Feedback on my web comic please?

[Drenn]

So here's the pitch: An amateur writer gets stuck in her own book and, through a series of events, tries to stop the events she already wrote from happening.

I've written novels before, but this is my first web comic. I'm collaborating with an artist friend of mine to get it done. I would greatly appreciate any and all feedback/thoughts/comments/critiques anyone has to offer. The Prologue and Chapter 1 are both done, and I was hoping to get some insights before we launch into Chapter 2.


Here's the link: http://storyforgeproductions.com/project/page-001/

Like I said, I'm new at comics, so any feedback would be greatly appreciated. Thank you so much! Look forward to hearing your thoughts.

[Zappit]

Oh, yeah. I think I saw you promoting this over at...where was it...Comicfury? It looks very good, and in like the flow of the writing. Moves a tad quick in the prologue, so it's harder to get a sense of the "dreamer". Other than that, I'm liking it.

[Drenn]

Oh, yeah. I think I saw you promoting this over at...where was it...Comicfury? It looks very good, and in like the flow of the writing. Moves a tad quick in the prologue, so it's harder to get a sense of the "dreamer". Other than that, I'm liking it.

Yeah, it's up on Comic Fury and a couple other mirror sites too. People have been super nice on ComicFury. Thanks for the note about it moving a bit quick in the prologue. We kind of felt that chapter 1 moved too slowly, and I guess we over compensated when we went back and wrote the prologue. :P

[Drenn]

Here's our first attempt on chapter 2. Trying to adjust the pacing problem by using less text and giving more space for character reactions. Thanks again for the feedback!

http://storyforgeproductions.com/project/page-28/

[Neoriceisgood]

Art doesn't immediately turn me off from reading, that's a pretty good sign.

[Drenn]

Art doesn't immediately turn me off from reading, that's a pretty good sign.

Glad you like it!