oots comic by me *now with plot*

CrimsonAngel · 12-19-2008, 10:34 PM

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comics

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Don't forget to credit them in your sig.

EXTRAS *new*

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Shades of Gray · 12-19-2008, 11:19 PM

"Technically I'm an elf, I do not sleep"

You are still copying oots lines. The art is too rigid. Everybody is standing perfectly straight all the time, even when having their face bitten of by a horde of lizardmen. The text saying "apparently you are competent after all" is impossible to read, either do a zoom in on the sign, or better yet, ditch the sign all together. You have potential, you just need to stick in a bit more effort.

Elrond · 12-20-2008, 01:46 AM

Look its alright but like shades i think your copying to many OOTS lines also improve your art a little bit and by the way your characters seem to me to be a bit to similar in the things they wear and it makes me confused about who's who. But ill watch this it i think it will get better with more experience and dont give up just yet youve got the makeings of a good avatarist in ya.

CrimsonAngel · 12-20-2008, 06:42 AM

Heh, sorry. I've been reading oots all my life. I think it's imprinted on my brain. But from now on I'll stop and say, "hey, has the giant used this?"

EDIT: Oh, and before I had ever thought of making a comic I was drawing bands of adventurers, so I dicided to make a comic. Originally these were pirates, but i gave them different classes and named them.

Lissou · 12-20-2008, 08:38 AM

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Originally Posted by CrimsonAngel

Heh, sorry. I've been reading oots all my life. I think it's imprinted on my brain. But from now on I'll stop and say, "hey, has the giant used this?"

EDIT: Oh, and before I had ever thought of making a comic I was drawing bands of adventurers, so I dicided to make a comic. Originally these were pirates, but i gave them different classes and named them.

You've been reading oots all of your life? It's a fairly recent comic, are you sure you don't mean all of its "life"? I mean, I don't think you're 5.

T-O-E · 12-20-2008, 09:42 AM

It's possible for him to have been reading it from a very young age. Check his profile.

EDIT: Huh? They only mis-spelled 'bored', 'killed' and forgot to add an apostrophe to 'I'm'.

Gourtox · 12-20-2008, 10:10 AM

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It's possible for him to have been reading it from a very young age. Check his profile.

EDIT: Huh? They only mis-spelled 'bored', 'killed' and forgot to add an apostrophe to 'I'm'.

I think that was kinda the point.

Mad Mask · 12-20-2008, 10:16 AM

A playgrounder and OotS-style artist who's approximately my age ? I didn't thought I'd see one in my life.

Anyway, keep drawing. Everyone is not that great when they start, look at me:

versus

Shades of Gray · 12-20-2008, 11:24 AM

And me:

Old<>New

Try personalizing your characters, giving them different colours and outfits.

Here's an early comic I did, the day I got inkscape. At the core of it, they all have the same body, essentially the only difference is hair, and other accesories, however, they look completely different. Some of the art though, does indeed suck however.

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Lissou · 12-20-2008, 01:17 PM

Oh, I guess I didn't think a kid would read the comic, I've always seen it as a PG-10 or something.

Anyways, it does look and sound like oots. The elf speaks in a convoluted way and seems to have some kind of rivalry with the halfling, the leader is surrounded by idiots...

But that's ok. I mean, we all start like that. Not to seem condescending or anything, it's not about age. When you start, whether you're young or old, you do what you know first. I remember my first series, I wrote a few books, I was so proud of them... But at the end of the day, it was just a story about teenagers turning into animals, just like Animorphs was. And when I did write something different, it was still teenagers fighting something big. But step by step I broadened my horizon if I'm making sense.

My advice would be to read a lot and get inspiration from everything, but really try to be unique and not to copy lines or plots. And keep at it, you'll get better by doing it a lot.

CrimsonAngel · 12-20-2008, 08:13 PM

im twelve thank you very much

CrimsonAngel · 12-20-2008, 09:22 PM

new comic

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Elrond · 12-21-2008, 02:15 AM

LOL actually laughed at that YAY my name is used

cameo time could i be in it? as like a villian or something?? it would be fun plus i like the new outfits are very stylish that small guys hot LOL just kiding

Lissou · 12-21-2008, 03:37 AM

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im twelve thank you very much

I didn't mean you were under 10. I meant that if you have been reading oots for years, then you must have started reading when you were under 10.
Not sure if that's what you were answering to, but I thought I'd clarify.

Dallas-Dakota · 12-21-2008, 03:47 AM

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Third panel, It's 'Those pore animals', not thoes pore animals'.
/nitpick.

But I think you have potential.
And made the text clouds line thinner.

If you want to express how they're shouting or something, use '!', or bolded or enlarged text maybe?

Lissou · 12-21-2008, 06:45 AM

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Third panel, It's 'Those pore animals', not thoes pore animals'.
/nitpick.

(You had "poor" right. It's "Those poor animals". Not "pore".)

Lissou · 12-21-2008, 08:40 AM

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Isn't a pore like a pimple or something?

Yes and no. A pore is the part though which your skin breathes if I'm not mistaken. A pimple appears when a pore gets infected I think. Or maybe it's black heads. Anyway, you have pores everywhere on your skin, even when it's healthy, so it's not /like/ a pimple, but still skin-related.

CrimsonAngel · 12-21-2008, 08:42 AM

So that guy up there said the animals had pores (yes they do but still)

Dallas-Dakota · 12-21-2008, 08:43 AM

Lissou is correct, I think.

And Crimsonangel, you can always blame it on the intellegence of the character ^^

CrimsonAngel · 12-21-2008, 08:47 AM

The only dumb ones are Kyle and Allen...

Oh sorry you don't know who there names are yet!

I'll make a character Bio later.

Does anyone know how to put a spoiler in a spoiler?

Tiffanie Lirle · 12-21-2008, 08:56 AM

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Does anyone know how to put a spoiler in a spoiler?

Just like you'd put anything else in a spoiler.

[.spoiler][.spoiler]See?[./spoiler][./spoiler]

And without the dots.

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CrimsonAngel · 12-21-2008, 08:57 AM

Thanks!

Oregano · 12-21-2008, 09:00 AM

I'd recommend keeping text within a few sizes of each other and using one size(10 maybe) for whispering, another(12) for talking and (14 or 16) for shouting.

The art's alright, what software do you use?

CrimsonAngel · 12-21-2008, 09:03 AM

I use inkscape.

Oregano · 12-21-2008, 09:22 AM

Right, that's what I use. I'd reccommend making the outline's of the character's a tad thicker then they should look right, I hope to see improvements in the art in coming weeks/months because it's good but has a lot more potential.

CrimsonAngel · 12-21-2008, 09:30 AM

character bio is posted

CrimsonAngel · 12-21-2008, 09:34 AM

I'm having a banner contest. Winner gets a trophy.

OH! Did I mention it's a shiney trophey?

Also, I'll add them to my comic as a hero/villaine.

Banners should include a picture, a caption (maybe) and authers name, and the comics name (obviously. Other than that go crazy!

Threeshades · 12-21-2008, 09:39 AM

It's improving. Now as said already try to keep consistent font sizes. And if the writing doesn't fit in the speech balloon, try realigning the lines or changing the speech balloon, but dont warp the writing.

Also try to keep the thickness of your outlines consistent. Only make the lines thicker on really huge objects or creatures.

Tiffanie Lirle · 12-21-2008, 09:41 AM

So have you even got a name for the comic yet?

Otherwise there might be a few problems with making a banner.

CrimsonAngel · 12-21-2008, 09:42 AM

Sorry, I get lazy sometimes, plus I don't realy want to spend an hour clicking on 2,000 different pieces to change thier size. I only do that with avatars and small 3-4 pannel comics