Whitefeather - OotS fancomic updated regularly

[Lissou]

In strip 5-part 2, I read Elan's answer to "who are you" before I read "who are you". It's not a huge problem, but I thought I'd let you know.

[Joracy]

I"m getting the feeling that Cal is somewhat....violent...hehe that was very funny though! Also I really like the way the bad guy looks, its just plain awesome!

[Nathan]

The "Get out of the way" line in comic 6 made me laugh.

[mockingbyrd7]

Woah, the plot thickens. Cal is her SON? I figured it was her little brother! So... who's the father?

P.S. Nice strip, and I loved Elan's guest appearance. The characters aren't fleshed out yet, but neither were OotS's characters within six strips!

[KillerCardinal]

Hehe, I just found this comic. Love your work, keep it up! I'm looking forward to seeing more about cal and what exactly is going on!

[WuanAnselm]

I've just found out this comic, I like it a lot^^ keep up th good work man I'll be sure to keep an eye on this one in the future

[Nocte]

They last strip was great!

[Felixaar]

Nice work. You art is good and the strip is entertaining and funny. Keep it up

[Jimorian]

LOL, I just noticed the bunny faces on the curtain rod.

For a while I edited a fantasy fiction webzine, so I had to wade through hundreds of stories to pick a few for each issue. I always had more than enough "good" ones to choose from after the initial cull, but then came the hard part of picking just the best to publish.

What often made the difference was the sparkle that the right extra details added to the story. A lot of people could get the basic mechanics of the prose and storytelling down enough so that there may not have been anything wrong with it, but again, there was nothing special to make somebody keep reading either.

While overall, the presentation isn't as "smooth" as the original OotS (and it certainly took time and practice for Rich to get to his current level), little things like the bunnies sprinkled throughout your pages shows that you're thinking beyond just the main story, jokes, and art. That these extra details support the foreground material is a huge bonus, and a very good sign that you WILL get better with time and practice. That you're starting out at such a high level of enjoyable goodness already is also nice.

So... uh... keep it up, won't you?

[banjo1985]

Wow thanks everyone for the influx of positive comments!

Jimor - You have no idea how good your comments make me feel, I've always been rather insecure about my work and tend to lose interest far too quickly, but comments like that and the others I'm starting to receive are giving me the impetus to stick with this! I repeat, thanks to all of you!

The 7th strip is done and below. I wanted to try and show some of the main characteristics of the characters in this strip, and I hope it does at least a little bit.

Strip 7 - Intelligence Was His Dump Stat!

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Again all comments are welcome

Hope you enjoy

Banjo

[RocketBard]

In the second panel, I think the guy was supposed to say "It use to be" instead of "Used." I'm sorry, I can't help pointing at what I think may be grammatical mistakes.

[Zephra]

very nice! like it a lot.

[Ichneumon]

Great, as ever. I like it, your art is improving a lot, but still quite blurry, you should do something about it, why don't you try Imageshack, I think it is much better.

I am beginning to get more and more intreged by the story. I must know more about it.

[Dronin]

Very nice

Just found it and am going to subscribe.

I don't see the blurriness that everyone keeps saying.
but in the last panel of strip 7 two comments are made off panel. Im not sure who was supposed to say each.

But in general I love the chars and art over 7 strips you have improved.

[chorpler]

Unfortunately, your comic is terrible. Sorry to be so harsh, but I have to be truthful.

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Just kidding! ;) Did I scare you there for a second? What an awesome strip. I'm anxiously awaiting the next installment. Frankly, I think your artwork is incredible. In fact, it barely looks like a stick figure comic at all. All you'd have to do is change the arms/hands to have some width and it would just be a regular comic. You're already doing it with the fists; I bet it wouldn't be hard to do it permanently. But then it wouldn't be an OOTS fancomic, so I guess you better keep it the way it is.

Also, Jenna's looking pretty hot!

[banjo1985]

Hehe yeah, I noticed the grammar mess-up shortly after I posted, but I've only just corrected it this morning... and Ichneumon, I'm going to try one on imageshack when my account activates, see whether there's any difference, because it does seem to be a problem for most people! And Chorpler, you're a mean-meany head for teasing me like that, but thanks for the good comment afterwards!

Again thanks for all the positive comments, and for pointing out mistakes that I have somehow managed to miss!

Here is Strip 8, the first person to identify the monster in the last panel wins a cookie!

Strip 8 - A Good Familiar's Hard to Find

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As always any comments or tips are welcome, I hope to post the next comic by Wednesday.

EDIT - A big triple chocolate cookie is winging it's way to Ichneumon right now!

Cheers all

Banjo

[Ichneumon]

It is a land shark, also known as Bulette.

Funny comic, I see real character development.

[chorpler]

Wow, this one was the funniest yet. Made me laugh out loud!

[theterran]

Just found this comic!

Keep up the great work!

[Miraqariftsky]

Um hallo, just have to ask: why was Cal's bear named after the fallen Morningstar?

Yep, and that... oh, right. A bulette...

Bullette?

Ga-ha-ah-haaaahhahhaaahhahaha!

[Olorin93]

In the second panel, I think the guy was supposed to say "It use to be" instead of "Used." I'm sorry, I can't help pointing at what I think may be grammatical mistakes.

No, "used to" is correct. In speech, the 'd' and 't' run together so apparently many people don't know the 'd' is there.

Reference: http://www.bartleby.com/64/C001/065.html

Great comic - I look forward to where the story is going and learning more about the characters.

[Nocte]

I was wondering if maybe you can make little link bars. Like this one

[Ink]

Heehee. Going to the zoo to choose a familiar? For some reason that tickles me.

Your artwork is really improving.

[Omicroncubed]

After our computer broke, I had to come check these comics thru this laptop and stuff... It's so slow, it almost won't load them.

These are great

[banjo1985]

I was wondering if maybe you can make little link bars. Like this one

I think I could do that, if anyone is interested in advertising my silly little stickman comic to the great unwashed? I might try and make some a bit later...

And Nexus - I must admit I don't know what you're talking about! It was just important to give Cal's bear a devilish sounding name...

The next comic may take me a little while, I've got to try and work out how to draw horses...it's proving difficult!

[Omicroncubed]

I may be interested in advertising!

[Ichneumon]

me too. <minimum length>

[theterran]

If you make a link bar, I'll have it in my sig.

[Nocte]

If you make a link bar, I'll have it in my sig.

Me too.

[banjo1985]

Hey all, sorry for the delay in Strip 9, but I've finally finished it, and it's a double length strip to boot!

I've followed Ichneumons advice and tried hosting this one on Imageshck, so any comments on whether it looks better or worse than the previous ones would be helpful!

As for banners, I'll see whether I can work on some later today, I also want to start the tenth strip and edit the first thread post to make it a clearer start.

Anyhow here is strip 9:

Strip 9 - Horsing Around

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Note - I'm aware that my horses look like mutant cows but it really was the best I could do! Apologies.

As always any comments are welcome, hope you enjoy and that the extra time I put in has been well spent!

Cheers

Banjo