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shadow_archmagi
2010-09-12, 08:37 PM
The potato is a small, brown, lumpy thing.
No one considers it beautiful.
Nearly everyone considers it good food.

It is a strange affair.
Potatoes are bland and soft.
In any other food, bland is an insult.

I have a friend who is Irish.
He resembles the potato thusly:
Neither he nor it make much sense.

This sentence lacks poem.
This sentence lacks meter.
It strives to imitate a potato.

Perhaps that is enough.

Rae Artemi
2010-09-13, 02:27 PM
You might want to remove the "is" from line 8, it is improper grammar and throws off the rhythm.

shadow_archmagi
2010-09-13, 03:54 PM
You might want to remove the "is" from line 8, it is improper grammar and throws off the rhythm.

oops

I did not see that

Rae Artemi
2010-09-13, 04:01 PM
oops

I did not see that

Hey, don't worry about it, guy. Everyone makes typos every once in a while.