Originally Posted by
Jorkens
1.If the Tharaii are so magical, why aren't they running things? How was their city destroyed? Is there an equally powerful race or being that's keeping them in check? Or do they naturally not get on with each other, so one of them can't start doing too well before a faction of his enemies knock him down again.
2.Being horsemen and living in the mountains doesn't really go together, so the present description of the Norathi sound a bit weird. You could try giving them flying mounts, though... Even then, I can't help feeling that building up a civilization that can support knights in shining armour would normally be associated with fertile farmland. Maybe they're actually a caste or a tribe from another civilization that at some point moved to the mountains and tamed (or came to an understanding with) the giant eagles that lived there. They built up a symbiotic relationship with the Rogath, protecting their caravans from raiders and their cities from treasure-hungry dragons in exchange for a handsome cut of the profits - enough for them to build spectacular cliff top castles and spend their time practising chivalry.
3.You don't seem to have anyone who lives on plains and farms. That seems like a fairly important role to have filled - if anything, you'd expect the people in control of the fertile plains to have built up one of the richest and most powerful civilizations.
4.Re apostrophes - it always seems like a fun idea to have a character called something like J'han, who on being pressed will explain that it's short for Jonathan.