Oooh! Oooh! Me next, me next! *violent arm-shaking*
A critique by Vorpal Tribble! My inner fanboy is having a wild party!
EDIT:
@DCs: Eh, I want to keep it the way it is. I find parentheses easy to skip over, personally.
Miscellaneous: I find it humorous that I was kept from finishing the Doom Moss by playing DnD. I also find it humorous that it has the same abbreviation as Dungeon Master.
Also, I have no idea on the remaining four feats to give the Origin Patch, and I don't want to just give it a bunch of Toughness, or something.