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Ichneumon
2007-12-26, 04:48 AM
Of burning love and extinguishing fires by Ichneumon

I look into the light
Flames and fire
Warming my hands
I stay at a save distance

Familiar and friendly
I want to come close
Embrace the flames
Be one with them
But I canít

I started looking at other lights
Without care the flame grew small
The flames are restless and without my care
They go to other hands
Warming those, not mine

I look into the light
Flames and fire
I want to embrace, be one
But I stay away
No experience in touching fire.
Afraid I might burn myself when I come close
But it is not my greatest fear
But to extinguish the fire completely
That I fear the most

That is why I stay at a distance

kpenguin
2007-12-26, 05:40 AM
Beautiful:smallsmile:

Ne0
2007-12-26, 04:10 PM
Great! (Damned Kpenguin, you forced me to say such a lame response!)

I'm not very good at describing or critiscising poetry, but this poem touched me, and that's all I think a good poem needs.

Bayar
2007-12-26, 04:23 PM
Beautiful:smallsmile:

what he said :smallbiggrin:

hyperfreak497
2007-12-26, 05:55 PM
Wow. That was...awesome. I can't think of a word to describe it other than beautiful. Gawram you kpenguin! :smalltongue:

Szilard
2007-12-26, 07:54 PM
I'm not sure what a good poem is, but this isn't bad.:smallsmile:

Sneak
2007-12-26, 09:09 PM
I like it. Very touching. In fact, one might even go so far as to call it beautiful. :smalltongue:

Just one minor thing (a little typo): I believe 'save distance' is supposed to read 'safe distance?' Not really an issue, but I just feel the need to indulge by obsessive compulsions by pointing it out. :smallsmile: