Re: D&D Snippets II: The Snippetting
good to see you back big teej!
@Volos
I like the 2nd person perspective you've gone with, here. I think that's really hard to write, and you did a good job with it; I think it fits the story you're telling really well. The narrative really hammers home the "you"s; that relentlessness I think is a driving force behind the general feel of your snippet.
My favorite bit, I think, is your choice of the word "remove" in the last paragraph. It serves to really underscore the instant, careless brutality of the stranger's action.
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I'm working up the other half of the Renaldwatch Massacre; the process has been slowed by my getting a "real job." I should be able to finish it by this weekend at the latest.
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