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Defiance - 2GGBB
Creature - Demon Avatar - M
Persist, Unleash, Trample
When Defiance enters the battlefield, if it has no counters on it you lose half your life total, rounded up. I will not rest, heedless of the costs.
6/6
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Virulent Hemoplague 5B
Sorcery-R
Destroy target creature you don't control. Each opponent loses life equal to the total toughness of creatures destroyed this way.
Overload 6BBBB (You may cast this spell for its overload cost. If you do, change its text by replacing all instances of "target" with "each".) The disease has one symptom: violent expulsion of all blood from the body. It's rather easy to spot.
Galvanic Dragon 3UR
Creature - Dragon R
Flying
Each instant and sorcery spell in your hand has overload. The overload cost is equal to its mana cost.
4/4
Are we allowed to critique the wording of each other's cards, or is that strictly up to the judge?
You can but please do so using spoilers and don't make really, really long or massive posts. This is more a place for the cards themselves.
I will note that Populate doesn't target. If you're not sure of the exact wordings of the keywords themselves, I think they're available in the Comp. Rulebook now.
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Population Bomb 1[G/W]
Instant - R
Populate. (Put a token onto the battlefield that's a copy of a creature token you control.)
Overload 3[W/G][W/G] (You may cast this spell for its overload cost. If you do, change its text by replacing all instances of "target" with "each.")
"We will need ever greater numbers to defend us now."
This isn't actually going to work the way you think it is. Populate is a keyword action; the reminder text is there to tell you what it does and isn't actually 'present', as it were, causing the Populate to not be affected by Overload. Might I suggest, "For target creature token you control, populate," followed by the Overload cost? It isn't quite what you intended (and if you don't Overload it the wording looks slightly weird) but it'll get a similar job done.
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Wow! Not only was that awesome, I think I actually kinda understand Archeron now. If all the "intermediate" outer planes got that kind of treatment, I doubt there would be anywhere near as many critics of their utility.
Lord Gareth, your wording doesn't work either. Populate is a game action that specifically replaces the game text "Choose a creature token you control and put a token onto the battlefield that's a copy of that creature token" on cards.
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701.27. Populate
701.27a To populate means to choose a creature token you control and put a token onto the battlefield that's a copy of that creature token.
The card works differently than what it appears. Yours does cause a lot of Populating, but not in the way that I believe the card is intended (which is that instead of only choosing 1 token, you choose all of them). Your card would let me, for example, make 3 centaurs if I controlled a Centaur and 2 birds. If you wanted what I perceive is the intended effect, you'd need this wording:
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For target creature you control, put a token onto the battlefield that's a copy of it.
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Presence of the Worldswarm- WWGGGBB
Legendary Enchantment - M
Whenever a token creature you control dies, populate.
Creature cards in your graveyard have Scavenge. The Scavenge cost is equal to the creature's mana cost. When the Selesnya and Golgari fused, death itself bent to the will of the Worldmind.
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Lord Gareth, your wording doesn't work either. Populate is a game action that specifically replaces the game text "Choose a creature token you control and put a token onto the battlefield that's a copy of that creature token" on cards.
The card works differently than what it appears. Yours does cause a lot of Populating, but not in the way that I believe the card is intended (which is that instead of only choosing 1 token, you choose all of them). Your card would let me, for example, make 3 centaurs if I controlled a Centaur and 2 birds. If you wanted what I perceive is the intended effect, you'd need this wording:
Oh certainly. I suggested the wording I did assuming that the poster in question wanted to keep Populate in addition to Overload.
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Wow! Not only was that awesome, I think I actually kinda understand Archeron now. If all the "intermediate" outer planes got that kind of treatment, I doubt there would be anywhere near as many critics of their utility.
Yeah, I'm not really sure about the wording either. I'll take another look at it when I get home. Then again, I may just leave it as it is, all failish, as DMofdarkness's card is even cooler.
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Fatigue makes me wax philosophic and/or babble. If I've posted something strange and tangential, that is probably the cause. This entry would be an example.
Fatigue makes me wax philosophic and/or babble. If I've posted something strange and tangential, that is probably the cause. This entry would be an example.
Think we can call this round done? There's been no further entries in awhile.
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Wow! Not only was that awesome, I think I actually kinda understand Archeron now. If all the "intermediate" outer planes got that kind of treatment, I doubt there would be anywhere near as many critics of their utility.
Yes, it has been a week since I made this one. Was a little frazzled recently. Well, time to grade everything and stuff! I'll probably put up my judgments sometime today.
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Lockdown - W/U
Instant - U
Detain target creature you don't control.
Overload 3WU (You may cast this spell for its overload cost. If you do, change its text by replacing all instances of "target" with "each.") "Our Sovereign Lord the King chargeth and commandeth all persons, being assembled, immediately to disperse themselves, and peaceably to depart to their habitations, or to their lawful business, upon the pains contained in the act made in the first year of King George, for preventing tumults and riotous assemblies. God Save the King!"
This card seems interesting. Nothing too special, just does what it's supposed to do. Probably fine, but doesn't impress me.
Unfortunately, the flavor text is very, very long ad I'm not sure whaat it refers to. Because it is lost on me, I feel an opportunity to explain why exactly this card has Overload was really missed. The flavor of pushing so much magic into this spell that it causes a grand explosion rather than a single targeted effect is somewhat lost.
Lord_Gareth
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Are we allowed to critique the wording of each other's cards, or is that strictly up to the judge?
In any event:
Thundersong Riotbreaker (2)WR Creature - Human Soldier [Uncommon]
[Tap]: Detain target creature and up to one other tapped creature. The enchanted Thundersong Trumpets proved insufficient to contain the chaos unleashed by the breaking of the Guildpact. Luckily, replacements were swiftly developed.
2/2
Dat Boros.
Interesting. I see where you went with this, except there's a key problem with the wording of this card: if the targeted creature becomes no longer a legal target, say because it leaves the battlefield in response, nothing gets detained. I dislike this effect and find it very weird. Also, repeatable free Detain? Martial Law is bad, but this card is even worse.
You also have some formatting issues, but they're not unreadable and don't confuse me, so it's not a detriment this round. The general mode is to use T as the tap symbol and just numbers when there is colorless mana in a mana cost.
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Defiance - 2GGBB
Creature - Demon Avatar - M
Persist, Unleash, Trample
When Defiance enters the battlefield, if it has no counters on it you lose half your life total, rounded up. I will not rest, heedless of the costs.
6/6
This card is problematic to me. While you've done some work in making Unleash and Persist work together, I'm pretty sure this doesn't actually work. The creature does enter the battlefield with counters: a -1/-1 counter and a +1/+1 counter. So the ability won't trigger at all, then the counters will be removed as a state-based effect. As a result, the card is just broken.
If it was somehow designed to function how you wanted it to, I'd find it a bit questionable. The Infinite Creature isn't very interesting to me, and there are ways to break this in half even with the drawback. I mean, is Melira+Kitchen Finks+Sac Outlet really that interesting?
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Virulent Hemoplague 5B
Sorcery-R
Destroy target creature you don't control. Each opponent loses life equal to the total toughness of creatures destroyed this way.
Overload 6BBBB (You may cast this spell for its overload cost. If you do, change its text by replacing all instances of "target" with "each".) The disease has one symptom: violent expulsion of all blood from the body. It's rather easy to spot.
An interesting and well-implemented alternative take on Overload. I like it. The flavor is kind of strange, but I see the Overload for sure. My biggest issue with it is the way the life loss clause has to be formatted.
I think it's kind of interesting, but really this card just seems like the kind of card I would hate because it would be an Exsanguinate-style game over. Though I guess that's not really a bad thing.
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Galvanic Dragon 3UR
Creature - Dragon R
Flying
Each instant and sorcery spell in your hand has overload. The overload cost is equal to its mana cost.
4/4
This card would be so cool if it actually worked very well. Unfortunately, there are some really weird things that happen as a result of this card. Some cards are a bit more pedestrian, like Murder. Others are very confusing. What happens when you Overload an Arc Trail or other card with two targets of the same type? I honestly don't know. What happens hen you Overload a Flames of the Firebrand? Confusion sets in here, as the language on these cards doesn't make sense.
I'm not actually sure how this works, and as a result I'm pretty sure this card can't win. But I'm pretty sure stuff like this is the reason why Overload isn't granted to other cards.
DMofDarkness
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Presence of the Worldswarm- WWGGGBB
Legendary Enchantment - M
Whenever a token creature you control dies, populate.
Creature cards in your graveyard have Scavenge. The Scavenge cost is equal to the creature's mana cost. When the Selesnya and Golgari fused, death itself bent to the will of the Worldmind.
At first these effects seem really broken, but then I remember that it costs 7 mana. So it's not that ridiculous that your tokens Populate themselves.
I like it, I think it combines the abilities to great effect and with amazing flavor.
Istari
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Town Guard 1WW
Creature - C
T: Detain target creature
1/2 "Stop right there criminal scum!"
Repeatable detain for no mana cost is pretty broken in Limited. Playing with Martial Law has made this clear to me. Making this a common is a mistake. The card is also much less interesting for this reason.
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The flavour text I used was the riot act, and I agree that I should have cut it down but I thought it lost something in the reduction. I also agree on your ruling, the worldswarm was my favorite submission out of all of them. It should be an actual card.
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The flavour text I used was the riot act, and I agree that I should have cut it down but I thought it lost something in the reduction. I also agree on your ruling, the worldswarm was my favorite submission out of all of them. It should be an actual card.
Personally, it was more that there was no real flavor indicating why it had Overload. Maybe the Azorius accidentally discovered that by forcing a lot of their energies into holding down a prisoner, they locked down an entire city block for several hours or something.
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Personally, it was more that there was no real flavor indicating why it had Overload. Maybe the Azorius accidentally discovered that by forcing a lot of their energies into holding down a prisoner, they locked down an entire city block for several hours or something.
Oh, I'm not stating that my card didn't have issues, I was just explaining the flavour text. I probably could have come up with something that fit better, but it didn't really occur to me until you mentioned it.
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Justicar of Oblivion 2WW
Creature-Human Cleric R
First Strike, Vigilance
Players can't cast spells from exile.
Permanents can't enter the battlefield from exile. "Things banished are meant to remain so."
3/4
Duran, Exiled King - 2WW
Legendary Creature - MR
Vigilance
XWW: Exile Duran, Exiled King and place X time counters on him. At the beginning of your upkeep, remove a time counter. When the last is removed, return Duran, Exiled King to the Battlefield with X +1/+1 Counters on him and place X 2/2 White Soldier Tokens with Vigilance into play.
2/2 "I will not rest until I regain may once again sit upon my throne" - Duran
Reality Gun 4
Artifact R
4: Exile target permanent.
At the beginning of your upkeep, return a card exiled by ~ to the battlefield under its owner's control.
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Willbreaker Wyrm (4)UU Creature - Dragon Illusion [Rare]
Flying, Haunt (When this creature dies, exile it haunting target creature)
You control the creature haunted by Willbreaker Wyrm. The knight slew the dragon, forcing it to find another body. Luckily, one was close at hand.
4/5
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Champion of the Pure (2)WR Creature - Human Cleric Knight [Uncommon]
First Strike
(1)WR: Put target exiled card with haunt into its owner's graveyard. Only Champion of the Pure's owner may activate this ability. "The exorcism will be painful, but relieving. Let us begin."
3/3
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The Unknowable 6BBBBBB
Legendary Creature - Horror (MR)
Flying, Trample, Indestructible, Shroud
You may cast The Unknowable from exile, but not from anywhere else.
Pay 10 life: Exile The Unknowable from your hand. Play this ability only any time you could play a sorcery.
You may exile X permanents you control and/or cards in your hand rather than pay The Unknowable's mana cost, where X is your life total.
When The Unknowable enters the battlefield, if you didn't cast it from exile, exile it and X permanents you control and/or cards from your hand, where X is your life total.
20/20
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EDIT: It got a tad wall-of-text-y, but I like this version better.
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Jehur the Timemage - 2UU
Legendary creature - Human Wizard - M
Hexproof
1U: Exile target spell that was not cast from exile, put a time counter on it. If it doesn't have suspend, it gains suspend
1U: The next time this turn you cast a spell it gains split second
1U: The next spell you cast this turn may be cast as if it has flash
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The Void Sage- 0
Legendary Artifact Creature- Human Wizard- M
Undying, Hexproof
The Void Sage may only be summoned if the other Three Sages (The Grim, Deep and Rune Sages) are exiled
The Void Sage may not be exiled
The Controler of The Void Sage may use any exiled cards as if they were in their hands
X- Exile a number of permenants whose base toughness is equal to or less then X.
The Void Sages Power and Toughness are equal to the number of cards that have been exiled
The Void Sage may not gain any Tokens or Counters
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The Grimsage- 3RBG
Legendary Artifact Creature- Human Wizard- M
Undying, Hexproof
XR- Deal X damage to target creature or player
XB- Target creature or player loses X tokens attached
XG- You gain X life, or regenerate X number of creatures
When the Grimsage is destoryed and has a +1/+1 counter, they are exiled instead of destoyed. "I am Death. I am Life. I am the cycle that defines them both."- The Grimsage of the Three Sages
3/3
The Deepsage- 3UBG
Legendary Artifact Creature- Human Wizard- M
Hexproof, Undying
XU- All cards gain either ripple or scy X intill the end of the turn
XB- You may add X cards your your graveyard to your libary, then shuffle the library
XG- You may add 2X of any color to your mana pool.
When the Deepsage is destoryed and has a +1/+1 counter, they are exiled instead of destoyed.
3/3 "The Deep hides much. I understand it all." - The Deepsage of the Three sages.
The Runesage- 3RGW
Legendary Artifact Creature- Human Wizard- M
Hexproof, Undying
XR- X number of creatures gain Haste and Double Strike
XG- X number of creatures gain Trample
XW- X number of permenants may not be exiled intill the end of the next turn
When the Runesage is destoryed and has a +1/+1 counter, they are exiled instead of destoyed.
3/3 "Each Rune, conveys a diffrent mystery."- The Rune Sage of the 3 Sages.
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Grimsage Matt, your card doesn't follow the restrictions of the contest.
Temporal Casting XU
Sorcery - R
X cannot be 5 or greater.
Put five minus X time counters on target face-up exiled nonland card you own. If it doesn't have suspend, it gains suspend. "The best magic simply doesn't exist yet."
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