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2011-04-11, 03:35 PM (ISO 8601)
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Re: My Little Pony IV: Friendship is Sufficiently Advanced Technology

Originally Posted by TSA

A couple of suggestions, just to improve the flow of this bit.

I'd consider dropping "as a result" entirely: It seems unnecessary. I agree on the second point, though.

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