The Crimson Throne (Pathfinder OotS-Style)

[Zefir]

Hello everybody!

I have some free time to spent and I decided to make the backstory of my current Pathfinder adventure in an OotS-Style comic. (Hopefully earn some extra XP cause I am a little behinde the other^^). I made the story a little bit more fun but most have had like I draw it.

Most story is given in the first comic. The severals Backgrounds will be in spoiler after they where asked to tell them. some more story background will also given in spoilers.

I plan to make even one every 3 weeks up to 2 every week. This depends on my work and how people ask for new comics, cause i like fans.



Current Page:

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Archiv

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1. Messages for all!
2. Meet at Lanzetstreet
3. The forecast
4. Storm on the front
5. Backup from the inside
6. I can see the goal
7. Don't burn yourself on Fast Food
8. Lamm is dead, check the hatbox
9. Let's take a look
10. That's in the box.

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Eon

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Eon was born and raised in Corvosa. Moste time of his childhood were spend in the orphanage. At a age of 10, he was an abnormaly high person. He was even as high as a man of 20 years. Because of this fact Lamm noticed him and tricked Eon to work for him. For some months Eon worked as a debt collector for Lamm, even if his body seems to be old his mind was like a child. With his tall body and his rude appereance many people feared him and it was easy to fullfill the task Lamm gives him. At some point Eon realized that he transports several Gold pices but only get a copper every time. He menaged to get a house in corvosa, what isn#t very hard, because most of them are empty. He managed to take a few coins every time there are so many that you can't say they miss them. But Hookshankes knows how many coins should be in the bag...

Don Salvara Gato Camorr

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Salavara doesn't know his father and his mother ban talking about him. His mother was Nartana Camorr, but she was ailing and weak since Salvara can remember. Cause of this the upbringing was taken over by his grandmother. She rears him in the traditional ways of the Varisian.
Salvara got used to walke the alleays and for that his Grandmother gaves him the nickname Gato (something like kitty).
In his young age he made friend with 3 boys Tharl, Jared, and Aaron and a girl named Ameiko. They launch a gang to earn 'donations' from the people. Salvara used his skills to distract people especially woman, while the rest collect the 'donations'.
At the age of 8 died Savaras mother after her long illness. Only two years later his grandmother was killed by a Hellknight named Alerghast. She was out on the fence market to buy some cloth. The hellknights made a razzia that day. At the examination the hellknight assure, that it wwas an accident. Salvara thought that the judge was bribed and he swear revenge.
All alone Salvara managed his next two years of his life with the help of his gang. Their actions got noticed by Lamm and he managed to take them into his groupe. The next three years were a ordeal for Salvara. But the day came where his fathers blood show of. flames burst out of his hand and set the house on fire he was in. he managed to flee from Lamm in the burning house. His new goal was it to stop Lamm and free his gangs member.

Kal Barron

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Kal Barons story is short . He was one of Lamm's lamms and he was allways alone. After he made it out of Lamm's hand he managed to stay alive. This years made him closed. He doesn't trust anyone. Well nothing more to say about his life.

Pathme Sonnenschein

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Rayne Bethma

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The Story beginns and playes in a larg city called Corvosa.
The City is one of the biggest once at the continent. Corvosa is a port city lokated near the Ocean, it makes good trade with the Varisian.
The city is split into different areas, most caused of the live standart or a sewer/river. The part in the north is called "Old Corvosa" the people of this district are mid to poor class people. In this distric the most popular place is eals end. Eals end is build of five ships unable to move, each ship holds another lust like Alcohole, drugs, gambling, erotic and entertainment.

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[Cizak]

The order you read the panels in is... wierd

[Zefir]

Its just for the first one the rest will be like normal comics.

I want to have the message in the mid cause all got the same message thats the point i made it like this.

[CrimsonAngel]

Geeze that comic is huge.

[Prince Zahn]

Aside from spelling(even though it is only minor)
I have a good feeling I'll enjoy reading this....so I will

[Allan Surgite]

Unless you were going for a pun, Crimson is not spelled Chrimson.

And reduction in size and a grammar/spelling check would be appreciated. If you wish, you can feel free to send any scripts you have to me; I'd gladly flick over them and fix up the more obvious spelling/grammar mistakes and return them.

[Zefir]

This will be nice my english is not good and word/leo don't make it better.
(I even wrote crimson right in the comic....)

The size is a problem that i will solve soone. Think Din A4 is much to large.

[Mina Kobold]

This will be nice my english is not good and word/leo don't make it better.
(I even wrote crimson right in the comic....)

The size is a problem that i will solve soone. Think Din A4 is much to large.

Don't worry, it'll come to you some day

Also: Word/leo?

[Allan Surgite]

I believe "Leo" is another spellchecker, but that is based entirely on the context.

Worry not; if you've a good head on your shoulders, merely reading "proper" English should rub off on you. And as mentioned, my PM box is always open, although I may not be able to reply instantly.

[Zefir]

Leo is kind of a dictionary which has some english phrases, without it you would have hunte me to mars or pluto or an other galaxi.

2nd strip is still at work.

[Allan Surgite]

Hopefully it will be a bit smaller this time?

I'd also advise a simpler panel set-up, unless you have a similar point to the one you were getting across in this strip to drive home in the following strip.

[Zefir]

2. Meet at Lanzetstreet

New Page is up.
Low intresst but hope it will come, sometimes.
Grammer checked by Allan A. Aokage

[Green-Shirt Q]

Good thing you showed everybody entering the building.

If you hadn't shown that, I would've assumed everybody teleported in using magic.

Wait...actually in a fantasy comic that doesn't sound as sarcastic.

Let me try again.

If you hadn't shown that, I would've assumed everybody teleported in using science.

[Zefir]

@:Green-Shirt Q

I am not sure what you want to say but i see the sarkasm so i tell you.
Your critc is no critic its just a make-someone-sad-dialog so pls if you have no good critcs just don' post anything.

[Allan Surgite]

@Zefir: He's being humorous, and not particularly serious

[Mina Kobold]

@:Green-Shirt Q

I am not sure what you want to say but i see the sarkasm so i tell you.
Your critc is no critic its just a make-someone-sad-dialog so pls if you have no good critcs just don' post anything.

Spicy guatamala-eating Michelangelo on a skateboard, dude!

He was making a joke, calm down and try not to take every post too seriously

Especially not if a "" is present.

[Zefir]

Then i am sry i missunderstand, but here where i live its just like a insult.

[Lord Raziere]

yea, stating something completely ironically in a sarcastic way is completely insulting and offensive, its not a good way to point out things in a cool way at all, I should really stop, you have Enlightened me to the truth, good sir.

[Mina Kobold]

Then i am sry i missunderstand, but here where i live its just like a insult.

The joke was that a common (but mild) criticism/semi-insult (The part about teleporting in with magic) would make perfect sense in this setting.

The smileys are what made the difference, though. Always keep an eye on the smileys

yea, stating something completely ironically in a sarcastic way is completely insulting and offensive, its not a good way to point out things in a cool way at all, I should really stop, you have Enlightened me to the truth, good sir.

It is a more offensive ay to point stuff out than just saying it nicely, actually.

But still not that offensive.

[Lord Raziere]

The joke was that a common (but mild) criticism/semi-insult (The part about teleporting in with magic) would make perfect sense in this setting.

The smileys are what made the difference, though. Always keep an eye on the smileys



It is a more offensive way to point stuff out than just saying it nicely, actually.

But still not that offensive.

ok, ok I'll be a little nice this time, ahem.

some of us prefer sarcasm as a means of pointing flaws and such and generally sticking it to people being wrong-headed in a cool way, and saying it directly doesn't have style.

[Zefir]

3. The forecast

Page 3 is up.

Sry all i try to clam down at these things but know my english isn't that good missunderstanding may appear.

[John Cribati]

Your English is far from the worst I've seen.

The worst i've seen is, and I quote:

"Has anyone really been far even as decided to use even go want to do look more like?"

[Zefir]

Your English is far from the worst I've seen.

The worst i've seen is, and I quote:

"Has anyone really been far even as decided to use even go want to do look more like?"

Thank you! But i mean not when i write english i meant when i read your Comments/critcs/sarasems etc...
And one thing can you tell me what the person want to say with the sentence you quote?

[John Cribati]

And one thing can you tell me what the person want to say with the sentence you quote?

Nobody knows what he was trying to say. The thread went crazy trying to figure it out.

[Zefir]

Ok guys. ( Maybe some subscribed this) Page 4 is up and checked

4. Storm on the front

Sorry that it takes this long time I had busy times. But I made something in the next few days up to the weekend:

- More Backgroundstorys of each PC.
- Pc Nr. 5 is still at work.
- Some Art upgrade on the PCs like Eon's hair.
- Comic Nr. 5

I have no knowledge in making a banner so I would ask you, if anyone can do this for me please. I would suggest if it has this in OotS style, cause its the Cover of the kampang. If you have any other Ideas which you think fit better, I won't reject. You can't have enougth Banner right?

Thanks to all who try this out and to all who still wait for the next Page.

[Zefir]

Oh no doublepost...

Well page 5 is up. Some story was added and the chars avatars.
I will increase the rate of the comics, now. last month IA took to much draw time.
5. Backup from the inside

[Mina Kobold]

A tad confusing but Hookhands and the drunk talk was funny

[Zefir]

Confused about the half-elf woman?
It will be cleared next page, she pop up just like this in the game.

[Mina Kobold]

Confused about the half-elf woman?
It will be cleared next page, she pop up just like this in the game.

That, and the order of the speech bubbles are a bit diffficult to understand

[Zefir]

Page 5 6 is up.
The half-elf discribes herself as I said.
6. I can see the goal

To explain the thing with the bubbles: My main order is from up to down then from left to right. I know in the last panle of page 5 its hard but it doesn't matter wich one you read last Hookshanks or Salvara.

Oh and again we have some drunk talk, sad that it will end after Lamms death.