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2007-10-28, 12:12 PM (ISO 8601)
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A short poem I just wrote (please critique)
this is a very short poem I just whipped up.
Hope
The power and the raging passion,
Of that gleaming little mark,
The un-embodied strength,
That small living spark,
Shining trough the curtain,
Flashing like a burning dart,
Lighting the certain path,
That shining strength of heart,
That which you cannot capture,
Or cage in bars of dark,
Its song - blissful rapture,
Its power - our hallmark.Last edited by Exeson; 2007-10-28 at 03:02 PM.
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2007-10-28, 12:27 PM (ISO 8601)
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Re: A short poem I just wrote
I like it. Nice rhymes and stuff. Could you criticize my poem? it's on down the page and appears to be so under the radar its above it.
Last edited by Leather_Book_Wizard; 2007-10-28 at 01:47 PM.
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2007-10-28, 12:32 PM (ISO 8601)
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Re: A short poem I just wrote
Hurray for poems!
Stupid English Lit making me look at them in different ways *tries to forget lessons*
I like it
stupid englit ruining my life...
Keep it up
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2007-10-28, 12:35 PM (ISO 8601)
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Re: A short poem I just wrote
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2007-10-28, 01:46 PM (ISO 8601)
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Re: A short poem I just wrote
Nice one! XP
I do the same in math o.O
*runs off to post poem of own*
you inspired me to do it, so there!!