Trying desperately to get caught up with stories:
I feel that this is a little short. It's well-written, though. I'm eager to see more from you.
Much as I like this story, I feel that it's beginning to drag just a little. Probably just me, though.
There's not much I can say that hasn't already been said. This was great, I can hardly wait for the final part.
I don't like Dragonball, so that probably colored my thoughts on this story a little. I do think it's well-written, and the dialogue of the next part is good; it's just not for me.
I'm probably not unbiased with this story either; Fallout's one of my favorite game series. That said, I feel that this managed to elicit the feel and atmosphere of a Fallout game rather well. It's pretty good.