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Saeyan
2011-07-10, 02:07 AM
I said I'd get around to it eventually...


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http://i20.photobucket.com/albums/b229/krysjez/oots/haley_thumb.jpg (http://i20.photobucket.com/albums/b229/krysjez/oots/longhairhaley_50p.jpg)

comments and critique always appreciated. Did this around midnight and looking at it in the day bits of her are kinda starting to bug me. I'd love if someone could help redline her hips, butt and foreshortened thigh. Her pose is from a study I did sometime ago, but it was pretty messy and my understanding of form isn't good enough yet that I can mentally fill in the blanks.

Not sure if I should clean it up/develop it a bit further, if yes I don't know if I want to go in the same direction as the V picture (http://www.giantitp.com/forums/showthread.php?p=9789126) which was more carefully rendered out. Thoughts?

Domochevsky
2011-07-10, 10:51 AM
Hm, looks pretty solid to me overall. Those are quite some hips. I'd have to seriously try to make any improvements here, with barely any gain. :smallsmile:

leakingpen
2011-07-10, 12:24 PM
the cloth over her right breast is popped up a bit high, it should tuck in a little more approaching the armpit, unless she has an antigrav brassiere.

the hip is a bit high, which is what's killing the perspective on the thigh. I would have the cloth end where the flesh on the thigh ends now, and redraw the thigh from there. oddly enough, the shadowing as is looks perfect for the FIXED perspective.

Saeyan
2011-07-10, 10:27 PM
she has an antigrav brassiere.
Haha, it seem all fantasy females own strapless antigrav Wonderbras! I'll change that, thanks for pointing it out.


have the cloth end where the flesh on the thigh ends now, and redraw the thigh from there
Sorry, I don't really understand what you mean by this...

Haruki-kun
2011-07-10, 10:38 PM
I think it looks amazing. Congratulations.

Flame of Anor
2011-07-11, 02:52 AM
Sorry, I don't really understand what you mean by this...

Leakingpen means, and I agree, that the hips are too tall. S/he means for you to do the following:


Make note of the place where Haley's right pantleg ends on her thigh.
Specifically, make note of the altitude of that spot on the picture.
(It's about the same altitude as the top of her left breast.)
Then change the drawing so that the top of her hips is lowered to that altitude.

Kaytara
2011-07-11, 05:04 AM
Hm, I think her hands might be a little on the smallish/frail side, particularly for someone who uses a longbow.

Other than that, I love the picture! It's full of personality! (I might have imagined the "armour" to have more *attempts* at imitating armour, i.e. straps and stuff in useless places. >D)

Do you really want to spread your stuff over two threads, though? :/

Mindfreak
2011-07-11, 08:13 AM
I said I'd get around to it eventually...


click to embiggen
http://i20.photobucket.com/albums/b229/krysjez/oots/haley_thumb.jpg (http://i20.photobucket.com/albums/b229/krysjez/oots/longhairhaley_50p.jpg)

comments and critique always appreciated. Did this around midnight and looking at it in the day bits of her are kinda starting to bug me. I'd love if someone could help redline her hips, butt and foreshortened thigh. Her pose is from a study I did sometime ago, but it was pretty messy and my understanding of form isn't good enough yet that I can mentally fill in the blanks.

Not sure if I should clean it up/develop it a bit further, if yes I don't know if I want to go in the same direction as the V picture (http://www.giantitp.com/forums/showthread.php?p=9789126) which was more carefully rendered out. Thoughts?

*Is jealous because you were able to make such a nich Haley drawing*
I like it a lot. It looks like what she probably would look like and since you're such a good drawer it looks good too.
10/10!

leakingpen
2011-07-11, 11:36 AM
http://personal.dreamfantastic.com/images/haleyedit1.JPG

Like so. basically you have the distance between hips too large, you have a skinny woman's abs chest and arms on a large framed woman's hips.

Asta Kask
2011-07-15, 10:29 AM
It's a gorgeous picture. My only problem is that it looks too innocent. Then again, she has an astronomical Bluff score...

Ninjaman
2011-07-17, 03:51 PM
Beautiful. But i agree on the hip thing.