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Socratov's brainfarts collection - Now with haikus!
Damn it feels good to be a warlock.
A real blasta-ass warlock keeps blastin',
a real blasta-ass warlock never has no spells.
'Cause a real blasta-ass warlock just invokes.
And all I gotta blast you with are
Hellrime, Brimstone and vitriolic blasts.
'Cause when the Hellfire comes around, what you gonna do?
Damn it feels good to be a warlock
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Socratov, you are one strange caballero. But I'd hate to see such a good offer go to waste.
Since you're offering, I would like a haiku written concerning the situation in my avatar. There's not much information to convey that isn't immediately visible: one's a human rogue with a thing for purple, the other's a gold half-dragon monk with a thing for books; the former believes that he's stealthy and that a half-dragon would make a fine dagger repository, and the latter would like to disillusion him on both accounts. Their names aren't important, and any further details I leave for you to ask about or invent.
If I like it, I'll proudly post it in my signature.
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Originally Posted by Socratov
Predator turned prey
Dangling helplessly at length
Dragons always win
This is a lovely little series, with a good mix of the serious and the silly. The second stanza does capture the scene very well, but to me the fourth stanza is the very best. Perhaps that's because it works the best when read outside of context, or perhaps it's because it has the best concluding line ever. Seriously, I laughed when I reached that line.
The third stanza seems weaker to me; I'm not sure how well the one-word final line flows with the rest of it, and "wiles" sounds like a two syllable word in my head. Yeah, I looked it up, it's a one-syllable deal, but it still throws me off a bit. As a whole though, the series paints creates an atmospheric and flowing scene. I'm keeping this. Thanks so much!
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If I've promised you art, I will get it done. I am also checking my PM's. Other than that, I am taking a necessary break from the forums. (Updated May 2013.)
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Originally Posted by Socratov
Predator turned prey
Dangling helplessly at length
Dragons always win
I like haiku, so I suggest you read this at least before making any more if you do too.
It's certainly interesting, however modern school english haku enjoys some freedoms which creates more to my creativity. However, I'm planning to learn Japanese at some point, so that would expand my haiku horizons some more
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Originally Posted by Komodo
Like it? I love it.
This is a lovely little series, with a good mix of the serious and the silly. The second stanza does capture the scene very well, but to me the fourth stanza is the very best. Perhaps that's because it works the best when read outside of context, or perhaps it's because it has the best concluding line ever. Seriously, I laughed when I reached that line.
The third stanza seems weaker to me; I'm not sure how well the one-word final line flows with the rest of it, and "wiles" sounds like a two syllable word in my head. Yeah, I looked it up, it's a one-syllable deal, but it still throws me off a bit. As a whole though, the series paints creates an atmospheric and flowing scene. I'm keeping this. Thanks so much!
glad you love it! Yeah, I had much fun with the last line as well (got it fairly early in the process). On the one word line, it helps to pretend to be a wise old man of the asian persuasion and then reading it out loud. Then it all makes sense
Feel free to use it and reference my name
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If that one article doesn't convince you to change your ways, try these other ones: Why "No 5-7-5" and some of the pages linked there, particularly What Is a Haiku—And What Isn’t and then maybe Becoming a Haiku Poet. There's more to haiku than fitting words into 5-7-5 boxes; without those further considerations, what you're writing isn't haiku at all.
Last edited by flyingchicken : 03-14-2013 at 11:54 AM.
If that one article doesn't convince you to change your ways, try these other ones: Why "No 5-7-5" and some of the pages linked there, particularly What Is a Haiku—And What Isn’t and then maybe Becoming a Haiku Poet. There's more to haiku than fitting words into 5-7-5 boxes; without those further considerations, what you're writing isn't haiku at all.
Oh my...
well, to be honest, writing a haiku in English is impossible (like any other western language). It's a traditional Japanese language art dealing with something similar to, but not syllables. since English doesn't have those, a concession was made to syllables for the general public. And yes, I am well aware that I write something more akin to senryu, focusing more on quirky people instead of nature. But do know that senryu is not something the general public is familiar with, while (pseudo) haiku is. And as I said, I probably won't write any real haiku (as far as the official rules are concerned) until I read and write some Japanese. For now (for the benefits of the general public and poetic licence) I keep to my incorrect ways. Until I Learn Japanese that is, then I'll compose the Haiku in japanese and add a translation. Please forgive me for now.
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