Thanks! I was worrying about that, but was having a hard time telling if it was too much of a jolt. *-delimited now
Are the rest of the tense things okay? It's really awkward to write everything in past-perfect, which is kind of where most of the action belongs*, so I just made use of it where it was the least obtrusive... Hopefully no one's too mad at me.
*Since Claaus is basically telling the story "I killed those men" and everything else is in the "things that had happened to set that up" category.