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    DruidGuy

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    Quote Originally Posted by Tawmis View Post
    I accept any and every challenge presented to me! The idea of a character being "boring" is a character without a backstory!
    So it may "seem" boring to you - but once you dive into what makes a character be the way they are - you give them some soul!
    So I enjoyed writing this!
    I'd love to hear your thoughts!
    I wasn't aware of what campaign you were playing (if it was Forgotten Realms or Homebrew)...
    I assumed Homebrew... since there's no mention of Forgotten Realms...
    So I made up a name of the town (can be changed to fit the world) and described it (also can be changed to fit the worl)
    Let me know!
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    I have lived my entire life wanting to being free.

    By the age of eight, I had run away from my home nearly once a week, but my parents, with their money, hired bounty hunters to track me down and bring me back home.

    Was my life at home horrible? Was I beaten? Abused? None of that, really. However, my family was rich and they had expected me to behave in a certain manor; prim, proper, sit up straight, be in before it gets dark outside. Otherwise, I was given whatever I asked for and had free reign around the house, could even command my servants to fetch me things I wanted.

    It was just the rules my parents put on me and the behavior they expected out of me. This is what I could not stand. I felt like one of their servants – demanded to act a specific way.

    I was sixteen, when one day a rather eccentric dressing man met my father for one of his standard business deals. The man smelt of wine and wore long, hard boots, a hat with a large feather through it, and a red sash that nearly touched the ground. He had a swagger when he walked through the room that drew your eyes to him and the women in the house – including my sister who was only thirteen years old – all heaved a heavy sigh as he walked by.

    Whatever business my father and he discussed behind closed doors lasted only an hour before he came sauntering out of my father’s office. He saw my mother then looked down at my sister, then back to my mother. “Are the two of ye – what – six maybe seven years apart?”

    My mother flushed red, her cheeks a deep crimson. Even she seemed smitten by this individual. I followed him outside and shouted, “Excuse me, may I have a moment of your time?”

    The man stopped, spun on one boot and looked at me with a coy smile. “Say what you will, young Zallend.”

    “Who are you?” I asked for beginners.

    “Me?” he placed his hands as if shocked. “Oh, I’m just someone named Captain Darick Eagletalon.”

    “You dress like no other I’ve seen before,” I explained.

    “That’s because I usually make your father come to the docks to do business, so he can see the goods I am bringing him,” Darick explained. “But this time, it would seem his schedule was too busy, so I,” he looked around, “ventured inland. Truth be told, I don’t like being landlocked. The sea,” he stretched out his hand and moved it across the horizon, “there’s nothing out there to obscure your view. No trees, no buildings, nothing – just the open sea as far as your own eyes can see.” He looked at me curiously, “It’s the only place to ever feel free,” he added, as if speaking directly to my soul.

    “Would I be able to come with you?” I asked.

    “What would your father say?” he smiled.

    “To Hades with my father,” I snapped back. “I am sixteen. Well and old enough to do what I want.”

    He looked at the house then back at me. “You have it easy here, boy. The sea – she’s beautiful – but she’s relentless, brutal. It’s not always beautiful and it’s not always kind. A storm can come along, dark as night, fill your eyes with blindness and pull you to the bottom of the sea.”

    “I am willing to risk it,” I said, firmly.

    “Then come along boy,” he gestured towards the wagon that had carried him here. “Do you plan to tell your family?”

    “No,” I said matter-of-factly. “Let them wonder and worry.”

    I sailed with Darick Eagletalon for four years aboard “The World’s Edge” until one day he docked and said he had business with my father. My father was waiting at the pier and when he saw me, he began to weep. “I thought we had lost you! Like we lost your sister.”

    “My sister? What’s happened to Allana?” I asked, breaking free of my father’s hug.

    “She took a wagon to Tarren’tor, where she was to be wed,” my father cried. “She is documented as arriving – but never made it to the castle. Her wagon was found with bloodstains in it, but otherwise completely empty.”

    I looked at Darick and he looked back at me. “Tarren’tor is dead center of a large continent. I can sail you to the nearest dock, but the rest is all on you. You seemed to not care about family when we originally left.”

    I looked at my father and sighed. “I’ve changed. I didn’t like being told what to do, back then. But my sister is another matter entirely.” I turned to my father, “I will find her, father. I promise.”

    It took six weeks to sail to Port of Nayr; a large port for a massive continent. I booked passage on a wagon, using money I had earned while sailing with Darick, and for three weeks, rode until I reached Tarren’tor. It was a massive city, like nothing I’d ever seen; full of decadent people, all who seemed to be consumed with the sense of pleasure; whether that was through flesh or inducing or smoking to enhance the sensation. As I walked through the city, I knew, deadlocked as I was, I would be alone unless I could find others to help me locate my missing sister…
    First of all thanks for what you do, it is appreciated.
    The world is indeed homebrew but as with most homebrew settings it can be slightly changed to accomodate anything. One of the most notable traits of this one is that there is a single huge continent and a couple of islands around it that together don't add to even 1/10th of the total land abovesea.

    The background is great. It has plothooks and it can be adjusted to explain pretty much any class level or connection the PC has by adding an NPC to the crew.

    And again thanks for the time you spend to write these stories. Have a nice day and good luck with your work I might even ask for another OC backstory from time to time.


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    I tryed to write one a backstory of my own while I was waiting yours.

    I was born first son of a rich merchant in the portual city of Balset. Our house was always full of life, parties and guests coming even from beyond the city to discuss of new contracts or just to enjoy a good conversation.

    Life was good alternating the months of study with the occasional journey with my father all across the seas to visit foreign lands to buy, sell, trade, deliver or maybe all four but most important of all seeing the different colors and coltures of the foreign lands.

    But life as the sea can turn in a blink from calm to tempest. In a single night the four ships that went to the Thrassir empire sunked during a tempest. It would have beed the biggest shipment in the whole history of Balset and my father invested almost everything he had in it. Our luck run out that night. Father had a couple of creditors that were waiting to collect after the ships returned.

    Everithing was gone after the debt was repayed. The house and the land sold, the ships sunked, the friends had no interest in us. It was time to begin a new life for the worst or the better.

    Balset offeres few job opportunities so we did what we could. My father worked as a docker while my mother and my sister couldn't find anything.
    I bagan to sail with the merchant ships, though it was far less enjoiable than the past experience, during the warm season and doing low level adventurer quests during the cold one, usually killing vermins in the sewers as no one else wanted to do them.

    The years passed and I managed to earn enough to open a small shop in the suburbs where the rest of the family could work safely.

    As for me I kept workin as usual.
    Until the day I earned enough to get a good armor, weapons and to pay the caravan to the near kingdom of Nossis. So I left behind the city where I was just the rat slayer to make a name for myself and return once I will be able to buy my own ship and explore the world.

    How good/bad is my attempt?

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    So, I haven't been here in a while but I really loved what you wrote Tawmis and was wondering if it was bad to ask for a second? I haven't checked if anyone else has but it's been 15 pages so I hope I can ask for another. I've really fallen in love with this npc I made to the point of deciding to remake them as a pc and am going to play them at some point. I'm uncertain how much info you want but I actually have more this time. (P.S. you put Krusk as a half-orc in the op but he's a full orc)

    Name: Zunda Rocktooth
    Gender: Female
    Race: Deep Gnome
    Class: Eldritch Knight Fighter
    Background: Mercenary Veteran
    My Dm Bullet notes on personality: Very friendly, married to the job. Loves a good fight, and a stiff Drink. Willing to help teach newbies and generally be helpful to good people.

    If you'd like I can also give her mercenary npc friends she works with in the game.(I don't know if it's too much but I'll throw it out there anyway and you can choose to ignore it if you want.)

    Mercenary Company
    Akra Draacis-Female Black Dragonborn-Hexblade Warlock(Uses a long bow made of a red crystal)-Quiet, a book nerd. Likes a good joke.
    Nalos Naragath-Female Triton-Shadow Monk(Has a Javelin of Lightning)-Very proud, enjoys exploring the surface.
    Duchess-Female Giant Hyena pet of Akra

    All female I know, I actually didn't write them with genders in mind so I flipped a coin for each and got the same result 4 times. Sorry if this is too much but as I said, I really liked these npcs and was wondering if you could give me something for Zunda. She's definitely my favorite and the rest are just in case you want to include them in your story.
    Last edited by Daghoulish; 2019-10-19 at 08:40 PM.

  3. - Top - End - #543
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    @All the stuff about Goatzart

    OMG, PLEASE, PLEASE, PLEASE

    If and when it's found out and he dies, have the goat be eaten by a T-Rex.

    Jurassic Park "Where's the Goat?" *Bloody Goat leg splatters on the windshield*
    I Am A: Neutral Good Half-Orc Fighter/Barbarian (2nd/1st Level)

    Ability Scores:
    Strength-16
    Dexterity-16
    Constitution-17
    Intelligence-17
    Wisdom-16
    Charisma-13

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    Quote Originally Posted by Tawmis View Post
    This one became a lot easier to write once I looked up some of the Forgotten Realms gods that the Lizard People have worshiped...
    Once I had that, the rest simply fell into place.
    Since you mentioned "he" is generless - I wasn't sure how you wanted to work that, since said god, basically wants his followers to propagate once a month... and if they're sterile to do a ritual suicide. So you could simply change the god and a few lines, or go with a specific gender (and become even more ruthless... since he could, reasonably, take female lizardfolk, against their will to breed his bloodline on)...
    Up to you with how you want to go from here - but hopefully I've given you SOMETHING to work with that works with you!
    I'd love to hear your thoughts!
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    Long have my people sought to make peace with the humans who continue to encroach upon our lands. Human settlements continue to spring up and expand deeper and deeper into the lands like a sickening disease.

    These stone walls push deeper and deeper into our lands as the human population continues to grow. The deeper the walls push, the more humans there are. The deeper the walls push, the less land there is for the wildlife, the more humans devour.

    They are a festering disease.

    I do not hate them because they are humans as a race; I hate them because of how wasteful they are. Not only do these ever expanding walls push on deeper and deeper, devouring the land which animals we hunt graze upon; more often than not, the streets to these cities and towns are overly large, allowing for large wagons to pass on both sides, with ample room.

    Humans, other than knowing how to expand and breed, know nothing of keeping matters simple. Many of the humans I’ve observed become belligerent on some form of liquid that they drink in excess; many of them not even skilled enough to survive, choosing to trade with other races, such as dwarves for their armor and elves for their bows and arrows.

    I have never shared the view of my people, who I believe are weaker for being more and more like the humans. Rather than hunt their own food, my people have continued to allow themselves to be hired as escorts through the High Moor in exchange for food and weapons.

    I do realize that some of my people will intentionally steer a good sized party towards a goblin cave for shelter or a troll’s nest, to help get rid of the larger problems with the High Moor.

    But civilizations encroaching on our swamps, such as Dragonspear Castle attracted unwanted attention from marauders after the castle fell. Trade Way and the Way Inn, attract adventurers who think there’s things to be found in the Misty Forest or High Moors. Julkoun, Secomber and Zelbross continue to expand in size as people travel to and from Daggerford and Waterdeep.

    When I was young, I was taught about Semuanya who focused entirely on matters of survivaland nothing else. Considered utterly amoral, uncaring, and unfeeling, his Shamanistic followers had called on their kin to avoid contact with other races and to limit it to contact within their own kind. As our people grew further and further away from Semuanya’s teachings, the louder and louder I got, until I was cast out of my own tribe.

    I did what I had to survive after that. I lived on the fringes of the swamp, praying on both animals and humanoids – whether human, goblin, gnome or kobold – to feast upon and put food in my stomach. I did not waste their bones, using them as traps or weapons and pieced together armor from the victims I devoured. I did not view this as an act of evil; I viewed this as an act of survival. Is an alligator evil when it devours a child that has roamed too close to the edge?

    My people have become weak – but the power and message of Semuanya still courses through my veins. Survive. Propagate. Survive. Propagate.

    My name is Ssirath and I will restore the glory of Semuanya and show my people the error of their ways.
    I like it. Definitely a couple things in here I'll want to flesh out a bit, but overall very impressive. Thank you! I do find it interesting that you make it sound almost like he hates the ways of the lizardfolk, which I originally didn't intend but really does kinda make sense. It also takes a bit of a darker edge on the character, which I really enjoy; I've been playing the character as kind of a comic relief who is all into resource management. Because butchering corpses and keeping fingers for later is funny!

    (If you're wondering what I'm going to flesh out, I'm going to flesh out how he got Cleric status (was he taught by elders to become a cleric? Did he just have a chosen one moment?) and how he came into contact with the "civilized" races.)

    This was a really great start though and I really do enjoy your stuff!
    78% of DM's started their first campaign in a tavern. If you're one of the 22% that didn't, copy and paste this into your signature.

    Where did you start yours?

    In a mountain after a cave-in.

    MY STATS OFF THE ELITE ARRAY:
    Str: 14 Dex: 8 Con: 12 Int: 15 Wis: 10 Cha: 11

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    I wish I had you for a DM...
    Please critique my 5e Beguiler Wizard subclass!

    https://forums.giantitp.com/showthre...izard-Subclass

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    Quote Originally Posted by Mongobear View Post
    The world follows the books version of the Norse Pantheon, but they're not culturally Norse. Elves are just elves, Giants and trolls aren't god-threatening entities, there's no World Serpent, etc.

    (SNIP)

    Hope this is enough? I can answer more if needed.
    Indeed. Only one small problem - can I play in this game you're doing?

    Quote Originally Posted by WadeWay33 View Post
    This is perfect! Exactly what I was looking for! Thanks!
    Awesome! Always so glad to know when I do these - it's at least close to the mark of what the requestor wanted!

    Quote Originally Posted by Mythalidor View Post
    Thanks for getting to this so quickly, I'll give it to my player that way they'll have a backstory. Glad to hear that you had a little fun with this. I really enjoyed reading it, I especially enjoyed the ending, when you revealled the whole thing was Bar'garius's plan, that gives me plenty of ideas to incorporate Goatzart into the future of the campaign, make him an actual driving force. As for Ellanar, is she a character that you had written before, or just a throw-away name?
    "Throw Away" - if you will - but also, intended fuel for you as a DM, if you wanted to do something with her.

    Quote Originally Posted by Trandir View Post
    First of all thanks for what you do, it is appreciated.
    The world is indeed homebrew but as with most homebrew settings it can be slightly changed to accomodate anything. One of the most notable traits of this one is that there is a single huge continent and a couple of islands around it that together don't add to even 1/10th of the total land abovesea.
    The background is great. It has plothooks and it can be adjusted to explain pretty much any class level or connection the PC has by adding an NPC to the crew.
    And again thanks for the time you spend to write these stories. Have a nice day and good luck with your work I might even ask for another OC backstory from time to time.
    The pleasure was all mine! Thank you for coming in here and allowing me to step in your character's world!

    And by all means, feel free to swing by anytime and request more character backgrounds!

    Quote Originally Posted by Trandir View Post
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    I tryed to write one a backstory of my own while I was waiting yours.

    I was born first son of a rich merchant in the portual city of Balset. Our house was always full of life, parties and guests coming even from beyond the city to discuss of new contracts or just to enjoy a good conversation.

    Life was good alternating the months of study with the occasional journey with my father all across the seas to visit foreign lands to buy, sell, trade, deliver or maybe all four but most important of all seeing the different colors and coltures of the foreign lands.

    But life as the sea can turn in a blink from calm to tempest. In a single night the four ships that went to the Thrassir empire sunked during a tempest. It would have beed the biggest shipment in the whole history of Balset and my father invested almost everything he had in it. Our luck run out that night. Father had a couple of creditors that were waiting to collect after the ships returned.

    Everithing was gone after the debt was repayed. The house and the land sold, the ships sunked, the friends had no interest in us. It was time to begin a new life for the worst or the better.

    Balset offeres few job opportunities so we did what we could. My father worked as a docker while my mother and my sister couldn't find anything.
    I bagan to sail with the merchant ships, though it was far less enjoiable than the past experience, during the warm season and doing low level adventurer quests during the cold one, usually killing vermins in the sewers as no one else wanted to do them.

    The years passed and I managed to earn enough to open a small shop in the suburbs where the rest of the family could work safely.

    As for me I kept workin as usual.
    Until the day I earned enough to get a good armor, weapons and to pay the caravan to the near kingdom of Nossis. So I left behind the city where I was just the rat slayer to make a name for myself and return once I will be able to buy my own ship and explore the world.

    How good/bad is my attempt?
    I like it! Especially the first few opening lines - help give a feel for the area. I do think it's great that both of us had mentioned how life out on the sea can change in a heartbeat, from freedom to death.

    Quote Originally Posted by Daghoulish View Post
    So, I haven't been here in a while but I really loved what you wrote Tawmis and was wondering if it was bad to ask for a second? I haven't checked if anyone else has but it's been 15 pages so I hope I can ask for another. I've really fallen in love with this npc I made to the point of deciding to remake them as a pc and am going to play them at some point. I'm uncertain how much info you want but I actually have more this time. (P.S. you put Krusk as a half-orc in the op but he's a full orc)

    Name: Zunda Rocktooth
    Gender: Female
    Race: Deep Gnome
    Class: Eldritch Knight Fighter
    Background: Mercenary Veteran
    My Dm Bullet notes on personality: Very friendly, married to the job. Loves a good fight, and a stiff Drink. Willing to help teach newbies and generally be helpful to good people.

    If you'd like I can also give her mercenary npc friends she works with in the game.(I don't know if it's too much but I'll throw it out there anyway and you can choose to ignore it if you want.)

    Mercenary Company
    Akra Draacis-Female Black Dragonborn-Hexblade Warlock(Uses a long bow made of a red crystal)-Quiet, a book nerd. Likes a good joke.
    Nalos Naragath-Female Triton-Shadow Monk(Has a Javelin of Lightning)-Very proud, enjoys exploring the surface.
    Duchess-Female Giant Hyena pet of Akra

    All female I know, I actually didn't write them with genders in mind so I flipped a coin for each and got the same result 4 times. Sorry if this is too much but as I said, I really liked these npcs and was wondering if you could give me something for Zunda. She's definitely my favorite and the rest are just in case you want to include them in your story.
    Consider this added to the list!

    Quote Originally Posted by Mongobear View Post
    @All the stuff about Goatzart
    OMG, PLEASE, PLEASE, PLEASE
    If and when it's found out and he dies, have the goat be eaten by a T-Rex.
    Jurassic Park "Where's the Goat?" *Bloody Goat leg splatters on the windshield*
    Since there's no windshield, just have it land on the fighter's shield.
    Party looks up and sees a giant T-Rex.

    Quote Originally Posted by GreyBlack View Post
    I like it. Definitely a couple things in here I'll want to flesh out a bit, but overall very impressive. Thank you! I do find it interesting that you make it sound almost like he hates the ways of the lizardfolk, which I originally didn't intend but really does kinda make sense. It also takes a bit of a darker edge on the character, which I really enjoy; I've been playing the character as kind of a comic relief who is all into resource management. Because butchering corpses and keeping fingers for later is funny!

    (If you're wondering what I'm going to flesh out, I'm going to flesh out how he got Cleric status (was he taught by elders to become a cleric? Did he just have a chosen one moment?) and how he came into contact with the "civilized" races.)

    This was a really great start though and I really do enjoy your stuff!
    I thought him being an outcast among his people - I wanted to dig into why. So I thought, maybe they've become complacent with the idea that the human settlements are everywhere; and might as well profit by being escorts in trade for food, which in turn (in your character's eyes) makes them even weaker, because now they're losing their basic need to hunt, and in the future, would be, if needed, easier to be killed off by the encroaching humans!

    I am glad it was enough of a stepping stone for you to be able to take off and explore with!
    Need a character origin written? Enjoyed what I wrote? How can you help me? Not required, but appreciated! <3

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    Quote Originally Posted by Tawmis View Post
    Indeed. Only one small problem - can I play in this game you're doing?
    Sure!

    Assuming you can make it to Pennsylvania once a month?
    I Am A: Neutral Good Half-Orc Fighter/Barbarian (2nd/1st Level)

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    Dexterity-16
    Constitution-17
    Intelligence-17
    Wisdom-16
    Charisma-13

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    Quote Originally Posted by Mongobear View Post
    Been awhile since I asked for one early on, but glad you're still going strong.
    I have a bit of an odd request, but it's sorta similar to what you're doing here--Can you write a quick background for a large town's unique feature?
    I went google s earching and found a map for a large Town named Thornwall, it's got a huge wall covered in thorns completely encircling it (big shocker!).
    The wall is factually of Elven design, and is maintained by a Druid Circle actually living within the town (it's approximately 2 miles in diameter, and 15ft thick/tall, and appears to be one solid piece of stone, like they carved a collosal Boulder down to a circle, and there's a section of farmlands, a forest, and a Lake within, plus the actual Town.
    I know the city was originally made for some other setting, but I can't find what, or where. I'm trying to make up a bit of history to explain it's existence, as the PCs will inevitably ask, as they're not from the town.
    The world follows the books version of the Norse Pantheon, but they're not culturally Norse. Elves are just elves, Giants and trolls aren't god-threatening entities, there's no World Serpent, etc.
    The region with Thornwall is similar to GoT's Winterfell, secluded wild region with harsh winter's and sparsely occupied with small vilages several days apart, Thornwall is the central hub of the region.
    The lake within the ring is fed by two small streams from the mountains a few days south, which form a barrier between Thornwall's region and the rest of the kingdom it is apart of. They are treacherous at times, and infested by Orcs and Goblins, but there is a well built trade highway through them, but armed escorts are still required.
    The lake also drains out into a pretty massive river that flows north into an Arctic sea port on the border of an unsettled tundra region (think the area North of the Wall in GoT, just without zombies and a 500ft tall wall), the port would be Hardhome, but larger.
    Historically, the world is quite old, the wall and city are recorded to have existed for several millennia, the original are what's unclear, think Illefarn or Netherese type empires from Faerun. However, this is the only "massive ring" of stone in the known world.
    Magic is less *the Weave" and more just a raw primal energy in the world. There is no Mystra, magic is something that just is. There are Leylines, which cover the world, and intersections of them are able to boost magical powers or cause Wild Magic surges. Most Wizards will build their sanctums on top of or very close to intersections of these Leylines.
    Planar cosmology is the standard inner/outer/prime material planes, except that it is possible to crossover to them without magical means if you can find a path. Fire Elemental plane is at the heart of a MASSIVE volcano, Earth is the bottom-most level of the Underdark, Air is above the clouds, and Water is at the bottom of the Ocean.
    Hope this is enough? I can answer more if needed.
    Side note – I think I found the original source of Thornwall – appears to have been for Pathfinder.
    https://www.reddit.com/r/rpg/comment..._of_thornwall/
    Obviously you will probably have to change the name of the gods I used, since you mentioned they were Norse based, so I used them for the foundation of some lore, which may or may not fit in your world. But hopefully you can adjust accordingly, if needed, and find some use of it. (May even just be able to skip the party about the gods, and just go to the main part) – but it’s me. When I create lore, I like to dig deep.

    As always, I'd love feedback - especially since this is more of a lore/legends thing rather than a character background.

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    The legend states that when the world was first found, it was bleak and dark.

    Odin called upon Frey to create a sun to grant light to the world. Frey reached into the heavens and collided two stars in his mighty hands and held them together as they exploded into a fury of fire and flame, and so the sun was born.

    Next Odin called upon Aegir to place life in the vast oceans, lakes and rivers of the world; and so Aegir pricked his celestial hand, and each drop of blood fell into the sea, slowly populating the oceans with life.

    Odin called upon Njord to breathe life into the world; and so with a deep breath, did he exhale upon the world and the winds were born, and the world began to spin around the sun.

    Nature began to take its course, but it lacked something.

    Odin called a council where he requested Freya, Hermond, and Skadi to join him.

    They explained to Odin what was missing was someone to worship them. Odin agreed.

    Calling on his wife, Frigga, goddess of birth and fertility, she entered the council’s chamber and offered her blood in a vail to draw from and bring life into the world.

    And so, Freya, goddess of fertility and love, plucked a feather from her most trusted falcon and draw a circle upon the woods, and brought the most beautiful of all the known races – The Elves – into the world.

    Skadi took the vial and dripped Frigga’s blood upon his hammer and brought it hard and heavy upon the mountains, and from the sparks, Dwarves were born.

    Hermond took a strand of his own hair, dipped it in the vail, and laid it upon the hills, from which the hairy footed, and unusually lucky Halflings emerged.

    Odin poured some of the blood into his hand and held it tightly so that it dried, and released the flakes upon the world and explained that Man, though short lived, will be able to live anywhere – whether it be forest, hills, mountains, frozen tundra, or plains, and so Humans came into the world.

    Unbeknownst to them – they were not alone in Odin’s chamber – for Loki, god of Mischief, had also observed it all, and brought with him a god, whose name has been stricken from the legends – a disfigured god named Khorus.

    Khorus had long despised Freya for her beauty and grace, though all her life she’d been kind and gentle with him. Khorus broke out of the spell that had kept him hidden and grabbed the vail of Frigga’s blood and shouted, “I shall have people in this world! People like me!”

    Freya instinctively launched an arrow to try and knock the vial from Khorus’ hands; only he raised his hand to defend himself, and instead the arrow struck his eye. And so, in his blind rage and fury, did his blood seep into the vial and unable to see, he collided into the table that viewed the world, spilling the mixture all over the world.

    The gods gasped in horror as Khorus backed up and began to laugh manically. “Orcs! Orcs will rise all over the world! They will know my hatred! It burns in my blood and so too, shall in burn in theirs!”

    And so did Odin banish Khorus from the Realm.

    But the gods had stared at the map and the damage had already been done.

    Many, many millennia and generations later… On the world down below…

    Barius Strumjord, a Ranger who followed Ullr, the god of the Hunt, had been drawn to out of the woods, where he could hear a beautiful song. He followed the song until he felt the presence of the sound all around him; but there was nothing that he could see causing the music.

    Barius called upon the Druids of the Wind to help him to determine the root. The Druids quickly heard the song and felt the presence of peace all around them. The Druids built a Druid’s Circle, just to the Southwest of the center of the focus, so that they could quickly teleport to and from, and gather information.

    As the Druids continued to study it, a small village began to spring forth, as they spent more and more time here. Other Humans, Elves, Dwarves, and Halflings were brought it to begin establishing the town of Freesong.

    The people of Freesong erected a statue in the center, just above the source of the song, believing that it’d been Freya’s voice, singing with love for the people of the world, of Freya herself. The statue had become a place for those seeking to have children, or hoping to find love, would come and pray to, often leaving tokens for Freya’s favor.

    It was a Human wizard by the name Kara Aasveig who discovered the source; there’d be a Leyline – a “fault line” of magic bubbling just beneath the surface. The origins of Leylines vary – some say that when the gods touched the world, they brought with them, their celestial magic that entered the atmosphere and some of it bled into the world itself, especially after Skadi had struck it with his hammer.

    When the Orcs learned of the erected statue of Freya, they began to launch their relentless attacks on the town. Barius Strumjord led the defense against the orcs, who had gone on to recruit goblins to help in their war against the light.

    Barius Strumjord knew that it would take more than what they had to defend the growing city. The Orcs were ruthless, brutal, and driven by sheer ferocity, often still charging forward when they were dead. Barius Strumjord called for the Druids around the world to come and help defend this Holy City. Hundreds perished in the battle, but it was Kara Aasveig who helped turn the battle. She channeled the magic from the Leylind – and used it to empower the Druids who formed a circle around the city, sacrificing their bodies to become one with the world beneath their feet, creating a massive barrier composed of poisonous thorns.

    Freesong, in honor to the Druids who gave their life to defend this holy city, was renamed to Thornwall, and grew to become a major hub on the world.
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    Quote Originally Posted by Daghoulish View Post
    So, I haven't been here in a while but I really loved what you wrote Tawmis and was wondering if it was bad to ask for a second? I haven't checked if anyone else has but it's been 15 pages so I hope I can ask for another. I've really fallen in love with this npc I made to the point of deciding to remake them as a pc and am going to play them at some point. I'm uncertain how much info you want but I actually have more this time. (P.S. you put Krusk as a half-orc in the op but he's a full orc)

    Name: Zunda Rocktooth
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    Class: Eldritch Knight Fighter
    Background: Mercenary Veteran
    My Dm Bullet notes on personality: Very friendly, married to the job. Loves a good fight, and a stiff Drink. Willing to help teach newbies and generally be helpful to good people.

    If you'd like I can also give her mercenary npc friends she works with in the game.(I don't know if it's too much but I'll throw it out there anyway and you can choose to ignore it if you want.)

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    Akra Draacis-Female Black Dragonborn-Hexblade Warlock(Uses a long bow made of a red crystal)-Quiet, a book nerd. Likes a good joke.
    Nalos Naragath-Female Triton-Shadow Monk(Has a Javelin of Lightning)-Very proud, enjoys exploring the surface.
    Duchess-Female Giant Hyena pet of Akra

    All female I know, I actually didn't write them with genders in mind so I flipped a coin for each and got the same result 4 times. Sorry if this is too much but as I said, I really liked these npcs and was wondering if you could give me something for Zunda. She's definitely my favorite and the rest are just in case you want to include them in your story.
    Consider it added to the list. :)
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    Quote Originally Posted by Tawmis View Post
    Side note – I think I found the original source of Thornwall – appears to have been for Pathfinder.
    https://www.reddit.com/r/rpg/comment..._of_thornwall/
    Huh, interesting. I googled and got nothing back except the map.

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    *the rest*
    Wooo! That's great, don't even think I'll change anything. Much thanks!
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    Quote Originally Posted by Mongobear View Post
    Huh, interesting. I googled and got nothing back except the map.
    I assumed that was the same map (and based the writing off what I saw there - so for example the druid's circle is just to the south west of the city's center)

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    Wooo! That's great, don't even think I'll change anything. Much thanks!
    Excellent! I wasn't sure if you actually used the Norse Gods, or something similar to Norse type mythology.
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    Quote Originally Posted by Tawmis View Post
    I assumed that was the same map (and based the writing off what I saw there - so for example the druid's circle is just to the south west of the city's center)

    Excellent! I wasn't sure if you actually used the Norse Gods, or something similar to Norse type mythology.
    Yeah, I'm using the gods as named in the PHB, just not the mythology behind them. I'll still keep a few common things Mjolnir, but I'm not putting the entire Ragnarok/Valhalla/World Serpent stuff.
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    Hey Tawmis,

    I have a character for an upcoming campaign, and I'm stuck on backstory. His stats are as follows:

    Variant Human Fighter 1 (going Battlemaster)

    STR: 11 (+/-0)
    DEX: 19 (+4)
    CON: 17 (+3)
    INT: 13 (+1)
    WIS: 13 (+1)
    CHA: 7 (-2)

    For feats I took Ritual Caster (Druid) because I want him to have a druidic vibe. I'd like to take Magic Initiate (Druid) as well. He has a longbow, rapier and shield (dueling fighting style), and his Dex focus means he can hit from anywhere. The focus of the campaign will be in a civilization ruled by magi (of all stripes except warlocks, not just arcane casters), and the characters will be vigilantes judging these casters for their various crimes.
    Thanks!

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    Quote Originally Posted by Sparky McDibben View Post
    Hey Tawmis,

    I have a character for an upcoming campaign, and I'm stuck on backstory. His stats are as follows:

    Variant Human Fighter 1 (going Battlemaster)

    STR: 11 (+/-0)
    DEX: 19 (+4)
    CON: 17 (+3)
    INT: 13 (+1)
    WIS: 13 (+1)
    CHA: 7 (-2)

    For feats I took Ritual Caster (Druid) because I want him to have a druidic vibe. I'd like to take Magic Initiate (Druid) as well. He has a longbow, rapier and shield (dueling fighting style), and his Dex focus means he can hit from anywhere. The focus of the campaign will be in a civilization ruled by magi (of all stripes except warlocks, not just arcane casters), and the characters will be vigilantes judging these casters for their various crimes.
    Thanks!
    Consider it added to the list - and will see if I can knock something out tonight.

    Headed to a hospital soon to visit a friend. But because of their situation, can't have visitors for long. So I should be home tonight, and will probably want to write to think of something else.
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    Thanks Tawmis; best wishes to your friend from the Playground.

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    Quote Originally Posted by Tawmis View Post
    Heh - this one has an Easter Egg if you've ever played the Sierra game King's Quest III: To Heir Is Human it will be immediately recognizable once seen.
    If you've never played it, then it's fine just the way it is. Just a little extra pumpkin spice to the story for folks who may be as old as I am and played old DOS games!
    That said, I had fun developing this story and this mentality...
    As someone who loves camping, campfires, and fire in general... I was able to tap into myself a little...
    Then turn it up to 11. (Spinal Tap, anyone?)
    As always, would love to hear feedback!
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    I admit I might have a problem.

    You see, when I first decided to become to be a Wizard it’d been because during a visit to Baulder’s Gate, there’d been a massive explosion at Felogyr's Fireworks – and I witness several wizards shaping and controlling the fires to bring it under control. Something about the sheer natural force of fire was enchanting; as the flames danced and burned, I was enthralled as if the fires had been speaking some kind of secret sign language message to me.

    I was only six years old at the time. Growing up in Waterdeep, I had access to the Great Library and began studying what it took to be a Wizard. Apparently it took a lot of study because manipulating the magical spectrum not only took a great amount of patience, but recalling the words of the spell, and studying them all night to have them memorized was a daunting task. One simple misspoken word or the word amount of salt being thrown could lead to catastrophic results.

    By the age of twelve, I had convinced my parents to allow me to enroll in The Order of the Evocation. I studied under the widely known, but often cruel, Manannan. He took his Wizardry very seriously and would scorn us if we tried to take any of the spell components home to learn magic on our own. He explained that without his guidance we could turn our families into sentient green slime or bring the roof down around our ears.

    Our first few sessions, after weeks of readying, studying and testing, was learning how to manipulate cantrips. There were some I enjoyed; such as Acid Splash, Fire Bolt and Shocking Grasp – but the others in my class seemed obsessed with things like Message, Mending, and Prestidigitation. When Manannan saw that my interests bled more towards things of violence he began to take a larger interest in me; I wasn’t sure if that was so I don’t burn myself to death or because he thought I could be trouble in the near future.

    Three months in, Manannan approached me after one of the classes had ended and said, “I see your interest wanes when it is spells that don’t deal with fire specifically. I had thought learning Ray of Frost would interest you, since it was more of a damaging spell, which I’ve noticed you enjoy.”

    “Ray of Frost is fine,” I said with a smile, “but it lacks the punch of fire. Chilling someone’s bones rather than setting their flesh on fire seems so mild.”

    “You would rather set someone’s flesh on fire?” Manannan raised a grey brow.

    “Not necessarily,” I admitted, “I just feel like fire does so much more. It’s destruction when it burns through a home, but its rebirth when it burns down a forest.”

    “Rain and water, and so by nature, ice,” Manannan contradicted, “are things of destruction and life as well. All of the four elements – whether they be stones falling from the sky, storm winds of great power, fires that rip through a city, or a watery flood – the four forces of nature are all symbols of life and death, depending on their use.”

    “True,” I acknowledged, “but there’s something different about staring into an open flame… it’s like each fleck of fire is a soul, dancing in the planes of Hell… and the shadows the fire cause to constantly shift and move around you… the crackling of the wood, the explosion of small flecks of ash ascending to heaven, only to be snuffed out before their journey has ever begun… There’s something about the fire that talks to me.”

    Manannan smiled and opened the palm of his hand where a small sphere of fire began to spin. “Good, I just wanted to make sure we were on the same page. Now, let me show you the true power of fire…”

    For weeks I would meet Manannan after the class and he would continue to show me the power of fires; and how, one could even summon a fire elemental to do their bidding…

    There was so much to learn.

    There was so much to burn.
    WOW! you're incredible! (I've never played the game) this is incredible and so special-feeling! it's perfect, and I hope you enjoyed writing. Thanks!

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    Quote Originally Posted by Goldlizard View Post
    WOW! you're incredible! (I've never played the game) this is incredible and so special-feeling! it's perfect, and I hope you enjoyed writing. Thanks!
    Thank you! It was a pleasure to write! Each time I write these - for brief moments, I walk in another person's shoes - and step outside of myself to tell their story.

    As for the Sierra/King's Quest III reference - the Wizard, Manannan, in the game is an evil wizard.
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    The only two I have left pending (if my memory serves me right is)...

    Quote Originally Posted by Daghoulish View Post
    So, I haven't been here in a while but I really loved what you wrote Tawmis and was wondering if it was bad to ask for a second? I haven't checked if anyone else has but it's been 15 pages so I hope I can ask for another. I've really fallen in love with this npc I made to the point of deciding to remake them as a pc and am going to play them at some point. I'm uncertain how much info you want but I actually have more this time. (P.S. you put Krusk as a half-orc in the op but he's a full orc)

    Name: Zunda Rocktooth
    Gender: Female
    Race: Deep Gnome
    Class: Eldritch Knight Fighter
    Background: Mercenary Veteran
    My Dm Bullet notes on personality: Very friendly, married to the job. Loves a good fight, and a stiff Drink. Willing to help teach newbies and generally be helpful to good people.

    If you'd like I can also give her mercenary npc friends she works with in the game.(I don't know if it's too much but I'll throw it out there anyway and you can choose to ignore it if you want.)

    Mercenary Company
    Akra Draacis-Female Black Dragonborn-Hexblade Warlock(Uses a long bow made of a red crystal)-Quiet, a book nerd. Likes a good joke.
    Nalos Naragath-Female Triton-Shadow Monk(Has a Javelin of Lightning)-Very proud, enjoys exploring the surface.
    Duchess-Female Giant Hyena pet of Akra

    All female I know, I actually didn't write them with genders in mind so I flipped a coin for each and got the same result 4 times. Sorry if this is too much but as I said, I really liked these npcs and was wondering if you could give me something for Zunda. She's definitely my favorite and the rest are just in case you want to include them in your story.
    And then....

    Quote Originally Posted by Sparky McDibben View Post
    Hey Tawmis,
    I have a character for an upcoming campaign, and I'm stuck on backstory. His stats are as follows:
    Variant Human Fighter 1 (going Battlemaster)

    STR: 11 (+/-0)
    DEX: 19 (+4)
    CON: 17 (+3)
    INT: 13 (+1)
    WIS: 13 (+1)
    CHA: 7 (-2)

    For feats I took Ritual Caster (Druid) because I want him to have a druidic vibe. I'd like to take Magic Initiate (Druid) as well. He has a longbow, rapier and shield (dueling fighting style), and his Dex focus means he can hit from anywhere. The focus of the campaign will be in a civilization ruled by magi (of all stripes except warlocks, not just arcane casters), and the characters will be vigilantes judging these casters for their various crimes.
    Thanks!
    I ran out of time on the weekend, and today at work was pretty much non stop busy (we got some new hires to train and such!)...

    So I will try to get to these as soon as I can. :)
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    Just curious, was the Diety you used for me, Khorus, a being of your own invention or does he actually exist somewhere?

    Im currently building his domain and a religious structure around him, and I don't want to use a pre-existing entity if he's vastly different.

    (Currently have his truest followers being like the old 3.5e Ravagers, which worshipped a similar god to how I'm writing up Khorus, who would rather bleed a victim slowly and inflict as much pain as they could instead of just kill them fast.)
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    Quote Originally Posted by Mongobear View Post
    Just curious, was the Diety you used for me, Khorus, a being of your own invention or does he actually exist somewhere?
    Im currently building his domain and a religious structure around him, and I don't want to use a pre-existing entity if he's vastly different.
    (Currently have his truest followers being like the old 3.5e Ravagers, which worshipped a similar god to how I'm writing up Khorus, who would rather bleed a victim slowly and inflict as much pain as they could instead of just kill them fast.)
    Well, when I wrote him he was based off the common "Orc God" - Gruumsh.

    But where as Gruumsh has one eye, I wrote it that Khorus loses an eye to Freya (to spark that hatred commonly seen between Elf and Orc).
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    Quote Originally Posted by Tawmis View Post
    Well, when I wrote him he was based off the common "Orc God" - Gruumsh.

    But where as Gruumsh has one eye, I wrote it that Khorus loses an eye to Freya (to spark that hatred commonly seen between Elf and Orc).
    Ok, so he's just a Gruumsh analogue?

    Also, I'm catching the parallels of him losing an eye, and Odin, which is often represented with one eye, maybe add in that they're brothers, but Khorus was "defective"
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    Quote Originally Posted by Mongobear View Post
    Ok, so he's just a Gruumsh analogue?
    Also, I'm catching the parallels of him losing an eye, and Odin, which is often represented with one eye, maybe add in that they're brothers, but Khorus was "defective"
    That would be a good twist too - that Odin came out all wonderful, great, and powerful - and his brother - perhaps a twin - came out disfigured and powerless, so there's always this hatred between them.
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    Quote Originally Posted by Tawmis View Post
    That would be a good twist too - that Odin came out all wonderful, great, and powerful - and his brother - perhaps a twin - came out disfigured and powerless, so there's always this hatred between them.
    That would go well with Orcs pretty much killing everyone. Odin made all the other races in my very small edit of the events, so Orcs being a natural enemy of all mortal races gets that across well.
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    Quote Originally Posted by Tawmis View Post
    This is one of those things... where it's difficult to write... not because of the story...
    But you want to handle something as sensitive like hermaphroditism and gender identity with a lot of care...
    It's pretty easy to offend someone these days!
    But I think I walked the balance and explained why Shou is the way "he" is...
    As always, I welcome feedback!
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    I come from a noble family but I have never felt like I’ve belong there.

    I had spent most of my youth trying to determine who – or even – what I am.

    When I was born, I was named Shou Akimura, meaning “Soaring Autumn Village.” I was named that because it had been Autumn when I was born, the first child of the village born in Autumn that year; and my parents had been so happy their hearts soared. They’d tried for years to have a child and had never been able to. They believed they had been cursed by the gods for some shame in their bloodline that they were not aware of.

    My mother firmly believed she was cursed after holding me. The Nāsu, or Nurse, told my mother she’d never seen anything like me; and now my mother saw why. When she wondered if I was a boy or girl, she was surprised I was a mixture of both. She knew she would have to keep the secret from her husband and simply told him that she had given him a son, knowing this would make him the most happy.

    I learned to live life as a boy; helping my father with chores around the house and farm, getting my hands dirty and sweating, while my mother would watch from her chair, sewing yet another blanket together made from the wool we had gathered from the sheep.

    When I was old enough to begin going to class, after practicing with swords; since all the boys were trained to become honorable warriors to defend the women, I began to notice I looked different than many of the boys – down… below. Afraid of being different, I would cover myself and often be teased for it, especially as a teenager.

    One day, after hours of being teased, I ran home to my mother to question why I looked different than the other boys. She explained to me that she did not know why – but that I must keep this secret from my father.

    This made it increasingly difficult to live at home, that I was forced to hide something about myself from my own family.

    Things would only get worse for me when my mother eventually gave birth to a young girl, when I was eighteen years old. She had been born normal, and now had become the main focus of my mother’s affection; so as twisted as it might have been, knowing that I had this secret about myself, that I could at least confide in my mother with, now that my sister had been born – and born normal – all of my mother’s time and affection was directed at her.

    I decided to tell my father the truth about me – and he did not react as I expected. I thought he might tell me he still loved me. After all I had grown up as his son for nineteen years; I was still the same person he knew. But my father was horrified and demanded that I leave. I quickly packed several possessions and left home.

    On the road, I had met an interesting man, from a distant land, who introduced himself as Tyrell Stormshadow. He claimed to be a bard – a man of music and storytelling. I traveled with him for weeks and he indeed knew how to play the lute and tell good stories. One day he had asked me, as we sat around a crackling fire, shadows dancing around us as the flames swayed, “You are young and when I met you, clearly not an experienced adventurer. But the wakizash strapped to your side is of exceptional make, so I am guessing you come from a rich family. Why would a young man, from nobility, leave his family behind?”

    I debated tell him a lie, but something inside me told me I would need to be truthful with others going forward, so I told him how I had been born, and how my mother was ashamed and my father cast me out.

    Tyrell Stormshadow smiled and said, “First, let me say I am sorry for all you’ve gone through, Shou. But how your organs look should never be a cause to fear or hate you. Who you are is the person inside. The flesh is only a mask we wear over our souls. Some masks may scare people, it’s true. But the person behind the mask is not necessarily as scary as the mask itself. I’ve stopped looking at the mask people wear and try to see their souls. That’s how you truly know someone. Someone with a scar across their face may look horrifying, but perhaps they got that saving their young daughter from a man or beast that meant her harm. The scar he wears is no different than your own. Remember that when you meet others. Judge them not by how they appear, but how their souls act. That is what truly matters.”

    I traveled with Tyrell Stormshadow for many weeks after; his story weaving and unique skills had gotten us jobs with other adventurers, whether that was driving out goblins from a cave, chasing giant rats out of a sewer, or looking into the disappearance of royal members of a family…

    One day, after finishing a task with several others, Tyrell said he would be leaving and that there was someone else he was to meet. I expected to go with him, but he put his hand on my shoulder and smiled, “No, now it’s time for you to find your path. I’ve taught you all I can teach you about yourself. You are your own man now. You no longer need me to help you see that. Go on, venture forth in the world, confident in who you are; and remember what I said – judge not by how they appear, but how their souls act.”

    I gave him a hug and he walked off, strumming his lute, singing a song about some fallen angel who had escaped captivity and wreaking havoc upon the world. As grim as it sounded, he made the song sound quite pleasant…
    Hello man!
    Sorry for the late reply, I was busy the whole week.
    Plus somehow I lost the original reply I had planned due to a firefox crash, but that's beside the point... (plus it was needlessly long for some reason, so good riddance)

    Great job here. I like how you've kept things ambiguous about the way the character was born since it points out to the most correct answer which is 'just because".
    The mentor bard is a bit cliché but in a good way. Now I can maybe add an instrument proficiency to my character sheet.

    Just as a footnote "Akimura" is the same as "Johnson" but it's my fault for not precising it, plus it's nothing too important.

    Thank you for the hard work.

    10/10 would recommend to friends.

    Cheers!

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    Quote Originally Posted by Aidamis View Post
    Hello man!
    Sorry for the late reply, I was busy the whole week.
    Life happens! Besides some people choose not to reply at all (which is fine, but then I never know if I did good, bad, or whatever with what they envisioned vs what I wrote) :)

    So a late reply is much appreciated, no matter how late.

    Quote Originally Posted by Aidamis View Post
    Great job here. I like how you've kept things ambiguous about the way the character was born since it points out to the most correct answer which is 'just because".
    The mentor bard is a bit cliché but in a good way. Now I can maybe add an instrument proficiency to my character sheet.
    Just as a footnote "Akimura" is the same as "Johnson" but it's my fault for not precising it, plus it's nothing too important.
    Thank you for the hard work.
    10/10 would recommend to friends.
    Cheers!
    So a little inside information - the name "Tyrell" is the name of my father's middle name - so I felt like it was a way of me, showing how he had helped me through life - and how, though he is no longer upon this mortal realm - in this world of fantasy - he appears to help others struggling in life. :)

    And by all means, please recommend this thread to your friends!
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    Quote Originally Posted by Daghoulish View Post
    So, I haven't been here in a while but I really loved what you wrote Tawmis and was wondering if it was bad to ask for a second? I haven't checked if anyone else has but it's been 15 pages so I hope I can ask for another. I've really fallen in love with this npc I made to the point of deciding to remake them as a pc and am going to play them at some point. I'm uncertain how much info you want but I actually have more this time. (P.S. you put Krusk as a half-orc in the op but he's a full orc)

    Name: Zunda Rocktooth
    Gender: Female
    Race: Deep Gnome
    Class: Eldritch Knight Fighter
    Background: Mercenary Veteran
    My Dm Bullet notes on personality: Very friendly, married to the job. Loves a good fight, and a stiff Drink. Willing to help teach newbies and generally be helpful to good people.

    If you'd like I can also give her mercenary npc friends she works with in the game.(I don't know if it's too much but I'll throw it out there anyway and you can choose to ignore it if you want.)

    Mercenary Company
    Akra Draacis-Female Black Dragonborn-Hexblade Warlock(Uses a long bow made of a red crystal)-Quiet, a book nerd. Likes a good joke.
    Nalos Naragath-Female Triton-Shadow Monk(Has a Javelin of Lightning)-Very proud, enjoys exploring the surface.
    Duchess-Female Giant Hyena pet of Akra

    All female I know, I actually didn't write them with genders in mind so I flipped a coin for each and got the same result 4 times. Sorry if this is too much but as I said, I really liked these npcs and was wondering if you could give me something for Zunda. She's definitely my favorite and the rest are just in case you want to include them in your story.
    This was fun to write...
    I could have probably gone into way more detail about the other two...
    But wanted to keep it to a summary rather than a novel...
    But I give enough clues about each to expand upon if you wanted...
    As always, hope you enjoy and I'd love feedback!
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    Survival.

    I have spent most of my life in the Underdark doing everything I can to survive. Whether it’s resisting being pulled into a lake by an Aboleth who had made the lake their home; or avoiding stepping beneath a deceptive Cloaker or Pierce or Roper. Then there are the Dwarves such as the Derro or Duergar, or the Drow Elves, and of course the Illithids and Beholders. If that wasn’t enough, just about every single plant life in the Underdark seems to feed off the nutrients of the dead, making them lethal.

    Because of this, I learned to fight to survive. It was from watching the Drow, with their dark magics, did I begin to learn how to manipulate magic myself. It was dangerous – being as close as I was to the Drow, but as a Deep Gnome, I had the keen ability of standing next to a rock in the shadows and be virtually undetectable. This limited exposure gave me only a fraction of the magical abilities I saw the Drow doing; but it was enough to help me continue to survive in the Underdark.

    I first took up the job as an escort through the Underdark. It wasn’t the safest way, cutting through caverns that dipped into the Underdark, but in some cases it would cut weeks of travel out of their travel time, rather than going around a mountain.

    It was then I’d met Akra Draacis, a female black dragonborn with some magical abilities. She convinced me to work with her together. Now, normally I might question the fact that she was clearly descended from a Black Dragon – who have less than a good reputation – but being a mercenary, that often worked in our favor. So few people crossed her when she got in their face. Her giant hyena named Duchess, snarling at her side, certainly added to the already threatening gesture of a Black Dragonborn, towering over them, demanding payment. If they’d only known her, like I had gotten to know her. On the days it was slow, and we were on the road, between jobs, she would have her nose deep in a book, reading everything from history, to even songs and poems written by a somewhat famous bard named Tyrell Stormshadow, who she had frequently mentioned that she’d like to meet one day.

    On one such day, between jobs, while headed for Daggerford, we saw several goblins attacking a lone figure. When we approached, we took note to the humanoid’s unusual appearance – with skin that looked to be made of the colors of the waters and skies, this figure fought valiantly against the goblins who outnumbered her considerably. Though it did not look like she needed the help, both Akra and I were curious to learn more about her – and what better way to gain someone’s trust than to help them? Both Akra and I jumped into the fight and made quick work of the goblins. The woman, Nalos Naragath was a Triton. She explained that though she had a javelin of special “qualities” she did prefer hand to hand combat. She explained that she’d left her aquatic kingdom in hopes of discovering the surface world. As it turned out, several ships had sunk near her kingdom and some of the things she found that came from the surface world drew her curiosity to see what the world beyond the ocean was like.

    The three of us formed an unbreakable friendship. I was the Blade, Akra was the Arcane, and Nalos was the Fist.

    My name is Zunda Rocktooth and these are my sisters… Sisters of Steel.
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    Name: Delsyn Corvos
    Race: Triton
    Class: Paladin of Conquest (Though he uses a pirate code instead of the book's code)
    Gender: Male

    Rough idea: 1. Captured by slavers
    2. Saved by the captain who was supposed to transport the slaves to sale
    3. Falls in love with said captain and marries her
    4. She is hung for thievery
    5. Attempting to end his life he is saved by a minor god and convinced to become his paladin.
    The Guardian is a minor god. "There's a legend of a man who lives beneath the sea. He is a fisher of men, a last hope for all those who have been left behind."
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    Quote Originally Posted by Sparky McDibben View Post
    Hey Tawmis,
    I have a character for an upcoming campaign, and I'm stuck on backstory. His stats are as follows:

    Variant Human Fighter 1 (going Battlemaster)

    STR: 11 (+/-0)
    DEX: 19 (+4)
    CON: 17 (+3)
    INT: 13 (+1)
    WIS: 13 (+1)
    CHA: 7 (-2)

    For feats I took Ritual Caster (Druid) because I want him to have a druidic vibe. I'd like to take Magic Initiate (Druid) as well. He has a longbow, rapier and shield (dueling fighting style), and his Dex focus means he can hit from anywhere. The focus of the campaign will be in a civilization ruled by magi (of all stripes except warlocks, not just arcane casters), and the characters will be vigilantes judging these casters for their various crimes.
    Thanks!
    Because this sounded like a custom/homebrew setting, I didn't use any Forgotten Realms references...
    As such, created an island to explain your character's ties to being a fighter with some druid skill...
    And went on to create the organization that manages these Magi (your DM can use it, rename it, or discard it)... Could easily be explained, you did this on your own, and it's not required...
    I also explain why, as a fighter, you focused on Dex and Con as stats....
    As always, would love to hear feedback....
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    Breathe in, breathe out. Control your breathing.

    The very plants seemed to tear at my flesh as I ran through the jungle. But this was no ordinary jungle; this was anything but ordinary.

    The Jungles of Skarn’tahl.

    Skarn’tahl is an ancient phrase that means “violent death.”

    Legend states that, long ago the fabric between the Shadowfell and the Prime Material Plane ripped apart as a great weapon from a demon had cut the fabric of reality open. From that tear in the fabric, creatures of unimaginable horror spilled out of the Shadowfell and landed here in the jungles of Skarn’tahl.

    I don’t live on this island where this lethal jungle resides. I didn’t get shipwrecked here.

    I came here willingly.

    All of my life, I’ve trained to become a part of the Vigilant; an organization of vigilantes that judge casters for their various crimes. Being thrown into the Jungles of Skarn’tahl is done for many reasons. First and foremost, the entire jungle is alive with beasts not seen beyond these jungles. Panthers that blur with large tentacles called Displacer Beasts, Hook Horrors, Basilisks, to name a few are all infused with magical properties. As if the beasts of Skarn’tahl did not pose enough of a danger, the floral of these dense jungles were also often enchanted – as beautiful as they are lethal. Hidden in the floral, such creatures as blight, gas spores, shriekers, and shambling mounds were all painful methods of promised death.

    Years of studying plants and with Druids has given me a deep understanding of how to hone my body to understand the natural order around me in preparation for this day.

    In order to survive this jungle, you learn to use the jungle in your favor. I lure the Displacer Beast chasing me right into the explosive arms of a Gas Spore, floating aimlessly that I’d seen before, using my dexterity to leap onto a branch and out of the way of the explosion of the Gas Spore, which violently and painfully infects the Displacer Beast.

    It takes nearly a week to make it from one side of the island to the other. An incredible feat of endurance since most of those nights are spent wide awake, because when there are beasts and fauna both seeking to devour your flesh for nutrients, there is little to no time to sleep.

    I knew this was the test. I knew that, despite years of training to fight and be ready, the test ahead of me would require endurance and agility rather than raw strength to survive. I relied on a longbow I forged in the jungle to hunt for my food, rather than engaging up close. The one weapon I was allowed to bring was my rapier, which I often used to deliver the killing blows in the back of the creature’s neck, after I had struck it with my bow. A shield made of a turtle’s shell had spared me many times from the venomous attacks from snakes and even plants, whose pollen would burn my flesh or make me slumber, had I inhaled them.

    I am glad to be done with the Jungles of Skarn’tahl. I’ve seen what magic – uncontrolled – can look like and I now understand why the Vigilant must endure this test. Not only do we see the horrors of magic gone wrong; but we learn how to survive it.

    As the ship sails into view in the distance, the sun setting behind it, I know I am ready for my life ahead of me…
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    Quote Originally Posted by togapika View Post
    Name: Delsyn Corvos
    Race: Triton
    Class: Paladin of Conquest (Though he uses a pirate code instead of the book's code)
    Gender: Male

    Rough idea: 1. Captured by slavers
    2. Saved by the captain who was supposed to transport the slaves to sale
    3. Falls in love with said captain and marries her
    4. She is hung for thievery
    5. Attempting to end his life he is saved by a minor god and convinced to become his paladin.
    The Guardian is a minor god. "There's a legend of a man who lives beneath the sea. He is a fisher of men, a last hope for all those who have been left behind."
    Consider this added! I don't think I've done a background for a Triton yet in this thread!
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    Quote Originally Posted by Tawmis View Post
    Because this sounded like a custom/homebrew setting, I didn't use any Forgotten Realms references...
    As such, created an island to explain your character's ties to being a fighter with some druid skill...
    And went on to create the organization that manages these Magi (your DM can use it, rename it, or discard it)... Could easily be explained, you did this on your own, and it's not required...
    I also explain why, as a fighter, you focused on Dex and Con as stats....
    As always, would love to hear feedback....
    ===========================================

    Breathe in, breathe out. Control your breathing.

    The very plants seemed to tear at my flesh as I ran through the jungle. But this was no ordinary jungle; this was anything but ordinary.

    The Jungles of Skarn’tahl.

    Skarn’tahl is an ancient phrase that means “violent death.”

    Legend states that, long ago the fabric between the Shadowfell and the Prime Material Plane ripped apart as a great weapon from a demon had cut the fabric of reality open. From that tear in the fabric, creatures of unimaginable horror spilled out of the Shadowfell and landed here in the jungles of Skarn’tahl.

    I don’t live on this island where this lethal jungle resides. I didn’t get shipwrecked here.

    I came here willingly.

    All of my life, I’ve trained to become a part of the Vigilant; an organization of vigilantes that judge casters for their various crimes. Being thrown into the Jungles of Skarn’tahl is done for many reasons. First and foremost, the entire jungle is alive with beasts not seen beyond these jungles. Panthers that blur with large tentacles called Displacer Beasts, Hook Horrors, Basilisks, to name a few are all infused with magical properties. As if the beasts of Skarn’tahl did not pose enough of a danger, the floral of these dense jungles were also often enchanted – as beautiful as they are lethal. Hidden in the floral, such creatures as blight, gas spores, shriekers, and shambling mounds were all painful methods of promised death.

    Years of studying plants and with Druids has given me a deep understanding of how to hone my body to understand the natural order around me in preparation for this day.

    In order to survive this jungle, you learn to use the jungle in your favor. I lure the Displacer Beast chasing me right into the explosive arms of a Gas Spore, floating aimlessly that I’d seen before, using my dexterity to leap onto a branch and out of the way of the explosion of the Gas Spore, which violently and painfully infects the Displacer Beast.

    It takes nearly a week to make it from one side of the island to the other. An incredible feat of endurance since most of those nights are spent wide awake, because when there are beasts and fauna both seeking to devour your flesh for nutrients, there is little to no time to sleep.

    I knew this was the test. I knew that, despite years of training to fight and be ready, the test ahead of me would require endurance and agility rather than raw strength to survive. I relied on a longbow I forged in the jungle to hunt for my food, rather than engaging up close. The one weapon I was allowed to bring was my rapier, which I often used to deliver the killing blows in the back of the creature’s neck, after I had struck it with my bow. A shield made of a turtle’s shell had spared me many times from the venomous attacks from snakes and even plants, whose pollen would burn my flesh or make me slumber, had I inhaled them.

    I am glad to be done with the Jungles of Skarn’tahl. I’ve seen what magic – uncontrolled – can look like and I now understand why the Vigilant must endure this test. Not only do we see the horrors of magic gone wrong; but we learn how to survive it.

    As the ship sails into view in the distance, the sun setting behind it, I know I am ready for my life ahead of me…
    This is good. Reminds me a bit of the CW's Arrow, but good. I'll make a few edits and pass it along to the DM. I appreciate the hard work evident in your descriptions, and the creativity inherent in describing a weird character concept. Nice work.

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    Quote Originally Posted by Tawmis View Post
    This was fun to write...
    I could have probably gone into way more detail about the other two...
    But wanted to keep it to a summary rather than a novel...
    But I give enough clues about each to expand upon if you wanted...
    As always, hope you enjoy and I'd love feedback!
    =========================================

    Survival.

    I have spent most of my life in the Underdark doing everything I can to survive. Whether it’s resisting being pulled into a lake by an Aboleth who had made the lake their home; or avoiding stepping beneath a deceptive Cloaker or Pierce or Roper. Then there are the Dwarves such as the Derro or Duergar, or the Drow Elves, and of course the Illithids and Beholders. If that wasn’t enough, just about every single plant life in the Underdark seems to feed off the nutrients of the dead, making them lethal.

    Because of this, I learned to fight to survive. It was from watching the Drow, with their dark magics, did I begin to learn how to manipulate magic myself. It was dangerous – being as close as I was to the Drow, but as a Deep Gnome, I had the keen ability of standing next to a rock in the shadows and be virtually undetectable. This limited exposure gave me only a fraction of the magical abilities I saw the Drow doing; but it was enough to help me continue to survive in the Underdark.

    I first took up the job as an escort through the Underdark. It wasn’t the safest way, cutting through caverns that dipped into the Underdark, but in some cases it would cut weeks of travel out of their travel time, rather than going around a mountain.

    It was then I’d met Akra Draacis, a female black dragonborn with some magical abilities. She convinced me to work with her together. Now, normally I might question the fact that she was clearly descended from a Black Dragon – who have less than a good reputation – but being a mercenary, that often worked in our favor. So few people crossed her when she got in their face. Her giant hyena named Duchess, snarling at her side, certainly added to the already threatening gesture of a Black Dragonborn, towering over them, demanding payment. If they’d only known her, like I had gotten to know her. On the days it was slow, and we were on the road, between jobs, she would have her nose deep in a book, reading everything from history, to even songs and poems written by a somewhat famous bard named Tyrell Stormshadow, who she had frequently mentioned that she’d like to meet one day.

    On one such day, between jobs, while headed for Daggerford, we saw several goblins attacking a lone figure. When we approached, we took note to the humanoid’s unusual appearance – with skin that looked to be made of the colors of the waters and skies, this figure fought valiantly against the goblins who outnumbered her considerably. Though it did not look like she needed the help, both Akra and I were curious to learn more about her – and what better way to gain someone’s trust than to help them? Both Akra and I jumped into the fight and made quick work of the goblins. The woman, Nalos Naragath was a Triton. She explained that though she had a javelin of special “qualities” she did prefer hand to hand combat. She explained that she’d left her aquatic kingdom in hopes of discovering the surface world. As it turned out, several ships had sunk near her kingdom and some of the things she found that came from the surface world drew her curiosity to see what the world beyond the ocean was like.

    The three of us formed an unbreakable friendship. I was the Blade, Akra was the Arcane, and Nalos was the Fist.

    My name is Zunda Rocktooth and these are my sisters… Sisters of Steel.
    So, first off sorry for the very late reply. My brains been scattered lately and it's taking a while to get all my thoughts in a row.

    First off, I love the idea of getting her magic from watching the other denizens of the underdark. You didn't know this but one of the starting cantrips I choose was dancing lights and its fits so well. A little luck really brought that together and I had a good laugh at the strangeness of your story really fitting without trying. Also the use of their racial hiding ability was fantastic and I really like it being featured. The way out of the underdark was pretty believable too. Genuinely liked every bit of this.

    I like Akra's bit, nothing much to say you nailed the character I made. Although I have to ask, who that bard is? Did you make them up or are they some know entity I haven't heard of? Nalos' section was much the same. Really great and I wish I had more to say but you really hit all the points I would want hit in an origin of their company. My only real thing is that I would change the name of the group, but that's more a personal preference thing. I prefer having group names be more gender neutral but that's just a me thing, maybe I should change it up.

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