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banjo1985
2007-07-16, 09:27 AM
Whitefeather
http://i192.photobucket.com/albums/z175/banjo_the_clown/newwhitefeather.png
An OotS Fancomic
By Banjo1985

Spiffy Banner:
http://i192.photobucket.com/albums/z175/banjo_the_clown/title2.png (http://www.giantitp.com/forums/showthread.php?t=50886)


New Artist - Keris Rain!

This is the main page for my Whitefeather OotS fancomic, which will now be drawn by Keris Rain, while I carry on with the script. We're aiming for one comic a week to begin with, and we'll see how we go from there! Once we've got work up and running again we'll probably update the banners and whatnot.

Anyhow, hope you enjoy my efforts, either way here are all the strips posted to date:


Character Biogshttp://i192.photobucket.com/albums/z175/banjo_the_clown/biogjenna.png
Jenna Church
Age - 18
Class - Ranger

Jenna's parents have been killed by Vortigern Darkspur, and he has taken her infant son Cal captive. She has sworn to avenge her parents and rescue Cal, with the help of her friends. Little has been revealed about her past, but Darkspur has suggested that having a child so young wasn't entirely her own choice. Despite the hardships of her recent experiences, Jenna retains a sunny, rather ditsy demeanor, and keeps the party together with her own positive outlook.

Oh, and it has become clear she can't ride a horse!

http://i192.photobucket.com/albums/z175/banjo_the_clown/biogailish.png
Ailish Wyvernspyre
Age - 23
Class - Cleric

Ailish is an aspiring cleric of Father Varin, the God of Light, and divine fervour also shines within her. She was sent to Jenna's hometown by her holy order, and quickly built up friendships with the rest of the party. Having said this, she is rather quick to get frustrated, especially when Beech has one of his slow moments. Ailish has a strong and forceful personality, and can sometimes let her duty get in the way of her actions.

http://i192.photobucket.com/albums/z175/banjo_the_clown/biogbeech.png
Beech Tree
Age - 24
Class - Barbarian

Beech is a slow and simple lad who has lived in town all his life that he can remember, which is only the last 6 years. Surprisingly gentle and kind, he is a sensitive soul who gets upset at the bad things in the world. He does his best to help the rest of the party, but often gets it wrong, much to Ailish's annoyance. Beech has known Jenna all her life, and see's her as a kind of big sister, despite being six years her senior.

Beech likes bacon, teddy bears and butterflies, though not all in the same sandwich.

http://i192.photobucket.com/albums/z175/banjo_the_clown/biogdrake.png
Drake Clement
Age - 21
Class - Sorceror

Drake is another of Jenna's childhood friends. There is definite attraction between the two, at least on Drake's side, but Jenna either doesn't notice or choses not to acknowledge it. Drake is a novice Sorceror, and sometimes his magic doesn't manifest quite the way he would like. Drake is very touchy about his masculinity, because of his crappy hit points he feels less of a man than the mountain that is Beech.

Drake is often between familiars, most run away after meeting Cal! His current familiar is a koi named Jaws, who he keeps in a bag of water.


Part 1 - Two Deaths, One Funeral and a Play House

Strip 1 - And so it Begins

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Strip 2 - Dying Words
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Strip 3 - Is dey Gonna be Okay?
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Strip 4 - Way to Break the Mood
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Strip 5 - A Blatant Plot Device (Part 1)
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Strip 5 - A Blatant Plot Device (Part 2)
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Strip 6 - A Far From Silent Night
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Strip 7 - Intelligence Was His Dump Stat!
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Strip 8 - A Good Familiar's Hard to Find
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Strip 9 - Horsing Around
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Strip 10 - Creative Marketing
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Strip 11 - Supplies
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Part 2 - Backstories and Battles

Strip 12 - Art Upgrade
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Strip 13 - A Bridge Too Far
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Strip 14 - Fight Scene: Take One
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Strip 15 - Time for Plan B
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Strip 16 - A Nightmare for Men Everywhere
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Strip 17 - Opposites Don't Attract
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Strip 18 - A Familiar Shadow?
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Strip 19 - Overkill?
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Strip 20 - Plot Exposition Ahoy!
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Strip 21 - Don't Go Down to the Woods Today...
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Strip 22 - Rated PG
http://i194.photobucket.com/albums/z257/kerisrain/Whitefeather/Comic22.png

Raistlin1040
2007-07-16, 09:59 AM
Join the club. I was here first.

My advice? Don't do a webcomic. It's insanely hard, and you will feel you have to meet a number of comics per month and it's hell.

Nightwing
2007-07-16, 10:03 AM
I would love to help you with your comic. Perhaps I could help with back story. Or maybe make some villains?

banjo1985
2007-07-16, 10:13 AM
Hehe I think you might be right with the difficulty part, but I'm really not thinking of doing it at that kind of level, where I feel obliged to do an update at a certain time, like poor Giant has been recently. I suppose I just want to do it as a kind of hobby & see how it goes and what it looks like further on. All I'm really thinking about at the moment is my character concepts and how people think they look etc, as everythings way to early to consider doing anything serious.

Nightwing, I may take you up on that offer at a later point, but at the moment I need to flesh my ideas out a lot more before I really start thinking about other stuff, cheers for the offer though!

Ichneumon
2007-07-16, 10:19 AM
I have started a webcomic 2 days ago. Here on Giantitp.com, I like it. You should do it too. We need more comics!:smalltongue:

Brickwall
2007-07-16, 10:22 AM
A ranger with a harpoon? Madness...

I'm sure you could develop a more appropriate style if you tried. It's not like OotS art is easy to learn, and judging by your level, you're already well on your way to mastering it.

Yeril
2007-07-16, 10:30 AM
Good luck :)

Ava
2007-07-16, 11:56 AM
Join the club. I was here first.

My advice? Don't do a webcomic. It's insanely hard, and you will feel you have to meet a number of comics per month and it's hell.

Agreed.

I've been wanting to do a webcomic for a couple of months now and so far I haven't even come up with one panel, just a few crappy sketches, lol.

onasuma
2007-07-16, 12:49 PM
Join the club. I was here first.

My advice? Don't do a webcomic. It's insanely hard, and you will feel you have to meet a number of comics per month and it's hell.

Very large objection! Starting my webcomic was the best thing i ever did. So much so i have three now, even if one still has no comics. I only have about 5 readers but i still love to give those few people that pleasure.

Raistlin1040
2007-07-16, 01:16 PM
Well than good on you. Remember my comic? Yeah, my artist quit on me.

banjo1985
2007-07-16, 01:57 PM
A few contrasting opinions there, I understand that its really difficult to come up with a premise for a webcomic in the first place, and even more difficult to keep the thing going. But I am going to try, just to see if I can do it more than anything else I think!

And I think your right about the harpoon, I think I'm going to change it to a quarterstaff, it fits the character better as well as the class!

Right I've put together another concept, this time for my cleric, and I've also enlarged my lead character:


http://i192.photobucket.com/albums/z175/banjo_the_clown/jennabig.png
Jenna

http://i192.photobucket.com/albums/z175/banjo_the_clown/Ailish.png
Ailish

Gefangnis
2007-07-16, 04:40 PM
Heh, you could take my route and do a fancomic instead of a webcomic. No deadlines, and you can go back and change your strips after you finish them!

banjo1985
2007-07-18, 09:30 AM
Right, before I did any more character concepts I decided to have a go at my first comic, hopefully it will help generate my ideas and get me started etc.

Strip 1 is below:

http://i192.photobucket.com/albums/z175/banjo_the_clown/comic.png


Tell me what you all think, in terms of story layout and my drawing, any criticism or nice things are greatly appreciated! Based on the feedback I'll decide whether to make a proper go at this or leave it by the wayside...

Note: Yes I'm already aware that the backgrounds are a bit bright, I'm working on modulating the colours a bit!

AmberVael
2007-07-18, 10:32 AM
Hmm... you know, the thing that stands out most to me is how the comic isn't quite as... crisp as your avatar. It has been blurred a bit.
If you could figure out how to get rid of that, it'd be a good thing to do.

banjo1985
2007-07-18, 10:36 AM
Yeah I kind of notices that, especially on the samller character images, I'm not really sure what to do about it to be honest, it might just be a size issue.

If anyone can help with the fuzziness I'm using Inkscape and hosting on Photobucket

Yeril
2007-07-18, 10:40 AM
Hmm, Intresting, only criticism I can see is you jumped into the story too quickly, dead parents in the 4th Panel seems alittle too soon.

other than that good, Im looking forward to see more about this
Cale-the-cat-strangler

AmberVael
2007-07-18, 10:40 AM
Ah. Photobucket.
Well, I don't know what it is, but I've noticed that once I reach a certain image size on photobucket, it becomes blurry for me too, no matter how nice I have it before it is uploaded.
*shrug*

Probably if you got a site for your comic that would host your images for you there wouldn't be a problem.

Kurien
2007-07-18, 11:07 AM
It looks like a good start.

However:

Some of the backgrounds have really thick lines, which makes them look really blocky compared to the characters. Perhaps if the lines were the same thickness of the character's lines? The thick lines are worst on the house in the fourth panel.

Also, it's just my opinion, but the lead character, Jenna, looks very... girly. I think it is the hair, and the boots. Well, you probably intended for her to look like that...

Ava
2007-07-18, 11:13 AM
I have to agree that the line width is a bit of a problem. I would suggest using thicker lines for outlines and things in the foreground, then use thinner lines for things in the background.

Other than that I think it's visually pretty good.

So far the story reminds me of the beginning of Star Wars... but who is Cal?

AmberVael
2007-07-18, 11:16 AM
Then again, line thickness can help denote how thick/thin an object is as well, so that is another way you have to think of stroke width.

banjo1985
2007-07-18, 01:12 PM
Thanks for the comments about the lines, I agree the backgrounds look over-chunky, I'm going to edit the first strip and repost it in a few days I think, see if I can get it to look better!

Yeah the lead character does look girly, maybe a little more so than I envisioned, but having drawn her like that I can't really imagine her any other way, so she probably won't change. Except for changing that Harpoon for a quarterstaff...

Yeril - It might be a little quick, but I was going for a start that would set up the coming story for the comic, it's not something that will continue but I thought it was a good way to start, though common opinion may differ!

As for the star wars reference I really can't comment I've only ever seen the original 3 films, and that was about 10 years ago! As for who Cal is, well that will be aparent in the coming strips if I get this off the ground.

Edit - Here is the first strip again with thinner background lines, and with Jenna rid of that damn harpoon!

http://i192.photobucket.com/albums/z175/banjo_the_clown/comic-1.png

banjo1985
2007-07-20, 08:28 AM
Right I've been working on strip #2, here's what I've got:

Strip #2 - Dying Words... Editted with Kurnours advice below
http://i192.photobucket.com/albums/z175/banjo_the_clown/strip2-1.png

As previously, I'd really like to know people opinions. I've tried to sort the line thickness issue out, and I also had a go at putting slightly more humour into this strip. Any opinions on whether this looks like a goer would be good!

Cheers all

Kurien
2007-07-20, 09:14 AM
That's great! :smallbiggrin:.

The line thickness in the first strip is much better, especially on the house.

However, in the second panel of the second strip, Jenna almost looks crazed :smalltongue: I think it's a combination of her hair and lines around the eyes. Also, the wrinkles under Jenna's mother's eyes in the the last panel look a little strange.

banjo1985
2007-07-20, 10:17 AM
Hehe thanks :smallredface:

I've changed Jenna's Mom's wrinkles on the last panel, and I think she looks a bit less weird now! I also noticed I hadn't dashed her speech bubbles in the last few panels, so I've changed that as well. As for Jenna looking a bit loony in the second panel, I was trying to make her look surprised at the voice of her mom but also relieved to hear it, but it didn't really turn out looking that way! Thing is, I'm struggling with working out how to change it...

ChimericPhase
2007-07-21, 01:30 AM
I think something that would help your background line-thickness issue would be to use non-black lines. Instead, use lines that are a shade darker than whatever they're outlineing.

Example:


http://img264.imageshack.us/img264/3694/marlisecret01kt4.gif
old comic I did sometime back


See the 4th panel? Dark brown, dark green outlines the tree, but keeps it in the background. I save black outlines for details and characters.

XiaoTie
2007-07-21, 02:11 PM
Damn that last panel on the second page made me laugh hard!
Keep it up!

onasuma
2007-07-21, 02:17 PM
Nooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooo ooo!
The harpoon was a great idea. Why? Why have you forsaken us so?

Hurkyl
2007-07-21, 05:31 PM
In the second panel of the second strip, you need to rearrange the text balloons. The natural way to read them is in the wrong order! (At least... I assume "Mom!" was supposed to come first)

Shadic
2007-07-21, 05:49 PM
Nightwing, I may take you up on that offer at a later point..Don't.

Anyways, for the comic...

Definitely make the text size bigger, I can hardly read it on my screen. The humor could use some work, and the art seems a bit cluttered - Everything seems to be one giant messy object, if you know what I mean?

And the Mom looks funny because you used black for the facial wrinkles, which is too strong of a color for a minor facial feature.

Also, the lines for the panels are far too tilted for my liking... If you clean up the general appearance a bit, I think that you could make this comic a lot better than it is.

Last, the whole "breaking a word mid-line with a dash" thing bugs me, it looks a lot better if you can avoid it. (For example, when you said "To be continued." at the end of the second comic.)

banjo1985
2007-07-23, 04:02 AM
Thanks for this batch of comments on the second strip. From what I can tell the general consensus is that my art and line drawing need to be cleaned up a bit, which I hope will happen as Ii do more strips, but time will tell!

Thanks for the note about my speech bubbles and the idea about darker shade lines rather than black, I think I may try this for the next comicand see what you all think compared to the first two.

Osamuna - sorry but the harpoon has been banished to the 7th plane of hell for the time being, but may return at a later point...

As for the humour, I'm not really sure I can do anything about it, it's the way I write and I put down what I thinks funny, however if no-one else thinks it is then maybe I should stop this before I get too into it!

For the next strip I'll be introducing the other three party characters, hopefully I should get it up in the next few days (damn my overcomplicated art style!)

Thanks again all

Omicroncubed
2007-07-23, 07:05 AM
Awesome comic. I would like to see more (even though I got to read the first two comics, but I'm in a hurry)

banjo1985
2007-07-23, 08:55 AM
Your luck is in Omicroncubed, because I'm just about to put up the 3rd strip!

Strip 3- Is dey Gonna be Okay?
http://i192.photobucket.com/albums/z175/banjo_the_clown/strip3.png

As always your opinions and comments would be greatly appreciated, I'm really glad to be getting some feedback, both compliments and constructive criticisms!

Cheers and thanks again

XiaoTie
2007-07-23, 10:14 AM
Plot thickens \o/

I can already tell that Beech is probably going to be my favorite character :thog: beech thog's friend

Omicroncubed
2007-07-23, 10:17 AM
Alright I just read it :smallbiggrin: So far It's been wonderfull.
EDIT: Oh and by I'm in a hurry meant: ''Me being forced off the computer''

Ichneumon
2007-07-23, 10:58 AM
I like it, I wil certainly keep reading it.

The style I find maybe a bit confusing and the pictures look a bit messy, but I am confident that will change in future comics as you are getting used to a certain style.

It looks great. :smallbiggrin:

Shadic
2007-07-23, 10:05 PM
What's with the line on her face in panel 3?

banjo1985
2007-07-24, 03:09 AM
Yeah sorry, I'll be the first to admit my art looks a bit busy, but I'm hoping it will settle down as I carry on and get comfortable with a certain style!

Shadic - The line is supposed to be her arm with her hand over her eyes, as in a 'duh' moment because of Beech's dumb comments, though looking at it that isn't clear!

Lissou
2007-07-24, 05:27 AM
I'm getting more and more curious :)

To make her look like she's thinking he's dumb, maybe you could close her eyes. You know, use lines instead? And I think it might be clearer if her arm wasn't on her face, only her hand, if you know what I mean. That line is a bit hard to interpret as it is.

I really like your art, though, and I think it looks better from one strip to the next, so keep going :).

banjo1985
2007-07-24, 06:59 AM
:smallfurious: I've just lost my progress on strip 4, damn computers! This may delay me a while, I was hoping to post it tomorrow but may be towards the end of the week now :smalleek:

banjo1985
2007-07-24, 10:41 AM
Scratch that, I've had a burst of creativity and strip 4 is finished!

Strip 4 - Way to Break the Mood
http://i192.photobucket.com/albums/z175/banjo_the_clown/strip4.png

It was a bit of a rush, so the art might be a bit rough around the edges, but please as always give me any feedback you see fit!

Hope you enjoy

onasuma
2007-07-24, 11:14 AM
Oh my word. That is funnier than The Day the Music Died (its a bbc radio program, look it up). Seriously, really good stuff

Ichneumon
2007-07-24, 11:30 AM
Serieously, this is great.

(I already see your artwork improving, great!)

This was funny.:smallbiggrin:

Ava
2007-07-24, 11:38 AM
I think the art and composition pulled together better in the last one (though why does her hand glow green?)

I liked the darkness of it (very consistant) and the line widths worked well with the close-ups and farther-away shots. It was easier on the eyes to follow what was going on.

Omicroncubed
2007-07-24, 12:44 PM
Sweet :smallbiggrin:

You make really great comics.

No wait... I don't think you deserve one small grin...

:biggrin::biggrin::biggrin::biggrin::biggrin:

Better?

banjo1985
2007-07-25, 03:34 AM
Wow, thank you all, I'm a little embaressed by the compliments to be honest, little old me and my silly famcomic :redface:

But thank you all, your helping me improve my art and my positioning etc, and keeping me motivated to carry on drawing!

Ava - That green is the star on her armour, but the way her hand is it really does look like her hand is glowing!

I'm not sure what to do next, clear up previous strips or start the new one, I'll see how I feel later today.

Thank you all again for the comments and tips!

banjo1985
2007-07-26, 04:14 AM
Hello all you forum types, I've got a strip ready to put up, but I'm not particularly happy with it, so don't expect too much! I wanted to make it a double length strip but it was going to take me too long, and I didn't want the trickle of interest to dry up!

So I'm posting up the frst part of strip 5, with part 2 to come up sometime over the weekend.

Strip 5 - A Blatant Plot Device (Part 1)
http://i192.photobucket.com/albums/z175/banjo_the_clown/strip5.png

As always comments of pretty much any kind are welcome, mainly so I know that people are reading!

Cheers

Kurien
2007-07-26, 07:36 AM
That's... Elan!? :elan::eek:

:belkar: Heh heh, Beech ate black mushrooms...

Ichneumon
2007-07-26, 07:39 AM
Elan????

Cool:amused:

Miraqariftsky
2007-07-27, 07:35 AM
Heh-eeehh, NICE! Well, it ain't fan-work without the occasional cameo!

Joracy
2007-07-27, 11:04 AM
AHA those are great! Keep making them!

RoG623
2007-07-30, 12:56 AM
Awesome comics. Keep up the good work and thanks for making them.

banjo1985
2007-07-30, 04:39 AM
Thanks again for the nice comments!

I've had a very busy last few days so progress on part 2 of strip 5 has been very slow. However I'm about 3 panels in, so I should get it posted by the end of tomorrow at the latest!

Cheers for putting up with my tardiness

banjo1985
2007-07-31, 06:12 AM
Roll up all you forumites for the next strip is here! Sorry that it's slowed down recently but I'll do my best to not slow down any further....

Strip 5 - A Blatant Plot Device (Part 2)
http://i192.photobucket.com/albums/z175/banjo_the_clown/strip52.png

As always any comments are welcome, whether their tips, criticisms or just to say you enjoy what I'm trying to put together! It's always nice to know you're wanted!

Cheers all

Banjo

Akaziel
2007-07-31, 06:50 AM
Sweet. It really is Elan.

I'm looking forward to the next one!

banjo1985
2007-08-01, 04:38 AM
Just a quick character creation while I'm working on the 6th strip (which will be along soon).

I tried a different art style to se what jenna came out like, and here it is:

http://i192.photobucket.com/albums/z175/banjo_the_clown/newjenna-1.png

While I think I'll have it as an avatar I don't think I could do a comic in the same style, it would take forever! However if anyone prefers it then I might make an attempt in coming strips.

banjo1985
2007-08-01, 07:59 AM
I've finished work on strip 6, this one I'm happier with, and I think it starts to give a little bit more of the plot...plus you get to see the evil guy for the first time!

Comments have dried up a lot over the last few strips, I'm hoping that's not because I'm getting worse? A comment or two would make banjo a much happier man :smallfrown:

Anyhow here's the comic:

Strip 6 - A Far From Silent Night
http://i192.photobucket.com/albums/z175/banjo_the_clown/strip6-1.png

Edit- Damnit 7th comic and my first spelling mistake, re-hosting it now with sword spelt right!

Even more than normal, any comments are welcome, about the story, questions, comments on my art style or humour, anything really!

Hope you enjoy...

Banjo

Castaras
2007-08-01, 08:03 AM
Looking good!

And Strip 5 made me laugh loads. Keep up the good work!

EDIT: Oh, and your spoiler in your signature is going weird...whenever I click to open or close it, two extra tabs open in Firefox with Roland St. Jude's profile...:smallconfused:

Ichneumon
2007-08-01, 08:05 AM
I like it. I like all of them, although I find the plot quite complicated.

The artwork is improving, although I somehow think all the pictures look a bit blurred, I am sure you didn't do that on purpose. Maybe you should try uploading 1 of them in Imageshack and see the difference.

I like it and I am certainly going to continue reading them.

banjo1985
2007-08-01, 08:12 AM
Oh god yeah I've just noticed my signature went all screwy, think I've cleared it up now though!

As for ImageShack I might have a go, I'm using Photobucket, but I'm getting loads of complaints about the blurriness, it's not like that when I'm drawing it that's for sure!

Citizen Joe
2007-08-01, 09:01 AM
You misspelled 'sword' ... 'swrods vorpal'

Lissou
2007-08-01, 10:52 AM
In strip 5-part 2, I read Elan's answer to "who are you" before I read "who are you". It's not a huge problem, but I thought I'd let you know.

Joracy
2007-08-01, 11:59 AM
I"m getting the feeling that Cal is somewhat....violent...hehe that was very funny though! Also I really like the way the bad guy looks, its just plain awesome!

Nathan
2007-08-02, 01:49 AM
The "Get out of the way" line in comic 6 made me laugh.

mockingbyrd7
2007-08-02, 02:46 AM
Woah, the plot thickens. Cal is her SON? I figured it was her little brother! So... who's the father?

P.S. Nice strip, and I loved Elan's guest appearance. The characters aren't fleshed out yet, but neither were OotS's characters within six strips!

KillerCardinal
2007-08-02, 09:46 AM
Hehe, I just found this comic. Love your work, keep it up! I'm looking forward to seeing more about cal and what exactly is going on!:smallbiggrin:

WuanAnselm
2007-08-02, 07:28 PM
I've just found out this comic, I like it a lot^^ keep up th good work man I'll be sure to keep an eye on this one in the future :smallwink:

Nocte
2007-08-03, 01:01 AM
They last strip was great! :smallbiggrin:

Felixaar
2007-08-03, 06:06 AM
Nice work. You art is good and the strip is entertaining and funny. Keep it up :smallbiggrin:

Jimor
2007-08-03, 06:38 AM
LOL, I just noticed the bunny faces on the curtain rod. :smalltongue:

For a while I edited a fantasy fiction webzine, so I had to wade through hundreds of stories to pick a few for each issue. I always had more than enough "good" ones to choose from after the initial cull, but then came the hard part of picking just the best to publish.

What often made the difference was the sparkle that the right extra details added to the story. A lot of people could get the basic mechanics of the prose and storytelling down enough so that there may not have been anything wrong with it, but again, there was nothing special to make somebody keep reading either.

While overall, the presentation isn't as "smooth" as the original OotS (and it certainly took time and practice for Rich to get to his current level), little things like the bunnies sprinkled throughout your pages shows that you're thinking beyond just the main story, jokes, and art. That these extra details support the foreground material is a huge bonus, and a very good sign that you WILL get better with time and practice. That you're starting out at such a high level of enjoyable goodness already is also nice.

So... uh... keep it up, won't you? :smallsmile:

banjo1985
2007-08-04, 04:52 AM
Wow thanks everyone for the influx of positive comments!

Jimor - You have no idea how good your comments make me feel, I've always been rather insecure about my work and tend to lose interest far too quickly, but comments like that and the others I'm starting to receive are giving me the impetus to stick with this! I repeat, thanks to all of you!

The 7th strip is done and below. I wanted to try and show some of the main characteristics of the characters in this strip, and I hope it does at least a little bit.

Strip 7 - Intelligence Was His Dump Stat!
http://i192.photobucket.com/albums/z175/banjo_the_clown/strip7-1.png

Again all comments are welcome

Hope you enjoy

Banjo

RocketBard
2007-08-04, 12:52 PM
In the second panel, I think the guy was supposed to say "It use to be" instead of "Used." I'm sorry, I can't help pointing at what I think may be grammatical mistakes.

Zephra
2007-08-04, 04:30 PM
very nice! like it a lot.

Ichneumon
2007-08-04, 04:41 PM
Great, as ever. I like it, your art is improving a lot, but still quite blurry, you should do something about it, why don't you try Imageshack, I think it is much better.

I am beginning to get more and more intreged by the story. I must know more about it.

Dronin
2007-08-04, 06:05 PM
Very nice

Just found it and am going to subscribe.

I don't see the blurriness that everyone keeps saying.
but in the last panel of strip 7 two comments are made off panel. Im not sure who was supposed to say each.

But in general I love the chars and art over 7 strips you have improved.

chorpler
2007-08-04, 11:59 PM
Unfortunately, your comic is terrible. Sorry to be so harsh, but I have to be truthful.

... (pause) ...

Just kidding! ;) Did I scare you there for a second? What an awesome strip. I'm anxiously awaiting the next installment. Frankly, I think your artwork is incredible. In fact, it barely looks like a stick figure comic at all. All you'd have to do is change the arms/hands to have some width and it would just be a regular comic. You're already doing it with the fists; I bet it wouldn't be hard to do it permanently. But then it wouldn't be an OOTS fancomic, so I guess you better keep it the way it is.

Also, Jenna's looking pretty hot!

banjo1985
2007-08-06, 04:23 AM
Hehe yeah, I noticed the grammar mess-up shortly after I posted, but I've only just corrected it this morning... and Ichneumon, I'm going to try one on imageshack when my account activates, see whether there's any difference, because it does seem to be a problem for most people! And Chorpler, you're a mean-meany head for teasing me like that, but thanks for the good comment afterwards!

Again thanks for all the positive comments, and for pointing out mistakes that I have somehow managed to miss!

Here is Strip 8, the first person to identify the monster in the last panel wins a cookie!

Strip 8 - A Good Familiar's Hard to Find
http://i192.photobucket.com/albums/z175/banjo_the_clown/strip8.png

As always any comments or tips are welcome, I hope to post the next comic by Wednesday.

EDIT - A big triple chocolate cookie is winging it's way to Ichneumon right now!

Cheers all

Banjo

Ichneumon
2007-08-06, 04:25 AM
It is a land shark, also known as Bulette.

Funny comic, I see real character development.

chorpler
2007-08-06, 04:36 AM
Wow, this one was the funniest yet. Made me laugh out loud!

theterran
2007-08-06, 08:03 AM
Just found this comic!

Keep up the great work!

Miraqariftsky
2007-08-06, 11:56 AM
Um hallo, just have to ask: why was Cal's bear named after the fallen Morningstar?

Yep, and that... oh, right. A bulette...

Bullette?

Ga-ha-ah-haaaahhahhaaahhahaha!

Olorin93
2007-08-06, 10:13 PM
In the second panel, I think the guy was supposed to say "It use to be" instead of "Used." I'm sorry, I can't help pointing at what I think may be grammatical mistakes.

No, "used to" is correct. In speech, the 'd' and 't' run together so apparently many people don't know the 'd' is there.

Reference: http://www.bartleby.com/64/C001/065.html

Great comic - I look forward to where the story is going and learning more about the characters. :smallsmile:

Nocte
2007-08-06, 11:07 PM
I was wondering if maybe you can make little link bars. Like this one http://www.giantitp.com/Images/Banners/ootsbanner_88x31_portrait.gif

Ink
2007-08-07, 01:57 AM
Heehee. Going to the zoo to choose a familiar? For some reason that tickles me.

Your artwork is really improving.

Omicroncubed
2007-08-07, 03:58 AM
After our computer broke, I had to come check these comics thru this laptop and stuff... It's so slow, it almost won't load them.

These are great :biggrin:

banjo1985
2007-08-07, 04:03 AM
I was wondering if maybe you can make little link bars. Like this one http://www.giantitp.com/Images/Banners/ootsbanner_88x31_portrait.gif

I think I could do that, if anyone is interested in advertising my silly little stickman comic to the great unwashed? I might try and make some a bit later...

And Nexus - I must admit I don't know what you're talking about! It was just important to give Cal's bear a devilish sounding name...

The next comic may take me a little while, I've got to try and work out how to draw horses...it's proving difficult!

Omicroncubed
2007-08-07, 10:30 AM
I may be interested in advertising!

Ichneumon
2007-08-07, 10:32 AM
me too. <minimum length>

theterran
2007-08-07, 10:52 AM
If you make a link bar, I'll have it in my sig.

Nocte
2007-08-09, 12:18 AM
If you make a link bar, I'll have it in my sig.

Me too. :smallsmile:

banjo1985
2007-08-09, 04:05 AM
Hey all, sorry for the delay in Strip 9, but I've finally finished it, and it's a double length strip to boot!

I've followed Ichneumons advice and tried hosting this one on Imageshck, so any comments on whether it looks better or worse than the previous ones would be helpful!

As for banners, I'll see whether I can work on some later today, I also want to start the tenth strip and edit the first thread post to make it a clearer start.

Anyhow here is strip 9:

Strip 9 - Horsing Around
http://img508.imageshack.us/img508/5/strip9cy0.png
http://img508.imageshack.us/img508/7003/strip92ft1.png


Note - I'm aware that my horses look like mutant cows but it really was the best I could do! Apologies.

As always any comments are welcome, hope you enjoy and that the extra time I put in has been well spent!

Cheers

Banjo

Ichneumon
2007-08-09, 05:03 AM
Great Comic, very funny and I like your mutant cows so very much.

Personally I think it looks better with the imageshack, but I am not so very sure anymore.

Keep it up, I am so going to read all of them.:smallbiggrin:

Omicroncubed
2007-08-09, 07:32 AM
It DOES look a lot better now.

At first it wouldn't load it, but now I can fully see it. This is awesome :smallbiggrin:

Gez
2007-08-09, 12:05 PM
It's funny how the horses on the banner are :smalltongue: when they arrive, and then :smalleek: after having seen how well Nature Girl fares.

Dragor
2007-08-09, 02:22 PM
Keep up the good work- Strip 9 funniest so far. :smallsmile:

I love your style and the detail on the characters, and most of all your sense of humour. This is most definately bookmarked. :smalltongue:

Joracy
2007-08-09, 04:41 PM
Lol the way you make not pictures in the background react to whats going on is really funny! and about not being able to ride horses...Hopefully she can track thing if they end up needing to :)

Felixaar
2007-08-10, 06:27 AM
Nice. Strip nine very good, Jenna is really cool.

Surfing HalfOrc
2007-08-10, 08:57 AM
Coming along quite nicely. Keep up the good work!

Klerik
2007-08-11, 09:06 PM
This comic is great! Can't wait to see more from you. :smallsmile:

bookmarked for sure!

[Insert Neat Username Here]
2007-08-11, 11:44 PM
Great! I bookmarked it, and hope more is coming soon.

banjo1985
2007-08-12, 10:34 AM
Thank you all for your positive comments, I'm glad there are people enjoying this!

Just thought I'd post a quick update, I've had a very busy last few days and haven't had chance to start the next strip. However, the dialogue is all written and I hope to make a start later today. Expect the next one Tuesday, though I might be able to get it out by late Monday if I'm lucky...

Another couple of strips will finish off the first part of the story. When this happens I'll probably post these on another site and put a link here, but I'll continue to post new strips up in magically spoilerized form here!

Thanks all

Banjo

banjo1985
2007-08-13, 03:27 AM
Right scratch that last message, I've finished the next strip for posting right now! It took less time than I though because it didn't require much in the way of movement or changes of scenery. In a few strips time the party will begin their journey, at this point I may slow down slightly as I'm going to have to practice battle scenes!

Strip 10 - Creative Marketing
http://img525.imageshack.us/img525/3986/strip10ip3.png

As always all comments and dicussion are welcome! I'm amazed this has been popular enough to last 10 strips, but hey the worlds full of surprises...

Cheers all

Banjo

Omicroncubed
2007-08-13, 04:17 AM
This is one of the best strips so far!

Nice job :biggrin:

(Huzzah! first to post)

Miraqariftsky
2007-08-13, 05:54 AM
Ha-harr! Good one! Sooo, Sid's a dig at various <Forum-Rules-political-censoring> unscrupulous merchants?

theterran
2007-08-13, 07:59 AM
Sushi :smallbiggrin: , that made me chuckle.

Mad Scientist
2007-08-13, 01:30 PM
"It's a koi not a goldfish" Hee hee!

Jimor
2007-08-14, 01:21 AM
Hee, can't wait to see how Jaws ends up being used down the line. :smallwink:

And it could be worse. In one of the submissions I had at my webzine, the character ended up with a tapeworm as his familiar. :smallyuk:

Gez
2007-08-14, 04:39 AM
The dog seemed to be a real blink dog, that said...

Flynnarrel
2007-08-14, 11:37 PM
"...you're secretly a merman..."

I enjoy seeing the creativity. There are a few parts where the details are a teensy bit off. ... the broken window in Jenna's parent's house, the pattern of breakage changed. I know it's difficult in such a complex piece of art... (oots and its dissapearing arrows, for instance).

Just thought it worth a mention.

Gez
2007-08-15, 12:06 AM
(oots and its dissapearing arrows, for instance)

I thought those were arrows launched by the hobgoblins, and missing their target; not arrows stuck in the hull.

banjo1985
2007-08-16, 03:59 AM
Ye the broken window wasn't right, but I'd like to think my arts got a bit better since the really early strips...

As for strip 11, the week from hell is delaying me doing it, but the dialogue is done now, and it should be up sometime on Saturday at the latest.

Edit - Thanks for the warning Ichy, I've changed it to a generic title, from now on, the new strip alert will just have to be my sig!

Ichneumon
2007-08-16, 04:23 AM
*still great comics...*

You might want to change your title as you can't change it anymore after 30 days, I have had to pm a moderator to ask him to remove it for me.

chorpler
2007-08-19, 02:42 PM
I thought those were arrows launched by the hobgoblins, and missing their target; not arrows stuck in the hull.

They were. See my post here (http://www.giantitp.com/forums/showpost.php?p=3009572&postcount=105).

theterran
2007-08-21, 11:11 AM
Saturday came and went...and I cried a little w/o the new comic :smalleek:

Been two days since someone posted on this thread...so I'll *bump* I reckon...hopefully this hasn't been forgotten :smallwink:

banjo1985
2007-08-22, 04:13 AM
Not forgotten, just.....on hiatus. I've started a new job which gives me much less time to do the comic, and to be honest I'm having issues with the dialogue, my ideas aren't appealing to me at the minute.

So I'm leaving this for a short time, and hopefully I'll come back with some better ideas!

Sorry everyone....I guess I'm struggling a little :smallfrown:

theterran
2007-08-22, 06:57 AM
No worries. GL with your new job.

Writers block can be such a pain...

mockingbyrd7
2007-08-22, 11:24 PM
I like this strip, but I have a couple things I would change:

1. The Females' Expressions - The eyes are a bit large and the hairlines are low, and its hard to tell what expression the women are making.

2. The Word Balloons - The dialogue is good but a bit bland. Also, since 99% of everyone reads left to right, top to bottom, many conversations can be hard to follow (especially this latest one and Strip 5).

One more thing: I love the names Drake and Jenna Church, but I feel like "Beech" and "Ailish" are a little uninspired. Nothing you can do about this though.

Overall I like where this is headed and I am eager to see more. Keep going! :smallsmile:

Midnight Son
2007-09-01, 12:41 AM
Any update on the updates? I've been enjoying this strip so far and would not like to see it fall into obscurity.

The Ninja
2007-10-05, 07:29 PM
*Places defibulator on thread*
"CLEAR!"
*Jolts thread back to life*
"Bad thread, don't die and make me have to break out the necromancy kit.":smalltongue:

On topic though, any updates in the foreseeable future? I've enjoyed this comic and I hope it continues, but this defibulator only has a few thousand more volts left in it...:smalltongue:

[Insert Neat Username Here]
2007-10-17, 08:29 PM
It's dead, Jim . . .
I'll pay for 500 GP of the diamond dust, and not a copper more! Any other donations?

Current: 500/5000

Dallas-Dakota
2007-10-19, 11:44 AM
Its dead.
Ahh, I'l be the caster and do my art and part as a cleric, I sure have 'nough levels.
*prepares : Animate Comic*

Ichneumon
2007-10-19, 11:48 AM
Casts "Charm Webcomic Artist" so to persuade him to finish this wonderful comic.

chorpler
2007-10-19, 07:31 PM
*Places defibulator on thread*
"CLEAR!"
*Jolts thread back to life*
"Bad thread, don't die and make me have to break out the necromancy kit.":smalltongue:

On topic though, any updates in the foreseeable future? I've enjoyed this comic and I hope it continues, but this defibulator only has a few thousand more volts left in it...:smalltongue:

Just FYI, it's "defibrillator." Designed to restart the heart's normal rhythm when it's gone into fibrillation, which is when the ventricles aren't beating properly, just quivering, and so no blood gets pumped.

I too hope this comic continues. It was pretty cool.

hyperfreak497
2007-10-20, 01:26 PM
I donate 1,297 gp to the worthy cause of raising this beautiful fancomic.

Currently at:
1,797/5,000

Dallas-Dakota
2007-10-20, 04:08 PM
I'l be the caster, I have 'nough levels in cleric to do it right.
Dont know exactly how much hiring the caster would cost, but I'm fairly certain its a bunch.

*goes and prepares : Animate : comic, Summon Drawing time, Animate : Banjo1985s fantasie, and last but certainly not least, Animate Internetconnection!*

banjo1985
2007-11-26, 05:59 AM
*creeps into thread, looks around nonchalently*

"Anyone miss me? I fear I'm a little late with the update..."

#11 - Supplies
http://img20.imageshack.us/img20/1393/strip11pq9.png

"There you go, a little late...but I'm sure no-one will notice..."

*runs away*

Miraqariftsky
2007-11-26, 06:13 AM
Yey, it's baaack!

Who's Father Varin? Her confessor? Or mentor, mayhap?

banjo1985
2007-11-26, 06:22 AM
Heh, apologies to all for neglecting this for so long. I had a few things going on that stopped me from doing the art on this, and that combined with my inability to draw the scenes how I imagined them in my head caused me to stop in frustration.

But my art has improved now, and I feel more able to continue, especially with these other webcomics encouraging me to start up again. From the next strip I will be using my more recent art style, which will hopefully make drawing quicker and easier to edit. We'll see how it goes, I know that there are better things to read on here right now, but if I get enough interest I'm going to continue this.

Nexus - Varin is Ailish's god (equivalent to Pelor), he has been mentioned before a while ago, but it's worth a reminder, it has been rather a long time since then :smallredface:

Jimor
2007-11-26, 06:28 AM
Yay! Good one, and a nice setup for future hijinx.

If'n you need a cheerleader:

*\o/*

boomwolf
2007-11-26, 06:34 AM
First time I see you comic.

A+ on the drawing. but you only get a C for the storyline so far...(too much, too fast, too many things to wonder about for 11 strips.)

Omicroncubed
2007-11-26, 08:13 AM
Woo it's back :smallbiggrin: Awesome one!

chorpler
2007-11-26, 09:51 AM
Super duper awesome.

LOL. "Beech ... this would appear to be a child's playhouse..." I'm still laughing over that one.

[Insert Neat Username Here]
2007-11-26, 05:12 PM
It's back!

And I can't wait to see exactly what the sleeping bags do.:smallbiggrin:

Ichneumon
2007-11-26, 05:14 PM
I am happy to see this has returned.

someonenonotyou
2007-11-26, 06:39 PM
Yeah It's Back! Three Cheers For Banjo!

Dallas-Dakota
2007-11-27, 12:53 AM
Gotta love it, then thenk thenk thenk thenk you for (trying to) resume(ing) the comic!!!!!!!

Still smiling over the joke....

Lex-Kat
2007-11-27, 03:25 AM
I'm so happy to see you do another strip. Thank you. I love it.

PlasticSoldier
2007-11-27, 10:16 PM
Excellent

So any guesses on what the bags are? I think it's either a Bag of Holding or Devouring.

banjo1985
2007-11-28, 04:34 AM
Thanks for the nice comments on my late return, I will carry on with this as much as I can. I haven't got the kind of time where I can commit to a schedule, but I aim to post a new comic at least twice a week.

Here is Strip 12, the first in my newer art style, and hopefully there's more detail in there. I'm interested in seeing what you think of it:

Strip 12 - Art Upgrade
http://img512.imageshack.us/img512/5721/strip12zg9.png

This is the first strip of Part 2 of the story, so I'm going to edit the first post to nest Part 1 in a single spoiler etc. I'm also going to stick the banner up in my sig, just in case anyone wants to use it. I won't have time to do another comic for a few days, the next should be posted maybe Saturday or Sunday, but no promises. But it definitely won't be a three month wait like last time. :smallamused:

Hope you enjoy, as always any kind of comments are welcome.


Note - Many thanks to Roland St Jude for changing the thread title for me.

Ink
2007-11-28, 05:28 AM
Great to see this comic back again. I'm liking the art upgrade, although I must confess that I like the old-look Jenna better. That is just my preference though. The new Jenna reminds me a little too much of Imoen for my liking. Still, nice work and I'm looking forward to seeing the next strip, Banj.

Lyinginbedmon
2007-11-28, 06:26 AM
The male character always has to dress up for an art upgrade :smalltongue:

boomwolf
2007-11-28, 06:56 AM
Sorry to say it, but I really liked the old looks better.

But really funny...

[Insert Neat Username Here]
2007-11-28, 06:17 PM
I like the humor, but the old art was much better.

Dallas-Dakota
2007-11-29, 12:49 AM
;3584142']I like the humor, but the old art was much better.

Your thoughts are my thoughts

We are in an vulcan mind-melt...

Lex-Kat
2007-11-29, 12:58 AM
My opinion:

I like the new art for everyone, with a couple of exceptions.

I liked Jenna's hair, boots, & chain mail top from the old style. Everyone else is an improvement.

I especially like Ailish's new sword, the symbol on her dress & Drake's "dress" is cool.:smallsmile:

banjo1985
2007-11-30, 08:50 AM
Hmmm, well mixed opinions so far on the change of art-style. I suppose I should explain why I have changed it.

When I first started the comic I had no real idea of character boards, backgrounds, facial expressions and character poses, I just had an idea for a story and some cool looking characters. I soon found out that the way I had drawn the characters made it very difficult to pose them how they should be, and on Jenna in particular it was almost impossible to get a good facial expression because of how close he fringe was to her eyes. That hair was also hell to deal with, it warped everytime I needed it to move slightly, and it took an absolute age to do a comic, just worked on the characters themselves.

But the way I have them set up now they are a lot more flexible. I can make the expressions I want on their faces, and pose them how I want to, where before I would struggle for hours. That was part of the frustration that caused me to stop in the first place. Making the comic is now easier, quicker, looks better, and most importantly, is a lot more fun for me to work on.
So that's why it has changed, and also why it will stay that way. I'm sorry if it causes some people to stop reading, but I need to keep the change for the sake of my own sanity. Plus I actually think it looks clearer and neater.

That said, I may move Jenna slightly back to how she was in the next strip, as most people have said they preferred her before. I might change her armour a bit, and look to put her fringe back in, I'll see what I can do, as long as it doesn't make her any harder to work with.

Anyway, enough of me waffling on, the next strip is done...and a day early too! See, told you it wouldn't be three months :smallamused:

Strip 13 - A Bridge Too Far
http://img442.imageshack.us/img442/2433/strip13qx9.png

As always any comments and criticisms are welcome, along with random banter about the comic. It would be good to hear from a few more people who actually prefer the new art style, just so I know I'm not alone.

Next strip could be up on Sunday, though Monday or Tuesday are more likely.

Thanks to you all for supporting me as I try to start the strip up again, it's really appreciated :smallsmile:

Dallas-Dakota
2007-11-30, 09:10 AM
Banjo, I love the new comic, especially the back ground man and its death:smallbiggrin:

Btw, I like the new style on Jenna(the front part of her hair), I thought it kept making eyes sad...

banjo1985
2007-11-30, 10:55 AM
Biogs for the four main characters are now up on the first post. Note soem minor changes to Jenna, the green armour star is back, and the boots are a little more pointy. More changes will occur if I can get them right. Biogs of Vortigern and Cal will follow when I have time.

Note that very little is said about any of the characters pasts. This is something I want to visit in the comic, Jenna's in particular, for her past plays a very important part in the story.

V - Well yes, the information given in the biogs is basic stuff that could easily be identified from the comics so far. More imformation will come in future comics, I won't be revealing it in biogs or any other methods outside the comics. And no character will get a biog picture until they are seen in the main comic.

All the biogs are for are people new to the comic after it's long absence.

Dallas-Dakota
2007-11-30, 11:19 AM
Maybe you can instead of plainly dumb the information on your first post in text, build it up in the story, let it reveal itself?

theterran
2007-11-30, 11:27 AM
The guy in the background is a nice touch :smallbiggrin:

Omicroncubed
2007-11-30, 11:58 AM
What theterran said. That was awesome

hyperfreak497
2007-12-01, 02:42 PM
I refuse to continue reading this strip until you conform to the American way of dating updates! I keep thinking that there can't possibly be a month 30 in a year...

Lyinginbedmon
2007-12-01, 02:58 PM
I refuse to continue reading this strip until you conform to the American way of dating updates! I keep thinking that there can't possibly be a month 30 in a year...

Banjo is British. Bite our historical, cultural, military, and diplomatic superiority :smallannoyed:

Dallas-Dakota
2007-12-01, 03:06 PM
(if britain would was superior it would still have most part of North america as an colony?)
Bite Dutchies cultural, historical and military superiority!

Nameless
2007-12-01, 03:17 PM
Britan, Britan, Britan!
Opened by the queen in 1972, Britan now attracts hindreds of visitores each year. But why do they come? Not just to discovor how chicken nuggets should really tast, or to take part in the great tredition of dogging... NO!
They come in their droves to meet the people of Britan! And it is them what we now here look at now today!

LET US ROCK!

banjo1985
2007-12-03, 04:00 AM
I refuse to continue reading this strip until you conform to the American way of dating updates! I keep thinking that there can't possibly be a month 30 in a year...

This comes from a country that spells colour and aluminium wrong, and replaces all s's with z's! I think I'll stick with the British way, what with being English and all :smallwink:

New comic has been started, and will be up tomorrow if all goes well.

Lyinginbedmon
2007-12-03, 04:27 AM
Brits of the boards! Unite! :smallbiggrin:

Nameless
2007-12-03, 04:53 AM
Hay, I only live here... and talk like one... and have a british sence of humer... and look british... shut up... :smallannoyed:

banjo1985
2007-12-03, 09:40 AM
I'm going to have to annoy Hyperfreak again, he's going to think I last updated in March :smallamused:

Anyhow, this strip hasn't took me as long as I thought, so I'm going to post it straight away. 4 comics in 8 days...boy I'm not going to be able to keep this up!

Anyhow, this is the first combat strip so far, the first chance you get to see how effective the team are etc. Now, one thing I've never been able to do very well is the sensation of movement, such as when someone is makes an attack or get's knocked back etc. I think I've managed to this to an extent in this comic, but any tips on how to do it better would be appreciated.

Anyway, here it is:

Strip 14 - Fight Scene: Take One
http://img258.imageshack.us/img258/2060/strip14dh0.png

As always any comments, conjecture or criticism is welcome. It would be good to hear how people are getting used to the new art style, or whether it still hurts your eyes :smallamused:

Anyway...hope you enjoy, next strip will be up Thursday probably, could be earier but based on my track record I'm not saying so!

SoD
2007-12-03, 10:06 AM
I can't wait for the update, Fight Scene number 2-enter the goldfish!

SoD that...brilliant.

Almighty Salmon
2007-12-03, 10:10 AM
I can't wait for the update, Fight Scene number 2-enter the goldfish!

SoD that...brilliant.

It's a Koi! :smalltongue:

theterran
2007-12-03, 11:44 AM
I bet Jaws will take this opportunity to run away...

what ya wanna bet? :biggrin:

Ichneumon
2007-12-03, 12:06 PM
Go Team Gold-Fish!

Great comic

SoD
2007-12-03, 01:14 PM
I bet Jaws will take this opportunity to run away...

what ya wanna bet? :biggrin:

I'll bet the bag it leaves behind!

Lex-Kat
2007-12-05, 01:54 AM
I like the way you date your updates. It's always made more sense, in my opinion, to put the day before the month. To avoid confusion (I'm american), I usually write out the month though (3Dec07).

Also, you should always do what is easiest for you, before pandering to any one person. Anyone who truly enjoys the comic will stay as long as you don't stray too far from what originally got our attention in the first place. Even then some may stay, if the change is good for them.

So basically, keep up the good work. I love it so far.:elan:

Dallas-Dakota
2007-12-05, 07:21 AM
KNOCKOUT

This is Bob here with my co-worker!
This round we have a special round! Aquatic!
In the left corner we have have stand- oh woops I mean swimming, KOI! And in the right corner! The big scary bigger octopus monster!

K.O.

KOI wins!

(love it)

Baron Pineapple
2007-12-05, 03:15 PM
This comes from a country that spells colour and aluminium wrong, and replaces all s's with z's! I think I'll stick with the British way, what with being English and all :smallwink:

*clearing throat* Ahem... (Insert Bardic Knowledge Check here) :elan:

Aluminum

1812, coined by Sir Humphry Davy (1778-1829), from L. alumen "alum" (see alum). Davy originally called it alumium (1808), then amended this to aluminum, which remains the U.S. word, but British editors in 1812 further amended it to aluminium, the modern preferred British form, to better harmonize with other element names (sodium, potassium, etc.).

"Aluminium, for so we shall take the liberty of writing the word, in preference to aluminum, which has a less classical sound." -"Quarterly Review," 1812

Seems to me it was just a matter of wanting to sound grandiose, neh? :smallbiggrin:

As far as Jaws is concerned, I suspect a rather nifty Familiar-Delivered Touch Attack spell might be in the works. At least, that is what I would do...

Mr_Saturn
2007-12-05, 03:27 PM
You have alot of detail in your comic. Nice work. =)

banjo1985
2007-12-06, 10:57 AM
Wow a compliment from teh esteemed Mr Saturn, that has genuinely made my day. :smallbiggrin:

Next strip is finished, just about on time!

Strip 15 - Time for Plan B
http://img99.imageshack.us/img99/6668/strip15ky0.png

Not much detail underwater unfortunately, but as the majority of next strip is underwater I'm going to work on improving it for then.

As always all comments are welcome.

Next strip might be up Sunday if I get the time, that will make 6 strips in 14 days, not bad going for me!

Surfing HalfOrc
2007-12-06, 11:07 AM
It's a Koi! :smalltongue:

It's NOT a Koi, it's a Betta! And it's gonna kick that octopus-thing's BUTT!

:smallbiggrin: :smallbiggrin: :smallbiggrin: :smallbiggrin: :smallbiggrin: :smallbiggrin: :smallbiggrin: :smallbiggrin: :smallbiggrin: :smallbiggrin: :smallbiggrin:

Lyinginbedmon
2007-12-06, 11:14 AM
It's a true classic!

Goldfish bought by moron
Goldfish carried around in bag by moron
Goldfish released into river by moron
Goldfish eaten by massive octopus moron thinks he can take...

Ichneumon
2007-12-06, 11:15 AM
I really start to like the non-oots style parts of this comic. I love the plot development.

Bayar
2007-12-06, 11:31 AM
hehe, cant wait to see the fight scene...it should be shocking to say the least. Also, american FTW !!! I find british english much more uptight...compare british english and american english like...paladin and bard...or something like that...

Lyinginbedmon
2007-12-06, 12:25 PM
Yes, well, we actually had The Bard :smallamused:

SoD
2007-12-06, 02:19 PM
Yes, and it seems to me to be more a paladin vs. barbarian. One of them misses some of the more colourful letters out.

Oh, and to keep on topic: brilliant comic, I put 11gp on the fish!

Bayar
2007-12-06, 02:35 PM
Yes, and it seems to me to be more a paladin vs. barbarian. One of them misses some of the more colourful letters out.

Oh, and to keep on topic: brilliant comic, I put 11gp on the fish!

actually, I first wrote barbarian, but backspaced since I thought "Nah, it is not that bad..."

Fawkes
2007-12-06, 04:06 PM
This comes from a country that spells colour and aluminium wrong, and replaces all s's with z's! I think I'll stick with the British way, what with being English and all :smallwink:

New comic has been started, and will be up tomorrow if all goes well.

According to the Firefox zpell-checker, lookz like you're zpelling them wrong. :smalltongue:
And we don't replace our s'z with z'z. We're not French.

Alzo, what'z up with Jawz'z eyez?

Lyinginbedmon
2007-12-06, 04:15 PM
Alzo, what's up with Jaws's eyes?

Like all great competitors, he's on steroids

banjo1985
2007-12-07, 04:48 AM
According to the Firefox zpell-checker, lookz like you're zpelling them wrong. :smalltongue:
And we don't replace our s'z with z'z. We're not French.

Alzo, what'z up with Jawz'z eyez?

Oui? Je suis la gar? :smalltongue:

Jaws is just a little over-excited, maybe his eyes will calm down a little in the next strip (i.e. I drew him ages ago and just expanded the picture, forgetting to spruce him up a bit :smallbiggrin: )

hyperfreak497
2007-12-07, 08:47 PM
Oooh, lookz like I zparked a debate! And Banjo updated again!

In June?! What the hell?! Have I been in a coma?! What happened to my family?!

NOOOOOOO!!!!!

Now look what you've done.

EDIT:

Banjo is British. Bite our historical, cultural, military, and diplomatic superiority :smallannoyed:

Military? :smallconfused: I thought we owned you...meh.

Also, I'm not zure if that'z a real :smallannoyed:, zo I want you to know that I waz kidding. I already knew that Banjo waz British (Britizh :smallconfused:).

P.S. Hey, Banjo! I take French in zkool!

Lissou
2007-12-07, 09:26 PM
Oui? Je suis la gar? :smalltongue:

What? You're a train station?
And I never knew...
:smalltongue:

Lyinginbedmon
2007-12-08, 03:45 AM
Military? :smallconfused: I thought we owned you...meh.

I could spend a few hours explaining the outcome (In which you should know that you didn't win), but I think one sentence should suffice:

We have some of your nukes over here :smallamused:

Now, to the comicry!

banjo1985
2007-12-08, 11:00 AM
What? You're a train station?
And I never knew...
:smalltongue:

Yes....yes I am :smalltongue:

Damn my lack of ability with other languages!

New strip should be up tomorrow, I haven't had much time to work on it, but fortunately this ones not too hard to do.

The Ninja
2007-12-08, 10:57 PM
Originally posted by Lyinginbedmon:
I could spend a few hours explaining the outcome (In which you should know that you didn't win), but I think one sentence should suffice:

We have some of your nukes over here

Actually, I think we kind of did, objective-wise. (Our goal was to be our own country, England's was to keep us as a colony, now we've got the USA.) 1812, on the other hand... I'll concede that.

But as for the nukes, they may be over there.....


...But we've still got the button over here.:smallamused:

banjo1985
2007-12-09, 04:47 AM
Strip 16 is finished, which is good, as I'm not sure how much time I'm going to get this week to do any further ones. I may only update once this next week, I apologise in advance if this is the case.

Just a small request, can we wrap up the thing about the nukes? It's half way to being political, and I don't want this thread locked :smallbiggrin:

Anyhow, he is Jaw's moment of glory:

Strip 16 - A Nightmare for Men Everywhere
http://img90.imageshack.us/img90/9416/strip16pk5.png

As always comments are welcome, plus random banter as long as it's not political :smallwink:

Oh and you are allowed to feel sorry for the octopus :smallwink:

Omicroncubed
2007-12-09, 04:51 AM
OUCH! That HAD to hurt :smalleek:

That was awesome :smallbiggrin:

Lyinginbedmon
2007-12-09, 05:12 AM
I'll admit, I did not, in any feasible way, expect that :eek:

Surfing HalfOrc
2007-12-09, 07:57 AM
I'll admit, I did not, in any feasible way, expect that :eek:

I did! (I said way back there somewhere that Jaws wasn't a Koi, Jaws was a Betta!)

Japanese Fighting Fish FTW! :smallbiggrin:

On the otherhand, I never knew Octopuses had balls! :smalleek:

boomwolf
2007-12-09, 08:01 AM
This proved to the world jest how destructive fish can be.

Eat sushi, save the world.

banjo1985
2007-12-11, 09:50 AM
No been quite as busy as I expected so far this week, so I've actually finished the next strip, though I must admit it was an easy one to do. 7 strips in 16 days is hardly Salmon-esque speed but it's not bad by my standards!

Strip 17 - Opposites Don't Attract
http://img408.imageshack.us/img408/9862/strip17ps0.png

In a few strips time there's going to be a significant plot exposition, with a bit more info about Jenna's past. I'm warning in advance, for those few strips comedy will be out the window, but I'm hoping it will enrich the story a little and explain a few things...

Anyhow, feel free to comment as usual...keeps this thread towards the top of the list :smallamused:

Dallas-Dakota
2007-12-11, 10:00 AM
Funny:smalltongue:

Thats all that needs to be said...

Fluff
2007-12-11, 10:39 AM
{Stuffs}


Shouldn't the "things" in "That things only knocked out" have an apostrophe?

Funny though.

banjo1985
2007-12-11, 10:46 AM
Probably. Proof reading my own work is not my strong point! Not a big enough error to make me rehost it though...I'm just a lazy old fart deep down :smallbiggrin:

Ahh my 666th post!

*soul is eaten*

Lyinginbedmon
2007-12-11, 10:52 AM
Not bad, although in the newest Dawn of the Webcomics I think I was the first to persistently hit near-daily updates, so it should be more "Lyingesque" than "Salmonesque" :smallamused:

Almighty Salmon
2007-12-11, 11:29 AM
Not bad, although in the newest Dawn of the Webcomics I think I was the first to persistently hit near-daily updates, so it should be more "Lyingesque" than "Salmonesque" :smallamused:

What? Are you trying to steal my spotlight?! Buzz off!

Also, That was funny Banjo :smallbiggrin: Nice one

Fawkes
2007-12-11, 11:36 AM
Not bad, although in the newest Dawn of the Webcomics I think I was the first to persistently hit near-daily updates, so it should be more "Lyingesque" than "Salmonesque" :smallamused:

Yes, but Salmon tastes better.

Lyinginbedmon
2007-12-11, 11:45 AM
http://img.photobucket.com/albums/v684/Lyinginbedmon/LyingFly.png

Quinsar
2007-12-11, 06:43 PM
that was sweet
as always

SoD
2007-12-14, 03:28 AM
OK, that was brilliant. I saw them and thought Ooh, Linear Guild, Whitefeather style!

PhallicWarrior
2007-12-15, 12:29 PM
Very nice, banjo.

Plot Device averted!

mockingbyrd7
2007-12-15, 12:33 PM
I betcha they'll end up as villains anyways. I mean, they're a pretty evil-looking party, headed for the town Jenna & Company are from. It would seem this doesn't bode well...

banjo1985
2007-12-17, 04:33 AM
Hi all, my previous comment about my week not starting as busily as I expected came back and bit me on the ass. Hard. There will probably be one more comic before Christmas, and I also have to work on my Webcomic Sacret Santa submission, which is going to be difficult.

Expect a comic Thursday probably, then another 3 or 4 days after Christmas. In new year posting should get a lot closer to normality, and I will be able to update more often!

ElanROCKS
2007-12-20, 08:51 PM
Join the club. I was here first.

My advice? Don't do a webcomic. It's insanely hard, and you will feel you have to meet a number of comics per month and it's hell.

I double this. I tried. It sucks. It's hard and stressful. Though it turns out good (sometimes) it IS insanely hard.

mockingbyrd7
2007-12-20, 09:19 PM
I double this. I tried. It sucks. It's hard and stressful. Though it turns out good (sometimes) it IS insanely hard.

Cool. I'll probably be starting a webcomic soon. :smallamused:

I would say take your time, Banjo, but I need you to hurry; now that Failing Saves is on break until January, I don't know how I'll get my Oots-fan-comic-fix without you! Help! :smalltongue: :smalleek:

Mr_Saturn
2007-12-20, 09:25 PM
Come to my webcomic! :smallwink: *points at sig*

Although not set in a DnD world.... <.<



*slips away*

banjo1985
2007-12-21, 08:39 AM
Okay, I'm going to have to disappoint you Mockingbyrd :smallbiggrin:

I'm going away for Christmas, and as such Whuitefeather will be out of action until the new year. Apart from the Secret Santa Christmas comic if I get that before I leave. I'll do my best to have the next one done for January 3rd, but we'll have to see.

Dallas-Dakota
2007-12-21, 09:36 AM
Awww, no new comic, my tingly sense was up again becouse you posted here.
(Thats why I am not subscribed to any threads, I have my tingling sense!)

mockingbyrd7
2007-12-23, 01:04 AM
Okay, I'm going to have to disappoint you Mockingbyrd :smallbiggrin:

I'm going away for Christmas, and as such Whuitefeather will be out of action until the new year. Apart from the Secret Santa Christmas comic if I get that before I leave. I'll do my best to have the next one done for January 3rd, but we'll have to see.

Why are you :smallbiggrin:grinning as you say you're going to disappoint me? When did you all go sociopathic? :smallamused:

Have fun on Christmas vacation, and don't sweat it. I eagerly await the return of all the fan comics. Safe travels, Mr '85.

banjo1985
2007-12-29, 05:16 AM
For those of you that haven't seen the Webcomic Secret Santa thread, here is the submission for Whitefeather, by BloodyRedCommie:

http://i172.photobucket.com/albums/w27/bloddyredcommie/Jaws1.png
http://i172.photobucket.com/albums/w27/bloddyredcommie/Jaws2.png
http://i172.photobucket.com/albums/w27/bloddyredcommie/Jaws3.png

Rather silly, but fun nonetheless :smallbiggrin:

Whitefeather will return soon, I've started work on the next comic, but I'm sure when I'll have chance to finish it...we shall have to wait and see!

Ichneumon
2007-12-29, 05:21 AM
We shall wait.

banjo1985
2008-01-03, 04:35 AM
Whitefeather has returned!

Strip 18 is here:

A Familiar Shadow?
http://img139.imageshack.us/img139/9215/strip18tg3.png

Sorry for the delay over Christmas and New Year, but I'm back now and in a mildly creative mood! Work on strip 19 has begun, and hopefully I'll get it up later this week, maybe Saturday.

Hope you enjoy and that you can remember what's happened :smallbiggrin:

Ichneumon
2008-01-03, 04:54 AM
Interesting. This as great and will keep following this.

Lyinginbedmon
2008-01-03, 08:22 AM
Clearly the silhouette is of the hobgoblin leader, but the question here is who is Jenna seeing?

banjo1985
2008-01-04, 03:49 AM
I'll take the lack of comments to be due to the board going down :smallbiggrin:

Anyhow, my creativeness lasted for the whole of yesterday, and I managed to get strip 19 completely done, so I'll post it now. 2 in 2 days, almost Salmonesque...or Lyingesque...depending on your comic of choice!

Strip 19 - Overkill?
http://img413.imageshack.us/img413/7391/strip19bp5.png
Gratuitous cartoon gore FTW! :smallbiggrin:

As always any comments are welcome, as are any suggestions, or even pointing out my regular miss-types. Strip 20 should be up maybe Sunday evening, though if I can I'll try to get it up earlier, to make up for the long break over Christmas!

Ichneumon
2008-01-04, 03:56 AM
Wait, wasn't there a BBEG in the first comic or something that looked like him?:smallconfused:

banjo1985
2008-01-04, 03:59 AM
*whistles innocently*

Vortigern? Well it maybe looks a bit like him....but I'm not saying anything. All will be revealed in time :smallbiggrin:

Lyinginbedmon
2008-01-04, 04:31 AM
I'm going to wager it's Cal's father she thinks she saw, though I'm very much waiting for the in-story revelation to be certain.

Lex-Kat
2008-01-04, 08:16 AM
Yeah!!! Two in two days. I'm happy, all my favorite comics are updating.

Great comics, Banjo.

Undertaker798
2008-01-04, 10:12 AM
Okay, so I'm a lurker. I lurk like a Crocodile Paladin who wears a stylish bowler hat. This comic is awesome!


"Whitefeather. The comic of large breasts." :smallwink:

banjo1985
2008-01-04, 10:17 AM
Okay, so I'm a lurker. I lurk like a Crocodile Paladin who wears a stylish bowler hat. This comic is awesome!


"Whitefeather. The comic of large breasts." :smallwink:

I am officially stealing this tag-line :smallbiggrin:

Jimor
2008-01-04, 03:00 PM
Shouldn't the latest installment be called "Redfeather?" :smallwink:

Nazde Bahatur
2008-01-04, 07:06 PM
Really nice one, bravo!
I really like them OotS thingies, I'm trying to make them for myself but inkscape's no good for me.
A little help here, the alter egos, the four guys your protagonists crossed at the bridge, in what races do they belong?
I know the last one is a drow, and the first one maybe a tiefling?
What about the other two?

Keep 'em coming!

banjo1985
2008-01-05, 10:54 AM
Really nice one, bravo!
I really like them OotS thingies, I'm trying to make them for myself but inkscape's no good for me.
A little help here, the alter egos, the four guys your protagonists crossed at the bridge, in what races do they belong?
I know the last one is a drow, and the first one maybe a tiefling?
What about the other two?

Thank you kindly sir :smallbiggrin:

The guys who crossed the bridge were two tieflings at the front, then a bugbear, and the drow at the back. They may return...depends how my mind works :smallamused:

Jayngfet
2008-01-06, 03:13 AM
very nice comic, the detail on the stick figures actually creates an interesting effect,.

mockingbyrd7
2008-01-06, 02:36 PM
Thank you kindly sir :smallbiggrin:

The guys who crossed the bridge were two tieflings at the front, then a bugbear, and the drow at the back. They may return...depends how my mind works :smallamused:

Well, they WERE headed in the direction of the main characters' home town... :smalleek:

The latest installation was great, and I liked the last two panels, BUT: Since you said in the character bios that Drake has something of a crush on our little ranger, I thought it would have been just as (or more) appropriate if Drake had gone up to comfort her.

I eagerly await more... More, MORE!!!! BWAHAHA!

:smalltongue:

Jimor
2008-01-07, 01:17 AM
The latest installation was great, and I liked the last two panels, BUT: Since you said in the character bios that Drake has something of a crush on our little ranger, I thought it would have been just as (or more) appropriate if Drake had gone up to comfort her.

My take was that Beech is the only one of the other 3 who knows WHY she was freaking out and who she thought that was, since he does tell her "it's not him" as he goes to comfort her.

banjo1985
2008-01-07, 04:35 AM
Congratulations Mr Jimor, you win a coconut :smallbiggrin:

Comic #20 will be delayed, as I made a rather nasty mess of my right wrist yesterday, which is making my progress on this strip rather slow. It doesn't help that I have to make quite a lot changes to colours and stuff in this one. I'll do my best to get it up as soon as possible, but with essentially one hand I'm not sure how quick that will be :smallfrown:

Miraqariftsky
2008-01-07, 07:14 AM
Get well, Banjo. Focus on yer own health first, then the comic. Don't overtax yerself over this.

Mr_Saturn
2008-01-07, 10:31 AM
We forumites are always here. Don't kill yourself over updating the thread. Or you could post a filler strip! Or prepare some in advance.

Hmm, i should do that too.

banjo1985
2008-01-07, 10:43 AM
Meh, bad wrist or no bad wrist it doesn't seem to be stopping me :smallbiggrin: quick trip to the doctors shows it's just sprained and bruised. I'd love to be able to get a buffer of strips up, but to be honest I don't have enough time and don't work quick enough...having a full time job, a girlfriend and a RPG campaign to run stops me doing as much as I'd like to.

I've been working on strip 20,couldn't help myself. It is now finished!

Strip 20 - Plot Exposition Ahoy!
http://img246.imageshack.us/img246/6010/strip20fe2.png

As always comments are welcome, it's nice to know that there are still people reading this with the amount of good webcomics that are on here.

Lyinginbedmon
2008-01-07, 10:44 AM
Humourous extras always help :smallsmile:

The exposition looks to be a good show, so I'm very much in want to read it

Dallas-Dakota
2008-01-07, 02:29 PM
Heheh, Beech had gone ahead, chasing squirrels :smallbiggrin: :smalleek:

And Banjo, I will continue reading, even though I may not respond to all comics:smallwink:

Dihan
2008-01-07, 03:12 PM
Whitefeather is in my top 4 favourite comics on this board. To be P.C., I won't tell you what's in what place though. :smallwink:

Undertaker798
2008-01-07, 03:14 PM
This comic gets better and better. Of course, if it gets any better. One would have to take lengths. :smallannoyed::smalltongue:

banjo1985
2008-01-08, 04:55 AM
This comic gets better and better. Of course, if it gets any better. One would have to take lengths. :smallannoyed::smalltongue:

If you sic Gilph on me I'll have to bring out my pet Rust Monster :smallamused:

Undertaker798
2008-01-08, 05:20 AM
It's a bluff! :smalleek:

banjo1985
2008-01-10, 04:48 AM
A bluff? Well that remains to be seen...just keep that warforged away from me :smallamused:

Anyhow, the wrist is recovering, but I'm still not 100% so the art on this one might be a bit off. Anyhow, here's the next strip...wow we're up to #21!

Aw young Jenna :smallbiggrin:

Strip 21 - Don't Go Down to the Woods Today...
http://img220.imageshack.us/img220/16/strip21ja4.png

Comment away :smallbiggrin: !

Lyinginbedmon
2008-01-10, 05:06 AM
Nice twist on the title, I'm very much interested in seeing where this goes...

Miraqariftsky
2008-01-10, 09:19 AM
Nnnniiiiiice!

Is she going to ask about the wages?

Surfing HalfOrc
2008-01-10, 09:34 AM
That's actually kind of creepy. Reminds me of a Western I saw once with Tommy Lee Jones.

Fluff
2008-01-10, 10:42 AM
Hey, in the character bios, for Beech,

" Beech has knwon Jenna all her life, and see's her as a kind of big sister, despite being six years her senior."

Shouldn't that be "known" not "knwon"?

banjo1985
2008-01-11, 04:39 AM
Hey, in the character bios, for Beech,

" Beech has knwon Jenna all her life, and see's her as a kind of big sister, despite being six years her senior."

Shouldn't that be "known" not "knwon"?

Yes...yes it should :smallbiggrin:

I clearly can't type!

Fluff
2008-01-11, 10:49 AM
Yes...yes it should :smallbiggrin:

I clearly can't type!


Wait wait wait...

Something I said was acknowledged by a webcomic author?!

...

PRAISE BE TO BANJO! MAY HIS PUPPETEY RULE SPREAD TO THE FOUR CORNERS OF EXISTENCE! (And if we're lucky, the bits between the corners aswell)

Zakama
2008-01-15, 12:28 PM
PRAISE BE TO BANJO! MAY HIS PUPPETEY RULE SPREAD TO THE FOUR CORNERS OF EXISTENCE! (And if we're lucky, the bits between the corners aswell)

Ooo, that's quote worthy, Banjo.

Any who nice comic, The freckles were a nice touch.

Gez
2008-01-16, 05:50 PM
What followed seems obvious...

The demon is Cal's father. Which explains why Jenna would be so young a mother, and why Cal -- being half-fiend or whatever -- is such a horrible kid, and why the bad guy kidnapped him. There's probably some "Dark Messiah, Chosen of Darkness, as Prophesied in the Dark Prophecy of Darkness" story going on.

MR.PIXIE
2008-01-21, 11:33 AM
:smallredface: Jen is hot...
there! I said it.

Fawkes
2008-01-21, 12:58 PM
Is this comic still going?

banjo1985
2008-01-22, 04:40 AM
Is this comic still going?

Yes...yes it is :smallbiggrin:

But I've had a busy few weeks, and I can't see things calming down for a while yet.

However, I will be making another strip as soon as I get the chance.

Elfanatic
2008-01-24, 07:17 AM
What followed seems obvious...

The demon is Cal's father. Which explains why Jenna would be so young a mother, and why Cal -- being half-fiend or whatever -- is such a horrible kid, and why the bad guy kidnapped him. There's probably some "Dark Messiah, Chosen of Darkness, as Prophesied in the Dark Prophecy of Darkness" story going on.

That makes the 'job' offer from the demon in the bushes quite nasty...

Lyinginbedmon
2008-01-24, 07:34 AM
Well, if he's a demon then he's risking a lot to be active on the Material plane. In theory, a demonic heir such as a half-demon child could serve as his pawn without him risking his own neck at the hands of the Celestials.

Krelon
2008-01-25, 06:59 AM
That makes the 'job' offer from the demon in the bushes quite nasty...

... and creates a nice background and adds some motivations. Still, what does the evil cleric need the mom for?

very nice fan comic!