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Interesting... i'll keep an eye on this.
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The artstyle is charming, I think (and the "creepy" doe eyes, which actually were slightly cute) but the strangulation of the dragon's mother was a little...weird. I can't put my finger on it. It looks like she just decided to die all of a sudden without any struggle. It looks like there was some kind of off switch on her neck. I would accept that he snapped her neck, if her head was turned around and there was a snapping sound effect.
Other than that though, looks good. I will continue to read.
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Looks good, but I really think you should cut out the "oots-style" part in the descreptin, since I've never seen any dragons being drawn this way in oots.
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The red-on-blue of the main dragon's speech bubbles is really jarring with all the other colours present, and a lot of things like borders seem to be inconsistently sized.
Why are the dragons just vaguely dragonesque humanoids?
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@ Q: you know, your right. I was thinking she was took by surprise and since she specialized more in learning magic than physical might and the Father did, he was far stronger and faster while she couldn't think of a spell to kill fight back in time, but it might be good to modify it to tell a better story.
@ Cizak: ok
@ Bright: think there is any way I can adjust the red-on-blue narration bubbles to be more readable?
as for borders....eh nothing's perfect.
as for the dragons:
OOC explanation: that is just how I like to draw them.
IC explanation: you can either say it is:
1. draconic polymorphing powers
2. Zarakkan's aforementioned unreliable storytelling.
3. my dragons are just different.
I leave you to decide.
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comic three, coming right up.
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nice!
but isnt he supposed to be a purple dragon if his perents are red and blue?
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super dark33
nice!
but isnt he supposed to be a purple dragon if his perents are red and blue?
[Morbo] GENETICS DO NOT WORK THAT WAY!!![/Morbo] :smallbiggrin:
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if hes purple itll make him special!
not like the ordinery blue dragon.
just draw him purple!
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super dark33
if hes purple itll make him special!
not like the ordinery blue dragon.
just draw him purple!
Yes, we need a purple dragon!
Perhaps he can meet one and wonder why he isn't purple himself? :smalltongue:
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Lord Raziere
[Morbo] GENETICS DO NOT WORK THAT WAY!!![/Morbo] :smallbiggrin:
This is perfect. I love that part, and it works perfectly well here. :smallbiggrin:
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oh really people? purple?
you are telling me that you want Zarakkan to look like Barney, the purple dinosaur? :smallamused:
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ummm no
he will be like burney, the purple dragon!
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Lord Raziere
[Morbo] GENETICS DO NOT WORK THAT WAY!!![/Morbo] :smallbiggrin:
Depends. If color is primarily determined by co-dominant alleles and by assuming quite a lot about the lineage of the parent...
Okay, okay, I'm stopping now.
about the art, I understand you are trying to have your own style, but have you con,siderd using smoother forms or thicker lines for your art ?
(Maybe just a little shading ?)
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yea umm.....not all alleles are co-dominant, the assumption that for say a half-elf would be a perfect half of human and elf is mostly an abstraction to my way of thinking.
either way, Zarakkan is NOT becoming purple, end of story. insisting so further will just raise my ire and make me draw a one panel comic of Zarakkan yelling "genetics do not work that way!!!" while pointing at a picture of a purple version of himself. :smallamused:
as for art style: I might improve it. Someday. Not all of us can improve things on a dime.
now wanna know something? these three comics were only the prologue.
this, is where we start the first "chapter":
http://i276.photobucket.com/albums/k...andFreedom.png
(Its called Cave, Father and Freedom,the "d" got decayed out.)
I'll start working on the fourth comic.
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I love your comic! The style becomes hard to read at times, but apart from that it's flawless! Good use of suspense, by the way!
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why thank you good sir, much appreciated.
I like it, now I have en excuse to to have an "extras" section. :smallbiggrin:
edit: by the way, comic 4 will be up soon.
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Comic #4
Note: Athim's "Original" name was Zarathim, as when a dragon is exiled from their family, they lose their Vir-nav-nil.
while I'm at it, Zarakkan's mothers name is "Skyrania"
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Hologram!
Anyway, the blue bubbles with red text and borders is REALLY hard to read.
Seriously?! Who the heck puts red text in blue bubbles?! [/hypocritical humour]
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Its a narrative thing. how else am I supposed to differentiate Zarakkan's narration from speech bubbles?
perhaps the blue needs to be lighter to better contrast the dark red?
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Lord Raziere
Its a narrative thing. how else am I supposed to differentiate Zarakkan's narration from speech bubbles?
Make them colors that stand out against each other, like bright red and black.
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Lord Raziere
perhaps the blue needs to be lighter to better contrast the dark red?
Maybe.
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Green-Shirt Q
Hologram!
Anyway, the blue bubbles with red text and borders is REALLY hard to read.
Seconded. Also, The new comic is great!
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Lord Raziere
Its a narrative thing. how else am I supposed to differentiate Zarakkan's narration from speech bubbles?
perhaps the blue needs to be lighter to better contrast the dark red?
You could make his thoughts like Shojo's narration in this OotS comic. Far more easy to read, and it fits with Zarakkan being blue.
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yea, I've decided to say "screw it" and just stick to the vertical, extra height might be a little long but its better than side-scrolling.
edit:......... what the- agh. that is it, I'm separating comic 4 into two images so photobucket doesn't screw it up :smallmad:
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4th comic: Badass. That is all.