I Did Some Writing! It Has Dragons! Wanna See?

[Lethologica]

Quite an interesting story, and well-written. The pacing in particular is excellent--I really enjoy watching you build to a moment.

I think putting Hatching and Reunion together was an effective choice. On the other hand, I feel like Flying Lessons suffered a little from coming after Virial and Kyrala.

In the latter, at the end--I'm not quite feeling the weight of the decision Virial is faced with. Partly it's that I haven't grown attached to the past lives, and I'm not sure how attached Virial has grown--that's just story that hasn't been told. Part of it is that I'm not sure Kyrala is ready to release agency for that decision to Virial. And part of it is that the ending is just a little bit crowded, emotionally speaking. The hope of the plan, the weight of the sacrifice, the transfer of agency--it's a bit much to take in at once. That's my opinion, anyway.

I'm excited to read more, should you post it. (No pressure.)