Our Comic Lab in the Playground: An experimentation class

[Green-Shirt Q]

So, since my last question didnt get answered, gonna post another one...


How would a comic based on the premise of the following picture sound like ? Good idea ? Bad Idea ? Sod Off Idea ?

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I think the picture requires a little more explanation then that, but you know, it looks like it would be a good comic premise.

Teenagers in a fantasy universe, role-playing as business men, finally see their world as the wonderous place that it is and go on an epic quest, originally to have fun, but later to rescue one of their fellow role-playing friends, which leads them on an epic jorney of fun, explosions, true love with hot elf chicks, self discovery, friendship, misunderstandings, and plenty of Chekhov's guns about their role-playing history to use skills and values of the mundane world, to make one of the greatest lighthearted feel-good fun-for-the-whole-family laugh-out-loud comedies of the year!

Yeah, I pulled most of that out of my ass. A picture is not enough to make a comic about.

However, did YOU draw that? Because no matter how crummy the story is, that art will save it if you used it in your comic.

[Maximum Zersk]

*Ahem*



How's it?

[Szilard]

Shiny. .

[BRC]

Very Nice.

So, I need some advice. I'm experimenting with using different backgrounds for combat scenes rather than the actual background.
Here's an example

Does this look better than if I used a normal background, or does it just look stupid.

[Blayze]

It makes it look like an advertising campaign for some Pepsi-branded breakdancing product.

[X2]

Very Nice.

So, I need some advice. I'm experimenting with using different backgrounds for combat scenes rather than the actual background.
Here's an example

Does this look better than if I used a normal background, or does it just look stupid.

Am I supposed to be reminded of a police light?

[BRC]

It makes it look like an advertising campaign for some Pepsi-branded breakdancing product.

You're Right! I could be making money off this!

Am I supposed to be reminded of a police light?

Was not my intent, but I suppose it works.

[Emperor Ing]

Critique: Even though I can tell what's going on, for one thing the characters aren't standing on any distinguishable floor, and two, even though they're clearly in the same area the background changed as if they moved

[Tiffanie Lirle]

Sort of concept art for a comic I've been thinking about starting for a while.

Probably gonna end up calling it "Continuity Error" after my old failed comic. :P

Still working out all the kinks, plot/story wise. But for the most part it's your standard "into the rabbit hole" deal. In a nutshell, protagonist A finds his way from World A to World B where he encounters protagonist B and the shadowy organization B works with. I'd give you actual details, but then I'd be giving away the plot.

Already have names and backstories sorted out for the characters. Except for the one on the right who's still missing her name.

Not sure if I'll even start it though. Just an idea that's been gathering dust in my mind for a while.

[Rowsen]

So, since my last question didnt get answered, gonna post another one...


How would a comic based on the premise of the following picture sound like ? Good idea ? Bad Idea ? Sod Off Idea ?

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Elven nerds. Best idea ever.
Incedentally, that's the first fat elf I've ever seen.

[Bayar]

Sort of concept art for a comic I've been thinking about starting for a while.

Probably gonna end up calling it "Continuity Error" after my old failed comic. :P

Still working out all the kinks, plot/story wise. But for the most part it's your standard "into the rabbit hole" deal. In a nutshell, protagonist A finds his way from World A to World B where he encounters protagonist B and the shadowy organization B works with. I'd give you actual details, but then I'd be giving away the plot.

Already have names and backstories sorted out for the characters. Except for the one on the right who's still missing her name.

Not sure if I'll even start it though. Just an idea that's been gathering dust in my mind for a while.

Had almost the same comic idea about a year ago, but was too lazy to draw it.

If the protagonist happens to dual wield a katana and a Mac-10, then it would be perfect

[Blayze]

Elven nerds. Best idea ever.
Incedentally, that's the first fat elf I've ever seen.

Reminds me of a scene in Simon the Sorcerer (I think it was the first game) where Simon stumbles upon geeks in a fantasy world playing a tabletop game called Apartments and Accountants.

[Cizak]

How would a comic based on the premise of the following picture sound like ? Good idea ? Bad Idea ? Sod Off Idea ?

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Did... dd you draw that??

[Szilard]

Did... dd you draw that??

No,The artist lives in CA, and I'm pretty sure Bayar's Romanian.

[Green-Shirt Q]

I come asking for people's honest opinions on an idea for a fancomic I have had while doodling in class. At first it was just for giggles, although recently I have actually considered it as a possible fancomic. I realize that I'm going to run out of comics to review on The Q's Comic Review relatively soon, and while I will not stop reviewing comics when permission is given to me, I probably will not be able to do it on a weekly basis much longer. And so, I need help to decide whether to start a new fancomic when The Q's Comic Review runs out of comics or just double my other comic's, Smooth Moves, update schedule.

Anyway, here's the description.

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Okay, this may come as a shock to a lot of people on these forums, but I really like Mario games. I love Mario from his bright, red, iconic, monogrammed hat to his shiny, brown, snappy, turtle-stomping shoes. What I particularly like about the various Mario games, I realize, is that with the countless videogames of many, MANY different gameplay styles, A LOT has been put into the mythos and yet a lot of it is quite open to interpretation.

This fancomic is an alternate imagining of Super Mario 64 with massive inspiration taken from the webseries There Will Be Brawl. Basically, it's Super Mario 64 but darker and edgier.

But it's not just that. It will also not just be Super Mario 64, but also contain continuity references from a hell of a lot of the other games. It will contain elements, plot-point references, characters and/or cameo gags from Sunshine, Galaxy, the Paper Mario RPG series, the Mario & Luigi RPG series, Super Mario RPG: Legend of the Seven Stars, Luigi's Mansion, Mario Bros., Super Mario Bros. 1, 2 and 3, Super Mario World, The Donkey Kong series, The Wario Land series, Dr. Mario, the Mario Party series, the Mario Kart series, New Super Mario Bros./Wii, Yoshi's Island, The Super Smash Bros. series and even Hotel Mario and Mario Is Missing. Even the movie will be referenced. So basically this is a huge celebration of the Mario games, attempted to make sense and put it into some kind of mass continuity.

Mario will have to encounter many of his past, forgotten foes who have shown up to haunt him (sometimes quite literally), such as Wario, Donkey Kong, Wart, Kamek, Smithy, Fawful, King Boo, and a few others.

Here's the title and title page.

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Here's the first comic.

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SO basically, I'm asking your opinions on whether or not I should go through with this when The Q's Comic Review runs it's course. And, if anybody has any sugestions, with the artstyle or many with a character or a reference they want to see, I'm all ears.

[CrimsonAngel]

Change goomba's legs!

[Szilard]

Yeah, I'm not so much liking this art style, but that's just me. I'd have to think of words to describe it and suggestions, but I'm a bit lazy right now. :P

[BRC]

A question, I'm working on the next Rebellion|Revolution, and I'm trying to get a point across visually, but I'm not sure it's working.
Here's the image in question. For reference, the entire comic up to that point has NOT been in the trenches, but in a city (Red walls=bricks)

Here's What I'm trying to do

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The guy on the left is readying his weapon (The type of gun is called a Stregson), which makes a distinctive Clack Clack noise when the safety is taken off (The fact that it's the safety is less important than the fact that the gun makes a Clack-Clack noise).
The Riot Cop is a Veteran recognizing the sound, (that's supposed to be him in the background).

So, is that coming across, or does the image make absolutely no sense without the explanation. One of the things Q's review of Rob and Jack made me realize is that I can't assume people will read anything that isn't actually in the main comic, and I don't want anybody who dosn't know to look for my explanation to be totally confused by this.

[Szilard]

A thought bubble perhaps? Assuming the second panel is him now and him then in the background.

[smuchmuch]

I'd recomend making the background in the second panel a little transparent or adding somme color effect. Or maybe a border like a thought bubble. It might make more apparent the fact that there's only one character who is flashbacking

[CrimsonAngel]

Oh, I thought he was standing with someone with that same gun.

[Szilard]

Oh, I thought he was standing with someone with that same gun.

Which is why BRC is trying to make it more clear.

[Green-Shirt Q]

Change goomba's legs!

...How, exactly, do you suggest I do that?

[CrimsonAngel]

I dunno, make them bend a different way atleast.

[Green-Shirt Q]

I dunno, make them bend a different way atleast.

Alright. Just for curiousity, why do you think that would be a better idea?

[CrimsonAngel]

It looks unnatural.

[Green-Shirt Q]

It looks unnatural.

...I think I see.

I will try to change it so that it looks more...natural. Yes.

[John Cribati]

I need an expression for "I want to laugh, but I am so confused."
How could I pull that off?

By the way, my comic is now up. I renamed it "Combo-Platter." Check it out!

[Emperor Ing]

I recommend the eyebrows of this with the standard open-mouth happy expression.

[Cizak]

Q: If you ever put that comic up, I don't think I'll follow it, because the art looks really bad. I mean, really bad. I'm so sorry that I have to say this to you without being able to give any constructive critisism, but it's just not pleasent to look at. It doesn't even look like Mario-characters...

I'm not saying that you'er a bad artist. Because your art in Q's Comic Review, Smooth Moves and My Name Is Q is very good. Sorry to say it, but... yeah, now I've said it