WAR GAMES! an oots style webcomic.

[Elrond]

New comic please??

[CrimsonAngel]

Sorry everyone, the comics might not come out as fast anymore. My paents signed me up for Kumn So now I have Twice the HW!

[Szilard]

Sorry everyone, the comics might not come out as fast anymore. My paents signed me up for Kumn So now I have Twice the HW!

Good for you, the internet is bad. Kumn on the other hand is evil, so I suggest moving to Canada or Mexico.

[Lyinginbedmon]

Okay, you've lost me. What is "kumn"?

[CrimsonAngel]

A wallet factory tutoring sesion.

[Szilard]

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Kumon

[Elrond]

My mum was gonna sign me up for that but i convinced er not to

[CrimsonAngel]

NEW COMIC!!!!

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[Fredthefighter]

*Applauds*
*Salutes*
*Bows and exits stage right*

[Assassin89]

Slight grammatical error.
Whose is a possessive, meaning of who.
Who's means who is

The phrase should be OK, who's next

trophey should be spelled trophy.

[Beans]

Pretty good so far. Your main flaw is typo errors, but that's not hard to overlook (well, for me it is. I'm a Grammar Nazi.)
Keep on truckin'.

[CrimsonAngel]

I'm bored but I'm not in a comic making mood, more the awsome pic of my Townie burning stuff.

[Threeshades]

Nice action, i hope there is going to be as much plot

Your art has improved a lot lately btw.

[CrimsonAngel]

Who Wants A New Comic!?

[Fredthefighter]

It would be nice Mr.Angel sir.
(It would also be nice if you were nicer to me but I suppose that isn't going to happen)

[CrimsonAngel]

Sorry, everyone I'm to lazy.

[The Gremlin]

Sorry, everyone I'm to lazy.

*Glare*

[Assassin89]

Sorry, everyone I'm too lazy.

*stabs for grammatical laziness*

I understand that you have your own personal life, but you need to set time for updates.

[Traker]

Sorry, everyone I'm to lazy.

Resist urge to vanquish laziness.

[Eldrys]

Awsome comic better than your first one (although you should probably have like a cast sheet) better art and grammar but some words are still mispelled) all in all you can make a much better comic than I ever could

[The Neoclassic]

Your art has improved a lot lately btw.

Agreed. Still certainly room for improvement, and your grammar still could use some notable attention, but you have made clear steps to better your work in the past month (judging from what I've seen).

[Traker]

new Comic Please

[CrimsonAngel]

new Comic Please

Featuring shiney new characters.

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*Named the black barbarian dude.

[Traker]

Thank you oh mighty one.

[Fredthefighter]

Thank you oh mighty one.

*Bows down*

[Bayar]

You do realise thta you are not allowed to use Bixby in the spell name because it is a violation of the OGL, right ?

Edit: You deleted your post ?

[CrimsonAngel]

Whats this? A COMIC!?

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[The Neoclassic]

I am intrigued! I like how different characters have different colored speech bubbles, I must say.

That said, here are some grammar notes if you are interested:

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What your comic said.
My recommendation for how to phrase it in the future (based on grammar notes, primarily, not changing any of the meaning or style).
Why!

What do you mean you need more reinforcements!
What do you mean you need more reinforcements?!
All the spelling and grammar here was good, but a question mark and an exclamation mark will better emphasize the king's disbelief and shock.

Look, if you don't whant to send more people, yu can kiss the south wall goodbye.
Look, if you don't want to send more people, you can kiss the south wall goodbye.
Again, almost perfect; just a few minor spelling issues.

One sec, these assasins look competant.
One moment, these assassins look competent.
"Sec" rings a bit too casually as it isn't really used outside of spoken conversation and webspeak.

You may also want to remove "Bigby", since that isn't OGL (in other words, the name is trademarked or copyrighted or something like that).

Have you considered getting a beta reader? Just someone who you can send the lines of dialogue to shortly before you finish the comic, and they'll send them back with all the grammar and spelling corrected. If you'd be interested, I could probably do it for you, or I'm sure many others would volunteer.

[CrimsonAngel]

I am intrigued! I like how different characters have different colored speech bubbles, I must say.

That said, here are some grammar notes if you are interested:

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What your comic said.
My recommendation for how to phrase it in the future (based on grammar notes, primarily, not changing any of the meaning or style).
Why!

What do you mean you need more reinforcements!
What do you mean you need more reinforcements?!
All the spelling and grammar here was good, but a question mark and an exclamation mark will better emphasize the king's disbelief and shock.

Look, if you don't whant to send more people, yu can kiss the south wall goodbye.
Look, if you don't want to send more people, you can kiss the south wall goodbye.
Again, almost perfect; just a few minor spelling issues.

One sec, these assasins look competant.
One moment, these assassins look competent.
"Sec" rings a bit too casually as it isn't really used outside of spoken conversation and webspeak.

You may also want to remove "Bigby", since that isn't OGL (in other words, the name is trademarked or copyrighted or something like that).

Have you considered getting a beta reader? Just someone who you can send the lines of dialogue to shortly before you finish the comic, and they'll send them back with all the grammar and spelling corrected. If you'd be interested, I could probably do it for you, or I'm sure many others would volunteer.

Thanks, Will you be my "beta reader"?
I'm changing the comic right now.

EDIT: remixed.

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[Traker]

Thanks lord again.