Re: The Two Brothers: A non-OotS style webcomic
Well I'm a huge fan of knights, and I like most of what you've done, but I do have a few complaints.
the first are your speech bubbles, or rather, lack thereof. in some scenes it makes it difficult to tell who said what, and in others it looks like background scenery, such as your t-shaped stars, (I've drawn stars like that too... they really shiny ones do indeed seem to take a t-ish shape) are part of the text.
the second is that in some scenes you're a little too simplistic, and it's hard to distinguish certain objects. shading the night sky would also be helpful.
third is a problem real knights shared on the battlefield: it's hard to distinguish one character from another while in full plate. Real knights used family or personal emblems, but the Teutonic knights, to my knowledge, did not, which I assume is why you did not implicate any such means of identification. however, since the comic doesn't take place on earth, I think it would be acceptable to give each knight a different pattern on his or her surcoat so we can tell them apart while they have their helms on.
fix those, and It'll be awesome.
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