My Little Pony LVI:S Has Left the Playground!

[BlasTech]

Took a look at the tvguide poll, I'd be more inclined to vote if I didn't have to register to do so. I suspect that might keep the numbers down somewhat.

Originally Posted by Dusk Eclipse

Ok... I know this might be entirely old news for you guys; but I just discovered that Twilights gender bent version is named Dusk Shine.... I'll tell you it is weird to read a shipping fanfiction and read your username every once in a while (the Fanfiction in question is "The Unexpected Love Life of Dusk Shine") >_>.

Reminds me of Conner Cogwork's "On a Cross and Arrow" series. I think the male counterpart of Twilight was called Dusk Shine there too, so maybe they share a continuity?

[Dusk Eclipse]

Originally Posted by BlasTech

Took a look at the tvguide poll, I'd be more inclined to vote if I didn't have to register to do so. I suspect that might keep the numbers down somewhat.



Reminds me of Conner Cogwork's "On a Cross and Arrow" series. I think the male counterpart of Twilight was called Dusk Shine there too, so maybe they share a continuity?

Nah, as far as I can tell is a fannon agreement, similar to how the 4th Hokage in Naruto was called Arashi in most fanfiction.

[Dirtytabs]

Trotsworth on deviantART was the first (probably) to come up with different names. I recall a few other artists posting a colt version and commenting something like, "I guess he's called Elusive/Rainbow Blitz/etc. now, so yeah." Guess those stuck.

Originally Posted by OracleofWuffing

Speaking of, where's the obligatory fanfiction that features Nightmare Lord Disqualis?

So it's not fanfiction but

So four heads aren't better than one.

[Pendulous]

I need help. I need more lyrical rock/alternative pony songs, and I'm having trouble finding more.

http://www.youtube.com/playlist?list...eature=mh_lolz

That's what I got already. The more popular ones are of course there, among many others. I have this one guy subscribed that has 14 playlists capped of pony music, but after going through eight or nine, I seem to be running out.

Originally Posted by otakuryoga

so..my thoughts on the tvguide poll...

methinks this could be a very eye-opening poll
--this is the first BIG poll we are trying to influence..previous polls have been on what you have to admit are "niche" sites--toy sites, fan sites, "geek" sites..but this one is by TV Guide..big and mainstream(even if most shows on the list are sci-fi/fantasy/paranormal

Except people will still flock to Fox News/Howard Stern bull and not think anything of it. Sad thing is, I can only add four shows, because that's all I've seen/liked on the list.

Oh, and MLP appears to be tied for second now with Walking Dead. Ugh, screw that show for real.

[MCerberus]

That image gets me thinking.
You know dragons in MLP. They're kinda greedy, kinda mean. That means that there's a good chance that the following may be roaming around the setting:

Spoiler

Tiamat

Now that's a villain I'd like to see.

edit- wow, Sombra suddenly developed a potty-mouth. Such foulness

[Madcrafter]

While on the subject of r63, is there a fanon name for Luna's spear counterpart? (NMM was on the previous page, so I would think so).

[Sean Mirrsen]

Originally Posted by otakuryoga

so..my thoughts on the tvguide poll...
-snip-

Well, now it's at 8%, three-something hundred votes behind Doctor Who, and about eight hundred ahead of The Walking Dead, the first and third positions on the list, respectively. A decent jump forward, though I wouldn't know how long these polls usually run or how many votes are typically accumulated.

Originally Posted by BlasTech

Took a look at the tvguide poll, I'd be more inclined to vote if I didn't have to register to do so. I suspect that might keep the numbers down somewhat.

I just used my Google account. Of the many things out on the Internet, it's one of the more useful things you can sign up to (at least because it helps you keep search preferences :P).

[Thanqol]

GETTIN' MAH REVIEW ON

Amishpirate's untitled whatever thing:

P1:

Spoiler

Punchline in the first sequence is lacking; a confused cough isn't funny. I think a lost question from somepony struggling to keep up would be better.

They also served another purpose; the solid oak furnishings were enchanted to automatically block the doors in the event of a magical accident. This was for the safety of those within and without; polymorphed ponies could be... unpredictable, to put it mildly.

"Polymorphed ponies"? Polymorphed into what?

Celestia’s School for Gifted Unicorns, despite its prestigious reputation, was absolutely the wrong place to hold any sort of formal affair. Sure, there were grand lounges for the professors to while away their idle hours, waxing on about their latest research, but this was no place for student’s hooves to scuff the carpet.

Huh what? The sentences don't follow

Under any normal circumstances, the two of them would’ve rather spend time with floor paneling than each other. Then again, these were far from normal circumstances.

The full stop, "Then again" transition is jarring. Think about it and verbalise it and come up with a more natural phrasing.

Summer’s story was quite different. Twilight had been forced to attend a teacher’s luncheon with other promising students. Which meant the teachers got to fawn over them

Same problem here.

and ended up right at Twilight’s side, chatting it up like they’d known each other for years. An interesting pony, to say the least.

And here

ice rang with unquestionable authority. Twilight fell silent and nearly cowered under her desk. “This is for your own safety. I will not have you performing such dangerous spells before-

Missing end quotation

That was the worst part, that they should have the gall to rob him of Dougnut Joe’s Twin-Topping Tuesdays.

Typo

In the waning hours of Celestia’s sun,the testing room took a far more gloomy mood in her lamplight.

Inconsistent "her"/referent

Overall;

Nothing stood out to me as wrong or inconsistent (with the disclaimer that I'm tired and not fully engaged with the world). I'm not hooked yet; I haven't encountered that moment that commits me completely to the story, but that doesn't mean it won't come. I don't think it should be delayed too much longer; the intro is solid, but now it's time to drop us into the real body of the story. Keep at it!

[Diego Havoc]

Gotta catch 'em all!

Originally Posted by Dusk Eclipse

Ok... I know this might be entirely old news for you guys; but I just discovered that Twilights gender bent version is named Dusk Shine.... I'll tell you it is weird to read a shipping fanfiction and read your username every once in a while (the Fanfiction in question is "The Unexpected Love Life of Dusk Shine") >_>.

Yeah, there's a whole set of generally accepted names for the genderbent mane 6.
Dusk Shine (Twilight)
Rainbow Blitz (Dash)
Elusive (Rarity)
Butterscotch (Fluttershy)
Bubble Berry (Pinkie Pie)
Applejack (Guess)
Barbara/Spines (Spike)

I don't particularily like any of them. :/

'cept maybe "Barb" for Spike. That's kinda clever.

Originally Posted by MCerberus

That image gets me thinking.
You know dragons in MLP. They're kinda greedy, kinda mean. That means that there's a good chance that the following may be roaming around the setting:

Spoiler

Tiamat

Now that's a villain I'd like to see.

[Kd7sov]

Originally Posted by Madcrafter

While on the subject of r63, is there a fanon name for Luna's spear counterpart? (NMM was on the previous page, so I would think so).

Harpsy, I believe.

[Gamerlord]

Originally Posted by Madcrafter

While on the subject of r63, is there a fanon name for Luna's spear counterpart? (NMM was on the previous page, so I would think so).

Originally Posted by Kd7sov

Harpsy, I believe.

I'm pretty sure it's Prince Artemis.

Also, congratulations Thanqol!

[DigoDragon]

Originally Posted by OracleofWuffing

Wait, Applejack x Rarity? You're gettin' your peanut butter in my chocolate, bub.

In the words of Judge Doom-
"My god, it'll be beautiful."

Wait. Um... So- wait. Wait wait wait wait wait, I'm just thinking about this now. Um, is Princess Cadence, like- are we supposed to infer that she's actually a direct descendent of the royal line prior to Lord Bongo's hostile takeover?

Not necessarily. I interpret is as that the Crystal empire's last royal family line died off after Lord Mungo took over. With him out of the way and no heir to the throne, Cadence is probably assuming the throne based on "winged unicorn" credentials alone, and without a challenger.

Originally Posted by t209

So My Littlest Pet Shop premiered on MLP Season 3 premiere. Any adult fans, yet? If so, shall we prepare for the fan nickname.
I wonder if My Little Pony is the only franchise that ended its previous reputation as silly and dumb and raised to golden age.

I didn't get to watch much of that yet, so I dunno what my opinion would be.
However, G.I. Joe has made strides into a more grown up, smartly entertaining franchise a while ago when it released the Resolution miniseries, and later, Renagades. Same goes for Transformers Prime. Big complex story arc, the kids aren't totally useless, and 'bots often get taken out for a while from injury. They can even die.
I like this trend.

Originally Posted by Forum Explorer

Sombra meets Molestia (safeish for work, but you'd get some really really odd looks)

Spoiler

Bwahaha, oh that makes too much sense.

[Grif]

Spoiler

Ole.

[Tectonic Robot]

If Sombra had a sombrero, he would have been awesome.

If Sombra was voiced by the same guy who did Aku (rest his soul) he would have been one of my favorites.

[Balmas]

Originally Posted by Tectonic Robot

If Sombra had a sombrero, he would have been awesome.

If Sombra was voiced by the same guy who did Aku (rest his soul) he would have been one of my favorites.

If Sombra had actual dialogue besides Crysals, Slaves and AAAARGH, I'd have liked him more.

I wonder if Samurai Jack is on Netflix...


Also, take that! My Little Pony is topping Doctor Who by three hundred votes!

[Kd7sov]

Originally Posted by Gamerlord

I'm pretty sure it's Prince Artemis.

Also, congratulations Thanqol!

Oh, right, duh. I was thinking Lyra.

[Forum Explorer]

Originally Posted by Balmas

If Sombra had actual dialogue besides Crysals, Slaves and AAAARGH, I'd have liked him more.

I wonder if Samurai Jack is on Netflix...


Also, take that! My Little Pony is topping Doctor Who by three hundred votes!

In hindsight I wouldn't like it if we got more dialogue (what would he say anyways?) and then we wouldn't get these hilarious dialogue jokes.

[t209]

Originally Posted by Tectonic Robot

If Sombra had a sombrero, he would have been awesome.

If Sombra was voiced by the same guy who did Aku (rest his soul) he would have been one of my favorites.

Sad about second though.

Spoiler

Mako's dead.

I wonder what if Sombra is a member of Lasombra Vampire.

[erikun]

Originally Posted by OracleofWuffing

Yes, let us trust the bearer of the Element of Honesty to keep the secret fake crystal heart secret.

Okay, yes, she's once again getting by with half-truths. That's our Applejack!

Actually, I thought this was really nice. After all, what is Applejack besides the Element of Honesty? She's a salespony! And we got to see some good salespony skills there, what with heading off curious crystal ponies and getting them interested in something else.

It's good to see Applejack as more than just the rodeo-southern-drawl pony.

Originally Posted by Madcrafter

Not to add to the the misunderstood villain fuel, since I hate that, but an EQD thing just think of a:

Crazy theory

With this wonderful screencap here, we know the door trap makes Twilight's eyes go glowy green and red, a la dark magic. What if Sombra got trapped by the door (made by someone else even further back), and then, afraid of his worse fear, made sure it would never come to pass (by enslaving the crystal ponies). That is why his eyes are as they are, not because of the dark magic (which came later). Then he gets smoked (hah!) and actually goes insane.

Using an Occam's razor approach, this makes no sense, and I personally don't like it either, but I figured I'd throw it out there for people to chew on.

Actually, I think this is a really neat idea. (The fact that Twilight's eyes are like that when she's casting magic upstairs kind of upsets the theory, though.)

Originally Posted by Dusk Eclipse

Ok... I know this might be entirely old news for you guys; but I just discovered that Twilights gender bent version is named Dusk Shine.... I'll tell you it is weird to read a shipping fanfiction and read your username every once in a while (the Fanfiction in question is "The Unexpected Love Life of Dusk Shine") >_>.

Yeah, as others have said, the names have been floating around for awhile now. On a Cross and Arrow probably helped to popularize them quite a bit.

Oh, and have some more Dusk Shine.

[TheAmishPirate]

Responses to review:

Spoiler

Originally Posted by Thanqol

GETTIN' MAH REVIEW ON

Amishpirate's untitled whatever thing:

P1:

Punchline in the first sequence is lacking; a confused cough isn't funny. I think a lost question from somepony struggling to keep up would be better.

Aye, I can do better than that. Good catch.

Originally Posted by Thanqol

"Polymorphed ponies"? Polymorphed into what?

I honestly thought specifying didn't matter here, as the sentiment is more, "spells could transform ponies into dangerous creatures, and they do not always behave rationally." But perhaps there is a better way to show this.

Originally Posted by Thanqol

Huh what? The sentences don't follow

It's saying that there are formal places where the students could hypothetically hold swanky parties, but those areas are off-limits to them. Does that make more sense, or should I change it?

Originally Posted by Thanqol

The full stop, "Then again" transition is jarring. Think about it and verbalise it and come up with a more natural phrasing.



Same problem here.



And here

There is a time and place for the full stop. This is not one of them either.

Originally Posted by Thanqol

Missing end quotation



Typo



Inconsistent "her"/referent

More good catches

Originally Posted by Thanqol

Overall;

Nothing stood out to me as wrong or inconsistent (with the disclaimer that I'm tired and not fully engaged with the world). I'm not hooked yet; I haven't encountered that moment that commits me completely to the story, but that doesn't mean it won't come. I don't think it should be delayed too much longer; the intro is solid, but now it's time to drop us into the real body of the story. Keep at it!

You're touching on my biggest worry for this story. See, because my Twilight isn't really ShowTwilight, I need these opening scenes to show the reader what she is like. Set the stage, establish characters, start up long-running plots, those sorts of things. Unfortunately, that also means we're three chapters in and just barely getting to the meat of the story. And even the meat of the story, if you'll remember some of the chats we've had about it, is going to be a slow boil anyway. I'd say I should make this intro sequence shorter, but I just don't know what to cut. Maybe I should re-focus, re-write, get a better grasp of what makes these characters worth following, something to get more bang with less buck in these chapters? I honestly don't know, and that really worries me.


Thanks for looking this over, another pair of eyes is always appreciated.

[DigoDragon]

Empress Trixie’s “How to Win Friends and Conquer the Rest” in GalCiv2:

Spoiler

Dear Princess Luna,

The wars against both the Jagged Knife and Resembool empires are very much in our favor. Our Unicorns scientists have recently completed research on miniaturizing Warp Drive technology to the point that it can fit on a Thanqol fighter craft. I can now literally “Zerg Rush” my enemies with swarms of really fast, cheap ships. Jagged Knife shipping lanes are effectively blockaded and their government will likely go bankrupt within a year.
Assuming I don't bomb them back to the stone age before then.

On the larger side of the scale, I’ve upgraded two battleships with better defenses against the Jagged Knife’s new weapon of choice (missiles). The Celestia and Cadence are now able to block nearly 75% of their missiles with improved Chaff while still employing a significant counter using our tried-and-true Phasor weapons.


In peaceful news, the Space Elves' citizens are so enamored with the Unicorn culture that three of their planets secede to our side! They're not spectacular planets, but they are tax paying citizens.

I would like to take a moment now and congratulate planet Twilight for completing our latest battleship: the Zecora!
This evil enchantress is the fastest battleship we’ve designed (8 Parsec/Week) and sports the highest damage rating yet at 72 points (For comparison, our current battleships average a 36 damage rating while our most experienced battleship, Discord, sports a hefty 41).

The Zecora is currently leading a fleet with battleship Discord, two frigates (Rarijack & Flutterdash), a dozen speedier Mk. II Thanqol fighters, and four troop transports. The fleet is but two turns away from Resembool’s homeworld. Resembool won’t last 3 turns. Last Turn the Resembool leader called me up and asked me to sign a peace treaty. It took me an hour to stop laughing. I think I forgot to put the call on mute too.
If ponies are about love & tolerance, we’re about to rename their homeworld Care-a-Lot!

Your Great & Powerful Student,
Trixie Lulamoon.

[Madcrafter]

Originally Posted by DigoDragon

Empress Trixie’s “How to Win Friends and Conquer the Rest” in GalCiv2:

Spoiler

Dear Princess Luna,

The wars against both the Jagged Knife and Resembool empires are very much in our favor. Our Unicorns scientists have recently completed research on miniaturizing Warp Drive technology to the point that it can fit on a Thanqol fighter craft. I can now literally “Zerg Rush” my enemies with swarms of really fast, cheap ships. Jagged Knife shipping lanes are effectively blockaded and their government will likely go bankrupt within a year.
Assuming I don't bomb them back to the stone age before then.

On the larger side of the scale, I’ve upgraded two battleships with better defenses against the Jagged Knife’s new weapon of choice (missiles). The Celestia and Cadence are now able to block nearly 75% of their missiles with improved Chaff while still employing a significant counter using our tried-and-true Phasor weapons.


In peaceful news, the Space Elves' citizens are so enamored with the Unicorn culture that three of their planets secede to our side! They're not spectacular planets, but they are tax paying citizens.

I would like to take a moment now and congratulate planet Twilight for completing our latest battleship: the Zecora!
This evil enchantress is the fastest battleship we’ve designed (8 Parsec/Week) and sports the highest damage rating yet at 72 points (For comparison, our current battleships average a 36 damage rating while our most experienced battleship, Discord, sports a hefty 41).

The Zecora is currently leading a fleet with battleship Discord, two frigates (Rarijack & Flutterdash), a dozen speedier Mk. II Thanqol fighters, and four troop transports. The fleet is but two turns away from Resembool’s homeworld. Resembool won’t last 3 turns. Last Turn the Resembool leader called me up and asked me to sign a peace treaty. It took me an hour to stop laughing. I think I forgot to put the call on mute too.
If ponies are about love & tolerance, we’re about to rename their homeworld Care-a-Lot!

Your Great & Powerful Student,
Trixie Lulamoon.

Nooooo. Another game I now aspire to play, yet will never find the time! I love these reports though.

[Topaz]

Originally Posted by t209

I wonder if My Little Pony is the only franchise that ended its previous reputation as silly and dumb and raised to golden age.

Does Battlestar Galactica count?

Originally Posted by DigoDragon

Not necessarily. I interpret is as that the Crystal empire's last royal family line died off after Lord Mungo took over. With him out of the way and no heir to the throne, Cadence is probably assuming the throne based on "winged unicorn" credentials alone, and without a challenger.

And having the Crystal Heart on her butt probably didn't hurt.

[OracleofWuffing]

Originally Posted by erikun

Actually, I thought this was really nice. After all, what is Applejack besides the Element of Honesty? She's a salespony! And we got to see some good salespony skills there, what with heading off curious crystal ponies and getting them interested in something else.

It's good to see Applejack as more than just the rodeo-southern-drawl pony.

Sorry if that came off in the wrong tone, I meant to imply that I liked it.

[Aotrs Commander]

Originally Posted by Topaz

Does Battlestar Galactica count?

Ahaahahahahahahahahahahaoh wait, you were serious.

[Diego Havoc]

Tara Strong burps in character.

It's exactly what it says on the tin.

[Aotrs Commander]

Originally Posted by Diego Havoc

Tara Strong burps in character.

It's exactly what it says on the tin.

Oh dear frag, she is so queen of the trolls.

No. No, I am officially elevating her to God-Empress of the Trolls.

I still don't think that's really high enough, but it's a start...

[zimmerwald1915]

Originally Posted by Aotrs Commander

Oh dear frag, she is so queen of the trolls.

No. No, I am officially elevating her to God-Empress of the Trolls.

I still don't think that's really high enough, but it's a start...

Her Imperial Majesty Tara Strong, By the Grace of Celestia, Empress and Autocrat of All the Trolls?

Her Excellency Tara Strong, Head of Trolldom, Leader of the Trolls, and Founder of the Trollish Empire?

Most Serene and August Tara Strong, Crowned by Luna, Great and Pacific Empress, Governing the Trollish Empire?

[PhantomFox]

50 sec teaser clip of Too Many Pinkie Pies
http://youtu.be/wY0NpmYopzA

[t209]

http://www.drunkduck.com/Cobblestone...treet/5414423/
I found a new comic crossover with My Little Pony and Sesame Street.