So: I'm a composer. Worked with a director who also does comics. He really wants to collaborate again, but he has no budget right now (getting something together for a Cronenberg-style body horror script that is pretty awesome). So he asked me to write a comic for him to illustrate. The plan is to publish webcomic, but present in comic book style (pacing, format, etc). I'm good with concepts and general story arcs, but I'm not really a writer (other than songs), so I recognize my own weaknesses.
Anyway, I have a first (very rough) draft of the first "issue" (arc-ing 32 pages, which is a little long for a print issue, but too short for a double issue). Any feedback would be greatly appreciated. You can read it here: https://docs.google.com/open?id=0B8-...UJTNE0xcm1QbFE
Thanks in advance to anyone who takes the time to read, and I appreciate any feedback/advice you can pass along!