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    Default Re: Well That Was Unexpected Thread II: Now with 230% more lasers!

    Page 166, Panel 9, top speech bubble (by lizard to robot) : Just seems grammatically garbled.

    169 and 170 you have the first shadow thing attacking getting shot in the gap between these two pages, which is a bit odd... like there is a page missing or something...

    Page 178, Panel 7, Red on black bubble: should be "better and better", not "petter and better".

    Page 179, Panel 9, second white on black bubble: As near as I can tell this says that "Your intellegence is much bigger than your intellegence"... which doesn't seem right.

    Page 185, Panels 7, speech bubble: Should be "trouble"
    Panel 9, speech bubble: Should be "braced", not "praced"

    Page 188, Panel 3, speech bubble: Blank (or is that just supposed to be Torn zoning out?)
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