A title page for a comic

[ellenate]

like the title says this thread is for your feedback on a title page i'm currently working on. (which a link should be present below for)

http://u.cubeupload.com/ellenate/con...lepagetest.jpg


https://u.cubeupload.com/ellenate/titlepagetest2.jpg new/updated!


edit:

zero replies. oh no.

It's not like so bad that no one wants to break it to me is it?

is the "feedback" thing tripping people up. really i'd take a "yea" or "nay" at this point.


edit 2:

used better uploader




edit 3:

took the advice given and came up with the above