2/28/2013 - Update on Thumb
12/31/2012 - There's a New Comic
12/12/2012 - The "Lost" Holiday Ornament (and Child's Play)
11/26/2012 - Leftover OOTS Swag on Sale (+Thumb Report)
Frequently Asked Questions (FAQ)

Order of the Stick 889 Get Real
Erfworld 163 The End of Book One
Erfworld Now at Erfworld.com!
RSS Feeds: OOTS

The Duke's Wolf, Part Four by Amber E. Scott
The Duke's Wolf, Part Three by Amber E. Scott
The Duke's Wolf, Part Two by Amber E. Scott

The New World, Part 9: Barbarians by Rich Burlew
The New World, Part 8: Gnomes by Rich Burlew
The New World, Part 7: Names and Cultures by Rich Burlew
Looking for the Gaming Articles?

 



Welcome back! Be sure you have read and understand the Forum Rules.


Go Back   Giant in the Playground Forums > Comics > Arts and Crafts
Register FAQ Members List Mark Forums Read End

Arts and Crafts The place to talk about stick figure avatars, graphic design, fan art, or any application of the visual arts and creative writing--or just to show off your latest masterwork!

Reply
 
Thread Tools
Old 06-22-2010, 03:39 PM   Top  -  End  -  #1
Blue Ghost
Firbolg in the Playground
 
 
Join Date: Jul 2008
Location: 
Thulcandra
Gender: Male
Default Chronicle of the D War: A Story from the Playground

After some prompting from some friends, I've decided to relaunch this project. I will be writing a series of short vignettes about my experience from the D War. Don't expect too much in terms of quality writing or a coherent storyline.
If anyone who had participated in the events described would like to contribute a chapter, it would be greatly appreciated. Please PM me first, however.

Table of Contents:
__________________

Blue Ghost, Lawful Good generalist wizard, at your service.
Love wins. S'agapo.

Avatar by azuyomi244.

Last edited by Blue Ghost : 08-19-2010 at 08:05 PM.
Blue Ghost is offline   Reply With Quote
Old 06-22-2010, 03:40 PM   Top  -  End  -  #2
Blue Ghost
Firbolg in the Playground
 
 
Join Date: Jul 2008
Location: 
Thulcandra
Gender: Male
Default Re: Chronicle of the D War: A Story from the Playground

Prologue

Spoiler
__________________

Blue Ghost, Lawful Good generalist wizard, at your service.
Love wins. S'agapo.

Avatar by azuyomi244.
Blue Ghost is offline   Reply With Quote
Old 06-22-2010, 04:32 PM   Top  -  End  -  #3
Lix Lorn
Titan in the Playground
 
 
Join Date: Feb 2010
Location: 
Missing her corner
Gender: Male2Female
Default Re: Chronicle of the D War: A Story from the Playground

(Applause)
Blue, you are AWESOME and I cannot wait for more!
__________________
Recent Homebrew:
Who said books can't hurt you? Fire Emblem Tomes
Pick a celestial, any celestial
Valley Dwarves-Vodka, Blizzards, and Wolves
Spoiler

Spoiler
Lix Lorn is offline   Reply With Quote
Old 06-22-2010, 11:43 PM   Top  -  End  -  #4
Blue Ghost
Firbolg in the Playground
 
 
Join Date: Jul 2008
Location: 
Thulcandra
Gender: Male
Default Re: Chronicle of the D War: A Story from the Playground

I was hoping to get the first chapter up today, but it seems that writing narrative is more difficult for me than I thought. It will be up tomorrow, I promise.
__________________

Blue Ghost, Lawful Good generalist wizard, at your service.
Love wins. S'agapo.

Avatar by azuyomi244.
Blue Ghost is offline   Reply With Quote
Old 06-23-2010, 02:42 AM   Top  -  End  -  #5
Je dit Viola
Barbarian in the Playground
 
 
Join Date: Sep 2008
Location: 
Just around the riverbend
Gender: Female
Default Re: Chronicle of the D War: A Story from the Playground

*applesauce*
It was pretty good!

Ooh, ooh! Can I write one? (Of course, including some of the stuff that happened in the Kiss or Kill thread, just before it)
(('cause, y'know, I was there.))

(Note: I'm writing this in spite of how much I detest writing about myself.)
In addition, if Blue writes about this same thing, then they don't technically contradict, because of the way mine's set up. Could be falsified, or something.

No more hugs
Spoiler


Dun dun duuuuuuunnnnnnn! ()

Okay, now back to your regularly scheduled stories.
__________________
Dolly by Recaiden:

I'm gone for a couple of years!
I'm off doing service in developing countries in South America
(Very little chance of internet access) - I'll try to come back afterwards
Je dit Viola is offline   Reply With Quote
Old 06-23-2010, 03:48 AM   Top  -  End  -  #6
Lix Lorn
Titan in the Playground
 
 
Join Date: Feb 2010
Location: 
Missing her corner
Gender: Male2Female
Default Re: Chronicle of the D War: A Story from the Playground

...
I want to hug a physical embodiment of evil. The irony is delicious...

Oh, and nice chapter. ^_^
__________________
Recent Homebrew:
Who said books can't hurt you? Fire Emblem Tomes
Pick a celestial, any celestial
Valley Dwarves-Vodka, Blizzards, and Wolves
Spoiler

Spoiler

Last edited by Lix Lorn : 06-23-2010 at 03:48 AM.
Lix Lorn is offline   Reply With Quote
Old 06-23-2010, 07:29 AM   Top  -  End  -  #7
Saint Nil
Bugbear in the Playground
 
 
Join Date: Mar 2008
Default Re: Chronicle of the D War: A Story from the Playground

Awesome work both of you! It might be interesting for others to add their own experiences to the work, while the main story would be conveyed by Blue. Anyway, glad to have this back.
__________________
Avatar by Logalmier

Spoiler
Saint Nil is offline   Reply With Quote
Old 06-23-2010, 10:53 AM   Top  -  End  -  #8
Blue Ghost
Firbolg in the Playground
 
 
Join Date: Jul 2008
Location: 
Thulcandra
Gender: Male
Default Re: Chronicle of the D War: A Story from the Playground

Ooh, thanks, Viola! That was excellent. Just what I was looking for. But now I cannot possibly outdo that...
But I would like to ask that any further chapters that others would like to contribute be PMed to me, so that this thread would not have to be closed.
__________________

Blue Ghost, Lawful Good generalist wizard, at your service.
Love wins. S'agapo.

Avatar by azuyomi244.
Blue Ghost is offline   Reply With Quote
Old 06-23-2010, 01:14 PM   Top  -  End  -  #9
Blue Ghost
Firbolg in the Playground
 
 
Join Date: Jul 2008
Location: 
Thulcandra
Gender: Male
Default Re: Chronicle of the D War: A Story from the Playground

Okay, I have finally completed the first chapter.

Alliance Drawn
Spoiler
__________________

Blue Ghost, Lawful Good generalist wizard, at your service.
Love wins. S'agapo.

Avatar by azuyomi244.
Blue Ghost is offline   Reply With Quote
Old 06-23-2010, 02:56 PM   Top  -  End  -  #10
Lix Lorn
Titan in the Playground
 
 
Join Date: Feb 2010
Location: 
Missing her corner
Gender: Male2Female
Default Re: Chronicle of the D War: A Story from the Playground

Ooooh. Tension and drama. <3
__________________
Recent Homebrew:
Who said books can't hurt you? Fire Emblem Tomes
Pick a celestial, any celestial
Valley Dwarves-Vodka, Blizzards, and Wolves
Spoiler

Spoiler
Lix Lorn is offline   Reply With Quote
Old 06-23-2010, 05:10 PM   Top  -  End  -  #11
Je dit Viola
Barbarian in the Playground
 
 
Join Date: Sep 2008
Location: 
Just around the riverbend
Gender: Female
Default Re: Chronicle of the D War: A Story from the Playground

((Oops. My bad. I promise I won't do it again.))

That's a nice first chapter! It's pretty great. And it has lots of dialogue, too!
__________________
Dolly by Recaiden:

I'm gone for a couple of years!
I'm off doing service in developing countries in South America
(Very little chance of internet access) - I'll try to come back afterwards
Je dit Viola is offline   Reply With Quote
Old 06-23-2010, 05:12 PM   Top  -  End  -  #12
ThePhantom
Bugbear in the Playground
 
 
Join Date: Jan 2008
Location: 
Hiding in the shadows
Gender: Male
Default Re: Chronicle of the D War: A Story from the Playground

I'm confused. Is this the second D War, or the first? I thought the brethen were only in the second.
__________________
Avatar by The Randomizer
ThePhantom is online now   Reply With Quote
Old 06-23-2010, 05:21 PM   Top  -  End  -  #13
Blue Ghost
Firbolg in the Playground
 
 
Join Date: Jul 2008
Location: 
Thulcandra
Gender: Male
Default Re: Chronicle of the D War: A Story from the Playground

Quote:
Originally Posted by Je dit Viola View Post
((Oops. My bad. I promise I won't do it again.))

That's a nice first chapter! It's pretty great. And it has lots of dialogue, too!
Sorry, it's my fault. I should have told you earlier. I really appreciate your contribution, Viola.

Quote:
Originally Posted by ThePhantom View Post
I'm confused. Is this the second D War, or the first? I thought the brethen were only in the second.
The Brethren were in the first as well. They were on our side, fighting against D_Lord. Remember?
__________________

Blue Ghost, Lawful Good generalist wizard, at your service.
Love wins. S'agapo.

Avatar by azuyomi244.

Last edited by Blue Ghost : 06-23-2010 at 05:21 PM.
Blue Ghost is offline   Reply With Quote
Old 06-23-2010, 05:28 PM   Top  -  End  -  #14
ThePhantom
Bugbear in the Playground
 
 
Join Date: Jan 2008
Location: 
Hiding in the shadows
Gender: Male
Default Re: Chronicle of the D War: A Story from the Playground

Oh. Things got mixed together. My mistake.
__________________
Avatar by The Randomizer
ThePhantom is online now   Reply With Quote
Old 06-24-2010, 08:02 AM   Top  -  End  -  #15
Saint Nil
Bugbear in the Playground
 
 
Join Date: Mar 2008
Default Re: Chronicle of the D War: A Story from the Playground

Ah, so its the clone wars. Good, because I felt the second D War was a little too much like kids on (ironically) a playground.

I stab you with my sword!
No, I'm immune!
You said you were immune to fireballs!
I'm immune to those too!

The first D-War had a little bit more..stability..in my opinion.

Anyway, very nice first chapter, and you did a good job introducing several of the sides. Will the next one focus on D Lord, or will all the stories you write come from your view point, while someone like Viola could write ones about her and D-Lord while Grim could write the sneakyness of the Brethren.
__________________
Avatar by Logalmier

Spoiler
Saint Nil is offline   Reply With Quote
Old 06-24-2010, 10:32 AM   Top  -  End  -  #16
Lix Lorn
Titan in the Playground
 
 
Join Date: Feb 2010
Location: 
Missing her corner
Gender: Male2Female
Default Re: Chronicle of the D War: A Story from the Playground

I wasn't even there. This is all new to me. XD
__________________
Recent Homebrew:
Who said books can't hurt you? Fire Emblem Tomes
Pick a celestial, any celestial
Valley Dwarves-Vodka, Blizzards, and Wolves
Spoiler

Spoiler
Lix Lorn is offline   Reply With Quote
Old 06-24-2010, 11:29 AM   Top  -  End  -  #17
Blue Ghost
Firbolg in the Playground
 
 
Join Date: Jul 2008
Location: 
Thulcandra
Gender: Male
Default Re: Chronicle of the D War: A Story from the Playground

Quote:
Originally Posted by Saint Nil View Post
Ah, so its the clone wars. Good, because I felt the second D War was a little too much like kids on (ironically) a playground.

I stab you with my sword!
No, I'm immune!
You said you were immune to fireballs!
I'm immune to those too!

The first D-War had a little bit more..stability..in my opinion.

Anyway, very nice first chapter, and you did a good job introducing several of the sides. Will the next one focus on D Lord, or will all the stories you write come from your view point, while someone like Viola could write ones about her and D-Lord while Grim could write the sneakyness of the Brethren.
I believe the Clone War was another event, which happened even earlier. I alluded to it in that last chapter. I'm going to be writing about the D War, which, unfortunately, was just what you said. I'm going to dread writing the battle scenes (maybe someone else will write them for me), but there were several interesting and very significant things that happened in between the battles that I'm eager to address.
The next chapter will be dealing with D_Lord and Viola. Viola may not like writing about Viola, but I do.
__________________

Blue Ghost, Lawful Good generalist wizard, at your service.
Love wins. S'agapo.

Avatar by azuyomi244.
Blue Ghost is offline   Reply With Quote
Old 06-24-2010, 12:04 PM   Top  -  End  -  #18
Lix Lorn
Titan in the Playground
 
 
Join Date: Feb 2010
Location: 
Missing her corner
Gender: Male2Female
Default Re: Chronicle of the D War: A Story from the Playground

Quote:
Originally Posted by Blue Ghost View Post
Viola may not like writing about Viola, but I do.
Ship. (Shot)
...well, it's a perfectly logical response!
__________________
Recent Homebrew:
Who said books can't hurt you? Fire Emblem Tomes
Pick a celestial, any celestial
Valley Dwarves-Vodka, Blizzards, and Wolves
Spoiler

Spoiler

Last edited by Lix Lorn : 06-24-2010 at 12:05 PM.
Lix Lorn is offline   Reply With Quote
Old 06-24-2010, 12:20 PM   Top  -  End  -  #19
Blue Ghost
Firbolg in the Playground
 
 
Join Date: Jul 2008
Location: 
Thulcandra
Gender: Male
Default Re: Chronicle of the D War: A Story from the Playground

Another chapter completed. It shares some themes with Viola's chapter, which is to be expected, since we're describing essentially the same event.
I found the multicolored chaos that characterizes D_Lord's speech difficult to follow, so I just used a shade of DimGray instead. I hope you don't mind, D_Lord.

Dark Heart
Spoiler
__________________

Blue Ghost, Lawful Good generalist wizard, at your service.
Love wins. S'agapo.

Avatar by azuyomi244.
Blue Ghost is offline   Reply With Quote
Old 06-24-2010, 01:35 PM   Top  -  End  -  #20
Lix Lorn
Titan in the Playground
 
 
Join Date: Feb 2010
Location: 
Missing her corner
Gender: Male2Female
Default Re: Chronicle of the D War: A Story from the Playground

Will I be smitten by a mighty and evil being if I ship ViolaD_Lord?

(Not that that would stop me.)
__________________
Recent Homebrew:
Who said books can't hurt you? Fire Emblem Tomes
Pick a celestial, any celestial
Valley Dwarves-Vodka, Blizzards, and Wolves
Spoiler

Spoiler
Lix Lorn is offline   Reply With Quote
Old 06-24-2010, 01:38 PM   Top  -  End  -  #21
ThePhantom
Bugbear in the Playground
 
 
Join Date: Jan 2008
Location: 
Hiding in the shadows
Gender: Male
Default Re: Chronicle of the D War: A Story from the Playground

On D_Lord's behalf, I will tell you the answer to that question.

YES.

(Besides, he didn't give his permission for that.)
__________________
Avatar by The Randomizer
ThePhantom is online now   Reply With Quote
Old 06-24-2010, 01:52 PM   Top  -  End  -  #22
Blue Ghost
Firbolg in the Playground
 
 
Join Date: Jul 2008
Location: 
Thulcandra
Gender: Male
Default Re: Chronicle of the D War: A Story from the Playground

Quote:
Originally Posted by ThePhantom View Post
On D_Lord's behalf, I will tell you the answer to that question.

YES.

(Besides, he didn't give his permission for that.)
That was in response to Lix and not me, right?
It probably is best if we lay off the shipping for now.
__________________

Blue Ghost, Lawful Good generalist wizard, at your service.
Love wins. S'agapo.

Avatar by azuyomi244.
Blue Ghost is offline   Reply With Quote
Old 06-24-2010, 02:42 PM   Top  -  End  -  #23
ThePhantom
Bugbear in the Playground
 
 
Join Date: Jan 2008
Location: 
Hiding in the shadows
Gender: Male
Default Re: Chronicle of the D War: A Story from the Playground

To Lix. We don't want this thread closed, so no shipping.
__________________
Avatar by The Randomizer
ThePhantom is online now   Reply With Quote
Old 06-24-2010, 02:51 PM   Top  -  End  -  #24
D_Lord
Barbarian in the Playground
 
 
Join Date: Jan 2008
Location: 
In the interdimoinal viod
Default Re: Chronicle of the D War: A Story from the Playground

Lets see, love it Blue, Nice Viola, and to Lix Lorn
Spoiler

Spoiler
__________________
AvatarbyNeoSeph7

I fought you all!!!!!
Spoiler

Last edited by D_Lord : 06-24-2010 at 02:56 PM.
D_Lord is offline   Reply With Quote
Old 06-24-2010, 03:59 PM   Top  -  End  -  #25
Lix Lorn
Titan in the Playground
 
 
Join Date: Feb 2010
Location: 
Missing her corner
Gender: Male2Female
Default Re: Chronicle of the D War: A Story from the Playground

I think just saying it is fine, otherwise I wouldn't have done.

That'd be awesome if he did. I'd just keep dodging and offer to stop if he made me his Dragon.
__________________
Recent Homebrew:
Who said books can't hurt you? Fire Emblem Tomes
Pick a celestial, any celestial
Valley Dwarves-Vodka, Blizzards, and Wolves
Spoiler

Spoiler
Lix Lorn is offline   Reply With Quote
Old 06-24-2010, 05:05 PM   Top  -  End  -  #26
Je dit Viola
Barbarian in the Playground
 
 
Join Date: Sep 2008
Location: 
Just around the riverbend
Gender: Female
Default Re: Chronicle of the D War: A Story from the Playground

It's good, that part is. And, you're right. Doing a single color looks a whole lot easier than planning out when to switch colors, and what to.

One odd quirky suggestion, though. Every time you do speaking, you always put action text before, then speech text after. There's nothing wrong with that. However, to me, it seems really repetitive.
Maybe you could try putting the speech text between action text or the speech text before the action text once in a while? That way, it won't look so
Stuff happens here, "Stuff gets said here"
More stuff happens, "Text starts to blend into spoiler box and is easily skipped over."
Again, more stuff happens here, and then, "This is said."

(Confusing enough, or do you need more clarification about what I'm trying to say?)
__________________
Dolly by Recaiden:

I'm gone for a couple of years!
I'm off doing service in developing countries in South America
(Very little chance of internet access) - I'll try to come back afterwards
Je dit Viola is offline   Reply With Quote
Old 06-24-2010, 05:17 PM   Top  -  End  -  #27
Blue Ghost
Firbolg in the Playground
 
 
Join Date: Jul 2008
Location: 
Thulcandra
Gender: Male
Default Re: Chronicle of the D War: A Story from the Playground

Hmm, I will consider that. Thanks!
__________________

Blue Ghost, Lawful Good generalist wizard, at your service.
Love wins. S'agapo.

Avatar by azuyomi244.
Blue Ghost is offline   Reply With Quote
Old 06-28-2010, 07:48 PM   Top  -  End  -  #28
Blue Ghost
Firbolg in the Playground
 
 
Join Date: Jul 2008
Location: 
Thulcandra
Gender: Male
Default Re: Chronicle of the D War: A Story from the Playground

An Unexpected Visit
Spoiler


Sorry about the delay, as well as the slip in quality. This piece didn't come as naturally to me as the ones before. I'm still not sure where the developments here will be going.
__________________

Blue Ghost, Lawful Good generalist wizard, at your service.
Love wins. S'agapo.

Avatar by azuyomi244.
Blue Ghost is offline   Reply With Quote
Old 06-29-2010, 12:20 AM   Top  -  End  -  #29
Je dit Viola
Barbarian in the Playground
 
 
Join Date: Sep 2008
Location: 
Just around the riverbend
Gender: Female
Default Re: Chronicle of the D War: A Story from the Playground

Joining up with Randomizer? Oh no!

Delays are alright, in my opinion. It just means you were busy.

(I see you took my suggestion! It looks better. But if that was the cause of the lack of flow, then you don't have to do it.)
__________________
Dolly by Recaiden:

I'm gone for a couple of years!
I'm off doing service in developing countries in South America
(Very little chance of internet access) - I'll try to come back afterwards
Je dit Viola is offline   Reply With Quote
Old 06-29-2010, 04:00 AM   Top  -  End  -  #30
Lix Lorn
Titan in the Playground
 
 
Join Date: Feb 2010
Location: 
Missing her corner
Gender: Male2Female
Default Re: Chronicle of the D War: A Story from the Playground

Blue and... the Randomiser? Working together?

Watch out, Blue... you're on a slippery slope, and the moral event horizons only half way down.
__________________
Recent Homebrew:
Who said books can't hurt you? Fire Emblem Tomes
Pick a celestial, any celestial
Valley Dwarves-Vodka, Blizzards, and Wolves
Spoiler

Spoiler
Lix Lorn is offline   Reply With Quote
Reply


Thread Tools

Posting Rules
You may not post new threads
You may not post replies
You may not post attachments
You may not edit your posts

vB code is On
Smilies are On
[IMG] code is On
HTML code is Off



All times are GMT -5. The time now is 10:10 AM.



Powered by vBulletin®
Copyright ©2000 - 2013, Jelsoft Enterprises Ltd.
Usage of this site, including but not limited to making or editing a post or private message or the creation of an account, constitutes acceptance of the Forum Rules.