You might want to try using some formatting: bolding and spaces between paragraphs are always helpful.
It helps to use the monster format in the online SRD see here: www.d20srd.org
. Using the standard stat block actually makes it easier to critique because all the necessary information is there.
Your blocks are missing some information. If you look under Monsters there is a section on Reading the Monster Entry. I found that information particularly helpful and you may too.
If a creature is an Outsider, Environment will be its Plane of Origin unless it has the Native Subtype.
Usually Racial Traits are listed in a separate Skills section not in the stat block. You can find a lot of good information there under Monsters (See Reading the Monster Entry)
Unfortunately, I don't have time to critique every monster right now but I'll get back to this.
P.E.A.C.H. Please Evaluate And Critique Honestly. Being nicer and kinder doesn't hurt either.
Please, please, please when using non-core material, cite to the books. There are too many books to wade through to find the one with the feat, special ability or spell you use.
I've got a red
pen and I'm not afraid to use it.
Thanks Gurgleflep for my new avatar!