ooohhh phew, then my computer doesnt try to kill me. what a relief!
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ooohhh phew, then my computer doesnt try to kill me. what a relief!
I'm still trying to kill you, though.
i didnt say i removed you from the list, only the computer.
I still can't believe the thread isn't up yet. If it's not up within the next hour, I will post the first three strips on this thread.
why not now? If outer peoplez will agree.
and the thread wont be up in a hour, the mods for webcomic section are offline.
They're all invisible. For all I know, they could be looking over the thread right now.
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The strips of the first chapter are by far the wackiest. There's no real plot in this chapter, other then the formation of the Spawn City.
I have to say, it's looking good. Might I reccomend a different font for the text in bubbles though? Perhaps a bit bolder. Also, the comic should be a wee bit... I think sharper? It looks kinda soft on some of the colors. Overall, though, it looks very good. Keep up the awesome work!
You're welcome, sah!
I've started working on Strip #4, which includes Grlump's first appearence.
Looking good so far. I probably don't need to say that the following criticism is meant to be constructive:
1. You've probably made the mouths different from OoTS on purpose, but I for one prefer that style. In this I think the flat lines make their faces seem vacant and emotionless and they seem to talk in a King Jovox yelling monotone.
2. The arms are held strangely, sort of cowboy-style.
3. They always look directly at the reader. This looks especially strange when running from a zombie, for instance. I would recommend moving the eyes to the side.
4. I'm really entering the realm of nitpicking on this one, it's not so important: The brain on the zombie is as big as the head; there would be no room for a skull or skin.
Keep in mind that if I started listing the stuff you're doing well we'd be here all day.
I'd like to be in, if I still can be. Make me a insane villain if at all possible, please. I'd like to have a banjo that can drive the listener temporarily insane.
1. I tried to make the mouths like OoTs as much as I could. The flat lines mean their mouths are shut and they're not talking.
2. I'll work on that.
3. I tried having their eyes to the side once, and it looks extremely weird.
4. You have to remember, this is set in a video-game. Therefore, all zombies must've been mutants or something while alive, and because of it, they have to have brains the size of paper plates :smalltongue:
Anyway, I'll work on the problems mentioned. Since the actual thread isn't up yet, I should just rename this the official thread O.o
So I'm guessing the permissions are over? :smallfrown:
Then I give you permission to appear in your comic, hopefully as a shapeshifter of some sorts that's a wild card (can be good, can be bad, can be ugly)
Issue 4: You wouldn't be related to Ogor Ogrebreath, would you?
Spoilerhttp://i777.photobucket.com/albums/y...xios5/CH14.jpg
Next issue:
The identity of the new player will be revealed!
The first battle on the server, ever! Will the ogre triumph over Blue Ghost and Crimson Angel? Or will the dynamic duo win the fight? Stay tuned, dear Playgrounders, for the exciting next issue!
Much better. Tone down the font size, and this is just a nitpick but why is it that the color looks a little... I don't know, spotty? Anyhoo, it's almost perfect, and I'm liking it. Maybe it's just my computer, or maybe you can try amping up the resolution of the picture? I would use the OoTS resolution as a guideline, and try to get as near to theirs as possible.
I would advise the unnecessarily tedious work of grabbing the background color and all the little blemishes that appear right next to different colors, paint over with the background color. This would require zooming into at least 350% or so. I would also advise you to use a different color for the POP, perhaps going with just normal black, because right now it's clashes with the background. I dunno though, you do what you think is best.
Actually, keep the color and just use Comic Sans, bolded. You'll be good with that.
I really like what you have so far!
I just have a few nitpicks.
1st, the arms are a bit too long, and a bit gorrila-ey.
2nd, the legs look kind of awkward with both of them so straight. If you make one foot angled a bit and then curve the leg it looks a bit more action-ey. I have no idea if that made sense, but if you look at OOTS you can see what I mean.
Other than that it looks fantastic, and I can't wait to see more :smallbiggrin:
I don't think the mods are ever going to approve the official thread :smallsigh::smalltongue:
Issue 5: Unique panel format time!
^: I'll work on the problems mentioned
"Draw" your weapons? *raises eyebrows*
This is looking pretty good. I'm impressed at how quickly you're building the pages.
Ooh, I like it! I like the mouths, different to normal OotS style, but much easier to draw
Do you have some sort of schedule of when people are appearing? I'd really like to know when I come in.
What I meant about the flat mouths was that I think you should make them as thick as the other lines and curve them up or down a little, depending on the mood of the character. Or, if the character is running from zombies, I would just use an open mouth. I was also going to say how I make OoTS looking mouths, (you're using Inkscape, I presume?) but Grlump likes yours, so never mind.
Anyway, I'm probably taking too much responsibility for your art.