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[Dispozition]

a) Your art style is amazing. I could never quite grasp pixel art and it's one of the harder styles to pull off well, you do it brilliantly.

b) The story, so far, seems like it could be good. Has decent humour (love the last panel of 10) and hopefully turns out well.

c) Humour, humour, humour, humour. So many comics go without it these days, you have it, and a good sense of it at that! Please, keep it this way :P

Now for some critique, although there isn't much...

Sometimes the eyes in the portrait frames look very odd, not sure if it's intentional or not but you may want to look at how you do them. I think it's probably the colour of the whites, seems to red to me. All the colours seems a little desaturated. The hay for example seems washed out and redder than it should be.
Don't think there's much else, more may come to me while I decide to be an evil bastard.

Anyway, I'll be following this with intent 'I kinda like where this is going'ness. Keep it up!

[Neoriceisgood]

Okay, starting Noah's introductional chapter!


Warning ahead of time, same world, same style, different story

for those who want gag comics the next few pages will probably be less interesting, as Noah's chapter is more about..

Well, like with Burk's chapter I'll just let the comics speak for itself.

[Neoriceisgood]

I make comics faster than I get replies, hoo boy.

Page 12, spread the joy.

[Green-Shirt Q]

For your last two comics:

[Neoriceisgood]

For your last two comics:

I think I mentioned that the 3 stories would be...different.

[Wreckingrocc]

That's just freaky...

Both those characters need to die.

EDIT: It would totally be the best thing ever if Burk jumped down with a robot, a mage, and a guy with misfit clothing and weaponry because the store ran out of regular clothing and weaponry... Despite the fact that this is a different story arc based around a different character.

It would totally kill the mood.

EDIT-EDIT: Nice fog, too.

That happy guy is really, really freaky.

[ThePhantom]

That's just freaky...

Both those characters need to die.

I think one of them is already dead.

[Neoriceisgood]

That's just freaky...

That happy guy is really, really freaky.

Good, that was my intention.


I wanted Joy to have a very very big nightmare fuel caliber, so if one of them comes across as the creepy one in a scene that includes a misformed necrophilic rapist I did it right.

[T-O-E]

Eek! Creepy. :

[Shadowcaller]

This... Is an interesting comic, keep going good sir.

[Neoriceisgood]

This... Is an interesting comic, keep going good sir.

Planning to.


Today's update will just be a bit later, Noah's arc requires a lot of new backgrounds unlike Burk's story, so it's not as easy to just cram out 3 pages a day.

[I guess having a lot of new backgrounds as it goes on may compensate a bit for the fact that it has less humour though ... unless you find necrophillia funny. ]

[Beholder1995]

I concur with the majority of the above statements.

Those guys are freaky... >_>...

[Neoriceisgood]

Page 13!

Sorry for it being text heavy, but some exposure was necessary.

[T-O-E]

This Joy club sounds interesting. Can't wait to find out more.

[Wreckingrocc]

Jeez... They're promoting essential suicide

Over-the-top grammar suggestion: I think the speaker's last line should be "the police have not," instead of "the police has not".

[charl]

Jeez... They're promoting essential suicide

Over-the-top grammar suggestion: I think the speaker's last line should be "the police have not," instead of "the police has not".

Depends on whether you are talking about the police as a group of people (plural) or as an organization (singular).

[Beholder1995]

This is moving along quite nicely.

The doors and windows in the background, though, seem kinda mushy.

[Neoriceisgood]

Jeez... They're promoting essential suicide

Who knows what they're promoting, the joy group's my personal attempt to actively mess up any of the ideas commonly associated with good and evil.

If I manage to do it right, Noah's ar....story will end up pretty darn twisted when it comes to morality and "right & wrong".

Of course I'll try to be careful when claiming that I'll try to add any kind of depth to it, because in the end it mostly depends on what the readers will think of it, but judging by the reactions I've managed to creep all my readers out severely with the following:


A group that promotes "joy and pacifism" and the only known fact so far is that they somehow managed to get 6 very cruel and dangerous serial killers to surrender themselves to the police, possibly facing the harshest crime there is in the Empire this story takes place in. [and the two pages on Sharkface Sam should give an indication on if they deserve it or not.]

If you consider the fact that anyone who would've killed Sharkface Sam on the spot when catching him trying to kill and rape a girl would have undoubtfully been considered a hero, you can try thinking about what specific implications or attributes of the "joy group" seperate them from ..well.

I won't give any spoilers as I don't want to ruin my own comic, but as I said before, I'm far from interested in black & white; and Noah's story is currently the most prominent one where I want to try and make this obvious.

The doors and windows in the background, though, seem kinda mushy.

Yeah, I drew em too small on paper, so they couldn't really be made sharp enough by adjusting levels.

I'll try to change the outlines up with the computer for the next shot so that they look better.

[Neoriceisgood]

Page 14, sorry for talking heads.

[T-O-E]

I don't mean to nit-pick but you used 'would' twice in the last panel.

EDIT: Mistake. See below.

[Neoriceisgood]

..do you mean "would" ? and thanks. Me with my silly mistakes.

[T-O-E]

Sorry, I have a habit of mis-placing words.

[Prime32]

This arc is becoming more and more like Death Note/Code Geass... even the uniforms. Noah dresses like L (his character sprite at least), and Hevel seems similar to Rivel too. This is not a bad thing, though.

I'm scratching my head trying to figure out how Burk's storyline could possibly tie into this.

[BRC]

OOh, so weve got an action story and a mystery! Time Travel is probably involved as well.

[Neoriceisgood]

This arc is becoming more and more like Death Note/Code Geass... even the uniforms. Noah dresses like L (his character sprite at least), and Hevel seems similar to Rivel too. This is not a bad thing, though.

I'll be honest in stating that the inspiration from those stories is definitely there, I'll be honest in saying that the points you gave me actually weren't the parts inspired for most part though!

- Noah dressing like L is actually by accident, I wanted to have his coat on the coathanger because..well, I wanted to; so had to sprite him without the coat on and just figured his shirt'd be white; I hadn't made the association to L at all.

- Uniforms were actually semi-inspired by Code Geass, I wanted to have school uniforms for the first arc and browsed around a bit for something I liked, I'm guessing that the dark+gold colour sceme that I share is the big reason this looks similar.

-I actually made up Hevel long before I ever saw Rivalz, so that's also a coincidence.


It's a bit of a shame that the clothes are the biggest offending factor in appearing similar, because especially when it comes to Noah's current outfit I had no clue how similar it looked, but it happens.

Truth is, I wanted his personality type to range in the direction of Light/L/Lelouche as a character who relies mostly if not entirely on careful planning and insane plots, but by that time his outfit and setting will be very detached from death note/code geass [at least, I hope] in a lot of ways anyway, so it shouldn't really matter.


I do apologise for being uncareful in my choice of outfits and character appearances though! I'll try to keep it in my mind if it won't end up looking too similar to another series in the future.

I'm scratching my head trying to figure out how Burk's storyline could possibly tie into this. [/

Just you wait till the third hero is introduced, fitting three completely seperate stories together is probably even worse than doing it for two.

To give you a hint though, not all characters and plot points are important to every story, Burk and Noah are in a completely different country right now and due to most of their troubles being national rather than international they're not problems that'll affect the other story.

I'm not gonna spoil how or why, but Burk, Noah and Tobi will all be connected to one aspect of the world for entirely different reasons, and the more this starts playing a part in the story, the more the 3 stories will become noticably intergrated.

OOh, so weve got an action story and a mystery! Time Travel is probably involved as well.

Nope, no time travel, possibly things closely related though.


[just curious, I've got Humour/Action & Suspense/Mystery now, although I have ideas for the 3rd story in terms of progression and what happens, the "genre" it'd fit in is still fairly open, so any suggestions or ideas on what'd be a good 3rd fit to add to the two already there would be appreciated!]

[Wreckingrocc]

Soap Opera/Western.

This looks like it's gonna be crazy. The joyful people are either going to be completely insane, or they're going to be repressing despair and misery with 'joy'.

[Neoriceisgood]

Soap Opera/Western.

Not sure, the western part could work due to the cosmetics of the setting it'll take place.

I'm actually thinking it'll end up like a semi-crossbreed of the current two arcs in some way, I'm thinking that just going ahead and seeing how it'll end is the best way to deal with it.

This looks like it's gonna be crazy. The joyful people are either going to be completely insane, or they're going to be repressing despair and misery with 'joy'.

[Lissou]

The only genre I could think of that would make it completely different was romance.
Not saying you should make it one. I don't even like romances. That's the first thing that came to mind though.

[Neoriceisgood]

The only genre I could think of that would make it completely different was romance.
Not saying you should make it one. I don't even like romances. That's the first thing that came to mind though.

Yeah, I thought about it as well.

Then I was like, no bloody way.

It'll probably be a mix between the genres, as it's both adventure and mystery as I have it planned now.

[Wreckingrocc]

I'd go more towards the action-adventure-mystery and less towards the comedy, though. Burk is enough laughs for all three of them, and having little comedy and lots of action will differentiate it from Burk.