The way he talks and thinks. "commence with getting the hell out" the star chart reading, and his utter absurdities
My first instinct is to say 'female'... but that could be based on nothing more than the fact that I'm female, and I know you are too. Still, seems somehow feminine to me...
First instinct was to say orc or half-orc. Second was dwarf. Read it again, and now am thinking drow.
Am bad at guessing though, so I'm probably wrong on all counts
Doesn't seem awkward to me. I like a snippet that has no (or not much) dialogue in it. I'm not very good at driving a story forwards without talking, so I admire your skill in making it work. I don't know the mechanics of the game well enough to notice any canon-bending, so you're safe from me there