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Old 07-13-2010, 11:40 PM   Top  -  End  -  #1
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Note - This has absolutely nothing to do with the game. Just a story idea I've had for a while, and I thought of it before I knew the game existed. Coincidence in the titles.

Anyways, like I said, I've had this story going on in my head for a few years, actually. Thought I'd finally get it out there.

Yes, it's all text. I don't plan on any pictures for it. Though, if anybody wants to draw some up, feel free. I don't mind.

I'll update this when I can, which is most likely to be at random times. So, check back often.

Each chapter will be split into a couple of parts, cause the forum allows only so many words per post. And, it's easier for me that way.

I would greatly appreciate any comments you have on it, good or bad. If they're bad, could you at least be constructive with them? Please?

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((Sorry bout the lapse in posting here. Probably won't happen again. At least, not for a little while.))

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I like this, I really do. It takes a sort of basic concept, "Camp Half-Blood but with X", X being dragons, and seems to have so far made it genuinely its own.
Needs moar writings. I is very likes.
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I like this, I really do. It takes a sort of basic concept, "Camp Half-Blood but with X", X being dragons, and seems to have so far made it genuinely its own.
Needs moar writings. I is very likes.
Yeah, I update when I can. I can tell you that the camp part is most definitely not going to be the major part of the story.
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Yay more story!

It's good, if I haven't said that before. Shall be reading.
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Just finished reading it. So far I'm liking it. Though, if I was one of those dragon kids I would be trying to learn how to turn into my dragon form as soon as I could. It seems pretty easy, too. Anyways, I'll be reading this.
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I like the story it is unique in a different way...

It is original too!!!
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Holy crap...since January? Damn.

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I just read it and I like it, but I want to mention is that it seems a little too perfect. I can't believe all those teenagers spent all that time at camp, and didn't cause any serious problems. Also how long was camp? Time was not referred to much at all, which tends to confuse readers trying to imagine the story. Still, I feel like its a great idea, keep writing!
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I just read it and I like it, but I want to mention is that it seems a little too perfect. I can't believe all those teenagers spent all that time at camp, and didn't cause any serious problems. Also how long was camp? Time was not referred to much at all, which tends to confuse readers trying to imagine the story. Still, I feel like its a great idea, keep writing!
The main reason I didn't do too much with the camp is because it's just kind of an intro part. Not really important to the main story.

But, yeah, thanks for the info. If I ever go back and rework stuff, I'll take you comments in consideration.
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Nice job!!

i've only read the first couple lines of the prologue and it already sounds really good. however, there are some editing things that bother me, and so i would be willing to go through and edit your writing, and send it back to you so you can decide whether or not to keep the change. if you agree, i'll do it in Microsoft Word, and track changes so you can see exactly what i did.... it sounds really cool....
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I like the story, I'll second that the pacing may need some work but other than that it seems like a lot of fun. I'm kinda curious to have it explained what its like to know you are gonna grow up to be a dragon.
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