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  1. 2010-07-12, 12:29 AM (ISO 8601) - Top - End - #1
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    Well, this is my web comic.

    Dream world is about a bunch of people, from all around the world, who all suddenly got a blackout. and when they woke up, They were in a world like nothing they had ever seen before.

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    I still donīt know all the options but iīm working on it.

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  2. 2010-07-13, 05:22 AM (ISO 8601) - Top - End - #2
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    Looks pretty good, but you have a few spelling errors. Maybye you should et someone to read your comics before you post them?

    Spelling errors in comic #1:

    Panel 1: "precident" should be "president".
    "promissed" should be "promised".
    "Well about the story, well". Not a spelling error, but when you repeat "well" like that it sounds weird.
    "exacly" should be "excactly".

    Panel 3: "becourse" should be "because".
    "vidio" should be "video".
    "No Little Alex loved something---" This would look better with "No, little Alex".

    Sorry to post something so boring as your first comic, but it's a major thing that needs improvement. Otherwise, it looks good. The art ids nice and it sounds like an interesting story.
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  3. 2010-07-13, 05:36 AM (ISO 8601) - Top - End - #3
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    Default Re: Dream world

    The massive blocks of text may dissuade readers...try stretching the page out a bit and separating them into smaller chunks.
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  4. 2010-07-13, 08:07 AM (ISO 8601) - Top - End - #4
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    Sheriff: I'll give you a little leeway on this first comic, but if this comic is about real world politics, you shouldn't post/link it here.
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  5. 2010-07-15, 02:04 PM (ISO 8601) - Top - End - #5
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    Quote Originally Posted by Cizak View Post
    Looks pretty good, but you have a few spelling errors. Maybye you should et someone to read your comics before you post them?

    Spelling errors in comic #1:

    Panel 1: "precident" should be "president".
    "promissed" should be "promised".
    "Well about the story, well". Not a spelling error, but when you repeat "well" like that it sounds weird.
    "exacly" should be "excactly".

    Panel 3: "becourse" should be "because".
    "vidio" should be "video".
    "No Little Alex loved something---" This would look better with "No, little Alex".

    Sorry to post something so boring as your first comic, but it's a major thing that needs improvement. Otherwise, it looks good. The art ids nice and it sounds like an interesting story.
    I have edited them, i will try to double check in the future

    Thanks

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    The massive blocks of text may dissuade readers...try stretching the page out a bit and separating them into smaller chunks.
    It is just the intruductions which include this much text. The real comic will be more speechbubbles and action.

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    Sheriff: I'll give you a little leeway on this first comic, but if this comic is about real world politics, you shouldn't post/link it here.
    It wouldnīt, i donīt even know whatīs going on in politics
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  6. 2010-07-16, 01:54 AM (ISO 8601) - Top - End - #6
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    New comic is up

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  7. 2010-07-16, 07:31 AM (ISO 8601) - Top - End - #7
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    Are the next two going to be a pilot (who crashes due to turbulences) and a miner (who gets buried in a collapsing shaft)?
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  8. 2010-07-20, 07:30 AM (ISO 8601) - Top - End - #8
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    Quote Originally Posted by Threeshades View Post
    Are the next two going to be a pilot (who crashes due to turbulences) and a miner (who gets buried in a collapsing shaft)?
    No. Why you ask?
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  9. 2010-07-20, 09:17 AM (ISO 8601) - Top - End - #9
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    A new comic is up, or 2 actually

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  10. 2010-07-20, 09:40 AM (ISO 8601) - Top - End - #10
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    Did she just petrify and fall over?
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  11. 2010-07-20, 01:06 PM (ISO 8601) - Top - End - #11
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    Another (two) is up

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  12. 2010-07-20, 01:31 PM (ISO 8601) - Top - End - #12
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    Quote Originally Posted by Ninjaman View Post
    No. Why you ask?
    Oh I just thought I was beginning to see a pattern.

    The last few comics are kind of confusing, people seem to tip over for no apparent reason.
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  13. 2010-07-20, 02:15 PM (ISO 8601) - Top - End - #13
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    Quote Originally Posted by Threeshades View Post
    Oh I just thought I was beginning to see a pattern.

    The last few comics are kind of confusing, people seem to tip over for no apparent reason.
    Propably best that way. If you think the intro is confusing you donīt stand a chance in the real story, as it is kinda "Alice in wonder land" the bloody version.
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    New comic is up

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    This means i am half the way through the introductions
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    This means i am half the way through the introductions
    Ok, I didn't want to post in this thread at first, but this just made me crack. Get a spellchecker. Seriously. It will improve the comic a bit. Proper punctuation and capitalisation is the key to a good reader response.

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    Quote Originally Posted by Bayar View Post
    Ok, I didn't want to post in this thread at first, but this just made me crack. Get a spellchecker. Seriously. It will improve the comic a bit. Proper punctuation and capitalisation is the key to a good reader response.

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    Quote Originally Posted by Keveak View Post
    There's only one "e" in Swedish.

    My spell checker say so
    You are correct. Also, seriously put these through a spellchecker AND improve the drawing. The lines are too thick, and you've copied and pasted almost everything.
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    Quote Originally Posted by Keveak View Post
    There's only one "e" in Swedish.

    My spell checker say so
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    Well my spell checker says so
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    Oh now i get it, all the inexplicable tipping over is meant to be inexplicable.

    scientists say the average human understands or best memorizes a pattern once it repeats the third time.

    But this does confuse me, why did nobody fall over in the other two comics?
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    Oh now i get it, all the inexplicable tipping over is meant to be inexplicable.

    scientists say the average human understands or best memorizes a pattern once it repeats the third time.

    But this does confuse me, why did nobody fall over in the other two comics?
    They did, you just couldnīt see it, the first gets set on fire, the second hit by lightning, the important thing is not that they fall over, but that they all got a blackout.
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    Next one is up, i spell checked this one.
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    Quote Originally Posted by Zexion View Post
    Bang.
    Actually, I was reffering to the word "say" needing an s at the end so it would be gramatically correct in Keveak's post. Won't go modify the comic since I didn't save the .svg file.
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    To make a link, highlight the words you want to link and then click the Insert Link button.
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