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2008-01-04, 01:24 PM (ISO 8601)
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A comic I made for Homework
A while ago I had to make a childrens book explaining the American Bill of Rights for history homework. I have decided to show it here, because I did it in OotS style.
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2008-01-04, 01:30 PM (ISO 8601)
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Re: A comic I made for Homework
Nice job. Nice job.
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2008-01-04, 01:34 PM (ISO 8601)
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Nice work! Not a bad job at all.
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2008-01-04, 01:35 PM (ISO 8601)
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Well it is for... whered I put that paper? *looks through trash*... I threw the assignment paper away, but it was for 2nd or 3rd graders, and we didn't have to include everything, but I think I did due process wrong.
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2008-01-04, 01:39 PM (ISO 8601)
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Re: A comic I made for Homework
My ideas about American law have certainly been, in some way, vindicated, but other than a few misspellings here and there it looks alright
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2008-01-04, 05:55 PM (ISO 8601)
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Re: A comic I made for Homework
Not a legal fanatic, but you might not want to use "The End" at the end. Teachers view it as a poor way to wrap up something. Also, you might want to not use the word "stuff" as much as you did.
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2008-01-05, 05:25 AM (ISO 8601)
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2008-01-05, 05:53 AM (ISO 8601)
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Re: A comic I made for Homework
Great comic.
About a possible ending, maybe something like this: "This was all people and remember: Pay your taxes on time."
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2008-01-05, 05:57 AM (ISO 8601)
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Re: A comic I made for Homework
I liked 'cruel and unusual punishment' in particular.
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2008-01-06, 07:29 PM (ISO 8601)
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It was funny, informative, OotS-style, and reader-friendly. A third grader could understand it but anyone could enjoy it. I felt that you over used the word "also" (try using "as well" after a sentence, "in addition" before one, "too" after one, etc.) but it was good and enjoyable in every other respect. Good job.
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2008-01-06, 07:57 PM (ISO 8601)
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Re: A comic I made for Homework
Several typos, which will probably have a slightly negative impact on the comic as a homework. I can list them for you if you'd like.
Apart from that, very nice.
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2008-01-06, 08:09 PM (ISO 8601)
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I think I had many of the same two typos, I spelled Amendment with two m's on the first page and I spelled your instead of you're.
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