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    Bugbear in the Playground

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    Aug 2010

    Default Re: Metal Heads and other Jak and Daxter stuff

    Quote Originally Posted by Debihuman View Post
    You might want to try using some formatting: bolding and spaces between paragraphs are always helpful.

    It helps to use the monster format in the online SRD see here: www.d20srd.org. Using the standard stat block actually makes it easier to critique because all the necessary information is there.
    Your blocks are missing some information. If you look under Monsters there is a section on Reading the Monster Entry. I found that information particularly helpful and you may too.

    If a creature is an Outsider, Environment will be its Plane of Origin unless it has the Native Subtype.

    Usually Racial Traits are listed in a separate Skills section not in the stat block. You can find a lot of good information there under Monsters (See Reading the Monster Entry)

    Unfortunately, I don't have time to critique every monster right now but I'll get back to this.

    Thank you for the tips. I'll do formatting after I've finished adding all of the individual stats. Also, some of the things you said I needed to add are already there. Again, thanks for your patience.

    EDIT: Did it! And yes, I know that I'm missing things, just let me know and I'll add it when I get the chance.
    Last edited by Getsugaru; 2011-06-23 at 09:38 PM.