BleachITP Reborn: Discussion & Setup Thread 2

[horngeek]

>.<

It's not as bad...

part of the point of the character is she'll know what the implications of her Shikai are, and get highly embarrassed by it.

[Moon Wolf]

Dear god, I can just see that.

[horngeek]

See what? The implications, or how embarrassed she'll be?

[Moon Wolf]

HG, I can't believe you're asking me that.

You should know.

[horngeek]

Good point. Remember that I'm not so good at 'getting' what people are talking about, though.

[Moon Wolf]

Hint: I have a bad, bad, mind.

[horngeek]

[Tackyhillbillu]

4th Division writeup:

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Ude's predecessor, Horigome Chinatsu, ran a tight ship. Ude was her Vice Captain for almost a 100 years, and she spend most of them trying to coax the Shinigami into actually doing some work. Since ultimately, she failed, Chinatsu ended up doing everything. The woman, a friendly Shinigami who at the very least matched Ude in terms of mundane and Kido healing, was a relentless dynamo of energy, running everything at once. No matter where someone was hurt, she'd be there. The 4th was a model of efficiency under her.

She retired from Active service a 100 years ago, leaving Ude in charge of the 4th. She took a position at the Academy, teaching Healing Kido and acting as the nurse. She still is much the same, everywhere at once. Ude drops in on her from time to time, mostly to complain, and nap on her cots.

Ude's management style is rather different from Chinatsu's. Indeed, many unsophiscated observers wonder if he does anything at all. Many sophiscated observers know that he does absolutely as little as possible, and has largely set up the 4th Division to run itself. Most divisions wouldn't survive like that, but the medics of the 4th are an easy going bunch, and can mostly manage themselves. He's divided up the squads into areas and functions, each of his seated officers commanding a group of unseated, and he encourages the Seated to do the same with their unseated members. Almost all authority devolves to the seated. Appeals of decisions and disagreements between his seated are dealt with by his Vice Captain, who otherwise pretty much just roves about the divisions. That way they can't bother Ude. Appeals can be made to Ude himself, but he rarely disagrees with his Vice Captain.

Divsion Size: Unknown

Division Training Levels: Well, for the most part, the 4th is an oddly assorted lot. They are on average better at Kido then they are at Swordsmanship, usually relying on that if cornered. However, for the most part, the group prefers to avoid battle, fleeing if it becomes needed. Very few generalizations can be drawn, because of the differences in motivations to join the Division, and difference services they provide. The seated are a jumble, mostly because the division ends up giving out seats via seniority, rather then fighting prowess.

Duties

Healing: The primary function, and the one that all the others support. The 4th excels at healing, and the expertise on the subject is unmatched. There are numerous subspecialties within the Division:
First Responders
Hospital Staff
Long Term Care Specialists
Mental Health Professionals

Supplies: The 4th Division runs inventory, and dispenses requests to most of the other divisions.

Janitorial: The 4th Division has the exciting job of cleaning the Seireitei. Meet new and exciting dust bunnies, and do battle with them.

Skills required

Honestly, the 4th usually ends up taking whoever will join. They are pretty desperate. Kido Users are nice, and people with Healing Talent are appreciated, but honestly, if you can hold a broom, the 4th will take you.

I dunno. How many members should the 4th have?

[Moon Wolf]

Nighty night, HG.

[The Librarian]

*jaw drop followed by facepalm*
Why would you ask Moon that HG. WHY?!

[Moon Wolf]

*jaw drop followed by facepalm*
Why would you ask Moon that HG. WHY?!

Meh.

Just...meh.

[horngeek]

Because I'm a social moron!

[Moon Wolf]

...

...

*no comment.*

[The Librarian]

Now your just putting yourself down HG. You didn't know what Moon was capable of. Most of us don't.

[Moon Wolf]

Seriously. There is only one person who knows what I am capable of. And even she doesn't really know the full extent of it. But she knows pretty much all of it. And you wouldn't even be able to imagine the kind of stuff we do and talk about....it's all manga-related, though.

So I'm not going to do too much to your regular lives.

(Quick. Thank your personal gods for that.)

[horngeek]

Eh.

Moving on.

<.<
>.>

[XtheYeti]

Seriously. There is only one person who knows what I am capable of. And even she doesn't really know the full extent of it. But she knows pretty much all of it. And you wouldn't even be able to imagine the kind of stuff we do and talk about....it's all manga-related, though.

So I'm not going to do too much to your regular lives.

(Quick. Thank your personal gods for that.)

Moon...you...you make me happy. That was hilarious.

[Moon Wolf]

Moon...you...you make me happy. That was hilarious.

*bows theatrically*

Thhhank yoouuu, GiantITP! You were an excellent audience!

*trips on curtain while exiting stage*

[The Librarian]

Seriously. There is only one person who knows what I am capable of. And even she doesn't really know the full extent of it. But she knows pretty much all of it. And you wouldn't even be able to imagine the kind of stuff we do and talk about....it's all manga-related, though.

So I'm not going to do too much to your regular lives.

(Quick. Thank your personal gods for that.)

I really do think I can handle at least a sample of your mindset Moon. Srsly, send me a PM if its is too much I think everyone will know....

[Moon Wolf]

...

No, you can't handle it. Plus I think I'd embarass myself into changing my name, forsaking all of my current possessions, and moving to Timbuktu.

[Shades of Gray]

4th Division writeup:

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Ude's predecessor, Horigome Chinatsu, ran a tight ship. Ude was her Vice Captain for almost a 100 years, and she spend most of them trying to coax the Shinigami into actually doing some work. Since ultimately, she failed, Chinatsu ended up doing everything. The woman, a friendly Shinigami who at the very least matched Ude in terms of mundane and Kido healing, was a relentless dynamo of energy, running everything at once. No matter where someone was hurt, she'd be there. The 4th was a model of efficiency under her.

She retired from Active service a 100 years ago, leaving Ude in charge of the 4th. She took a position at the Academy, teaching Healing Kido and acting as the nurse. She still is much the same, everywhere at once. Ude drops in on her from time to time, mostly to complain, and nap on her cots.

Ude's management style is rather different from Chinatsu's. Indeed, many unsophiscated observers wonder if he does anything at all. Many sophiscated observers know that he does absolutely as little as possible, and has largely set up the 4th Division to run itself. Most divisions wouldn't survive like that, but the medics of the 4th are an easy going bunch, and can mostly manage themselves. He's divided up the squads into areas and functions, each of his seated officers commanding a group of unseated, and he encourages the Seated to do the same with their unseated members. Almost all authority devolves to the seated. Appeals of decisions and disagreements between his seated are dealt with by his Vice Captain, who otherwise pretty much just roves about the divisions. That way they can't bother Ude. Appeals can be made to Ude himself, but he rarely disagrees with his Vice Captain.

Divsion Size: Unknown

Division Training Levels: Well, for the most part, the 4th is an oddly assorted lot. They are on average better at Kido then they are at Swordsmanship, usually relying on that if cornered. However, for the most part, the group prefers to avoid battle, fleeing if it becomes needed. Very few generalizations can be drawn, because of the differences in motivations to join the Division, and difference services they provide. The seated are a jumble, mostly because the division ends up giving out seats via seniority, rather then fighting prowess.

Duties

Healing: The primary function, and the one that all the others support. The 4th excels at healing, and the expertise on the subject is unmatched. There are numerous subspecialties within the Division:
First Responders
Hospital Staff
Long Term Care Specialists
Mental Health Professionals

Supplies: The 4th Division runs inventory, and dispenses requests to most of the other divisions.

Janitorial: The 4th Division has the exciting job of cleaning the Seireitei. Meet new and exciting dust bunnies, and do battle with them.

Skills required

Honestly, the 4th usually ends up taking whoever will join. They are pretty desperate. Kido Users are nice, and people with Healing Talent are appreciated, but honestly, if you can hold a broom, the 4th will take you.

I dunno. How many members should the 4th have?

They were said to be the largest division in canon, and had ~1000 members in the previous RP.

[The Librarian]

...

No, you can't handle it. Plus I think I'd embarass myself into changing my name, forsaking all of my current possessions, and moving to Timbuktu.

Okay, if you feel that its to protect your pride, go with it.

[nothingclever]

Idea-Time!

How about a certain division, say, 10th (they don't have a job yet) is in charge of running the academy and instruction of recruits (And even any unseated or seated that want to learn something new.) The division would have a diverse selection of specializations as well as a few jack-of-all-trades.

...

Shades have good idea?

Yes, sounds like a good idea to me.

[CMOTDibbler]

Yes, sounds like a good idea to me.

I agree, and 10th would be great, considering that includes me!

[Purple Rose]

Okay, so I decided to revisit and revise Ai:

Name:[/B] Kato Ai (last, first)
Gender: Female
Height: 5'7"
Weight: Very thin
Affiliation: Shinigami
Rank: Candidate for Third Squad Captain

Appearance: Very thin with youngish features. Her hair is a mousy brown and short cut. She has soft brown eyes and an almost permanent wistful look on her face. She wears sailor fuku style school uniform (in a rather modest way, you pervs ). Most notable about her is a pair of small wings growing from her back. The wings are white and between two and three feet long. She also has a faintly glowing halo floating above her head. The halo is a physical ring that hovers over her head and can be grabbed and pulled. Though it seems to be "rooted" in place, meaning that if the halo is pulled, it would result in her head being yanked along as well. But it is able to be moved around though, that is, she can pull it off to the side or pull it down onto her head. It just snaps back into place afterward.

Personality: Somewhat shy and reserved, she tends to weigh on the serious side. Pensive, but she can be sweet and friendly too.

Background: Ai's background before joining the Seireitei is a bit of a mystery for those not in the know. What is known is that about one hundred years prior she was welcomed into the Seireitei by the third squad's previous Captain after some disturbance in the mortal world involving her. Her abilities are quite unique in the spirit world and made her of interest with the scientists of the twelfth squad. After a relatively short time, and to the unease of some of the court guard, Ai began working her way up the ladder in the third squad, becoming a seated officer and eventually the Vice Captain. It is widely rumored that Ai was romantically involved with the Captain, or that he owed her a debt of some kind. Either way, after the Captain's death, Ai superseded him as Captain, much to the disapproval of quite a few of the other Captains. Despite the misgivings about the decision, she has served admirably in her role.

When she took over the third squad she lobbied hard with the Central 46 to restore its role as the execution squad. She eventually won and instituted a very rigorous and ritualistic system of corporal punishment for those deemed dangerous or malicious of spirit enough to warrant execution for their crimes. She oversaw the construction of a temple and execution grounds for the purpose of carrying this out.

Execution grounds: Under Ai's instructions a temple was build on the large hill at the center of the Seireitei. The grounds, which are several hundred feet long and half as wide, are situated at the highest point on the hill, on a wide, level area.

At one end is a stunningly ornate pagoda with seven tiers. It rises high above the hill and is visible from almost anywhere in the Seireitei. Its peak is crowned in gold and catches the light like a beacon during the day.

At the far end, opposite the pagoda, is a large, raised circular platform carved from marble and engraved with intricate carvings that form a complex web of symbols and patterns throughout. At the center of the platform is another raised circle cut from the stone, on which rests a small shrine. Within the shrine is a plain looking ceremonial sword, resting on a raised dais and shielded by thin veils on all sides.

Running the length of the grounds between the pagoda and the shrine is a path of cut marble and granite, inlaid with jade and other semiprecious stones. Described in the priceless mosaic is a story of a spirit's passing from the mortal world into the seireitei and its eventual death and reincarnation in the mortal world once more. Woven into the story are scenes of hollows and shinigami in battle, families together, spiritual beasts of all kinds. The workmanship of the pathway is exquisite and unmatched. Lining the path on both sides are twelve cherry trees that are in blossom year round.

Standing on the outer side of the raised platform is a towering oak tree which nearly dwarfs the Pagoda on the far end of the grounds. The tree, like the others, is covered with leafs all year round. It's trunk it thick and ancient and it exudes its own spiritual presence.

Stationed around the grounds are 13 guards, 4 guard the pagoda, 4 the pathway, 4 the circumference of the platform, and 1 the shrine itself. They all wear elegant ceremonial uniforms and their faces are masked behind thickly veiled headgear and remain perfectly motionless throughout their shifts. Each wields a decorative, but also practical, lance and are trained to fight anyone who endangers the sanctity of the grounds. Though visitation is allowed, absolute silence is enforced on the grounds with violators being forcefully removed by the guards.

During actual executions only the soon to be executed and Ai are permitted to speak. The blade, through some unknown mechanism, destroys spiritual bodies and sends the soul off to he reborn in the mortal world. The ceremony is very complicated and a rather solemn event.

The entire area has been underlain with a special material that suppresses spiritual pressure, allowing even powerful criminals to be brought and punished there without exceptional risk.

Zanpaktou: She doesn't actually have a zanpaktou, but instead uses a combination of unarmed attack styles and her halo (covered below).

Shikai: Though she doesn't have a zanpaktou per se, she does have a form of release when she fights. Specifically, it results in her wings growing very large, allowing her to use them to fly very swiftly. When released, her physical attack power increases significantly, as well as her speed and agility. In addition, her halo gains the ability to fire off a beam of golden energy, similar to a Cero, which she does by grabbing the halo and pulling it down in front of her face, aiming at her target. She can only fire a limited amount during her release though and has to recharge after she reaches the limit.

Bankai: Again, it isn't a bankai exactly, just an attack on that level. Her halo rises into the air, growing wider rapidly, turning into a vast circle over the battle area with her at the center. After a moment of charging, the halo fires a column of devastating golden energy that blasts everything within its area, including its user, resulting, in most cases, with her release ending and her being left incapacitated afterward, making it an all or nothing attack. Either it defeats her enemy, or she leaves herself entirely vulnerable to attack after its use.

How does that look?

[Draken]

Well, the material that supresses spiritual energy is easy. It is called sekiseki, or deathstone. The sword that destroys spiritual bodies and sends the souls to reincarnate through unknown means is also very much known, it is called a normal weapon.

Just kidding. But yes, when a spiritual being is killed, unless the attack obliterates or devours the soul of the victim, then they are, by default, sent to reincarnate in the material world.

[Purple Rose]

Okay, so a general failure to grasps some general well known facts of the universe aside, any suggestions or critiques?

[Draken]

Well. There is a rather strong contrast between her looks and the execution role. But other than that, well, I will have to approve I guess.

I recommend removing the mentions of cero in her entry. Gives an odd hollow feel to it all. Just say it is a laser of some sort.

[Dorizzit]

Updated version of Damara, passing it through here before it goes in the Character Registry.

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Age: 465 (looks mid-thirties)
Height: 5' 8"
Weight: 135 Ibs.
Reiatsu: White, appearing as a soft glow that slowly grows more intense as he releases more power.
Faction: Soul Society
Division: Sixth Division
Rank: Vice Captain
Appearance

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Appearing as a man in his prime, Damara has a slender but very fit form. His eyes are a light gray and highly observant, and he studies new people or phenomena very carefully when he first encounters them, either obviously or not. His hair is black, and flows down his neck to his shoulders. His personal appearance is always immaculate, without so much as a hair out of place. This is not due to vanity; he simply feels it is his duty to look proper because of his high position, and in times of extreme duress he begins to look more unkempt. Damara wears a standard Shihakusho, as well as a small silver neck band and a thin, long white scarf that hangs down both his front and back almost to the feet. He wears his Zanpakuto on his left hip.

Personality

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Damara has been described by many people who have worked with him as cold, callous, or heartless. This is not, technically, correct. Damara rarely shows emotion, and is a private, introverted person. He has great difficulty bonding with other people, and has never put in a significant effort to do so. As a result, he can come off as uncaring. Despite this, Damara is a kind person who is devoted absolutely to the Soul Society and has a strong sense of personal justice. Damara has a keen analytical eye, and is very perceptive of occurrences around him. He is an extremely meticulous person, and he doesn't do anything by half. Damara's greatest asset is his ability to learn; he can take in information very well, and is excellent at improving himself. Damara is also extremely intelligent. He enjoys learning new hobbies, and has mastered a large number of skills. These pursuits fill the void left by his lack of friends.

History

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Very little is known about Damara's life before he became a Shinigami; nobody has ever really talked to him about it, and he doesn't seem particularly inclined to volunteer the information without provocation. It isn't hard to imagine him living quietly in some corner of the Rukongai, and this is the general assumption of his time there by any who have cared to speculate.
What is known is that Damara entered the Shinigami academy at a relatively young age, the thought of keeping the balance between the Mortal World and the Afterlife appealing to him. He committed himself to his studies with the quiet, unceasing effort that has become characteristic of him. He made no friends in his school days, devoting most of his time to study and practice. His constant efforts paid off, however. Damara consistently got extremely high marks in all of his classes, showing extraordinary skill at sword fighting and a high level of technical ability with Kido.
Damara graduated from the academy (valedictorian) and was initially assigned to the Thirteenth Division Squad. He took well to field work, and quickly gained a reputation as a cold, but hardworking and unquestioning shinigami. However, he continued to remain apart from other people, and had no real friends. Due to his constant distance, Damara was reassigned repeatedly because of his diverse skill set and high learning ability. Eventually, he was assigned to the Sixth Squad, where he was able to get along well because of the more fluid organization of the Division. Over time, Damara has climbed through the ranks at a fast but not startling rate, eventually reaching his current position as Vice-Captain.

Abilities

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Damara is a highly adept swordsman, preferring the use of Zanjutsu over all other combat disciplines. His style revolves around pure skill, as Damara is neither unusually strong nor unusually quick for one of his level. Despite his preference for swordplay, Damara is well practiced in all areas of Shinigami combat techniques, retaining good levels of skill in both Hoho and Hakuda. Damara's distance with his Shunpo is average, but the movement itself is very fast and he has a high degree of control over the technique, and he can use it many times in succession. Damara has a high level of ability with Kido, as well, able to reliably cast up to Hado 88 or Bakuda 90. He has a moderate level of skill in healing kido.

Zanpakuto
Shiro Hoshi (White Star)

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"Shine, Shiro Hoshi"
Inner World

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Damara's Inner World appears as an unbroken vista of stars without visible planets. Occasional shooting stars can be seen.

Spirit

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Shiro Hoshi takes the form of a large, pulsing white light. It is a flippant, playful spirit, frequently urging Damara to action without his usual careful forethought. He serves as a more reckless and immediate voice to Damara's endless hesitance. Despite this contrast, Damara and Shiro Hoshi are very close, and Damara spends much of his free time communing with his Zanpakuto Spirit.

Sealed Form

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In its sealed form, Damara's Zanpakuto is a simple katana with a crossguard shaped like a four-point star. The hilt is bright white, and meticulously wrapped in strips of white sharkskin. A small, flawless star sapphire is embedded into the pommel. The blade itself is brightly polished and razor sharp.

Shikai

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When the command is uttered, Shiro Hoshi flashes very brightly, blinding any but Damara who is looking at it. Afterwords, Shiro Hoshi continues to shine very brightly to the perception of anyone except Damara, who is not negatively affected by it. This can make it difficult to pin down the sword's exact location. The blade of the sword also trails an afterimage of its movements. Damara can control the length of this trail. Shiro Hoshi has three commands in this form:
White Wave: Damara swings Shiro Hoshi in a vertical or horizontal arc, which projects a wave of kido energy outwards. This is a simple attack which can be done repeatedly, and is moderately powerful. The wave is thin but strong and very sharp, allowing it to cut through most terrestrial materials.
Solar Flare: The light emerging from Shiro Hoshi pulses once and then flashes in a manner identical to its shikai command, potentially catching an opponent off guard and blinding them. The move also has a secondary effect, however, reflecting any moderately powerful energy based technique that gets caught in the second flash.
Fall: Shiro Hoshi is immediately pulled towards the largest immediate source of gravity at an extremely rapid rate, effortlessly slicing through obstructions or anything else that gets in the way. Damara has trained very hard to keep a hold on his Zanpakuto during this move. The technique is extremely powerful, and enables Shiro Hoshi to cut through almost anything. There are drawbacks, however. The technique is very difficult to control, and once it is started it cannot be stopped until Shiro Hoshi hits the ground or doesn't move for ten seconds, which can leave Damara vulnerable.

Bankai
(Damara has not yet achieved Bankai)

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Eikyuu Shiro Hoshi (Eternal White Star)
When Bankai is activated, Shiro Hoshi sheds its bright white glow, replacing it with a dull, dark blue one. The blade itself extends slightly, and the hilt fades in color until it is only a shade lighter than the sapphire in its pommel. The blade stops trailing at this point. Pricks of light appear on the blade of Eikyuu Shiro Hoshi, simulating a night sky.
Eikyuu Shiro Hoshi is nearly indestructible and impossibly sharp, creating a formidable weapon. It also is wrapped in a blanket of kido-like energy, allowing it to parry mystic attacks as well as physical ones.
Damara also gains large, indistinct wings of energy, similar to the one surrounding his sword but both stronger and tougher. These wings have three effects: they allow Damara to fly at high speeds, they can serve as shields against attacks, and they can be used as a weapon.
Activating Bankai also gives Damara a large boost to his physical abilities, and heals him of any injuries he has sustained in battle up to this point.
Eikyuu Shiro Hoshi has five commands:
Falling Star Blade: The stars in Eikyuu Shiro Hoshi's blade expand in size until the sword takes on the appearance of its shikai covered in white flames, and then the sword hurtles in a direction of Damara's choosing. Damara can switch direction mid strike or end it at any time. The technique is very similar to the Fall command of the Shikai, but has more control and more power.
Meteor Storm: The stars separate from Eikyuu Shiro Hoshi's blade, and then lance towards an opponent or opponents, forming a number of powerful strikes. It is very difficult to deflect all of the meteors, and they travel very quickly, making this a very deadly technique. Damara can also channel a much stronger and larger version of the attack through his wings.
Shield of the Night Sky: Damara swings Eikyuu Shiro Hoshi in an arc in front of him, trailing parts of its kido blanket, which can be used as a shield. If Damara desires, he can activate the Meteor Storm command from this shield.
Night Wave: This command is identical to the White Wave command, but is much more powerful.
Night Tide: Damara swings Eikyuu Shiro Hoshi in a vertical or horizontal arc, releasing a large wave of damaging kido energy. The technique is similar to the White Wave attack, but it is larger and stronger, making it unable to perform the precision cuts of White Wave in exchange for increased area of effect and power.
Heart of the Star: A blinding light fills a radius of twenty feet around Damara, making it almost impossible to see for anyone except him within this area. The area of the technique is ringed with white hot flames that do not harm anyone entering the area, but cause serious burns to any opponent attempting to leave. The technique lasts for two minutes or until dismissed before fading, and is very draining on Damara, likely causing him to drop bankai after it ends.

[nothingclever]

When she took over the third squad she lobbied hard with the Central 46 to restore its role as the execution squad.

I've got nothing against the entry but I wish she'd have lobbied hard for the role of the third squad to not be execution because I think an entire division devoted to such a thing sounds silly. I wish it had a more general purpose but that's just how I feel about the division which was already like that before.

I suggest explaining in your entry why she wanted to be in charge of and reinstate the third squad's role as executioners. Why does this shy angelic looking person want to be in charge of ritualistically offing people?

I'm not saying you shouldn't go with what you have but you might try coming up with an entirely new purpose for the division unless people actually want it to stay execution oriented. Maybe it still carries out executions but they are a secondary role of the organization. Do you really want your character to fill such a role? I don't think people would object much to the 3rd division getting a redo from canon and the past game. I have a slight suspicion you chose the 3rd because it was an uncontested slot for a captain character. There's nothing wrong with that, I just think why tailor your character to something it doesn't necessarily have to be.