Quote Originally Posted by Zaq View Post
Hey, we've got an update or something.

More pointless friction between Danica and Beena that's caused by, I dunno, the fact that communication isn't a thing that can happen. More Beena trying to force relevance upon herself. And a "punchline" that's basically "lawl Beena is free-spirited."

I feel like this page is fairly emblematic of how Star Power is written. Not a single element of it feels natural. It's not just checkbox writing—it's checkbox writing that attempts to check boxes by pasting in prewritten elements that may or may not be appropriate or relevant to the story at hand. Am I being too harsh? I just really don't feel like a single part of this page actually fits elegantly with anything else.
Speaking as one who didn't follow this for a very long time, this page didn't seem so bad. At least by the nominal standards of Dominic Deegan.