You might've forgot, but Diego Havoc didn't. :smallwink:
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You might've forgot, but Diego Havoc didn't. :smallwink:
X-com ponythread (it's grisly, you've been warned)
UFO 2-3, Abductions 3-4, Terror 1
Spoilerhttp://i.imgur.com/WcmCY.png
No No No No No No!
Argh, they're dead, Princess. I've killed them, I've killed them all!
http://i.imgur.com/ZiOZ1.png
There were these aliens, some kind of silicon-based thing. The lab techs are calling them chrysalids because they LAY THEIR EGGS IN THEIR VICTIMS. I'd tell you what the soldiers called them, but, y'know, NOPONY SURVIVED THE MISSION
http://i.imgur.com/TzVou.png
That's okay though, since we had such heavy losses, I decided to send in more Thanqol's on the next mission to try and capture some of the aliens. I thought maybe if we had a floater and a sectoid captive, we could catch up, and everything would be a-okay.
http://i.imgur.com/U8SiV.png
They're all dead too.
http://i.imgur.com/PDKIo.png
But that's okay, we did capture a sectoid on one of the missions. I mean, sure, most of Africa has withdrawn from the counsel. But it's fine. We'll be fine. Everypony will be just...fine
http://i.imgur.com/ZiOZ1.png
[OOC. I'll be editing in a moment of silence for all dead forum members with proper nicknames as soon as I finish the current mission. There's a lot of you. The save isn't completely dead, but losing the terror mission to 6 chrysalids screwed me pretty hard. I lost Egypt on the spot and all of Africa is panicking.]
Truth, my friends.
It's like shooting fish in a barrel, isn't it?
Wondrous grand.
X-com Ponythread in memoriam. Further lengthened because I just ran into Mutons. I should be screwed, but we might yet pull this out.
SpoilerLt. "Boomer" Maxtronaut
Lt. Jay "Yeti" Balmas
Lt. Amish "Crash" Pirate
Sgt. Tiki "Hex" Snakes
Cpl. Diego Havoc
Cpl. Forumexplorer
Sq. Otakuryoga
Sq. Gamer Lord
Sq. Sylvestor McFly
Sq. James Pokonic
Rookies Thanqol Thanqol #1-7
Your world thanks you for your sacrifice.
http://images.wikia.com/mlpfanart/im...h_saluting.jpg
My name isn't there. I think that's a good thing. Right?
:Raises hoof:
Does the X-com thread need an interceptor/avenger/Firestorm/Lightning pilot? I'd like to volunteer. Or does Twilight Sparkle knock down alien battleships with rainbow Power Of Friendship (TM) coming out of his horn or something?
Respectfully,
Brian P.
Quick! I need opinions
I decided to take one last shot at getting my story featured on EqD. I've been scouring every chapter for punctuation errors for the past two days, and I'm going to submit it in a few hours so that hopefully it can get featured before season 3 airs.
I decided to also rewrite the description, because frankly it was rather weird. So, whether you've read my story or not, what do you think of this description?
Compared to the old one:Quote:
Can a heartless pony live and love?
Rainbow Dash is divided, and she doesn't have much time left. Soon she will have to choose. To save herself and her friends, she will have to convince them to give up the Magic of Friendship. But how can she give up everything Luna suffered for?
Does it make you interested or curious? Does it draw you in? If you've read the story so far, do you think it's fitting? Any improvements I can make?Quote:
Can a heartless pony live and love? Twilight Sparkle is at a loss for answers after she finds a wounded Rainbow Dash in the forest. Meanwhile a dispute dating back to a wish Luna made thousands of years ago threatens to end in war. When even the Elements can not stop what is to come, will Twilight be forced to give up the Magic of Friendship for a wish to save everything she loves, or will she fight and lose it all?
The story is about Dash and written from her perspective so it seemed really silly that the old description mostly talks about Twilight.
That is hilarious and I don't know how I missed it the first time.
In other news, after a good day or two being too mentally exhausted (probably partly because I was up until about three finishing that TT game), and trying to decide what to play between Witcher 2, more OpenTTD or X-Com (original, for those not keeping track, since I can'y play the new one), I finally decided on... Icewind Dale 2.
(Which probably shows you why my gaming habits are so schizophrenic.)
I've only been though it once, and last time I spent hours installing it, and resetting my party for a Heart of Fury run, and then playing about twenty minutes. This time, I've spent even longer, since I decided I wanted to replace the boring fighter and boring cleric with new characters (I had toyed with starting a fresh new game, but then remembered that IWD2 is early 3.0 and it wasn't worth the effort), so created two new characters (Fighter 4/Paladin X and Druid (which, like clerics, drastically suffer from not having the later range of 3.5, but whatever) and I cranked out DaleKeeper 2 and copied the XP and equipment (mostly) from the older two characters.
I might even start playing in a minute...
I will eventually get back to AotrsCom, don't worry. (And we've got plenty of XCom stuff to be getting on with at the moment, so let's spin the joke out a bit longer, shall we?)
In regards to the underlined: not sure if it actually works, but: http://forums.steampowered.com/forum....php?t=2964408
Friendship reports
I've seen this plenty of times before but... soooo many puns.
Wow. Did they drop the rocket accuracy in classic? I only missed once during my whole normal game, and that's with two heavies on my team.
:_: i didn't get a nickname.
The second description is better, but both seem awfully busy. Like, I've no idea what a wounded Rainbow Dash has to do with any of the Luna parts, or even where the "heartless pony" bit fits in. And yeah, it is weird that the story is from Dash's perspective, when that description would make me think it's a Twilight-focused story. My advice is to stick to one of your more over-arching plot threads, and just focus on that.
It's 90%, but the RNG being what it is...
I didn't even make it past Squaddie. :smallfrown:
Keeping in mind that I haven't read the story, that I probably won't, that we have unsalvable differences regarding what "dark" is, and that these differences probably extend to the "sad" tag...Quote:
I decided to also rewrite the description, because frankly it was rather weird. So, whether you've read my story or not, what do you think of this description?
In the earlier version I like that I get some plot details, and pretty intriguing ones at that. In the revised one I like the wording better, but the rhetorical question about Luna's suffering comes a bit out of nowhere and gives no hints about the plot. I think you could do well by meeting those two versions halfway.
I'm not sure who the rhetorical question in the first line refers to. If it's supposed to refer to RD and indicate much angsting on her part, then it's doing it's job. And I do mean mean this completely unsarcastically. It also means I'm awfully turned off by this fic buuut *points back to the "unsalvable differences" bit*
Hope it helps.
That was what I tried with the new description, to turn the focus on Dash and the main dilemma of the story, where the old description is sort of all over the place and very unfocused.
You don't think the mystery and vagueness of the descriptions would make people interested in finding out what it means by reading the story? That was my intent, at least. I don't want the description to tell people what is going on (at least not outright), I want it to leave them wanting to find that out.
Hmm, I guess the Luna part needs work, then
The question does refer to RD and is a little bit of what you said, but also very literal. As in, "how the hay can a pony with no heart even live?" Maybe I need to make the literalness clear, but I don't want to risk giving too much away by doing that.
I just want to be vague and mysterious, because the story has a LOT of mystery and I don't want to ruin that mystery before people even read the first chapter. I want to draw them in, and then reveal the mysteries.
Hmm, so you all agree the Luna part needs work. I guess that's fairly conclusive, at least :smallsmile:
So what if I reduce my description to just this (with optional bits in brackets)?
It leaves out a lot compared to the original, but it's short and sort of to the point, while also very vague and mysterious.Quote:
Rainbow Dash is divided, and she doesn't have much time left [to live?]. Soon she will have to choose[, or she will lose everything?]. To save herself and her friends, she will have to convince them to give up the Magic of Friendship.
So yesterday I went to WalMart to get my daughter a new pair of sneakers and we stopped at the toy isle to browse. The pony selection (as usual) was just the basic common pony figures and a couple blind-bags. They had one of the huge talking wedding Cadence figures.
However something was trying to peek from behind the box, so I lifted it out of the way and found someone hid a couple Trixie and Lyra figures. Yay!
So I got myself a Trixie. :smallbiggrin:
Spoiler
Giant image: Captain Trixie of the Royal Guard
YEAH!! :smallbiggrin:
I like how Pinkie is totally having fun being the kiddnapped princess.
While I watched some of the G1 series, I wouldn't call myself a fan of it. Though your term is interesting.
Happy birthday, otakuryoga!
Wow, so many ponythreaders are older than me.
Hmm, good point. So maybe:
Also kinda unsure what "5 words" to use in my submission. EqD asks for that. In my previous submissions I used "Can a heartless pony live?" but with these changes I'm leaning towards something like "Can a pony fight destiny?"Quote:
Rainbow Dash is divided, and she doesn't have much time left. Soon she will have to choose. To save herself and her friends, she will have to convince them to give up the Magic of Friendship, or she can fight ... and lose.
Interesting; something to bear in mind, though I'm not sure if I'd want to risk it (you'd try it out on the demo, first I guess) and the implication is it's a bit more programming than I'm comfortable with.
But useful to know, nevertheless (I'm not actually surprised that it exists, though); something to consider one day if'n I'm bored and feeling adventurous.
Happy Birthday!
S'what I'd do...!Quote:
Originally Posted by otakuryoga
I actually did - well, not a changeling, but you get the idea - one undercover mission a few years back, chief. I gotta tell you, skinning 'em right is way harder than you'd think! The look on the guy's face when I revealed myself, though...! Totally worth it! Still makes me laugh now...