Fully agree on the first version being too cluttered. I specifically "applied pressure" to the writers of the story to have all the heavy damage focused on one side, so that the design could be less of a "mishmash of mishmachinery". And the expression... well, I never was much of a master with those.
As to what happened... eh, if you're unlucky, you'll find out in full detail, in due time. If you're lucky, we will have rewritten it by then. When I looked at the injury list the writer first gave me, my reaction was "are you sure she didn't just crash into a grain harvester? " I still have to shut down my brain for reading parts of the current version. Hopefully we'll manage to make it readable by the general audience. Somehow...