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    Default Selling Out (Oots style)

    A webcomic about a journey to the bowels of the earth seeking glory and goodness...

    It's just coincidence there's also a lot of treasure...

    All of the characters are based on friends or family.

    As a note I'm not normally much of an artist.

    Any comments will be appreciated!

    Last edited by GeorgeOB; 2011-07-18 at 03:51 AM.
    I am not amused

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    Pixie in the Playground
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    Default Re: Selling Out (Oots style)

    Why is the one guy in the middle so much taller than everyone else?

    Most of the comics just seem to be the characters staying in the same position and talking for six panels. This is a flaw. It can be overcome, but the dialogue needs to improve a bit.

    However, it's always good to see a new fan artist. With a little honing of your skills, you could make something excellent.

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    Default Re: Selling Out (Oots style)

    So, p1... the two morally questionable individuals in the back straight up killed the fighter? Are you going for a "Good guy among idiots/evil people" type of story with the cleric?

    Why is the figher only going "blah blah blah"? You kinda need to start with actually legible text before you can trail off like that. Unless that's gonna be a running joke of sorts.)

    That plus what T.H. Everything said.

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    Default Re: Selling Out (Oots style)

    You need to use exclamation marks, question marks and dots. Most of the time you do, but in some comes for so appearent reason you don't.

    Still, this could become good.
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    Don't say I didn't warn you.
    I won a thread. Am I pathetic to list that in my signture? Yes. Of course I am.

    Awesome avatar is awesome. And made by yldenfrei.

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    Default Re: Selling Out (Oots style)

    Firstly, sorry about gap between posts, a family issue came up so I have been away for quite a while.

    Thanks for the input everyone!
    The fighter's speech is intentional as is the others size.

    New comics will be posted about once a week
    Also I will go back and fix anything I think is wrong...

    Once again I apologize for the delay.
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