Re: WAR GAMES! an oots style webcomic.
hmmm...
so which side am I supposed to be rooting for?
while starting off in the middle of combat is generally a tried and true method of pulling people into the story, this just seems to be one random event after another. character and plot devices are introduced in one comic, and then killed/resolved one or two comics later. I don't know the who/what/when/where or why the fighting is taking place. seemingly plot-relevant characters are killed in a few strips after they're introduced, and your only joke thus far was a reference to a movie that glorified what was hands-down the most evil nation in history until the nazis came along. that and killing a rabbit. neither of which are particularly original or funny.
because I don't know any of the characters or what/why they're fighting, I feel little drama in their sudden deaths.
also, in one panel the spear is falling point away from a dead guard, and in the next he's somehow been impaled on his own spear. what's up with that?
all in all, I think you could be doing better.
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