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    I'll do a more complete writeup on the fluff when I come up with it. This is for a new campaign setting I'm planning out where planar incursions (The result of a great planar cataclysm) are allowing horrible things to leak onto the material plane, in this case negative energy. The important parts are there, I'm just concerned about balance issues. I think with all the drawbacks its ok, if a little dangerous to have around at low levels.

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    In places where negative energy is prevalent, it sometimes corrupts infants in the womb, twisting and warping their very souls into an undead creature. This creature would break free and wreak havoc, were it not for the fleshy prison that keeps it in check. Such infants are born with deathly pale features, white hair, and empty eyes. These are the Paleborn, and they are forever at war with their own souls.


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    -2 Con. A Palebornís soul is eager for release, and works against the Palebornís good health.

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    +2 racial bonus on Hide, Jump, Move Silently, and Tumble checks. Paleborn seem to almost float when moving acrobatically. They are also unnaturally quiet and good at remaining unseen.

    Undead Soul (Su): A paleborn's soul is undead, which has a number of effects. First, it always detects as evil and undead in addition to its actual alignment and type when subject to divination spells and effects, such as detect evil and detect undead. If the Paleborn is in the area of a turn or rebuke attempt and would be effected if it were an undead creature of its HD, it is instead Dazed for one round. Lastly, while within the area of a Desecrate spell or effect, the Paleborn's spirit is bolstered and impassioned, granting the paleborn a +1 profane bonus on attack rolls, damage rolls, and saving throws. Likewise when it is within the area of a Consecrate spell, its spirit becomes restless and agitated, imposing a -1 penalty to attack rolls, damage rolls, and saving throws.

    Unnatural Aura (Su): Animals, whether wild or domesticated, can sense the unnatural presence of a Paleborn at a distance of 10 feet. They will not willingly approach nearer than that and are shaken if forced to do so; they remain shaken as long as they are within that range. A Paleborn takes a -4 penalty to all handle animal and ride checks involving animals as a result.

    Incorporeal touch (Su): A Paleborn can briefly manifest its spiritís ghostly nature in its hand to disrupt the life force of a living creature. Paleborn have an incorporeal touch attack that deals 1d4 points of damage to a living creature hit by it. As an incorporeal attack, this attack has no strength modifier to damage, and attack rolls with it use the Palebornís Dexterity modifier instead of its Strength.

    Sense life (Su): Paleborn are supernaturally aware of the condition of living creatures around them. They instantly know whether any creature they can see within thirty feet is dead, fragile (alive and wounded, with 3 or fewer hit points left), fighting off death (alive with 4 or more hit points), undead, or neither alive nor dead (such as a construct). This ability sees through any spell or ability that allows creatures to feign death.

    Spirit Release (Su): Once per day as a swift action, a Paleborn can lower the vital boundaries keeping its spirit in check, allowing it to become incorporeal. It gains all the benefits and drawbacks of the incorporeal subtype and flies at a speed equal to its base land speed with perfect maneuverability. A Paleborn can remain incorporeal until the beginning of its next turn without penalty, but it can also, however, choose to remain incorporeal for additional rounds. Doing so causes the paleborn to become Fatigued if it remains incorporeal for two rounds and exhausted after the third round. After remaining incorporeal for four rounds, the paleborn dies, as it loses grasp of its own life force. These effects take affect immediately when the Paleborn becomes corporeal again. When the Paleborn returns to solid form, attempting to go incorporeal again with this ability within 24 hours automatically results in the paleborn's death as mentioned above.

    Death Release: Upon dying the Paleborn's undead soul breaks free 1d4 days later and becomes a free-willed Wraith under the control of the DM. This entity has a mind of its own, and immediately attacks the nearest living creatures to the best of its ability. Once its wraith has escaped, no resurrection magic outside of a True Resurrection or Wish spell can revive a dead Paleborn, unless its wraith is subdued and present at the time of casting.

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    Wow, good little roguish utility abilities. I don't think I've seen a time bomb like this before. Wouldn't want to play one at low levels, That's for sure. Wouldn't want my death/failed will save to be a TPK.
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    Heh, yeah I didnt have rogues in mind when I started making the race, it just worked out that way. As for the TPK, 3rd level or so should prevent that. The wraith does attack the nearest living things though, meaning if you're lucky, it will attack your enemies first and buy the party a couple of rounds of blasting.

    The idea was they'd be Ok for one round per day, but in the event that more was needed, they could put their lives on the line to accomplish what they were attempting to do.

    I was thinking about giving them +1 to saves vs. Sleep, stunning, paralysis, poison, and disease to reflect their semi-undead nature. Maybe +2. Too much? Thoughts?
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    This is actually a really cool idea, and a pretty good execution. I like the little details, like the way animals won't go near them. Unfortunately, you should never have something like the spirit release ability on a PC race. It's just not good for the game. It sounds cool in theory, but actually having a PC die because he botched his own saving throw really sucks in the middle of a game. There are ways to do incorporeality reasonably for a PC race, but putting in a drawback of BUT YOU MIGHT DIE isn't a good one. It's always tempting to try to balance out huge positives for any homebrew with huge negatives, but the huge negatives affect the game a lot more.

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    Quote Originally Posted by Kellus View Post
    This is actually a really cool idea, and a pretty good execution. I like the little details, like the way animals won't go near them. Unfortunately, you should never have something like the spirit release ability on a PC race. It's just not good for the game. It sounds cool in theory, but actually having a PC die because he botched his own saving throw really sucks in the middle of a game. There are ways to do incorporeality reasonably for a PC race, but putting in a drawback of BUT YOU MIGHT DIE isn't a good one. It's always tempting to try to balance out huge positives for any homebrew with huge negatives, but the huge negatives affect the game a lot more.
    I was originally going to make it a flat one round per day, but I wanted to give them the option to last longer, but at grave risk. That they have the power, but using it too much might kill them is kind of cool. It could work either way, though. Either way you get one safe round of incorporeality a day. Which version you choose between the two depends on how much you trust your players not to stupidly abuse their powers.

    I'm sure there's a better idea that I'm not thinking of though. How about after the second round, they're fatigued (until they rest) when they rematerialize and after the third they're exhausted. After the fourth, they die and we have problems.
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    Unlike the other guys, I really don't like the execution here... though the concept is fine.

    The basic mechanic is "weird and situationally OP ability, then another, and then rocket launcher tag with yourself".

    Give them Lifesense to 30' or whatever, and make that unnatural aura not have any effect on animals. I mean, panicked is a big thing. It means that Paleborns will basically auto-win encounters against animals, and immunity [animals] is a solid advantage. Druids would be pissed. Anyways, make that Extraordinary (so it applies all the time, even in antimagic fields) and make it so animals just don't like Paleborns. No detrimental effects.

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    Incorporeality is crazy at level 1. It gives you the ability to totally ignore your opponent, and then pop out and stab them in the face for SA damage or something. It's "balanced" by the potential of your player killing himself and the DM taking the character over... but that's not a nice balance. You shouldn't have to balance things that way.

    Paleborns should have, for ChaMod (or whatever relevant statmod... maybe ConMod, since it takes a penalty) + 3 rounds in a day, they get a 5% miss chance per every HD they have (so it's about as good as blur at level 4, and you can't use it as much). But it takes a swift or maybe a move action to activate...

    Alternately, you could say that if a Paleborn spends 1 round (not just a full-round action) doing nothing but focusing, they get that 5%/HD ability for 1 round, which can be improved with feats.

    In either situation, the miss chance applies to their attacks as well (also spells), which should be negatable with a feat.

    Also, drop that "wraith craziness!" nonsense. It's annoying to lose a character because of a racial ability... or any of your own abilities, for that matter.


    You might even be able to drop the con penalty this way... assuming your balance point is the human.

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    I really like this idea. Just a couple of questions:

    If the Paleborn have undead souls, are the effects of positive and negative energy reversed like common undead, or does its living body affected as normal?

    How does it react to turning/rebuking?

    If the wraith is killed, is the soul destroyed, or does it go to one of the outer planes? If it does go to one of the outer planes, is it sent to a specific one because of its condition?

    On a semi-related note, will you be making races like this for all the planes? If so, consider me very interested.
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    Quote Originally Posted by Aran Banks View Post
    Unlike the other guys, I really don't like the execution here... though the concept is fine.

    The basic mechanic is "weird and situationally OP ability, then another, and then rocket launcher tag with yourself".

    Give them Lifesense to 30' or whatever, and make that unnatural aura not have any effect on animals. I mean, panicked is a big thing. It means that Paleborns will basically auto-win encounters against animals, and immunity [animals] is a solid advantage. Druids would be pissed. Anyways, make that Extraordinary (so it applies all the time, even in antimagic fields) and make it so animals just don't like Paleborns. No detrimental effects.

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    Incorporeality is crazy at level 1. It gives you the ability to totally ignore your opponent, and then pop out and stab them in the face for SA damage or something. It's "balanced" by the potential of your player killing himself and the DM taking the character over... but that's not a nice balance. You shouldn't have to balance things that way.

    Paleborns should have, for ChaMod (or whatever relevant statmod... maybe ConMod, since it takes a penalty) + 3 rounds in a day, they get a 5% miss chance per every HD they have (so it's about as good as blur at level 4, and you can't use it as much). But it takes a swift or maybe a move action to activate...

    Alternately, you could say that if a Paleborn spends 1 round (not just a full-round action) doing nothing but focusing, they get that 5%/HD ability for 1 round, which can be improved with feats.

    In either situation, the miss chance applies to their attacks as well (also spells), which should be negatable with a feat.

    Also, drop that "wraith craziness!" nonsense. It's annoying to lose a character because of a racial ability... or any of your own abilities, for that matter.


    You might even be able to drop the con penalty this way... assuming your balance point is the human.
    I think lifesense 30 would be way more OP than the animals thing. It's basically blindsense with living creatures. What if it was reduced to shaken, or the range reduced to like 15? I have another race that takes a -4 penalty to ride and handle animal checks because they are similarly unnatural, I suppose I could use that here. The limited incorporeality stays though. For one round a day, its not OP, just useful.

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    I really like this idea. Just a couple of questions:

    If the Paleborn have undead souls, are the effects of positive and negative energy reversed like common undead, or does its living body affected as normal?

    They're healed by positive energy, since their body is living.

    How does it react to turning/rebuking?

    It doesnt, for now... This is an interesting point, I'll have to think on this.

    If the wraith is killed, is the soul destroyed, or does it go to one of the outer planes? If it does go to one of the outer planes, is it sent to a specific one because of its condition?

    It's destroyed, I think. What would happen to an ordinary wraith?

    On a semi-related note, will you be making races like this for all the planes? If so, consider me very interested.
    Glad you like it I might be making a few more. Daelkyr halfbloods will be similar representatives of the realm of madness. I'm still in the planning stages on this stuff though.
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    Auto panicking all animals is broken and should be nerfed.

    The "Turn incorporeal, will save or die" ability should probably be reworked; it's just not ever worth using because a 5% chance of killing yourself is nuts. I'd just make it "incorporeal for one round/4 HD, minimum 1."

    If their ability to sense life can see even invis, it needs to be nerfed as well.

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    How about you can be incorpreal for HD number of rounds, and for every round you over-do it, you take a small amount of damage? Oh, and Unnatural Aura has to go. Panicking things all the time will get annoying, not at least because your party will be annoyed the little bags of XP keep running away.
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    How about you can be incorpreal for HD number of rounds, and for every round you over-do it, you take a small amount of damage? Oh, and Unnatural Aura has to go. Panicking things all the time will get annoying, not at least because your party will be annoyed the little bags of XP keep running away.
    Not the least of which because you still get XP for them (you don't have to kill something only defeat it).
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    Not the least of which because you still get XP for them (you don't have to kill something only defeat it).
    I wouldn't consider that defeating the animal in any way, and if it did count as defeating it, then this is broken the other way around (go into a... pack? den? of dire bears at level 1, profit.)
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    I wouldn't consider that defeating the animal in any way, and if it did count as defeating it, then this is broken the other way around (go into a... pack? den? of dire bears at level 1, profit.)
    It's broken in that it hurts your allies (Animal Companions) and that it is a no save Save or Lose against a whole category of monsters (animals).
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    I like where your going with it, I actually have a game world of my own that this would work well for. The concept that "my soul and I have different alignments" seems wierd to me, because by definition of the word, if my soul is evil, than I am evil, because I am my soul. But if you redefine the term to fit your campaign, more power to you.

    I think the Spirit Release should probably be tied to Constitution Damage rather than a single roll of "Boom, your Dead." Especially knowing that if you fail, your party suffers.

    Unnatural aura is thematically a good concept, but does need to be nerfed. Perhaps giving the animals a low DC to resist the effect, or restrict the range to only 5 or 10 feet. This prevents the Druid's wolf companion from having a fit.
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    Possibly make it Shaken (a debuff) instead of panicked (they have to run away).
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    I have a single suggestion for spirit release, one that may reduce the risks of death at level 1 while making for some interesting situations.

    Instead of having the wraith manifest immediately upon death, why not have it materialize 1d4 days later (time spent wriggling from the cage of flesh) much like some forms of create spawn. In this way, you don't automatically start slaying people around you when you die and your party still has a window of at least 1 day to get you revived and prevent the wraith from emerging altogether. Even better, imagine that a party has been carrying your corpse towards town for a couple of days. Are they going to risk carrying you for a third day or will they dump your body to avoid the risk?
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    Ok, so everyone is saying basically the same things. Instant death = bad, and panicked = hella bad. I can fix those.

    I think there's a point that a few people are missing though, I must have worded it poorly. You can be incorporeal for one round, but at the beginning of your next turn you can either become corporeal at no risk, or try to stay incorporeal for another round, which then promts the will save.

    I know how I'm going to fix the panic field, but I'm not sure about the incorporeality yet. I have 2 ideas though.

    1. After the second round, they're fatigued (until they rest) when they become corporeal and after the third they're exhausted. After the fourth, they die and we have problems. Still discourages them from overextending themselves, but is much more lenient about it and has a set time limit.

    2. The Paleborn takes 1 point of Con damage per round after the first. (Maybe even Con drain.) This method fits more thematically, as the wraith attempts to break free at the body's expense. It means that 2 rounds per day arent too bad because next time you rest, you heal the ability damage. If its drain, it means that overextending themselves is a life-altering choice until theyre high enough level to have access to healing magic strong enough to heal ability drain.

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    As for putting the delay between time of death and emergence of wraith, Its a cool idea. One I hadnt thought of because my players never bother with resurrection most of the time, preferring instead to just make a new character. I like it for the safety net it creates, but I dont like it at the same time because the wraith doesnt get to break free like its always wanted to and fly screaming at the party. It makes them frightening to even the most jaded players. Hmm... cool fluff, or party safety... I'll think about it.
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    Thing is, if my group was starting a campaign at level 1 and somebody said "Hey, I'm going to play a Paleborn!" I'd say "Like hell you are!" No WAY am I playing in a group where Joey Joybuzzer is playing a character with a Con penalty and an built-in Russian Roulette option who TPKs the party when he dies. When he gets himself killed doing something stupid because it was "what my character would do" and the wraith eats my face, I will NOT be pleased.

    I'd hazard a guess that, even if one of your players is cool with abruptly dying because of his own foolishness, most players in the group will NOT be pleased to have a ticking time bomb traveling in the party.

    However, I'll concede that a time delay would make it more reasonable, as it gives the party time enough to get the hell out of Dodge before the wraith appears.
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    Quote Originally Posted by jiriku View Post
    Thing is, if my group was starting a campaign at level 1 and somebody said "Hey, I'm going to play a Paleborn!" I'd say "Like hell you are!" No WAY am I playing in a group where Joey Joybuzzer is playing a character with a Con penalty and an built-in Russian Roulette option who TPKs the party when he dies. When he gets himself killed doing something stupid because it was "what my character would do" and the wraith eats my face, I will NOT be pleased.
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    What about having Spirit Release inflict 1 negative level, no save, per round of incorporealness after the first? Lets it be usable in an emergency at low levels, still a heavy penalty, but predictable enough that you won't have the Rogue turning into a wraith and slaughtering the party. It also scales fairly nicely, letting him survive being incorporeal for one more round each level, though if you don't have Restoration it's unpleasant.
    EDIT: On further reflection, I think auto-fatigue as you suggested is best. Con damage isn't too bad, since Lesser Restoration heals 1d4 and 2 rounds of incorporealness is totally worth a 2nd-level spell. And if the character takes a Strongheart Vest or binds Naberius, they can be incorporeal all they want. Con drain or negative levels are too hard to get rid of at low levels, and crippling your character until you can afford Restoration isn't much fun.

    Sense Life kind of shuts down a fair number of plots. You might just let them use Deathwatch at will like paladins can use Detect Evil at will; still very useful, but they can't walk into a room, go "That guy's a vampire!" and instantly attack, and there are ways to interfere with it.

    I'm not sure about the Incorporeal Touch. As it's (Su) it's a standard action. But it's still an incorporeal touch attack for the same damage as a dagger, meaning that until the character gets iterative attacks it's basically Weapon Finesse plus ignoring armor against all enemies, unarmed, for free. For balance comparison, there's Emerald Razor, a maneuver from Tome of Battle that lets you make one melee attack as a touch attack as a standard action; it's a 2nd-level maneuver, so you can't use it before 3rd level, you can't use it every round, and it's still considered pretty good. I like the flavor and Incorporeal Strike's not broken, but I can see trouble coming from it.
    Also, you don't specify whether Incorporeal Touch uses negative energy. This is good. DON'T say that it's negative energy, or all Paleborn will pick up Tomb-Tainted Soul for infinite healing.

    I don't think this race is broken, but I would hesitate to allow it at low levels. All of its abilities could be very powerful at low levels, and its drawbacks can be very irritating to the party (scaring the druid's animals, no resurrection so if he dies no more trapfinding), and are potentially powerful weapons (scaring off animals, hiding his body in a closet to use the wraith as an assassin).

    At high levels it's more reasonable, but as-is I'm not sure it's balanced enough at low levels. The fear effect from Unnatural Aura is flavorful enough that I think it should stay, my suggestion on Spirit Release is above, and it might be prudent to put some kind of limit on Incorporeal Touch - say, costing 1 hp to use so it's not a no-brainer at low levels.

    EDIT: Also, giving +2 to five skills that every single Rogue uses leaves a bit of a bad taste in my mouth. Sure Halflings get +2 to four skills and +4 to Hide, but Jump and Climb aren't nearly as important as senses and stealth. It's not overpowered by any means, but it looks excessive. It'll make people think you intended for this race to be an overpowered choice for rogues, and Incorporeal Touch and Spirit Release will solidify that judgment. You might want to drop one or more of those bonuses, or switch them to Knowledge (religion), Sense Motive, or something else that fits the flavor but doesn't come up as much.

    And finally, I definitely like the flavor of the abilities. A ghost-touched rogue would be a fun character, someone born with an undead soul that is a cool idea, and you could have a lot of fun getting creative with Incorporeal Touch and Spirit Release. Just be careful about the power level.
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    What about having Spirit Release inflict 1 negative level, no save, per round of incorporealness after the first? Lets it be usable in an emergency at low levels, still a heavy penalty, but predictable enough that you won't have the Rogue turning into a wraith and slaughtering the party. It also scales fairly nicely, letting him survive being incorporeal for one more round each level, though if you don't have Restoration it's unpleasant.
    EDIT: On further reflection, I think auto-fatigue as you suggested is best. Con damage isn't too bad, since Lesser Restoration heals 1d4 and 2 rounds of incorporealness is totally worth a 2nd-level spell. And if the character takes a Strongheart Vest or binds Naberius, they can be incorporeal all they want. Con drain or negative levels are too hard to get rid of at low levels, and crippling your character until you can afford Restoration isn't much fun.

    Ok, so one vote for auto fatigue.

    Sense Life kind of shuts down a fair number of plots. You might just let them use Deathwatch at will like paladins can use Detect Evil at will; still very useful, but they can't walk into a room, go "That guy's a vampire!" and instantly attack, and there are ways to interfere with it.

    Sense life is deathwatch, it's functionally almost identical. I might reduce the range on it though. Like 5 or 10 feet. That way its more like "That guy's a vam...::gets slaughtered by vampire::

    I'm not sure about the Incorporeal Touch. As it's (Su) it's a standard action. But it's still an incorporeal touch attack for the same damage as a dagger, meaning that until the character gets iterative attacks it's basically Weapon Finesse plus ignoring armor against all enemies, unarmed, for free.
    For balance comparison, there's Emerald Razor, a maneuver from Tome of Battle that lets you make one melee attack as a touch attack as a standard action; it's a 2nd-level maneuver, so you can't use it before 3rd level, you can't use it every round, and it's still considered pretty good. I like the flavor and Incorporeal Strike's not broken, but I can see trouble coming from it.

    For 1d4 damage, period. No Str. The only way to increase this damage is with things like sneak attack. And it only works against living targets.

    Also, you don't specify whether Incorporeal Touch uses negative energy. This is good. DON'T say that it's negative energy, or all Paleborn will pick up Tomb-Tainted Soul for infinite healing.

    Yes, that was intentional.

    I don't think this race is broken, but I would hesitate to allow it at low levels. All of its abilities could be very powerful at low levels, and its drawbacks can be very irritating to the party (scaring the druid's animals, no resurrection so if he dies no more trapfinding), and are potentially powerful weapons (scaring off animals, hiding his body in a closet to use the wraith as an assassin).

    That's just not right, lol.

    At high levels it's more reasonable, but as-is I'm not sure it's balanced enough at low levels. The fear effect from Unnatural Aura is flavorful enough that I think it should stay, my suggestion on Spirit Release is above, and it might be prudent to put some kind of limit on Incorporeal Touch - say, costing 1 hp to use so it's not a no-brainer at low levels.

    EDIT: Also, giving +2 to five skills that every single Rogue uses leaves a bit of a bad taste in my mouth. Sure Halflings get +2 to four skills and +4 to Hide, but Jump and Climb aren't nearly as important as senses and stealth. It's not overpowered by any means, but it looks excessive. It'll make people think you intended for this race to be an overpowered choice for rogues, and Incorporeal Touch and Spirit Release will solidify that judgment. You might want to drop one or more of those bonuses, or switch them to Knowledge (religion), Sense Motive, or something else that fits the flavor but doesn't come up as much.

    I was thinking that in the back of my mind. It really wasnt intentional to make this race so rogue-friendly, it just worked out that way. I used the bonuses a ghost gets to its skills and threw in move silently because, well, incorporeal things are silent. I can pare out some of the awareness though without much of a loss and make some proper replacements.

    And finally, I definitely like the flavor of the abilities. A ghost-touched rogue would be a fun character, someone born with an undead soul that is a cool idea, and you could have a lot of fun getting creative with Incorporeal Touch and Spirit Release. Just be careful about the power level.
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    Edit: Ok, I reduced the fear effect's range, and changed the skill bonuses. I like these better. Sense life is unchanged for now.
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    For 1d4 damage, period. No Str. The only way to increase this damage is with things like sneak attack. And it only works against living targets.
    No Str bonus isn't a problem for a rogue. Sneak Attack, Craven, Dex from Shadow Blade, Int from Swashbuckler, and various and sundry weapons enhancements are the main ways for rogues to get damage. Plus Sneak Attack usually only works against living targets.

    In any case, I definitely like this, and all the changes you've made are good ones.

    Night-Touched are pretty cool as well; modeling them after shifters to let the character focus on a particular aspect of vampirism is a nice touch. And looking at their racial feats, it occurred to me that Paleborn pretty much cries out for racial feats.
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    Ok, so 24 hours and no further votes, I guess I'll go with the Fatigue>Exhaustion>Death model.
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    I'm envisioning a Paleborn Paladin, entering the Sacred Temple where he, and the Holy Order of Paladins to which he belongs, was raised.
    *beep!* *beep!* *beep!*
    Paladins leap out of "hiding", as their detect evil goes off, cries of "SMITE IT FOR THE GOOD OF PELOR!" ring out, and blades bounce harmlessly off his skin.
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    "Oh, it's you. Welcome back," says whichever paladin. They realize who it is, their "brother". "Guys," he replies, "Once again, DO YOU SEE THAT ONLY A PORTION OF ME DOES THAT?!"

    I'd take the next step, now, and produce some fun substitution levels for this race.
    Also, does a Paleborn necessarily have to be born to a human? An Elf, Dwarf, or even better, an ogre, could be hit by the same effect. Logically, this would work as a template. However, I'm not going to put that stress on you. After all, to make it into a template, you'd have to nerf everything even more.
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    Well, humans were the default idea, but a template might be cool too, of course like you said, you'd have to nerf it a lot or give it a LA. Lets say for now that human souls are the only common souls restless enough to be effected this way.

    But anyways, yeah, feats, substitution levels, PrCs, if you guys have any suggestions, throw them at me and I'll post the ones that stick in the OP. I'll more likely than not include them when I compile and print out the setting for my group too.

    Edit: Incidentally, how does the Phantom template in MM5 get away without a level adjustment?
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    Incorporeality in general just sits bad with me if it's at level 1... there MUST be some way to abuse that.

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    Well, lets think about some published level one adventures:

    The Sunless Citadel: Lets you get into (But not out of) the locked path leading to the failed dragonpriest near the dungeon's beginning. So you'll most likely die facing him or the imp. Lets you bypass entire corridors, but you're isolated and what's on the other side might be worse than the room you left.

    The Burning Plague: Maybe you can use it to get behind the kolbold barricades near the mine's beginning, but then you're surrounded by kobolds. You can fly up to the kolbolds' lair, but then you are staring at not only an entire village of kobolds, but their leader who is a sorcerer IIRC.

    The Forgotten Forge (Eberron): You can get inside the Forge without having to find the secret entrance, but the two iron defenders would then proceed to likely ruin your day.


    So in conclusion, walking through walls leaves you isolated and possibly trapped and maneuvering around your enemies likely makes you a target. Incorporeality is really only broken when you can use it for multiple rounds.
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    I'm thinking Paladin, Druid, and barbarian should have some substitution levels, somewhere, and maybe rouge.

    I'll see if I can make some... paladin?
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    I'm not too familiar with the intricate details of Incarnum, but from what I do know, this concept practically demands that something be done with Necrocarnum.
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    Really, though. Far as I can tell, a Paleborn would show up on a detect evil radar regardless of alignment.
    A good aligned paleborn would show up on both detect good and evil!
    I'd rule it like that, anyways.

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