Since I'm not going to write anything else ever, I might as well do some commenting instead.

Leo Krilangi, Part 1: Not sure what to make of it. It's less story and more history, but that's what it's advertised to be. Can't say I'm fond of sapient, omniscient guiding forces behind the universe, though.

On the Origin of Species: It could stand to be longer. As it is, everything just sort of happens at once.