Re: Flacepant: The Adventures of a Real D&D Party in a Slightly Embellished World
Are you posting this for constructive criticism, or only compliments? Just checking, since I know some people like how they do things and aren't looking for suggestions. However, if you are, I have some suggestions/reactions/constructive criticism below.
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Comic #1: If you are going for the OotS look, you need consistent lines.
The guy's cloak has much thicker lines than the rest of his body.
Comic #2: Some of the lines separating the panels are sloppy. Not sure if that's on purpose or not. The water lines are also rather unrealistic looking. I'm not sure what program you're using, but I recommend Inkscape; it'll be a lot easier to iron out little details like that.
Comic #3: Second panel, the guy's speech does not fit into his speech bubble. I don't really get the punchline...
I think this has potential, but some work on the artwork and making it amusing to those of us who weren't at the gaming session you say this is based off would help a lot.
Re: Flacepant: The Adventures of a Real D&D Party in a Slightly Embellished World
OotS doesn't make them sloppy... It's very clean and fresh looking... Yours looks just... Choppy. It is slightly jarring to look at all the contrast... OotS seems to blend it nicely.
The things in OotS that are meant to look sloppy are really not sloppy at all. For example, in the first hundred or so comics, the borders were very squiggly and sloppy looking. But they looked like they were intended to be that way. With things like this, it looks like you merely overlooked the stroke width differences, and forgot to iron out the curves on the cloak.
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Re: Flacepant: The Adventures of a Real D&D Party in a Slightly Embellished World
No, no, no, it's not just that I'm impatient. I personally know the person who writes this webcomic and am rather annoyed with him for going two weeks in a row without updating for no good reason.
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Re: Flacepant: The Adventures of a Real D&D Party in a Slightly Embellished World
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No, no, no, it's not just that I'm impatient. I personally know the person who writes this webcomic and am rather annoyed with him for going two weeks in a row without updating for no good reason.
Ah. Well if you know them in person, then how about giving them a swift smack upside the head and telling them to get working?
And also, why did you choose to write your username as a series of numbers, not letters?
Re: Flacepant: The Adventures of a Real D&D Party in a Slightly Embellished World
1) I have tried, but it didn't work. I thought this might help. 2) I used numbers for variety, especially since it's amusing when people don't understand and think my username is a series of random numbers.
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Re: Flacepant: The Adventures of a Real D&D Party in a Slightly Embellished World
New update, despite Catattack problems (i.e. him being way too particular about Ronak). This is a Nonsequitor, or one-panel filler comic from another adventure.
Re: Flacepant: The Adventures of a Real D&D Party in a Slightly Embellished World
Comic 4 link in first post sends you to comic 1
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