Some writing of Mine (Critiques welcomed)

[McBish]

Here is a new one titled- Bebop. Points for guessing what Anime it is named after. Not really, it's to easy.

Bebop

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A note of music
can be heard in the silence
of tonight

We have torn down
the world and replaced it

A beacon of light
blinds us
we are so use to the dark

But in your eyes
I can see something else

And I hope, you see
something in me as well.

Floating through the void
we reach out to each other
Even if we don't mean to.

In the end we will collide.
Will we be ready?

And another.

A Thought

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*tick*

A clock ticks
in an empty room
no one is there
but me, and my mind
it twists
and tries to fit what I see
into the world around me

But it is hard
there is something in front of me
Something that doesn't fit in
Something new,
terrifying and beautiful

It dances in front of me
its form ever shifting
flowing as the sands of time
drip down. Slipping away

A clock ticks
and my body flies
I need to do something soon
before this
fades away
and all I am left with
is a impression
of a memory

*tock*

And as always any feedback is welcomed.