightened me to the truth, good sir.

It is a more offensive ay to point stuff out than just saying it nicely, actually.

But still not that offensive.

Lord Raziere
2010-08-18, 12:55 AM
The joke was that a common (but mild) criticism/semi-insult (The part about teleporting in with magic) would make perfect sense in this setting.

The smileys are what made the difference, though. Always keep an eye on the smileys :smallsmile:



It is a more offensive way to point stuff out than just saying it nicely, actually.

But still not that offensive.

ok, ok I'll be a little nice this time, ahem.

some of us prefer sarcasm as a means of pointing flaws and such and generally sticking it to people being wrong-headed in a cool way, and saying it directly doesn't have style.

Zefir
2010-08-23, 02:21 PM
3. The forecast (http://i977.photobucket.com/albums/ae257/Goldmann-andreas/seite3-1.png)

Page 3 is up.

Sry all i try to clam down at these things but know my english isn't that good missunderstanding may appear.

Herpestidae
2010-08-23, 02:31 PM
Your English is far from the worst I've seen.

The worst i've seen is, and I quote:

"Has anyone really been far even as decided to use even go want to do look more like?"

Zefir
2010-08-24, 06:18 AM
Your English is far from the worst I've seen.

The worst i've seen is, and I quote:

"Has anyone really been far even as decided to use even go want to do look more like?"

Thank you! But i mean not when i write english i meant when i read your Comments/critcs/sarasems etc...
And one thing can you tell me what the person want to say with the sentence you quote?

Herpestidae
2010-08-24, 11:44 AM
And one thing can you tell me what the person want to say with the sentence you quote?

Nobody knows what he was trying to say. The thread went crazy trying to figure it out.

Zefir
2010-09-06, 02:52 PM
Ok guys. ( Maybe some subscribed this:smallbiggrin:) Page 4 is up and checked

4. Storm on the front (http://i977.photobucket.com/albums/ae257/Goldmann-andreas/seite4-1.png)

Sorry that it takes this long time I had busy times. But I made something in the next few days up to the weekend:

- More Backgroundstorys of each PC.
- Pc Nr. 5 is still at work.
- Some Art upgrade on the PCs like Eon's hair.
- Comic Nr. 5

I have no knowledge in making a banner so I would ask you, if anyone can do this for me please. I would suggest if it has this (http://www.rpg-resource.org.uk/images/articles/3392/curse-of-the-crimson-throne-players-guide.jpg) in OotS style, cause its the Cover of the kampang. If you have any other Ideas which you think fit better, I won't reject. You can't have enougth Banner right?:smallbiggrin:

Thanks to all who try this out and to all who still wait for the next Page.

Zefir
2010-10-02, 12:30 PM
Oh no doublepost...

Well page 5 is up. Some story was added and the chars avatars.
I will increase the rate of the comics, now. last month IA took to much draw time.
5. Backup from the inside (http://i977.photobucket.com/albums/ae257/Goldmann-andreas/Seite5-2.png)

Keveak
2010-10-02, 04:43 PM
A tad confusing but Hookhands and the drunk talk was funny :smallbiggrin:

Zefir
2010-10-03, 03:45 AM
Confused about the half-elf woman?
It will be cleared next page, she pop up just like this in the game.

Keveak
2010-10-03, 09:43 AM
Confused about the half-elf woman?
It will be cleared next page, she pop up just like this in the game.

That, and the order of the speech bubbles are a bit diffficult to understand :smallsmile:

Zefir
2010-10-16, 01:53 PM
Page 5 6 is up.
The half-elf discribes herself as I said.
6. I can see the goal (http://i977.photobucket.com/albums/ae257/Goldmann-andreas/Seite6a.png)

To explain the thing with the bubbles: My main order is from up to down then from left to right. I know in the last panle of page 5 its hard but it doesn't matter wich one you read last Hookshanks or Salvara.

Oh and again we have some drunk talk, sad that it will end after Lamms death.

Zefir
2010-10-18, 03:24 PM
I took some time and create a banner for the webcomic:
http://i977.photobucket.com/albums/ae257/Goldmann-andreas/Banner.png (http://www.giantitp.com/forums/showthread.php?t=163704)

Zefir
2010-11-08, 05:32 AM
I'm sorry for the late update, but it doesn't seem that there are many readers.

Open for comments (or is there a rule that says no comment befor page 10?)

7. Don't burn yourself on Fast Food (http://i977.photobucket.com/albums/ae257/Goldmann-andreas/Seit7-2.png)

Zefir
2010-11-13, 06:46 PM
4th in a row thats bad very bad...

8. Lamm is dead, check the hatbox (http://i977.photobucket.com/albums/ae257/Goldmann-andreas/Seit8-2.png)

I hope someone is here reading it. I answer every question related to the comic like Backstories/persons/etc.

Allan Surgite
2010-11-28, 07:04 AM
Quick question, if you don't mind?

From Eon's profile/backstory thingy...

Eon was born and raised in Corvosa. Moste time of his childhood were spend in the orphanage. At a age of 10, he was a heigth boy. He was even as high as a man of 20 years. Because of this fact Lamm noticed him and tricked Eon to work for him. For some months Eon...
Can I presume you mean "he was an abnormally tall person", or something along those lines?

Zefir
2010-11-28, 07:45 AM
Yep, just like you said. I changed it and added some more (hopefully with less mistake or misunderstandings.

And for the reader(s):

9. Let's take a look (http://i977.photobucket.com/albums/ae257/Goldmann-andreas/Seit9-2.png)

I add more backstorys as soon as I can.

Zefir
2010-12-05, 09:48 AM
Some backstory upgrade are made. Comic will need a few more days.

Noone has a guess what is in the box?

mastermind
2010-12-07, 08:26 AM
The most dangerous box. Ever.
http://thedemotivators.com/wp-content/uploads/2009/11/this.jpg

Zefir
2010-12-07, 12:24 PM
The most dangerous box. Ever.
http://thedemotivators.com/wp-content/uploads/2009/11/this.jpg

hihi nice but not near the true thing inside^^.

super dark33
2010-12-10, 03:44 AM
a key or somthing?
or maybe a ring? no, thats a cliche...
pharaps an amulet?

Zefir
2010-12-10, 10:18 AM
a key or somthing?
or maybe a ring? no, thats a cliche...
pharaps an amulet?

No
No
And No.

If you need a hint: There is a hint hide in a previous page. Update will come on Sunday. School kills my free time in the week.

super dark33
2010-12-10, 04:17 PM
a CROCODILE?!?!

blackjack217
2010-12-10, 04:19 PM
a maguffin?

Zefir
2010-12-10, 08:14 PM
a CROCODILE?!?! No

a maguffin? Not sure what this means, but I think I can say No^^.

Zefir
2010-12-27, 09:41 AM
Update comes soon my work killes my time. I only need to correct the spelling.

Zefir
2010-12-30, 05:36 PM
And here it is sorry for the delay. Hopefully someone reads this^^.

10. That's in the box. (http://i977.photobucket.com/albums/ae257/Goldmann-andreas/Seit10-2.png)

super dark33
2010-12-30, 05:44 PM
didnt see that coming

Zefir
2011-01-01, 05:06 AM
That was the plan, but if you look up comic 2 you see that she is flying a bit.

Zefir
2011-01-23, 06:52 AM
Hey readers*echo*echo*echo*

sry that there aren't any updates but my school is going to kill all my time until 27th January. After that they there will be an update I promise, if there is anyone I could promis this.

Zefir
2011-02-13, 10:18 AM
I know I need to update this but my examy end next friday so it will take a bit longer.
Here is something I tried for a new style what do you think?
http://i977.photobucket.com/albums/ae257/Goldmann-andreas/New-Eon.png

super dark33
2011-02-13, 02:59 PM
The new art looks nice, and hope you will get a high score!

Zefir
2011-02-23, 08:49 AM
Bad for me updating will need more time than thought, due to illness of other people in my workplace.

Zefir
2011-03-09, 05:16 PM
Yeah I know it is a self reanimation, but I try to make an update this weekend with Eon's art upgrade. (The lack is caused by a 380 page thick book I have to read in the next 3 weeks and I haven't start it until now)

Zefir
2011-05-04, 03:24 AM
I'm sorry for the big delay in this comic. I never wanted to have it such big and hope there are people still intressed in it. My Bachlor Work takes near all of my time.

If there isn't much intresst remaining in this I'm going to start a new one, because the setting of the crimson throne is a dokumentary of a current DnD groupe I'm playing, so there aren't much ways for crativ storyline.

Either way The new one or an update will start near 16 of May since this is the date where I have to finish my Bachlor work.