So yeah. I'm making an OOTS-style webcomic. It's comedic, yet an ongoing storyline. It starts out with a multiclass Fighter/Paladin named Lloyd Zephyr looking to organize an adventuring party, and quickly mushrooms from there into something much bigger...
Nice comic so far. You've done well making the characters dynamic rather than overly copying and pasting like a lot of fancomcs do. The jokes are also funny so far.
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What you could improve on is composition, especially with regards to the text/ speech bubbles.
Some of the text looks a bit cramped up, and sometimes you haven't arranged it in a way that enforces how the character is speaking. For example, in the very first panel you could have split the text up into sentences and had the speech bubbles in the centre, since him talking is the only thing happening.
You also don't need so much of the horse in the panel, especially if he's not doing anything. It just leads it being visually confusing when characters overlap.
Do you plan out the panels before you start drawing with vectors? Doing a quick sketch might help.
Keep up the good work! I'm looking forward to seeing more.
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Is Remus going to be a main character? Deceptively useless animal companions are the best.
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And then the reverse-reverse happens. And then the universe implodes and creates a gigantic black hole. The end.
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Yes, I really quoted myself and put it in my signature. You can't honestly say you never thought something you said was so awesome you wanted to make it into a quote and put it in your signature, can you?
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Okay, maybe you can.
Why did I buy Teleporking.com? I have no idea. Am I rich yet?
I like it so far too as well also.
only thing is, are their limbs long intentionally?
Yes they are. I find it provides for a greater range of movement. It may be OOTS-style, but that doesn't mean I can't take some liberties to fit my own preferences.
Apparently I haven't said anything yet, but I'll be watching this comic.
Also, I almost got Murphy's Law mixed up with Godwin's Law when trying to remember what the title meant. Now I'm wondering how a webcomic based on Godwin's Law would work...
Also, I almost got Murphy's Law mixed up with Godwin's Law when trying to remember what the title meant. Now I'm wondering how a webcomic based on Godwin's Law would work...
My life expectancy in the Playground would be measured in seconds after the first post, no matter how much I tried to excuse myself by saying, "I'm Jewish, I can say it, it's okay!"
Murphy's Law: Anything that can possibly go wrong will.
Ahhhh so it IS Sods law...
Cept... like the American version... which makes it inferior
partly cuz its the American version, but mainly as its not as silly a name as "Sods law"
By the way, you should set up your first post the same way I set up mine. Putting direct links in an archive and posting the newest one in image form. Otherwise, eventually the thread will slow down.
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Doing a quick sketch might help.
